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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 15 years ago

#411

Originally posted by: sri_4
hey bhoomi
a great poem on a great occassion
i feel proud to be an indian where we have one university in diversity n every religion people is traeted same....u whole poem is great just pointing out some lines,,,

Vishwa Ko Diye Ganit, Vigyan, Bhugol key Shastra anek hai, Alag Alag Dharm, Bhasha, Sanskruti Lekin Mitti ek hai, Mere Sang gayega Vishwa ka Har ek Insaan, Mera Bharat Mahan! Mera Bharat Mahan!
jai hind!!!!

great one!!!
sri:-)

Hi Sri,

Good to know dear u liked it and felt it was apt and nice. Yup I am Proud and I feel immensly blessed to have been born as an Indian. Its one of the richest cutlure and ancient wisdom is attached here givign us so mcuh to learn conquer for sure. In my poem i feel so much more i could add but i had to sum it in few lines.. .. the last line yup i wrote the poem when i got those in mind.. glad u liked it and thank for commenting... its surely lifts my spirit..tc Sri,

luv u

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: Revolutionbreez
wonderful !!!!

I reallly really loved it !!

What an apt poem for republic day !!!

Hi,

I am so happy that u liked it so much... u felt it was apt.. so ncie to hear it .. i tried to yesterday wrote yesterday adn posted am glad u all liked it.. thansk for ur encoruagign words ..tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#412

Originally posted by: Divya_kaldivya
Hey Bhoomi... Both the poems were really good!!!!!!! Really liked Mera Bharat Mahan.... 👏

HI Divya,

Hey fist congrats for startginur own thread .. have read and not yet heard the voice. I will listen to the song and only then will reply though i am sure I woudl feel at peace listenign and love the voice ..

thanks dear for reading my work and likgin it so much.. Mera Bharat Mahan u liked that one.. feels content.. chalo i didnt spoil the day but glad added to our 60th Republic.. thanks dear.tc

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: sanightingale
😃😃😃
diiiiiiiiiiiii.....jhappiyaaan!! Happy Republic dayyy!!😃 yahaan rehkar itna pata nahi chalta...tv shivi par hi flag hoisting n patriotic songs dekhkar republic day ki feeling aati hai...😆
UR poem has done it dis tym!! 😃 awesomeee.... as alwez!! so very well written!! d last para is my fav..!!! :D
ekdum har indian k dil ki baat ⭐️👏
Mera Bharat Mahaaan!!
have a lovely day..missshhh u! mwaaaaaaaaah!🤗

Hi San Sweety,

areeyyyy wah wah Dekho dekho kaun reply kar raha hai.. hehehh awww feels sooooooooooo happy to see u here readign replying.. aahhh missed u loads dear.. and u are amogn our gang the force behind me writing such nonsense and u all made me feel i make sense actually through these lines which u all felt was poetry.. so ncie to know u still like my work and enjoy reading it.. dear i have started this thread here, all my poem some of which i have shared with u i have posted here.. and new one also... i had sent u the link of soem new ones.. hope u got htem.. glad u liked Mera bharat mahan wrote this yesterday onlya nd posted.. and feelgin of Republic day ayeii aww yes stayign away from India u cant feel the magic just wathc on Tv.. here flag hoisting, sportday kya kya hotahai... children roamign with flags and colours ful clothese with fuctiosn happen.. bohat happenign hotahai..delhi mey red alert u see...last part is ur fav.. hmm many liked htat one .. ehehhe...wow

har Indian key dil ki baat unki pehchaan...

Garv sey kehtey hain sab Hamara Bharat Mahan...

yeh loo reading ur comment lines aur nikhar uthi.. ehhehhe.. chalo so nice of u dear to reply comment.. and i miss u a lot.. and luv u as always... sweety..ahh kitney dinoo sey Muah muah nahi tha..😆😳..

keep smiling...tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#413

Originally posted by: golu_1677
both the poems are superb.

Hi Golu dear,

Am very happy to know u likedboth the poems..

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: ssh57
Baawara Mann

A very beautiful , romantic poem. Broken relationships are hard to bear but this person has used his energies positively and achieved what he aspired. He hasn't becomes a Devdas. Similarly he should move on in life and not grieve about someone who was not true to him. I know itsa easier said than done. Liked the poem very much. Love ssh57.

