[FF] [Sajan+Mayur]-Sweet; blank pages. Note pg20 - Page 3

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Posted: 16 years ago
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@ Mimi. Im updating now babes. I had few problems! Erm that kept me off! Just posting it in 5 mins. Proof reading! LOL i make to many mistakes.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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@P.s p.s Dinner! Will post then. Didnt realize the time. Also got to read your updateee! Ehehe! Get ready fo the eassy cuz i got a feeling i will LOVED it alott! :)
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Posted: 16 years ago
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NO!!!!!
You better be a fast eater. I've been waiting a whole entire WEEEK for this! Grr.
LOL Im planning on writing you an essay too! XD
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Posted: 16 years ago
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This part has a lot of stop and play. The POV thing. Hope its not confusing! 😳
EDIT:

Also where the colour changes of the stop and play. Its gonna be the boys POV. the girl's is pink!
Hope its not to confusing. Thanks Iqra for telling. 😊


Part two: First sight

"I miss you to papa" Gunjan dropped her weight on her bed, as she ended the call. Gunjan stretches her hand to grab the notebook laying few inches away from her. She took the pen from the middle and started writing.

Dear diary,

Top 3 reasons why im really miserable right now
3- we have moved!
2- Dad can't come here to see me till next three months.
1- Mom and Aaron are diffidently getting married.

Argh! The flight was a disaster. That FAT women squashed me to bits throwing her arm around me. OK! She was sleeping but still I could of died. It was so heard to breath and even harder to remove her arm, since it weighed tons for crying out loud! I knew something bad was coming. Aaron on purpose booked my seat away from mum. I wasn't going to bite for god sake. I know he wanted quality time with mum; he could of done that at home since he is staying with us.

Mum and Aaron out for dinner. Didn't take me. Grr.
Aaron goes i will get bored. JHOOOTAAAAA!

They go and after few seconds the phone suddenly rings. I jump. I was relieved to know it was only papa. Good thing mum emailed him this house number. I didn't really think she would. We spoke, had few emotionally talks, I even cried. His news made things worse when he says he wouldn't be able to see me till next three months par chalo he said he would bring dadu with him this time.

Grr, im-starting college the day after. New place. New people. Scared? Maybe a little. Oh great! Finally mum and Aaron are back from dinner! I thought they probably eloped! I seriously can't trust Aaron; god knows what crazy stuff he could get mum to do. Hmm.

Love Gunji


Gunjan hides her diary back under her pillow and headed downstairs.

*Stop*

*fast-forward *

*play*


Gunjan increased the volume on her I-pod as her favourite song came. Tu hai wohi. Hindi classic. Saiera finds it a bit odd seeing her daughter interested in old songs. It is how she says it: Unusual. Gunjun rolled the car window down and looked out towards the clouds.

*Stop*

My mother insisted to drive me to the collage. I told it was OK! She really didn't need to. Then what? She starts frowning and does the mother drama. You know: But baby this is a new place. I'll be a worried sick for you. It's just been a two days since we moved, you don't even know where to go. Corrections! I did. It's like 20 mins away. I could have easily walked.

* Play *

"here we are" Saiera looked over at gunjan who pulled her hoodie sleeves down trying to hide her hands.
"Thanks Ma" Gunjan hugged her mother before she got out of the car.

**

"Mayank! Mayank!" Mayank who was busy highlighting his notes, stopped and looked ahead only to find Nupur zooming towards him on her skateboard
"Oh god" He feared.
"Hi" she clutches on his top, getting her feet on the ground.
"Hi" He smiles, as she throws her arms around his neck, pulling him in a friendly hug.

**

Gunjan checked her bag to make sure she had everything, slings the strap over her shoulder and tired to catch her breath feeling everyone's gaze on her.

No one is going to bite me. They seem friendly. Gunjan thought as she sorted her spectacles out.

"I can do this," She softly whispers to herself, hiding her face in her hood, blending into the coward of the teenagers.

