Abhimanyu Birla: A man who is still a boy - Page 3

Originally posted by: Mushfika_01

okay first thing's first, where the f...HECK have you been? no seriously, where WERE you?! How did you not start writing these way before?! what were you even thinking noor? I feel like smacking you so hard right now you have no idea. i'm so mad and so so so happy at the same time. I feel like i'm having a goddamn mood swing.

I knew you could write. you analysis, your capability to understand the characters to such depths is something i have always admired about you. But then you posted that arohi poetry and i was kind of taken aback that you could ace that as well. but never, and i repeat, NEVER in my wildest dreams did i imagine that you would write something THIS well. i'm sorry, but i really didn't. bro this is like a professional kavita or whatever you wanna call it. like do you even know how talented you are, woman? I don't think you do. I really don't, otherwise you would have posted these long time back.

I loved every bit of it. like every single bit. but i'm gonna mention two parts that literally tugged at my heart:

1.

Darr lagta tha ki jab ye toota hua dil kisi ko dunga

Toh kya pata wo choor choor kar de

Ya kya pata sirf ek hisse se wo pyaar kare..

you know people can talk about their fears, put it into words, and just own up to it. but this was not just speaking of trepidation - this felt like i was literally peeking into abhimanyu's heart and actually seeing the terror. it's like he laid his heart in front of us to have a look. so transparent, so beautiful!

2.

Dekha maine usko

Aur dhadkne kuch aisi badhi

Ki maano

Fisli wo par gir main Gaya

Sambhli wo par sambhal main Gaya

i don't think i have ever read something more beautiful on about their first meeting than this. the moment i read this bit, my thoughts went back to the lag ja gale scene and how abhi ran and how she turned around and losther balance and he wrapped his arms around her oh-so-protectively and looked like he was intoxicated. the whole scene itself is very close to my heart but after reading this part, noor, i think there is this new-found depth that just made a permanent place in my mind and i don't think it would ever fade off - such is the power of your words!! Honestly idek what i'm saying because i'm truly speechless.

i want to tlak about every single part but if i do that i would end up writing a novel LOL. but just know that your talent blew me away today. I'm so fortunate to have known you and been able to read such a masterpiece.

P.S. I kind of imagined all of us sitting in an auditorium as you read this whole thing to us and trust me the image was just too wholesome to express in words. Love you meri jaan!! I want one on akshu now😳

Red: well, I was on a break, writing my physics, Chemistry, biology and maths notes and tbh, I did write that time too... But all of them are unfinished and I love unfinished poetries.... toh I was just having a gala time with my books, poetries and myself ... Kya mujhe aap bata sakti hai ki mujhe pitayi kyu padegi? Matlab Mandir ka ghanta hun main jo tu baja daalegi. Well you mood swings tells why you wanna hit me even when I give u this pyaara poetry 😉

Blue: first a big big hug to you. I never knew you used to read my analysis 🙈 sacchii... Tbh I did crave for a comment from you but we were not such good friends then toh I used to feel I will disturb you by tagging you par tu toh chupi rustom nikli... Padh li aur batayi bhi nhi. Hmph.

Aree mujhe khud ko nahi pata hai main kya likhti hun aur kaisa likhti hun... Bas likhti hu ye pata hai and to get these reviews, I know something must have clicked to my readers. So you really don't have to apologise for that. I have never given you guys a peek to my talent 😃

Okay to come to my analysing skills, I don't know how I do it. When I said Abhimanyu and Akshara are close to me and a part of me especially Abhimanyu I meant it. And I shamelessly admit, if not for HC I would not have seen the show and the got to know the character because I don't really watch shows and also, HC bring nuances to Abhimanyu like no other.

For me post these long back, these were supposed to be written too. Maine kal hi likha hai ye

And how do I reply now and I guess you could tell my replies are pretty much messed up but I will try.

About first part... I don't know which part in this poetry are my favourite but I will talk about the lines you mentioned.

