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Hai caughtup with ur fanfiction.Loved the concept.First part is nice.Continue.....

Originally posted by: sl032597

I liked it...its a new concept..I dont understand why veer worships angad...I mean he doesnt seem like the most caring person.I guess we need a bit more foundation...like why does angad think nobody likes him..but none the less i cant wait for the next chapter and the introduction of the Manhotra girls. please write soon. in all honesty I will rate this a 5 out of 10, it wasnt long so i couldnt tell much about your writing or plot. But it a was good first chapter

Part 2

Recap: Introduction of Veer Jeet Durga Angad and Anarkali

A small house but very beautiful surrounded with fresh green trees in the garden there were delicate pink, white, red and yellow flowers… In the quiet atmosphere all of a sudden we hear a cute voice screaming for help

Raaji: Mahi …Mahi bachaou

We see a beautiful girl gets up from her bed and with her delicate feet goes running down the stairs…she is dressed in a shocking pink & black churidaar…

Mahi: ( Scared) Di kya hua kahan hain aap…

Raaji: She doesn't answer but just cries

Mahi reaches the garden and figures out that it was a joke and Raaji sprays Mahi with the pipe and Mahi is all wet..

Mahi: Di yeh kya hain

Raaji: She starts singing Happy Birthday

They both hug

Mahi: Di, Soni kahan hain

Raaji: Nazar nahee ayi

A girl wearing a short black shirt with black pants is running around in the neighborhood giving out chocolates to the kid as it is Mahi's Birthday...She finally comes home and Mahi and Soni hug.

Mahi: Soni…Kahan thi tu

Soni: Meh na …Meh na (scratches her head)

Mahi & Raaji: (Both tap their forhead slighty ) Mrs. Confuse

The three sisters hug and promise that they will always be there for each other…

Then we see this women who wearing a brown sari..With her hair tied in a bun and comes with Aarti Taali and Sweets for Mahi

Maasi: Mahi..janam din Mubarak hoon

Mahi:Thank you Massi

They all take arti and eat sweets.

Then we see the streets of Mumbai again

Veer comes from the Mandir and goes to Angad's room, and he sees that he didn't eat his breakfast.

Veer: Angad, Angad

Jeet: Bhai aap aygeh

Veer: Angad phir chalgaya naa

Jeet: Useh umeed bhi kyun rakneh

Veer: Aiseh Baat Nahee

Jeet: Angad hamareh parwa nahee karta kyunki useh lagta hain Mama neh Badi Ma(Angad'sMom) ki jaga li

Veer: Saach koi nahee janta Tum Bhi nahee

Author'sNote: I know it might not be that interesting but its the introduction part and they are quite dull but the next episode the persoinality of the characters will be revealed furhter..and love will enter the story in few episodes:) Pleasee leave ur comments and Rating out of 10.