Hi Shardha,

Glad that U liked this poem.. yes he doesnt becoem a devdas and am happy u liked the poem and that aspect where he aspires and achives all what he felt... yup usign energies positivly but aahh love love still what has left and what wounds havnt healed wont with these dreams... it may need love to heal it throguh may be soeoen else to coem in hsi life and do.. ya right Sharadha he shodultn grieve abotu soeone not true to him.. but gusssey dard mey bhi pyaar ko khoney ka ehssas is deeper...

glad that u liked and ur comments showed a new ray into the poem and its emotions for me.. an iinspirtion to newer thoguhts for me.. tc

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: ssh57
Railgadi

A very short and sweet poem. Real fast work. In 8 lines they met, fell in love and got married... great going. tc ssh57

Hi Shardha,

heheh yup a bit weird poem but with a difference i was lookign for in my poetry form which rarely was coming. but glad u al coudl bear ita and actually liked it too.. thanks dear for ur comemnts..😃ttc

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: ssh57
Mera Bharat Mahan

A very apt poem for the 60th Republic Day of Bharat.Its such a sweet coincidence that we have a WOMAN PRESIDENT to unfurl our Tiranga on this day isn't it? What I liked best about the poem is its positive attitude. Pessemists can keep talking that we still have uneducated citizens and many below the pverty line. But let us be optimistic and celebrate all the good things we have achieved so far. Sach much Mera Bharat Mahan hai.Vande Mataram. Love ssh57.

Hi Shardha,

Glad that u felt it was apt for our 60th republic day.. Yes i feel so proud that we have a woman President and at this age of 74 as well she travelled in that jet plane and became the the first at this age to travel in that.. Our country has so many names so many records in so many fields, and yes this poem looked at the achivmets w had and not crib abotu what we havtn yet... Poverty will go away when corruption is removed i feel... Yup optimistic approach adn surly India can acive more .. Glad that u liked it dear.. and Mera Bharat Mahan . surely proud ot be an Indian 😃.. Jai Hindi! VAnde Mataram...

luvu

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#414

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid
Dafan Hui Zindagi:

I loved this topic Bhoomi. Pata nahi kyun aaj bhi log aise heinous kaam karte hai....mujhe bahut achha laga ki tumne ye likha....and I specially loved this line....

Ek din Ladka chita ko aag dene khada hojayega Samne Apkey,
Lekin har pal Ladkihi hai jo Chinta karti rehegi Sath Apkey.

Pitaji Aapney Vansh ke naam par Apne Khun ki bali chadhai hai,
Is Paap se Vansh ke neev mey hi Vinash ki fasal Ugai hai.

and more specially the Vinaash one...coz mujhe ye Vinaash soch kar hi maza aa gaya...hehe. I mean...jo log aise gande soch rakhte ho....unke vansh ka kya kaam....again a very nice job Bhoomi!!

Hi Sumaiya,

I am so glad dear that u liked this poem so much and it touched u so much.. yes that line of Vinash i feel it from my heart who kill such unborn girls never can make their vansh to rise ... Glad dear that the lines touched u so mcuh and u liked this poem..it is a poem which i had ot write and feel liek giving ansers to the many and askign many question to the ones who do such acts...

glad u read and liked the owkr.. ur comments are always wonderful thansk for lettign em know u viws..

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid
Awaz Uthau Karz Chukau:

Now this was terrific....main batati hu kyun....kyunki...isme tumne dowry system k khilaaf ek awareness shw kiya hai....along wid a sweet stint of love...the last line was awesum....where he said he is fighting against this system and also attributing his first love...that was realllllllllllllllllly nice Bhoomi....and mere 'l's dekh kar tum samajh gayi hogi ye baat...lolz.

HI Sumaiya,

U liked this one tooo it is an attemopt to feel the pain and i involved the love story for many reason to make it interstign not as a lecture and also to show men can raise their voice and many a times its the woman who dont support the other woman.. Glad dear u felt theis was like a awarness and liked the whole poem a lot.. even the last part where he is raising voice.. so ncie to know what i was attemptign wasnt wrogn and u appreciate my wokr.. really feels so ncie to read such comments.. luv u for been sooo sweet ... tc

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid
Bawara Mann:

That was a lovely poem....literally!! Actually one desires for everything....but everything is actually nothing without love of our dear ones....bahut uchaiyon par kabhi kabhi insaan bahut zyada akela hota hai....so I guess u portrayed that fact veryyy nicely....and sach me yaar....mujhe nayi adjectives chahiye....warna tum kahogi....ye ladki ek hi baat ghuma phira k bolti hai....lolz.

Hi Sumaiya,

awwww u liked this so much.. ya one deseires a lto of things..and kuch hasil nahi ho.. uski wjah kya hai we try and acoieve so mcuh.. but in one corner if u have lost love only love cna heal that wound no aotun tof anythign selse can... the girl didnt deserve him na.... but still loosing ur love can make heart feel that good.. mann sach mey bawaraahai.. love creates so much complex emotiosn na... Adjectives dhundoo matt kehdoo Bhoomi achaa to likhogi akhir Dost kiski ho😉😃..hehe luv u tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#415

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid
Railgadi:

Its a cute poem....pehle bechare ko lal dupatta dikhaya gaya....lekin janab ne usse hari chudi me convert kar diya....hehe. And TC gawah bana tha....lolz....thats sweet actually. Mujhe to bada maza aya padh kar.

