[FF] [Sajan+Mayur]-Sweet; blank pages. Note pg20

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Hey everyone, im..
Astha. Living a 15-year-old teenager life. It sucks right now! The gcse bomb has landed!
asthu, ashiie, mad/pagal (Mimi babes you used this to; yep its actually a nickname😆). My main nicknames used the most LOL! This idea has been swimming in my brain ocean for a very long time and I have to type it out. I got this sudden craze of

writing stuff😆😳, all day long typing stories, some don't even make sense, but I don't learn and carry on with the madness. Its fun, seriously

About the story:

It's a simple and spicy. Based on sajan and mayur. 😳

Imp stuff;
- You will find a lot of pauses, play, stop, rewind, and fast-forward in the story. No, no one is playing a video; it's just my way of writing. Basically these words would be used when introducing the characters, someone's point of view will be shown, and few other bits don't get confused. I will try and play safe. 🤓😛
So basically this FF will be shown as first person and second for all the characters then when mainly stop will come and like the whole writing bit, including dialogues and after play it will be second person again. A bit random way of writing. Trying something new. LOL!! 😆😆

Also i want to Thank my new and great mate mimi. Im so glad to have found you babes. Your a sucha amazing person and not forgetting beautiful FF writer. Thank you so much for your support, your the reason that im posting this FF! 😳 Like to delicate this part to you. 🤗


Sweet; blank pages;;


* beep beep *

"go away" he mumbered under the covers.

* beep beep *

" go home "

* Pause *


Samrat Lucas Smith. 18, mix race,British father, Indian mother. A distractible dashing youngster. Basketball champ and a talanted music artist.Has attitude and is arrogant, why not? Has to maintain his cool dude reputation at Excel collage. What else? Going out with Dia and his sister hates her.

* Play *

I'm sinkin' into the lava
And I'm tryin' to keep from going under
Baby, who turned the temperature hotter
'Cause I'm burnin' up
Burnin' up for you baby


He jumped up hearing the loud music. Jonas brother?? Nupur. My twin always uses stupid ways to wake me up doesn't she? Last time she poured freaking cold water on me. Seriously I get tortured in this house. No one lets me complete my beauty sleep. He complained getting up.

" Burning up? What a stupid song nups " She widens her hazel eyes hearing his words.
"Your stupid" Nupur pointed but later gasped as she saw samrat coming towards her

* Pause *

Nupur Ellie Smith. Twin of Samrat. A tomboy, she does have a little girlish side but doesn't show it, its what she calls"top secret"
andis a somewhat crazy teen. Skateboarding and drawing, two passions of her life. Bestfriends with Mayank Sharma and hates Dia the most in her life, hasn't given her brother the reason, all she knows is that Dia is NOT the right girl for her brother or for any one. Come on she is so chipko. A complete plastic. Fake and the list goes on.

* Play *

"What did you say" he grabbed her arm before she could get away.
"OUCHHH" Nupur cried as samrat twisted her arm. .
"Say sorry"
SORRY MY FOOT!

"For saying the truth, Never"
"all right" he tightens his grip, and carried on twisting her arm.
"ahhhh, get away you horrid psycho" Nupur spoke trying to release herself.
"How I wish, having a wacko sister like you anyone would want to get away, I wonder how I survive" He smirked seeing her mouth open wide.
"Chup"
Samrat rolled his eyes as she started sulking.
What a drama queen he thought.
"Chal, im sorry" Samrat smiled as he released her arm and pulled her in a hug.

**
"Maaaaaaaa" He shouted not finding his favourite shirt.
"Mayu stop screaming" She frowned seeing him throwing out all his clothes from his cupboard.
"Mayu" He looked back, hearing his mother scream.
"Ma im getting late, I want my shirt" He wined like a small child
.

* Pause *

Mayank Sharma. He was raised by his mother after his father abandoned them. Extremelyhandsome. This 19-year-old lad is blessed with hardworking skills. Best friends with Nupur and irritates her with his one habit of not expressing his feelings. Mayank isn't really fond of that. He prefers to hide his emotions.

* Play *

"beta why do you like to trouble me" mayank sighed as he found his mother picking up his clothes from the floor.
"Ma, leave this, im getting late, meri shirt"She shakes her head finding it on the bed.
"Whats this, mayu you never look properly" She pointed out giving him his shirt
"Sorry ma" She smiled as he lowered his head
"Aw mera bacha, its ok, ab chal; hurry and get ready, breakfast is ready" He smiled as she pinched his cheek lightly before walking off.


