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@RadiantTreasure

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 15 years ago

#51

hey bhoomi

great poem again..

another social issue-domestic violence!!!!

i could feel the pain the women was facing with he in-laws n husband...only if she didnt had a dter she would have commited suicide..hmmm..really i have also seen some incidents like this really n on t.v..it feels bad that we..i cant do anything for them..all i can do is pray n hope one day create awareness regarding this..u peoms surely would help all of them realise the imporatnce of dter-in-law n wife..after all she has left her house,name for them...

hmmm..u r words always make me feel it n i am really glad to read it..

some lines which i liked..

Logon se kahte woh ,apni biwi ko rani bana jevaro se ladate hai,
Yeh to sirf main hi jaanu, ki wah to mere shareer ke Ghaav chupate hai,

Sochti Hoon kaise Is Nark se Nikalti Main,
Beti ko janm na diya hota to shayad khudkhushi karleti main,

Karva chouth ke Din , chand ko dekhon main jabhi,
Prarthana karu, Aisa Var Na mile Kisiko Kabhi!!!

Kaisi Yeh Grahasti chala rahi hoon,
Angaro par roz chal rahi hoon.

great one again,,👏

sri:-)

Edited by sri_4 - 15 years ago

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topsyturvy23

@topsyturvy23

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

#52

hey bhoomi another mind blowing poem
loved it
sorry dnt have much time to appreciate
gotta attend few guests
but next time will surely comment in detail
thanks for pm

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Mahak

@FragranceOfLove

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#53

di.......

guess what?

aaj main first nahi aa paayi.........

but i did it on purpose!

i mean hamesha main hi first aayi to aur logon ko kaise chance milta?

so i decided that i wont be first!

everyone shud get a chance!

and i loved this poem!

u always write something based on social issues...........

and i always love this fact........

in this poem u have beautifully described the emotions of a women undergoing the harsh treatment of her husband......how everything is different......i mean in front of everyone.....she is a queen,.........while in reality.....she is nothing but a maid.......and she cant do anything as she has a daughter......i really have sympathy for her! poor she! she has to suffer! why?

👏

Edited by mahaklovesmayur - 15 years ago

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Sumi_162710

@Sumi_162710

Rocker

Posted: 15 years ago

#54

Hey Bhoomi....u said it correctly....ur poems r a gud break for me......and again u hav portrayed a very touchy n realistic concept....aisa to kitne gharo me hota hoga na!!! And the way the woman pours out her grief thru the lines....it really touches the heart. Another gr8 piece of work dear!!

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Kanu K

@artizia

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#55

i loved
"woh thi aur kum "

reminds me of shabd movie

lol

it was seriously a fresh breeze from emotional poems.

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Kanu K

@artizia

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#56

i wish no one has such a life

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: sri_4

hey bhoomi

great poem again..

another social issue-domestic violence!!!!

i could feel the pain the women was facing with he in-laws n husband...only if she didnt had a dter she would have commited suicide..hmmm..really i have also seen some incidents like this really n on t.v..it feels bad that we..i cant do anything for them..all i can do is pray n hope one day create awareness regarding this..u peoms surely would help all of them realise the imporatnce of dter-in-law n wife..after all she has left her house,name for them...

hmmm..u r words always make me feel it n i am really glad to read it..

some lines which i liked..

Logon se kahte woh ,apni biwi ko rani bana jevaro se ladate hai,
Yeh to sirf main hi jaanu, ki wah to mere shareer ke Ghaav chupate hai,

Sochti Hoon kaise Is Nark se Nikalti Main,
Beti ko janm na diya hota to shayad khudkhushi karleti main,

Karva chouth ke Din , chand ko dekhon main jabhi,
Prarthana karu, Aisa Var Na mile Kisiko Kabhi!!!

Kaisi Yeh Grahasti chala rahi hoon,
Angaro par roz chal rahi hoon.

great one again,,👏

sri:-)

Hi Sri,

This is taken from some real life situation i have seen.. the line where she says how she was slapped as she didnt cross alogn with her husband i saw this one myself and i was shocked how the husband was scoldign her after havign slappe dher and she wasmore shocked and wasnt able to belive he could do this infrotn of public and later askign her to drink some juice and she was nto able to belive its love or is he crazy.. such men exist and i wish none get such life partners ever..

yes domestic violence is so much at large and with nuclear family we see more of it.. and actually people are havign their own life no one is bothered about other women sufereign beaten cruelling ..they leave it and walk away ignorign it..

I really felt the pain of this lady in the poem and whenver i read it i feel the face the pain of the women i have seen and even i feel i am helpless i am not strogn to do anythign may be just voice my opinion..

Am glad Sri u liked it and felt the emotion.. this issue is so very much increasign with stressful lifestyle and mental instability for men and work pressure evoke more troubles..

u liked those lines makes me feel glad.. hope u like the poem which i keep positn gin btw.. tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#58

Originally posted by: sanju_veni
hey bhoomi another mind blowing poem
loved it
sorry dnt have much time to appreciate
gotta attend few guests
but next time will surely comment in detail
thanks for pm

Hi,

good ot know u read and liked.. take ur time to comment no hurry..but nice ot know u liked it and appreciate it.. attend ur guest and have a good itme.. tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#59

Originally posted by: mahaklovesmayur
di.......

guess what?

aaj main first nahi aa paayi.........

but i did it on purpose!

i mean hamesha main hi first aayi to aur logon ko kaise chance milta?

so i decided that i wont be first!

everyone shud get a chance!

and i loved this poem!

u always write something based on social issues...........

and i always love this fact........

in this poem u have beautifully described the emotions of a women undergoing the harsh treatment of her husband......how everything is different......i mean in front of everyone.....she is a queen,.........while in reality.....she is nothing but a maid.......and she cant do anything as she has a daughter......i really have sympathy for her! poor she! she has to suffer! why?

👏

Hi Mahak ,

good to know that u liked this poem and also the concept.. its increasing in large number vilence against women is so much there not only in slums or uneducated people but also in educated high fi families just the way is differnt and many hide it unders wraps.. it bitter and many of hte issues and situation i have mentioned r taken from real life experiences of such woman..have seen few situation of such woman facing be it slappign or hidign their makrs wounds under jewlery or clothers with dupatta around... be it glares to hide the swollen eyes .. :(

sad btu true fact.. glad u liked reading and all that applause make me know u like such sentive issue as well... though it may move emotionally anyone.. tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#60

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid
Hey Bhoomi....u said it correctly....ur poems r a gud break for me......and again u hav portrayed a very touchy n realistic concept....aisa to kitne gharo me hota hoga na!!! And the way the woman pours out her grief thru the lines....it really touches the heart. Another gr8 piece of work dear!!

Sumaiya dear,

Good to know u liekd the poem .. and ya it was a bit disturbign na.. i have one more disturbign that this but wotn post it so soon let me not make u all feel i have becoem a feminist.. these poems are a break but aaj to thoda jyada disturb to nahi kiya with mature poems... kuch hasaati to better hota tum ko..with studies exams ur side na... may be try with my next dear..

am glad dear this poem touched u and u felt the meotions i felt whiel i wanted to write this one.. tc all my best wishes with u ..do well in whatver u do..

luv u

Bhoomi

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