I have written something long back and it was like this- "mujhse pyaar tab mat karna jab main tooti hui si hun.. mujhse pyaar tab karna jab main poori hun. Kya pata tum pyaar karo toh sirf ek tukde se karo aur dusre se sirf nafrat Karo. Kyunki phir na main tumhari nafrat sehan kar paungi aur na hi tunhare ishq mein main vaari jaungi." And when I was writing and thinking about Abhimanyu, all I could think of broken pieces which were never touched. One could love his one part (like we all loved his soft love) but what about his love now... It's passionate, it's something that burns him down yet keeps him cool and not many likes it but it's still his love. He dies a million death when he took a step away from Akshara and so I came up with these.

To write on Abhimanyu, I was confused where to start. I thought he is an open book but to read an open book is hard because we all are lazy and more than that to understand is more hard because we think we already know him... What's there to know more. There should be some Curiosity but never have I known that Abhimanyu Birla is going to be that one character who is it all. We may think he is an open book but damn the beauty he brings. I thoroughly enjoyed writing this and more than that, I enjoy your'll reviews.

About 2nd part... The lag ja gale sequence... It will be forever imprinted in our hearts. The one sequence that made AbhiRa the jodi they are today.

And Mush, how do I reply to such compliments? I am at loss of words. All I can say is I am glad I am here and I met you all and had a time to share laughs and love because I would have missed meeting such amazing souls and I am sure I would have regretted it.

P.S. One day for sure sweetheart. And I will wait for you guys to take your seats when I will be reciting my poetry. And I love you moreee >>>> Will be sure writing on Akshu 🤗

Originally posted by: samairaxx

wowwwww!!!! that was the most beautiful piece of poetry i have ever read!!! abhimanyu became an open book by the time i was done reading. so beautiful. please give us more

Thank you so much Samaira (I guess that's your name.. your UN is that) and I am just so glad Abhimanyu Birla is an open book to you now. I will be for sure writing on Akshara and AbhiRa.. 🤗

Originally posted by: 2TheMoonAndBack

RESSSSSS!!!! OMG OMG OMG YOU POSTEDDDDDDDD!!!! SORRY NOOR I WAS BUSY THE WHOLE DAY TODAY!!!

It's okay ... Main khud apne one shot mein busy ho gayi thi .. but it's gonna take time... I am getting back to form and its asking for brain cells which I kinda lack at the moment 😆

I don't know how many times I read this poem......but everytime I found .... something new I discovered about abhimanyu....ur writing is good nd soothing......

Read d poem....

Originally posted by: jani_faizal

OMG Noor you posted a poem on Abhi… Ok I’m reserving this spot to come back and write…I’m so busy trying to get my OS done… I think I just need to stop coming in to IF to check cause I end up staying for much longer than I planned and I’m just procrastinating away….

Jaaanniiiiiiiii 🤗 I am waiting for the OS... And take your time to read and write... Nd in the mean time I will happily procrastinate about your one shot

Reserved!!!

Edited

Noor🤗❤️🤗

I want to start this thread by declaring that all the Abhimanyu haters should come and read this. You will leave where this man comes from and you will leave converted.

Parvaane Zindagi Ke

You described his childhood so perfectly. This is the root of all of his anger, his drive to excel, and his unabashedness. He had no choice to grow up before his age to protect the mother he loves so much. He does not believe in silent love because that is all his mother has done all her life. He lashes out because Manjiri never does. Instead of speaking up, she suffers in silence and that is why he refuses to do that, says what he feels. You have described his parent's failure to protect and nourish his emotional health perfectly.

The Brotherhood

I always say that Neil is Abhomayu's personal rainbow. Neil is Abhimanyu's sunshine, sanity, and sukoon. He is also Abhi's only voice of reason when Abhi's anger is at its peak. You are completely right- Abhimanyu is very lucky to have Neil in his life as Neil is the only one who loves him unconditionally.

Joy of Love

Akshu's voice is the balm to his wounds. She is the pied piper of Abhimanyu Birla. He met her and she made him believe in love and life just by existing and he committed himself to her because the man does not do things halfway. Your words beautifully described what Akshu means to him. How she is his answer from the universe. He is smart enough to understand that and is brave enough to claim what is made for him. Thank you for writing this part. You nailed it.

