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Posted: 17 years ago

Hey guys, I've had a very busy few weeks and school is finally out... now for exams. I'm really still not recovered from all the buzz, so heres a short and boring update. Next one, I PROMISE will be more masaleydaar with some SG scenes... Hmmm... I miss those days...

"Arrey ah raha hoon bhai…" Machan mumbled irritatingly, whilst rubbing his eyes… As he walked out of his room, his eyes faintly caught the 2:59 turn into 3:00 on the small digital piece he had treasured for the last year an a half. A train of hushed curses escaped his mouth as he wrapped the plaid robe tighter against his form… Who could be at his door at this hour? A frown contorted his face as he lifted his gaze towards the unwelcome nightly intruder… "Kya ha… Shiv?" The annoyance immediately dissipated as Shiv Kapoor's distraught features registered vividly in his surprised eyes. "Tu… Tu… Shiv… tu andar ah…" (You… You… Shiv… you come in…), he mumbled still in awe of his best friend's battered state. Supporting Shiv lightly by the shoulders, Machan tugged the former into the warmth of their small, but comfortable home. Before shutting the noisy door, his eyes trailed questioningly towards the open skies… only the dead of night greeted his curiosity…

Seating Shiv on the sofa, he quickly disappeared into an unlit corner of the compartment… returning a few minutes later, with a glass of water, which he thrust forcefully into his friend's hands. The latter sat unresponsive… the void in his eyes made an unnoticeable tremble vibrate through his body. Machan knew Shiv since childhood… They had went through infancy together… every aspect of it shared with each other… So much so, that he had become the Kapoor's second son. The only reason Nikhila had allowed Shiv to come to Mumbai, was because her two sons would be together. Without much thought, he had become distinctly familiar with the ways of his best buddy… and right now, something seemed amiss… Seating himself across from Shiv, he sat intently with his fingers entwined afore him expectantly… while the latter remained immobile… His eyes… The one thing that he had come to appreciate… was Shiv's eyes… they were like his music… melodious… Narrowing his own, he searched through Shiv's… a vain attempt… as all his empty hands received… was the disturbing blankness. He had noticed it many a time… The way Shiv stared at Gauri… even though it was all a "sham"… the twinkle in his friend's eyes never went unnoticed by his own… Silence reeked in the room… and he dared not break it…

Uncounted minutes relapsed… as he held the vulnerable glass between his precarious grasp. With each passing minute, the thunder frenzied within him… the overwhelming rage of her feet tirelessly pounding in his ears… His eyes pressed into nothingness… burning an invincible hole… When suddenly they ceased their position… shutting tightly… The sound of fragile glass scattering across the floor momentarily faded the throbbing in his ears… A surge of pain rushed through his hand… welcomingly… Slowly, he lifted open his eyes once again… Faintly aware of Machan's unmoving posture… "Gauri…" he whispered deeply…

Minutes… hours… days… months… had passed… as he upturned each corner… ventured in each corner… every nook… every sector… of Mumbai… his thirst having grown with each turn of the dial…

(End Flashback)

"Ek din… Ek din teri raahon mein… baahon mein… panahon mein… ajoonga… Ek din tera ho jaoonga…" Slowly he lifted his gaze… receiving a mesmerized crowd… lost in melody… as some faces responded to his eyes with an awed blankness… while others immersed themselves in the embrace of their partner, whilst swaying to the reminiscent beat…

"Yed dil toh na… keh saka… ye baatein…" as his voice lingered hauntingly in the wispy airs… his fingers brushed passed the strings… whilst tracing the eyes peering at him through the crowd… the all-too familiar twinkle… the upturned corners of those lips… As she turned… his arm extended automatically… whilst her figure disappeared amidst the shadows…

