New FF... 'Shiddat' (Devotion)Part 5,p.19

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prab_rockinn

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Posted: 17 years ago

#131

An update!!!!
Omg mein kithe sapna tah nahi vek rahi.....

"Uske liye…" wah what a line!!!!!
lovely shayari....

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desi chic

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Posted: 17 years ago

#132

Originally posted by: prab_rockinn
An update!!!!
Omg mein kithe sapna tah nahi vek rahi..... Nayi jee... tussi sleep reading kar raye oh... hor kuj?

"Uske liye…" wah what a line!!!!! *ROLF*😆
lovely shayari.... Danwaad ji😉

Pabu... u know what I'm thinking... tu saariyan di ffs padh di ehn... par aap... mere dimaag vich ek superhit idea eh... kyun na tussi vi ff likhan lag jao... Hai na superhit!

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prab_rockinn

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Posted: 17 years ago

#133

Originally posted by: desi chic

Pabu... u know what I'm thinking... tu saariyan di ffs padh di ehn... par aap... mere dimaag vich ek superhit idea eh... kyun na tussi vi ff likhan lag jao... Hai na superhit!

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dc

Na ji na je main likhan baith gayi na ta phir tah panga pai jayega....... Mainu sirf nuks Kadna 😆 ya tareef kadna anda hai....

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desi chic

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Posted: 17 years ago

#134

Originally posted by: prab_rockinn

Na ji na je main likhan baith gayi na ta phir tah panga pai jayega....... Mainu sirf nuks Kadna 😆 ya tareef kadna anda hai....

Kamchor... bahane-baaz... Sudarja😆 Mere idea nu evenh na barbaad honede... as for teri capabilities, tareef de phul bandana teh koi tere kolon sikhey... nukz? oye, kiddey nukz??😆

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desi chic

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Posted: 17 years ago

#135

Guys... question... shall I?... continue... *coughs*😆

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ladoos

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Posted: 17 years ago

#136

yes, of course u should continue...i am pretty much a silent reader but have to say that u're one piece of work! where do u come up with such beautiful ways of describing feelings & emotions? but i will say that i was disappointed to read that he had bet on her. i feel like this idea has been beaten black & blue...and although, i like the detailed descriptions, i feel that they slow the pace of your story down a bit...i'm hoping you'll see where I'm coming from but in either case you're a wonderful writer...also, i'm sure you'll appreciate constructive criticism😊 waiting for the next part...

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salt

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Posted: 17 years ago

#137

I'm so glad I managed to catch up on this FF! 😊 I love the plot line (which I think I have figured out), character sketch of both Shiv and Gauri (though at present going by Part 4 I like Gauri better than Shiv), and most of all your writing! 👏

I'm not sure, if I mentioned this to you before, but you write with a lot of feeling dc, and I love & admire your writing style a lot. What I love the most about your FF's is they go into depth in even the most simplest things, which might go unnoticed by others – you capture and pen them beautifully down in your FF! 👏

I know for certain that I will read almost every one of your FF's again & again, because there is something in them that simply compels me to go back & read them. Seriously, you are brilliant at keeping the suspense alive, yet giving a little detail to the reader that should help them figure out the story 😊

I really LOVE the FF! A sincere request to please continue it as soon as you find the time. I'm dying to read the next part, and dying to read their face to face encounter.

And, thank you so much dear for taking out the time to write! 😊

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Amnu

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Posted: 17 years ago

#138

oh that is a totally a stupid question to ask...di u better continue...uugggh i m so mad that i can't even find the words to yell at u 😡 😡

I BETTER SEE AN UPDATE ON SATURDAY

Asever 😡

Amneet

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Amnu

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Posted: 17 years ago

#139

Originally posted by: desi chic

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desi chic

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Posted: 17 years ago

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Originally posted by: ladoos
yes, of course u should continue... lol... u sure?😆i am pretty much a silent reader but have to say that u're one piece of work! is that right eh?... I am a punjaban afterall *waves hand*😆 jokes!... Thank you deeply😳 where do u come up with such beautiful ways of describing feelings & emotions? its your imagination yaar... but i will say that i was disappointed to read that he had bet on her. i feel like this idea has been beaten black & blue you know, I felt the same... but I had the idea in my head eons ago when I began this and for some reason didn't feel like changing it...and although, i like the detailed descriptions, i feel that they slow the pace of your story down a bit...i'm hoping you'll see where I'm coming from but in either case you're a wonderful writer...also, i'm sure you'll appreciate constructive criticism😊 certainly!! thank you so much for your honesty, much appreciated... I admit, I'm a wordy person... and it can be a bad thing... I know it can sound droning and boring. I will take your words into consideration... If I can just put in my two cents, I think sometimes such things are needed to get a point across, although I know I over do sometimes! thank you kindly for the suggestion... finally!😃 waiting for the next part...
Thanks for the time!😛

Cheers,

dc

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