Arjun and Riya saga: Veil - Page 3

I'm shook.

It's everything I imagined their story to be like. Except for me Riya didn't come from a haunted past. It's because I never thought she needed to know darkness to be Arjun's soulmate.

But this portrayal. It made me cry so many times. A true "two broken souls finding each other". It was mesmerizing and hauntingly beautiful at the same time.

I was so curious about Riya's own pain but the start till end of first update was so gripping. I wish there could be two heart reactions I could give this update. ❤️ ❤️

Loved it.

Let me read the other part. And I really hope you write more often. The writing style is so beautiful. I think I lost myself within it.

Originally posted by: RiyaA123

You're literally the one I talk to on this forum except bloomie and naheen and you never told me you're writing a story???????

Darn. This does look like a long story but I'm so excited.

Let me read and comment. Way to go girrrllll!!!!

Curious to know about your thoughts. Thankyou for reading and commenting

Originally posted by: RiyaA123

I'm shook.

It's everything I imagined their story to be like. Except for me Riya didn't come from a haunted past. It's because I never thought she needed to know darkness to be Arjun's soulmate.

But this portrayal. It made me cry so many times. A true "two broken souls finding each other". It was mesmerizing and hauntingly beautiful at the same time.

I was so curious about Riya's own pain but the start till end of first update was so gripping. I wish there could be two heart reactions I could give this update. ❤️ ❤️

Loved it.

Let me read the other part. And I really hope you write more often. The writing style is so beautiful. I think I lost myself within it.

Of course the first two chapters took majority time, look at their lengths lol

Naheen told me in Wattpad I should post my stories here, but they are soooo longggg like one shot is 10k words i don't post 😂😂

I wanted Riya being a bit broken and haunted not because of connecting with Arjun. I think empathy is enough...it's a way to connect in past and my own khujli to connect her with another story 😂😂

Damn it.... I was going to appreciate that confession Arjun gave her. It was so him.

Yet the next update starts with so much pain and loss. You killed Chotu and Shree lost a leg. Why?

They didn't deserve that. The pain and loss was so much that it left me gasping and I'm still in shock. I haven't cried so much over a story. Shree was right. What's the point of the job. They lost everything and yet the next time they fail to save someone. The department would pin them as corrupt and negligent. All past golden service forgotten.

It breaks my heart to think that. I wish Chotu hadn't died and they could all have a happily ever after.

Originally posted by: Phir_Mohabbat

I am shy 😑 I don't self promote lol sorry about that

Curious to know about your thoughts. Thankyou for reading and commenting

Your writing killed me. In both good and bad ways. It was like being on a rollercoaster except lots of pain and angst.

You should definitely post them here.

My thoughts? You're a gifted writer. The ups and downs and the way every feeling is portrayed? I can genuinely feel the emotions and that deserves an award for a writer.

Keep writing and do let me know.

A single tag would do. Because I wouldn't wanna miss anything.

Originally posted by: Phir_Mohabbat

I wrote this story like over a stretch of 3 days. No kidding

Of course the first two chapters took majority time, look at their lengths lol

Naheen told me in Wattpad I should post my stories here, but they are soooo longggg like one shot is 10k words i don't post 😂😂

I wanted Riya being a bit broken and haunted not because of connecting with Arjun. I think empathy is enough...it's a way to connect in past and my own khujli to connect her with another story 😂😂

I loved how you brought so many Povs and still didn't lose the essence of the characters and story.

But I would not forgive you for killing off Chotu. That big teddy deserved to be happily married to his 11:30 girl.

And yes do write more. You're such a witty person. I expected your stories to be sarcastic and witty. This angst has given me more tears than I'd like. I cried so much.

Also please share your other stories. How come I don't remember reading your masterpieces?

Originally posted by: RiyaA123

I loved how you brought so many Povs and still didn't lose the essence of the characters and story.

But I would not forgive you for killing off Chotu. That big teddy deserved to be happily married to his 11:30 girl.

And yes do write more. You're such a witty person. I expected your stories to be sarcastic and witty. This angst has given me more tears than I'd like. I cried so much.

Also please share your other stories. How come I don't remember reading your masterpieces?

Yeah pov is something i was like should I write third person where everyone has voice or just Riya seeing the world.

Idk if you noticed but Riya never talk to herself as Riya. As in it's always "she spoke to shree and Rathore sir said.." it's never "Riya watched shreee and Rathore sir said." . I wanted it as Riya only when she accepts herself as Riya. When she's known as Riya after everything happened

Hehe sarcastic is only the imperial affliction wala Riya. She's just badass, idgaf there... Something I can dream of 😂😂😂 she's the epitome of no fcks given. How she navigate and become part of team was intresting to write

Sorry about chotu.

Originally posted by: RiyaA123

Your writing killed me. In both good and bad ways. It was like being on a rollercoaster except lots of pain and angst.

You should definitely post them here.

My thoughts? You're a gifted writer. The ups and downs and the way every feeling is portrayed? I can genuinely feel the emotions and that deserves an award for a writer.

Keep writing and do let me know.

A single tag would do. Because I wouldn't wanna miss anything.

Damn too much good words

Yeah I should post a few os here

Originally posted by: RiyaA123

Damn it.... I was going to appreciate that confession Arjun gave her. It was so him.

Yet the next update starts with so much pain and loss. You killed Chotu and Shree lost a leg. Why?

They didn't deserve that. The pain and loss was so much that it left me gasping and I'm still in shock. I haven't cried so much over a story. Shree was right. What's the point of the job. They lost everything and yet the next time they fail to save someone. The department would pin them as corrupt and negligent. All past golden service forgotten.

It breaks my heart to think that. I wish Chotu hadn't died and they could all have a happily ever after.

Yeah I mean in war sacrifice is needed and all that...I kept thinking who to kill. And it's not like chotu will be forgotten. His presence will be there till these people live. There is a line that we aren't forgotten once we are dead, we are truly gone when the last person who knew us is also dead

I wanted everyone to lose something in that incident. Everyone should feel the pain. High stakes

and all that.