***

Anger seared through his veins as he mechanically lifted his fist… and brought it down… over… and over… The disturbing past… all too real once more… Far in the distance… he heard his name being called… "Shiv… Shiv… yeh wohe nahin hai…" (Shiv… Shiv… this is not him…). His fist refused to relent… nor did the firm hold his other hand, which had the swine's collar… It was all too real… once again… Shiv… His arm ceased mid-air… as the familiar voice echoed in his ears… the overwhelming tremble in it's tone… His fingers methodically left their hold… as he stood… slowly taking a step back… and another… even as the sound of footsteps striding urgently away filled the air… He stared at the empty space… just moments before occupied by the brute… that had experienced his wrath… The mechanical thrust of his fist still vibrated in his joints… as he felt a group of hands hold him still… as it all slowly went black…

***

"Gauri… wohe tumhe khush rakhega… ye mera vaada hai…" As the words sunk in slowly… she looked up with unresponsive eyes… Ipshitta looked at her hopefully… the corners of her lips curving slightly as she nodded her head in the positive…

For those wondering what the last two scenes are about, the first of the last two is on the same night as Machan and Shiv went out and the last is at a later date. I will go into depth in the next update.

Cheers,

dc

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Posted: 17 years ago
thanx 4 updatin
i wz wnderin wer every1 is
it seems 2 b a ghost town here in the kaa forum!
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Posted: 17 years ago
di,

sorry for ditching...really busy...will reply and update tomorrow...rite now at work...sorry again



lil kam chor 😳

Amnu 😉
Edited by amneet89 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
Sirf trailer hai.....
poori story kithe hai????

Chal koi gal nahi... will manage wit this for now....



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Posted: 17 years ago

sorry dii for not commenting earlier

i was going through my favourites and i saw this link…i immediately started reading.... see this is what happens when you don't update soon (ahem ahem 😉 )

okay i just read the part…once again i am speechless…they way you desctibe everything is just amazing…i feel so bad for shiv right now poor guy is going through so much…i love the song you used its one the most romantic songs...update soon

btw: love the siggy you are using simply MIRCHY uffff 😳

Edited by Rock_Star - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago

Recap: He stared at the empty space… just moments before occupied by the brute… that had experienced his wrath… The mechanical thrust of his fist still vibrated in his joints… as he felt a group of hands hold him still… as it all slowly went black…

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"Gauri… wohe tumhe khush rakhega… ye mera vaada hai…" As the words sunk in slowly… she looked up with unresponsive eyes… Ipshitta looked at her hopefully… the corners of her lips curving slightly as she nodded her head in the positive…

Part 7

Lifting his charcoal eyes… he met with the reverse… white… A curtain of blanche encased him in its presence… It touched the space, as far his paled sight would allow… Pure… white… Untouched drapes hung loosely around… yet he could sense no bounds… no walls… It was all… white… It felt, oddly serene… His mind was empty… his heart's blaze dimmed… Rather than blind him, the purity of the surroundings suddenly seemed to enlighten his senses… numbed from time… from trial… The barren colour had always had an affect on him… affecting his sanity… as did something else… that he failed to recall, in the state of blankness… For a long pause, he just stared into the whiteness… when slowly, a soft mysterious breeze filtered through the stillness… as though beckoning him. He could feel it rush through his layers of dark hair… whisper endearingly in his ears… caress his smooth skin…

Driven by the unexplained gesture, he aimlessly extended his hand… as though to catch it… But he felt… nothing… And then it dawned on him… that he had not moved. It was as though his body had lapsed into a paralysis. Looking down, he noticed for the first time… that he was sitting… His body felt feathery, and he tried to lift himself again, but all in vain… when a distant sound seeped through his effortless struggle. Blankly, he glanced around the room… when at some point his eyes traced a fleeting movement behind a layer of sheer drapes... He stared at it for a questioning minute… as the silent curiosity got the better of him. A sweet melody weaved through the unseen cracks again… calling him… and as though in silent response, the mute paralysis of his body began to give way… tingling alive, as the sensation of being ran through his veins… Slowly, he got up from the unnoticed chair… curiosity-driven towards the dreamy veil… He could sense the calmness of his breaths… it perplexed him, yet he couldn't think why… Still in the unexplained trance, he lifted a tender hand… unveiling the scene afore, as it lay…