Hi Sumaiya,

aww so sweet u have replied ot each of the poem .. really touched by ur effort to let meknow ur comments on each one.. feels absolutely ncie to read each comment for sure. Heheh u felt it was cute.. try to kiya.. hehe yup the lal and hara dupatta... TC pe to many have laughed i guess.. so it made u smile na.. mazaa aya tumhey wow!! kya baat hai.. I am very happy to know that.. luv u tc

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid
Mera Bharat Mahan:

Nice one....Republic Day pe badhiya kaam kiya tumne....and mujhe to hamesha hi Indians ki patriotism dekhke bahut achha lagta hai....bahut kam countries k log itne patriotic hote hai...in short it was beauuuuuuuuuutifuuuuuuuuuul Bhoomi!!

Hi Sumaiya,

U liked this one.. i am very glad dear u apprecaited this.. U like Indians patriotic feelings glad u respect each one and their patriotic feelings emotions... Thanks for feelgin it was beautiful.. just it was a small attempt. i think bohat ikh sakti thi.. may be improve karti jauuu in my work.. tc luvu

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#416

Originally posted by: Sur_Singhania
hey bhoomi
Happy republic day 2 u 2!

beautiful poem again

i wonder how u write such gud hindi...i cant even write a paragraph in hindi or even pure english...

i feel so motivated after reading such a gud poem

u know u shud get these published someday

there are hardly any gud hindi poets out there now

keep up d gr8 work

tc

love

Sur

Hi Sur,

Happy Republic day .... Glad that u liked the poem.. and u thought i am good in Hindi.. hindi is our national langauage and englsih is our link language with the world.. so just fro that i can write.. my poems ar ein very simple words so its just i try and write my thought feeligns down and poem automatically banta hai... u can also surely try and write only emotions pour karlo... SO nice oto know i in some way motivated u to write... U feel i shoudl get these publish.. i really dont have high regrd towards my talent now.. i feel its just thoguhts which i am bringign out and may be professional poets may dislike and feel many errors are there. dont know not yet confient it could be given a book form to be presented.. But really the way u wrote and u felt for me andmy work.. i am surley very very touched.. really thanks for suchh great lovely words of compliments encoruagment... u truly made me to feel special.. really sweet of u.. thanks..tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#417

Emarld & Diamond

I remember when u had given me the ring,
Emrald and diamond shaped heart it nicely sinked,
I wondered how to say I am not ready for it,
I remember u saying throw it or take it,
I knew I loved the feeling that u liked and loved me,
But how could i cheat myslef as i didnt loved so deep,
I didnt except the ring and broke ur heart,
U threw it around and it torn me apart,
I wish i could get out of feeling guilty
that u fell in love with me,
I wish somehow i could explain not to hurt urself
for someone like me...
but what to do... the emrald reminds me of u,
the diamond reminds me of u..
and see i found u today and why r u wearing green and
i wonder why am dressed in white,
are we destined to sink together in life path,
as u n me ..in a ring.. our heart linked besides?

.............................Bhoomikauttam

What Can I say?

What can I say when u want to say,
That I am no longer part of ur life,
The one who stood always by ur side,
I the one who helped u in every strife,
I the one who gave up all as I loved U ,
I am here listening to You,
As U say I am no longer the one to have any space in ur life,
I dont have any place as ur wife,
I stand here gazing the trees around,
want to walk to other house but memories surround,
Want to go and shout at you ,
want to some how show my pain to u,
but u no longer care for me,
Alone walking let me search for ME...

..................Bhoomikauttam

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Sri

@RadiantTreasure

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 15 years ago

#418

hey bhoomi
wow!!2 poems at once its just so good..
one shows out the emotions between a girl who doesnt love n guy who loves so deeply her...

loved theses lines..
Emarld & Diamond

and see i found u today and why r u wearing green and i wonder why am dressed in white, are we destined to sink together in life path, as u n me ..in a ring.. our heart linked besides?

and other shows abt a wife whose husband dont care abt her n now shes walking alone to find herself again..

What Can I say?

Want to go and shout at you , want to some how show my pain to u, but u no longer care for me, Alone walking let me search for ME...

great !!! 👏
good wishes
sri:-)

Edited by sri_4 - 15 years ago

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Sumi_162710

@Sumi_162710

Rocker

Posted: 15 years ago

#419

Emrald n Diamod:

Now its a very crucial situation I guess....sumtyms ujust donno wat to say....a yes seems very hurried n a no means all vanished....uff....such a tough situation yaar!!! And the last bit....one dressed in green n the other in white....I loved the way u left it wid a question....coz I think lyf is always a question...its actually never ending n none knws wat will happen next. So it was definitely very nice.

Wat can I say:

Well...wat can I Say?? Meri dost ho achhi to zarur likhogi....ryt? Lolz!!! But the situation is very painful n pathetic...doing so many things for one person n getting this kinda behaviour in return....its terrible...it wud be betterto get nothing in return at all.....but at the end she was ryt in searching fr herself...coz at the end of the day....its always ur own self that will be always wid u....so it was definitely nice!!

And dear....i love replying to each of ur poems....coz they all hav different things to convey n I hav got diff feelings reading them....so just like to let u knw..I knw its a pleasant feeling when ur thoughts r appreciated. So I just try to return u a smile as u always bring one to my lips.