**

Oh my god! We are moving! I cant belive this. And where? From great China to Northern California. What im I going to do in a place filled with palm trees. She stopped fiddling with her dupatta as soon as her mother walked in.

* Pause *


Gunjan Natalia Samantha Daniels. 18, born to a half French, Indian father and a Chinese mother. Parents divorced; living with her mother. Gunjanis a talented artist, who portrays her emotions through her art; apart from art, music is the next close thing to her. Her feelings are also clearly shown in her song lyrics.

* Play *

"Gunji, how come your not packed yet? You do know darling we are leaving tomorrow" Saiera shakes her head finding her daughter blank, staring her direction.
"Gunjan" She blinks feeling her mother shaking her abit.
"mum, why cant we stay here. Why does Aaron have to move all the way to california?

* Stop *

My mother's new boyfriend. Isnt it bad enough I cant stand him in this house and now when she decides to marry him, my hopes of getting my parents together goes flushing down the toilet. He is NOT worth it. Aaron seriously cant give the love my mum needs; dad could. So Aaron can't fit in this family photo since he doesn't complete it; forcing me to hate him even more, when she breaks the news to me last night that we have to move there! What about what I want? I don't want to move! Leave my friends. And go to some stupid Excel collage. I cant belive they already got me a place. Can life get any worse?

* Play *

"Because we are" Gunjan rolled her eyes hearing her mum happily reply.
No point asking again. Its like the 55th time I got the same answer. She thought


**

What the freaking bugs? Is my sister wearing my hoodie again? He stared at her surprised.
"What??" Nupur clicked her fingers, snapping samrat out of his thoughts.
"Nups, seriously stop wearing boy clothes, its not right for a girl and why?? Are you wearing my hoodie again? What part of DO NOT TOUCH my stuff don't you get man, does the word privacy ring a bell"? Nupur rolled her eyes while samrat raises his left eyebrow.

" Two things twin; first this is my HOODIE. If your not forgetting I brought this first before you copied me and plus there is a difference in the sizes. Mine is certainly not BIG like yours since I don't weight tons. Are you still going to the gym? You have definitely put on weight and second, the day you stop TOUCHING my things, the word privacy will ring in my head OK!" Samrat closed my ears as nupur screamed her last word. Seriously she has one big mouth.


Ignoring his sister, Samrat carries on eating his breakfast. He brings the toast closer to his mouth to bite when suddenly he looked at nupur deadly.
" Did you just call me FAT??" Nupur laughs at his slow realization.
"Turtle, took you time"

"Sam and Nups!" Before Samrat could say anything, his mother's voice interrupted him.
"How many times do I have to remind you not to fight while we are eating? Have you forgotten you manners. I certainly hope not" Rati shakes her head disappointed with her children's behaviour.
"Ritu darling, they are kids" Richard warmly smiled at his wife, lightly patting her hand.

Rati shakes her head. She glances at her kids and later at her husband giving an annoyed expression, which meant. You spoil them.

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Mwahahah, I is first to comment! 😃
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Asthuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