Glass… As he stepped forward, his feet muffled under the velvety blanc flooring… Glancing around, he caught fragments of white, encased in silvery glass… Sheets of the colourless colour drew over an array of antiques… Turning straight ahead, he saw a man stare back at him… A pristine white adorned his firm, dark feature… As he stepped closer, he noticed the flicker of movement once more… twirling in the base of the eyes that stared back at him… Instinctively, he turned around… Feeding on the blankness… He could feel a presence… as though the calm beats of his pounding heart. The sound… again he felt his senses raise as the melodious piece touched them… Feeling it jive with his steady breaths… he coursed through the unseen maze… smothered in white… scattered in glass… infused with the captivating melody… And as though someone had slowly turned down the volume… the musical tinkling fused with the breeze… His feet ceased mid-step… as the essence of another, filled the void in his being… He wanted to turn, but stood still… not wanting the essence to fade… Holding on, as though it held the key to his sudden existence…

"Shiv…" As the voice seeped through his sliding crust… everything suddenly began to blend… as though the moment, meant all… Through misty eyes, he looked ahead… still aware of the presence behind… But afraid to loose touch… Gracefully, an image dreamily sifted through the fog… casting aside the uncertainty… filling the void… As the haze lifted… encased in the class afore, his eyes held arrested in the astral figure… The glitter of silvery jewels caught his eyes… as a foot stepped gently forward, then immediately covered by an immaculate white. Trailing his transfixed gaze upwards, he breathed in the carefully woven figure… Bemused waves of black commanded his attention now… as the endearing strands unveiled the features etched into memory… yet, as though seen for the first time, once more… As the thickening breeze rushed to capture the sight, his own presence reflected off of the soft, hazel eyes pondering over him… An unmeasured rush of euphoria unleashed in his veins as dared to extend his arm… Nothing

"Gauri…" Swaying between the shores of consciousness and dream, he murmured sluggishly as his heavy eyelids slowly lifted open… For a second, his mind was a blank slate… white… when it suddenly hit him. Immediately, he sat upright… rubbing his hands over his face… Holding his face between the cup of his hands for a minute, he relived the reverie… When reality revisited, he found himself staring out the large window… into a slate of darkness… as Mumbai slept soundlessly…

*~*

In the midst of a long faded conversation, her eyes wildly threaded through the crowd gracing her presence… It was the day… As the pages of the calendar flew… the days had passed at a dreaded pace. Each day had layered onto her chest, an unseen burden, slowly eating away at her… "Gauri, tum teekh ho…" Betraying the faade, with startled eyes, she looked into the warmth of another's… The ends of her lips curved slightly as she mumbled a response… "Haan… main teekh hoon…" As the words left her mouth, she averted the gaze conveying a silent affection… unbeknownst to her, built up over time… "Nitesh…" She whispered… but was stood helpless as the latter walked smiling into one of his friend's embrace… An urge to scream overflowed her mind… yet, the voice never found her.

As Nitesh retreated, content writ over face… Her heart swelled… An unexpected nausea congested her senses… "Gauri… Isse milo… Mera dost, Shiv…"

Rest I will post tomorrow… Promise… I just can't think, and I don't think I'm doing any good right now. Sorry guys, I'm not much happy with what I wrote there, so am gonna end it here for now until tomorrow. I will for sure post tomorrow, Mirchi Ki Deewani walah promise! Sorry Amnu… *holds ears* I have to gather my thoughts...

Her breath caught in her throat... as a fleeting sense of calm lifted from her chest... Lifting her apprehensive eyes she addressed the face, silently pleading... "Shiv Sareen, mere bachpan ka yaar. Pichle doh saalon se Italy mein hai. Wahan pe iski family ki garments ki outlets hain." (Shiv Sareen, my childhood friend. For the last two years he has been in Italy. His family has garment outlets there). As her eyes graced the unknown presence smiling towards her. In the faintest instance, a barely noticeable curve of the lips betrayed her composure... Turning her attention to the man next to her, she allowed the light smile gain a little depth, before turning back to Shiv... Shiv Sareen... Inwardly, she let out a deep breath...

