Mystery man Part 4B Pg 6

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey guys this is nida...i got a new idea for a ff so i decided t post it...this is just my second ff the first one is Apne which i'm writing with my friend kinza but her computer broke so im doing most of the posting for that too at the moment...plz comment...
Concept
Kripa Sharma is happily living with Nishant Sharma and her son Prateek Sharma.But when Zaib Richster comes into her life, she finds her lost love Angad Khanna.But who is Zaib Richster and what is his purpose in coming into Kripa's life? A ruthless businessman as the world knows him or Angad Khanna Kripa thinks?Or is he just what he wants to be?Nobody knows who he is or what he wants except himself.
Characters
Kripa Sharma: Mother of Prateek Sharma.She loved Angad Khanna but life brought her to Nishant Sharma who is her......She loves Prateek a lot as he is Angad's only nishaani.
Nishant Sharma:His relationship with Kripa we'll know later.Prateek calls him papa because he doesn't know he's Angad's son.He helped Kripa when she was pregnant and he loved or maybe still loves someone else.

Prateek Sharma: 6 years old, He is a very mischevious kid but you can't help loving him.very cute and adorable.loves to play pranks on his mummy and papa but mostly on mummy because she gets revenge and that is better.
Zaib Richster:ruthless businessman.Casanova, has had a lot of one-night stands.Doesn't respect girls except Kanan.She is his best friend.Nobody knows anything about him except Kanan.His name came in the business world 4 years ago and since then anyone who hears his name starts to tremble.He is soon finalizing a deal with Nishant Sharma in Dubai.(i went there only once and it was a beatiful place).
Kanan Garewal: She was in love with someone but couldn't be with him because she thought he was with some one else so left Dubai and went to India where she met Zaib Richster.She is his best friend and the only girl that doesn't hit on him.She is the only one who knows his past.
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ok this was the concept and character sketch.I'll post the first part soon...

Index List
Concept & character sketch pg 1
Part 1 pg 2
Part 2 pg 5
Part 3 pg 6
Part 4a & 4b pg 6
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Posted: 16 years ago
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no replies only views😭...don't you like it?...plz tell me if you like it or not because i am really feeling bad cos i got no feedback good or back😭...plz comment

Edited by xxlibragurlxx - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey its awesome pl conti .
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Posted: 16 years ago
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great part
love the concept
is zaib angad?
what happened to angad
continue soon
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Wonderful concept!! This would be interesting..!

Do continue please...!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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thanks for commenting...i was seriously thinking nobody liked it...can i get some more comments though...it really encourages me to write more...
Part 1

We see a room filled with toys of superman, batman, spiderman and a lot of other toys scattered all over the room.A lady enters and starts calling the little boy in the bed.

Kr:Prateek.Get up baby.It's time for school.

Pra:A little more time mama.I'm so sleepy.

Kr:Come on prateek.You have to go to school na?You are a good boy after all.

Pra:If being a good boy means having to go to school, I don't want to be a good boy. stubbornly

Kripa thinking:Uff,this boy.he's gone on his fath...no kripa that's dangerous territory.you always cry when you go there and prateek and nishant hate to see you cry...forget it...this boy na...always making me think of him.

Kr: Get up Prateek.

Pra:Ok mama.He gets up and goes in the bathroom.

Kripa goes down and makes breakfast for him and Nishant.

Nishant comes down and says:So he woke up?

Kr:yeah he did.

Then Prateek comes and sits on the table with nishant

Ni:so how's the champ today?

Pra:Hungrry.

Ni:really so how about us asking for food.grinning bcoz he knows kripa hates to be disturbed while cooking.

Pra:can we bang our spoons against the plate papa?

Ni:course why not?

They start making noise:Food!Food!Food!all the while banging their spoons on their plates when kripa comes out with two cups of very cold water and dumps it on their heads.

They at once shut up and start shivering.

Pra:Mama it's very cold.

Kr:serves you right for disturbing me. now go change while i keep ur breakfast and better not make a sound while im serving food or when ur eating, got it?

Pra, Ni:got it.

when they came back and kripa placed the bhindi on their plates, they looked disgusted but decided to eat remembering what she just did when kripa said:Stop, prateek.you can eat pancakes since it was nishant who told you to make noise.

Pra:Thank you mama.

she smiled.

Ni:not fair.i also wany pancakes.plz kripa.i'm sorry na.i won't do it again.promise.

Kr:fine but you better not do it again.smiling

nishant also smiled cos he knew this happened everyday.He and prateek played pranks on her then she'll get her revenge then they'll manoafy her and promise to her they won't do it again making a cross behind their backs.

Ni:Ok champ let's go.We're getting late.

Pra:ok papa.let's go.Bye mama.Love you.

Kr:Love you too son. bye.she waves and they leave.

------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ So this is part 1 and i know you'll be saying this is boring...but my mind isn't working at all...next part zaib and kanan entry into kripa, Nishant and Prateek's life....plz comment...i want at least 10 comments to continue... and the title is Mystery Man...credit goes to my cousin Sehresh for helping me with it...
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wowo awesome prateek soo sweet , i love it thx for pm .
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey
thks for the pm sweety
good one yaar
hmmmm interesting sweety
update soooooooooooooooooon
luv soumya
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hi! Nice part👏!The intro was cool (basically becuz I love superman . He is soooo... SUPER!! ) Prateek is just adorable😳!!! I like Nishant and Kripa's friendship !! I cant wait till the next part!! I bet it's going to be just as interesting!!
Best of Luck and continue soon please!
Mona!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey there:

Just read your FF....it's awesome...love it already..can't wait for Zaib's entry..I am sure he is going to rock!!..😆..
Can you pls PM me when you update??
thanks a million
continue soon

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