*Stop*


I took a deep breath as I entered the office. It took me forever to find it until a teacher guided me to the front office finding me lost. The office was really small, filled with drawers cluttered with papers. Padding chairs and plants everywhere. I looked a head to find a desk, which was mannered by a woman in her late 30's sitting down doing some paper work. I made my way towards her.

" Excuse me" the women looked up.
"Im Gunjan" I informed her.
"Gunjan Natalia Samantha Daniels, New student" The awareness in her eyes messaged me that she knew I was expected and that she remembered my very long name.
"Yes, im here to collect my schedule and a school map" I politely replied.
"Of course, I got it right here for you my dear"
She brought few sheets on her desk to show me. She kindly went through my classes and highlighted the shortcuts on my school map.

It was really confusing to understand the routes.

*Play*


Gunjan smile, before leaving at the lady. She took a deep breath again, opening the door. To her horror the buzzer went off which indicted so should be heading to her first lesson. Science.
"Digesting frogs world" Gunjan muttered as she made her way out.

**

Gunjan stared at the small classroom. Class hasn't started, and the room buzzed with conversations. She thought.

*Stop*


The teacher saw me standing outside, he called me over. He didn't say much then point at the back desk. Most probably my seat I guessed. I was happy to know no one was there. Alone! I like it.
I kept my eyes down. I could feel my classmates around me glancing over at me.
Uncomfortable much?

I tired to catch my breath hearing the chair move next to me. I grabbed my pen and started doodling idly inside my book. I gasped feeling a leg lightly crease past mine.
Oh my god! I could feel my cheeks warming up. I looked down to check if the person was trying to play footsie. It was a he and he wasn't.

I dropped my head down again allowing my hair to fall to hide my face. I closed my eyes feeling the chair move closer to mine.

*Play*


"You new?" Gunjan blinks hearing a soft musical voice.

*Stop*


"Yes" Oh my freaking bugs? The girl can talk.

I blinked as she whispered. Quiet one, I thought. I carried on examining her as she sorted her spectacles out nervously. I moved my face closer, her cheeks appeared slightly lifted. Nervous smile I thought. She turned her head a little to face me, my eyes flickered to her's. She quickly looked away awkwardly.

* Play *

Gunjan bite her lip to hide her smile. She flushed in embarrassment. She tired to concentrate on what the teacher was saying but his green-eye- gaze was on her. It seemed strong and made her even more nervous.

"Page 56" Gunjan stretched her hand out to grab the textbook which the teacher dropped on the table,
"Wait I-" He stopped midway.

*Stop*

I froze. My fingers wrapped around her cold hand, something stung me. I felt weird. I let go. I softly laughed at the way she was looking at me. Well, tried. I could see the private glances she kept passing. I could sense the confusion

*Play*

"What?" Gunjan flickered her blue eyes with Samrat.

*Stop*

His out burst nearly gave me a heart attack, then what he was staring at his hand like someone just bit it. I just ignored him, opened the textbook, and started my work finding the teachers gaze on us.
Everyone got this stare issue here
I told my self as I felt his green-eye gaze on me again.

*Play*

Samrat shakes his head. He leans forward to grab his pen, which unfortunately was beside gunjan hand.
Oh great! He thought as he leaned forward to get it trying not to touch her but failed.
Gunjan looked over at him again as his fingers rested on her's.

______________________________________

If you found it confusing do pm. And ill try to make it more simple. Also hope
you enjoyed it and sorry Mimi for updating late. Problems? And i tired to eat fast enough 😆😳
Edited by Asthuox - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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LOL Asthu, I reserved this spot before I got your PM 😆