For a while, she stood with the circle of socializing personalities, occassionally flashing a quick smile of address. Unbeknownst to herself, her slender fingers had begun to wind the end of the lemony-yellow of her jeweled dupatta... finding the cool band slipped around her finger just an hour before... Her stomach suddenly began to turn, as the nausea began to overcome once more. "Gauri, what do you think?" Startled out of empty thoughts, she looked up at her concerned companion. Immediately, her hands dropped to her side. Excusing themselves, she followed Nitesh has he led her outside... Instantly, she felt a rush of relief... "Gauri tum teekh ho na?" (Gauri are u alright?).

Guilt hit her square in the face as she looked into Nitesh's chocolate eyes, laiden with obvious affection... Slowly removing his hands from her shoulders, she held them between her own. Lifting her gaze, she managed a petite smile of assurance, nodding her head lightly in the affirmative... "I'm sorry Nitesh, pata nahi... kuch tabeeyat teekh nahin lag rahi teeh... but I'll be fine." Immediately, she felt the hands between hers retreat and reach for her forehead. "Doctor..." Refusing his eyes entrance into her own, she removed his hand and again held them between her own, while taking a light step back... "I'm ok Nitesh, sach.. I'll be fine... sirf tohri hawa ki zaoorat teeh. Main tumhe tohri der mein milti hoon andar..." she finished off with difficulty. "Main tumhe chodh kar kahin nahi jaane walah..." Instantly, her tired eyes shot up to his after momentarily looking aside, as though stifling a threatening glaze. As he took her hand into his own, she felt the nausea flow over... giving way to a light-headedness. Half consciously, she felt a breezing peck on her forehead. She wanted to smile... to feel but the invisible barrier was relentless... as she hopeless...

*~*
Cursing silently, she looked down the vacant street with searching eyes... For the umpteenth time, her attention fell to the dial on her wrist... 1:00 was approaching fast, and the thought of Nitesh waiting at the restaurant assailed her. Attempting to make an effort, she had agreed to his lunch invitation at the latest craze located on the outskirts of Mumbai... Serenity... Or something was the name... She couldn't exactly remember. In fact, she realized guiltily that she couldn't recall anything of the brief conversation besides the final reminder he had forwarded before ending the call... Looking from her malfunctioning vehicle towards the empty road... to her dead cell, she realized walking would be the only option. Adjusting the pastel yellow of her dupatta, she pulled back the loose strands of hair... stepping under the warmth of the circular object reigning the skies...

As she treaded the long path in solidarity, her thoughts betrayed her... running wild... She couldn't think of why there wasn't a single vehicle along this path... unknowingly, a nervousness was creeping in... As though answering her unspoken query, a blur of darkness flew by... It took her a second before she realized where she was again... Slowly recovering from the dizzing moment, she lifted a subconscious hand to adjust her veil... nowhere to be found... "Aap shayad isse dhoondh rahi hain..." Her limbs went numb... as the husky voice registered...

Next Part: Monday perhaps...

Cheers,
dc

Edited by desi chic - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago

RESERVED 😊

well i m back di and it was just too WOW...it was AWSOME and rite now i am too awed to say something...u just did it again di...took me into mirchi's world...let me stroll there for now and when i get my senses back till 2morrow i will edit.

u better update 2morrow di i will be at work but as soon as i come back i want to see a post here and a reply in Angel...u haven't even replied there yet di 😭

thanx for updating...you are the best and i love you🤗

lil kam chor😳

Amnu😉

Edited by amneet89 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
Last part edited~

Next... The inevitable... 😉

Cheers,
dc
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Posted: 17 years ago
y do u do that??! "Shayad aap isse dhoond rahi thi..." in his husky voice *sigh*...and thats it... 😲 ....just when i had started to sigh....lol....until next monday 😒!
btw i didn't know you'd three new parts up...so it was sort of a treat for me to read them all together...so yeah i guess i'll just have to wait until next week...
take care =)
Edited by a.i.c - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
well...well...well di...i thought i was going to see an update today...di quit torturing us and update...i miss shiddat with hell lot of shiddat


Asever 😳

Amneet 😉

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