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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 15 years ago

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Originally posted by: mjhtnupurmayank
Hii... Nice One Shot.... 👏
Keep Writing.....

glad u liked it.. surely will try my hand at few more...

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: monikaseth
👏👏👏Thank You Very Much bhoomi for this another awesome ff ..waiting for your next one ... mind blowing dear.👏

Hi Monika,

dear how r u doing... am so happy to get ur response.. dont u thank me ever... warna mujhe gussa ayega and i will write an ff with u as female lead with angad and sarii girls including neha bamb may get jealous at u ...lol.. areyy i am writing here posting here all due to u n few mroe friends u have encouraged me so much that i feel like posting here and i feel like writign soemthign or the other.. u al inspire me n encoruage me.. its my pleasure to post.. but moer od it am so lucky to u have u as my reader and my friend.. love u ...and glad u enjoyed reading this one too.. tc

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Sookie

@-Sookie-

Voyager

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Posted: 15 years ago

#13

I shall be back with a comment. And you have broached the topic of changing seasons which also happens to be my personal favorite.

Sookie.
This is me saying "reserved" in an elaborate way :-)

Okay, I am back.

It takes something small and something practically insignificant to bring about a difference in life. Its like asking someone when did they fall in love. Most people might tell you the day, time and the instance when it happened. But few people would tell you that its an evolution.
It starts with loving oneself and the moving on to another individual. How can one person love another when he does not love himself or herself?
The first time I read this, I thought you were talking about changing seasons and changes which comes to life. Now I see that it was just an allegory to summarize original intent.
I would both agree and disagree with you.

I would agree in the fact that people at some or the other point of time would realize what they were and what they have become. The changes that have taken place to come to the current state are both intentional and some consequential. Most of the times, changes are irrevocable. Older states may repeat in new variant and its never the same as before. In the end, it all comes to dealing, accepting and moving on.

I would disagree with the pessimistic point of view in the beginning of chapter. I would not disagree with the intent but with its purpose. There is a disjointedness in the way she realizes something against her daily life. The shift which is seen in her personality is a little drastic for my taste. Or I am missing something important.

Good work Bhoomi. This might not be my favorite but its well written. Your last one still is my personal favorite. :-)

Write soon

Sookie.

Edited by Sookie* - 15 years ago

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: Sookie*
I shall be back with a comment. And you have broached the topic of changing seasons which also happens to be my personal favorite.

Sookie.
This is me saying "reserved" in an elaborate way :-)

Okay, I am back.

It takes something small and something practically insignificant to bring about a difference in life. Its like asking someone when did they fall in love. Most people might tell you the day, time and the instance when it happened. But few people would tell you that its an evolution.
It starts with loving oneself and the moving on to another individual. How can one person love another when he does not love himself or herself?
The first time I read this, I thought you were talking about changing seasons and changes which comes to life. Now I see that it was just an allegory to summarize original intent.
I would both agree and disagree with you.

I would agree in the fact that people at some or the other point of time would realize what they were and what they have become. The changes that have taken place to come to the current state are both intentional and some consequential. Most of the times, changes are irrevocable. Older states may repeat in new variant and its never the same as before. In the end, it all comes to dealing, accepting and moving on.

I would disagree with the pessimistic point of view in the beginning of chapter. I would not disagree with the intent but with its purpose. There is a disjointedness in the way she realizes something against her daily life. The shift which is seen in her personality is a little drastic for my taste. Or I am missing something important.

Good work Bhoomi. This might not be my favorite but its well written. Your last one still is my personal favorite. :-)

Write soon

Sookie.

Hi Sookie,

Good to read ur comments. It surely evolves a lot of things when i read ur comment as if I am going into a depth of the thought i am writing my story with.

This story as u said in the starting is about the changing season and the changes in life. I mean the girl in the story is writing about a page where her situation and her percepective to seasons changed. The way u said u disagreed with the pessimist approach and i do agree with that.. thats how the girl moves on in life knowing her attitude was so pessismist and her liking for a particular season was a narrow approach. Every thing in life is for a reason and purpose whcih it needs to be fulfilled. As seasons change and bring with it diferent colours and different nature.. same with life there are differnt phases different perspective and its more important to take the good from each and look at it with that percpective.

U found that the change in her attitude was a bit drastic.... its a small one shot so may be u felt likt that i will surely try and make my approach more realisti cnand less drastic hte next time:)

In the story I think like most teenage girls she also was in love wiht rains with only the romance she could feel only in rains.. but as she grew up she had responsibilities and her child like heart was not there... later a small romance she felt and it otuched which i think for me was a lighter thought whcih anyone can feel and sometimes small happenigns in life give us the most biggest lesson of life to learn and keep in mind.. she started loving even the season she mostly disliked.. she took the positive out o f that and soon she learnt the lesson of life to love herself and she will be able to love all.. :)

thanks dear for replying in and am happy that u liked my previous work .. it was a more mature one i think.. this one was lighter and the next which i posted was just Tp.. hehe.. feels great to get a reader like u for my story.. absolutely excited to have my story read by u.. thankd for all ur encouraging words... 😃

tc
Bhooomi

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