I is good 😉
OKAY! Back to the part, ooooooh lallalalallla "First Sight" 😍 I'm dreaming already! 😆
@ Gunjan's diary-
Aweeeh poor baby! 😭 I can totally feel her pain. So much happening in her life all at once! Moving- which is like hell, esp. if you're attached to the place you're living in, her DAD's like not in her life atm, and that must suck! I cant imagine not seeing my dad for 3 months, I would DIE!
AND her mum and Aaron's marriage. 😕 I already told you this- but I'm really looking forward to Aaron and Gunjan's future scenes. I kind of want her to let him know that he's not her dad, and he never will be... but she's willing to accept him, it'll just take time.
Some step-dad/daughter bonding session. OH OH, and maybe Gunjan's dad can drop by one day... I'd like to see how he acts around his ex and her boyfriend. That'd be awkward 😆
LOL 🤣 You're fat woman thing just makes me laugh every time! It's like the 10th time I'm reading it 😆 Pooor Gunjan!
I already said this yesterday, but I'd like to see fatty aunty make another entry 😆
Aweeeeh, nobody takes her out for dinner? Stupid Aaron 😡😆
And I loved how you described Gunjan's feelings towards her dad not being around. She sounds really close to her dadu too! Bless. 😊
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAGH!! Tu,tu hai wahi-din ne jisse apna kahaa. Tu hai jahaan, main ho wahaan, ab toh yeh jinaa tere bin hai sazaaaaaaaaa!! Mil jaye iss tarah, doh lehre jis tarhaa, oooh mil jayye iss tarah, doh lehre jis tarah, phir hona judaaa haan yeh wadaa rahan!
I loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee that song! RoKa 🥺
I'm so glad you put in the RoKa touch. Gosh, I miss them like hell. 😭
@ MayUr scene- AWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEH!!!!!! I can so totally imagine that! Nupz skatboarding, grabbing Mayank for support and then embracing him in a bear hug 😳 Hayyee, I love MayUr to the core!!
@SaJan moment-
I tired to catch my breath hearing the chair move next to me. I grabbed my pen and started doodling idly inside my book. I gasped feeling a leg lightly crease past mine.
Oh my god! I could feel my cheeks warming up. I looked down to check if the person was trying to play footsie. He wasn't.
BEST DESCRIPTION EVER!! LOL "playing footsie" 😆 I loved playing footsie in g.5! LOL But then it turned into violent kicking 😕😆
Aweeeeh! I love Sam's reaction when their hands touch! 😆 "looks like someone bit it" hahahahah!! I could totally picture that!
Hayyeee, Im so dead. I hope there's more MayUr in Part 3!!!! 😃
Totally loved the update, and yesh- you eat fast. Mimi khush hai 😉😆
But you have to update the next part SOONER THAN SOON!
Edited by mimi0295 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: AMMY LUVS RIDZ

AWESOME MAN....👏....i was literally laughing during SaNu convo.....and that play pause was fab.i would love to read ur ff for sur.do pm me.update soon.👍🏼

Eheh! 😆😆 i love SaNu😛 Aw, thank you! Im glad you liked it!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: SanaSarwar

Sanu conversation 🤣🤣........... do continue 😉 nice one 😆😆😆


LOL many liked the SaNu convo. Im suprised😆😳 Thanks
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: Shafoo

wowowow you are soo dam good


Thanks 😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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@ u have different style of writing ...👏
👏@ Good scene with that dairy .. it helped us 2 understand her mind set .😊
@ that plane and fat woman scene was hilarious 😆
@ Mayur part was so so small...plz add more in the next chapter😉
@ I think in future we will see some conflict b/w mom's new man and Gunjan ??😉
@ sam and gunjan meeting was a good scene 2....

good work ... keep going and pm me ......😛

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: blushpink13

Hi Asthu!

Hey Babes😛 Whats your name btw??

The intro is just FAB!!....luved he way they have all mixed yp families..lol

LOL yep! Mixed famoo😳😆
AAnd when I read Samrat Lucas..man its nothing less than a joke'actually there is this guy in my school his name is lucas and he has twin!

LOL! Creepy😆 I would wanna meet the boy. ill probs be like ive used your name in my FF and he'll be like
Er do i know you? 😆😆

Its amzing how you have this "video" type thing'pause forward stop'.mi-n-d-b-l-o-w-i-n-g!!!

Aw, im glad you liked it. 😳
Plz add me to your pm list. Im luking forward for more updates=)

Already have😛

And gunjan..lolz'mom chineese'lovely..

Mixed races. I like them. And Gunji is multi cultured 😆😆
Ur trying something new but its great! Keep it up!

IQ

Thank you😳


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