You don't know how HAPPY I am to see this post! 😆 I think I was more excited about your FF then you were! LOL
@everyone-Only I'M allowed to have exclusive updates (right Asthu?) *I just thought I should make it clear* 😆
And OH EM GEE I love your intro!! Pagal 😆 I think I've called you that in all our PMs. LOL
Im SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO happy you posted this yaar! IM JUMPING FOR JOY!
I already told you how UNIQUE your writing is! Your technique is soooooo hatke and AMAZING, am loving it! If I ever write another FF, I am sooooo chorifying your idea! 😆
@ Also i want to Thank my new and great mate mimi. Im so glad to have found you babes. Your a sucha amazing person and not forgetting beautiful FF writer. Thank you so much for you support, your the reason that im posting this FF! 😳 Like to delicate this part to you. 🤗
^^😲
*faints*
*wakes up*
😲😲
*dies on the spot* 😆
OH MY GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOD!!! You're soooo sweet yaar!! Gimme some tissues, Im crying you a river!!! That is soooo sooo SOOO sweet Asthaa, Im speechless...
I'm glad to have found you! In such a short span of time, you've become one of my most treasured friends on I-F! Thank you so much for the dedication..*sobs*
Okay!!! Now for the essay! 😈
@ Samrat Lucas Smith's intro- 😆 "Go away. GO HOME!" LOL And I already mentioned in the PM how I loved their names and the idea of them being a mixed bred (Gosh, it sounds like I'm talking about an animal) 😆
Ugh. Jonas brothers. 😆 I can feel his pain!!! (dont kill me, I know you love them)
🤣 COLD WATER? Hawee.... my poor Sammy, nobody lets him have his BEAUTY SLEEP! LMAO
I LOVEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE the fact that SaNu are twins 😳 I is SOOO excited to read about their scenes! hehehe
UGH and Sam going out with Dia 😡
@Nupur Ellie Smith's intro: AWEH! I wanna hug her! Tomboy 😳 Once upon a long time ago, I was a tomboy 😆 hehe, she skateboarding... OMG MayUr skateboarding scene 😍 (EVERYONE: IGNORE MY COMMENTS, I HAVE ALL THE SCOOPS) 😆
And I LOVE LOVE LOVE her for HATE HATE HATING Dia 😆
@SaNu: AWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEH!! I lovee them Asthuu!! They hate and love each other! 😆 It's soo cutee! Esp their dialogues. "Sorry for telling the truth? NEVER!" hahaha
@Mayank Sharma's intro: AWEEEEEEEEEEEEEH!!!!!! OMG I wanna hug him SOOO tightly and never let goo!! I love him and his mum, MORE OF THEM PLEASE!!! 😳
And he doesnt express his feelings.. that's gonna be a problem, but Im excited to see how you pen that down. Esp. when they're in love 😳
And I love the fact that MayUr are best friends! I IS SUPER EXCITED NOW!
@Gunjan Natalia Samantha Daniles (I hope I got the name right) intro: Aweeeeeeeeh, I already PMed you like a paragraph saying how much I love her.. and I totally feel for her. Moving to a whole new country, starting over.. leaving everything behind. *sigh
This is my favourite line: Aaron can't fit in this family photo since he doesn't complete i
You wrote that soo beautifully.. all those emotions in ONE line. 👏 Asthu, take a bow!
Okay, this is my FAVOURITE part:

What the freaking bugs? Is my sister wearing my hoodie again? He stared at her surprised.
"What??" Nupur clicked her fingers, snapping samrat out of his thoughts.
"Nups, seriously stop wearing boy clothes, its not right for a girl and why?? Are you wearing my hoodie again? What part of DO NOT TOUCHE my stuff don't you get man, does the word privacy ring a bell"? Nupur rolled her eyes while samrat raises his left eyebrow.
" Two things twin; first this is my HOODIE. If your not forgetting I brought this first before you copied me and plus there is a difference in the sizes. Mine is certainly not BIG like yours since I don't weight tons. Are you still going to the gym? You have definitely put on weight and second, the day you stop TOUCHING my things, the word privacy will ring in my head OK!" Samrat closed my ears as nupur screamed her last word. Seriously she has one big mouth.
Aweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeh!!! That's like LOL funny Asthu! *sigh I LOVE SaNu!!!
Amazing first part, you ROCK!
I know this FF will be even more successful than mine. All the very best babes, and add me to ur PM list: IM FIRST!
And, CONGO on your first part to your FIRST FF!! Isnt it exciting? MUAHZ!!!
-- Mimi
Edited by mimi0295 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Nice FF! Do continue soon!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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AWESOME MAN....👏....i was literally laughing during SaNu convo.....and that play pause was fab.i would love to read ur ff for sur.do pm me.update soon.👍🏼
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Sanu conversation 🤣🤣........... do continue 😉 nice one 😆😆😆
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wowowow you are soo dam good
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hi Asthu!

The intro is just FAB!!....luved he way they have all mixed yp families..lol…

AAnd when I read Samrat Lucas..man its nothing less than a joke…actually there is this guy in my school his name is lucas and he has twin!

Its amzing how you have this "video" type thing…pause forward stop….mi-n-d-b-l-o-w-i-n-g!!!

Plz add me to your pm list. Im luking forward for more updates=)

And gunjan..lolz…mom chineese…lovely..

Ur trying something new but its great! Keep it up!

IQ

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey
it was an AWESOME intro!
I loved really liked the way you write...the play, pause...its actually very nice and diffreent!
So Mayank and Nupur are best friends...hehe...nice change from always the bickering ones...
And OMG the Sam-Nupur conversation was hilarious!! Too good yaar!
I'm really looking forward to reading more...
Do PM me when you update!
Nidhi
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Posted: 16 years ago
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nice intro.. like ur way of writing.. really unique :) do add me to ur pm list.. pls continue soon..
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hey its awesum stuff yaar
loved ur pause and play
plz continue soon and do add me to ur pm list

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