Pain of Heartbreak

Life without her is impossible but life with her in pain is unbearable...

And this is where the man is. His pain is so well described by you. She is part of him and no one can ever take that away from him. It's the power of one-sided love. You just justified every emotion of Abhimanyu post heartbreak.

This was so lovely. Thank you so much for writing this And I am a fan of your words.

Love,

Amnu

You have carefully chosen all words Noor

You have captured all his phases so beautifully in this poem

Amazing ❤❤

I'm in love with some line they are just Fab

That Abhimanyu ki Akshara has all my heart 🥺❤

Noor you have analyzed Abhi's thoughts so well coz it's not easy to capture everything in form of poem.

Hugs for this beautiful poem 🤗

Originally posted by: 2TheMoonAndBack

I am at a loss for words. Sach mein what was thatttt.😲

You described his every phase of life to perfection. I dont think even writers could do such a great job.

This post just gave me a different pov to abhi, his character,his childhood, his pain, his fears, how he felt that he was finally healing the first time he heard akshara, how his heart just automatically got fused with hers, so much so that when she fell, he lost his balance and when she composed herself, it was like he just untangled all the messy threads of his life. How did you even write that psrt so beautifully.

And then the heart break oh my my my. If piercing something sharp into yuor heart was a picture, i am sure i would fine this poetry in there. The analogies, the examples and just the pciture you painted in front of my eyes is somrthing beyond beautiful. I loved how he said this is a way to pay back for the times she had saved his life and thats why he is marrying someone else but his every breath will start and end with akshara.

You even took us to a walk to his childhood, something that we r not aware of and now rhat i read it, i have a mkre comprehensive pic of abhi and the reason why he is what and how he is.

This was just pureeeee magic noor. No words. Just want to salute you. Please never stop writing. Ilove youuuuuuuu🤗

Rituuuu yaar... You guys have to stop making me emosh and smile the widest at the same time. I don't know where to start replying to the comment. My emotions are all over the place but thank you !!!!! This is so heartfelt you know.

Yes!!! The writers are not putting efforts and that's why I sent them this poem yesterday. Aadhe DKP team ko bheja hai. Harshad ko bhi bheja hai. I just hope wo dekh lein 🙈🙈

Coming back, leaving my Fangirling side ...

What do you say when you feel at the top of the world? Or feel too overwhelmed with the love and appreciation? Tbh, I actually feel belonged! You guys are just the sweetest.

His love is something that was hardest to put it in words... I have not fallen in love forget love at first sight but I have heard about it .. but how do we describe love at first voice? And hearing all this ... I feel I have done justice to to it.

Like Amnu says, they are each other Yin and Yang of each other. They complete each other and many times the writer has given us clue of mythology and I connect them with Radha Krishna ji. They just fits beautifully par ab Radha ko unka Krishna milega... Waqt lagega par saath honge

Messed up childhood... We don't really know what happened but Harsh talks with Manjiri, I am sure if someone I know nd if my father did that, I would hate him and will not be in the same room as him. So Abhi actions with his father seems justified to me .

Once again... Whatever I will say will not be be suffice the love I have for you and every here.

I always felt it was not only his mother but Akshara too because he never really cared about anyone opinion if Akshara said yes but it's his way to honour the two most important woman and people of his world and who rule his heart and mind. Unki ek aah par uski jaan nikal jaati hai. He is just doing what makes both of them happy. And we all know, Akshara is hurt but she is still happy (more than she is hurt) in her sister happiness. So comes the heartbreak.

And I am glad I am able to give a different perspective to Abhimanyu Birla 🤗

Nd Ritu.... A big hug to you ❤️

Originally posted by: 2TheMoonAndBack

Ikr?? Idk how she wrote something so deep. Its like someone is just explaining abhis character word by word, analyzing it deeply hut also with simplicity.

Rituuu... I am just feeling ki i was able to done justice to him. Thank you so much for all these comments 🤗