The rightful place maan/jaanu os

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The almost empty shah house gave a sense of calmness to Kinjal instead of emptiness...she walks towards the kitchen where her mummy is cooking evening snacks exclusively for her ,seeing her mummy humming an old song for the first time brought tears n smile to her face....instead of entering the kitchen she moved towards the mandir 

Kinjal : kanhaji ,main nahi janti jo main karne wali hun uska koi matlab hai bhi ya nahi ,bas itna samjhti hun ki maine mummy ko itna relax aur yun akele mein gungunata hue kabhi nahi dekha .ek umeed si nazar aa rahi hai ki shayad mummy ki zindagi mein bhi khushiya aayengi ...plz mera aur mummy ka saath dijiye ga...aap toh mummy ko jante ho woh kaisi hai ....issliye unhe jhoot bolne jaa rahi hun...plz maaf kardena  


Flashback starts(1 hr ago) 


Anupama: Kinjal tu yeh bahar kya kar rahi hai 

Kinjal : woh mummy ghar par koi nahi hai ...aur aaj mein ghar ki chabi le jana Bhul gayi 

Anu: arey toh mujhe phone kar deti ,main jaldi aa jati 

Kinjal : kyun ...aap kyun jaldi aate ...aap kaam kar rahe the mummy ...par yaha baki sab toh kaam se gaye nahi hain....baa babuji satsang mein gaye hai ,papa aur kavya ghumne ,toshu ko aaj ghar ane mein late ho jayega, aur baki sab kaha hai yeh toh aap jante hi ho 

Anu:  phir bhi beta 

Kinjal :ab jaane do naa mummy bahut bhook lagi hai andar chalte hai 


Anupama bedroom 

Kinjal : mummy snacks mein kya khaoge ? 

Anupama: arey tu kyu banayegi ,main banati hun ...tu thak ke aayi hai ,tu aram kar 

Kinjal: aur aap thak ke nahi aaye ho...mummy aap bhi naa apne aap ko bahut taken for granted lete ho ...aur waise bhi mujhe sirf do logo ke liye hi toh banana hai 

Anupama: Wahi toh...sirf do logo ke liye hi toh banana hai toh main bana deti hun ...acha sunn tu meri alag cheez main madad kar de 

Kinjal gives a questioning look 

Anupama: mere bag mein diary hai usse thoda padhkar dekhle ...aaj ki kuch kuch cheeze mujhe thodi thodi samjh ayi hai....tu dekhle na shayad tujhe zyada samjh ajaye...

Kinjal : thik hai mummy aap jao main dekhti hu 

Anupama: thanku beta 

Kinjal opens her bag n takes out her diary to read Anupama's notes but it shocks her that it's not Anupama's but Anujs diary ......

Kinjal : yeh mummy ne galat diary utha layi....

Even after knowing it's not mummy's dairy Kinjal couldn't put down the diary...she started to read each n every page n as the number of the page to read decreased tears in Kinjal eyes increased....n then she came across the laminated rose which was meant for Anupama but now is silently trapped in Anujs diary ...Kinjal closed the diary but couldn't stop the tears coming out of her eyes ...at first they were tears of sadness for anujs misery but next moment the tears were of joy ...joy to know that finally there is someone who has such pure love for her mummy ,someone who is good hearted ,who respects her mother ....


Flashback ends


Anupama: Kinjal beta tu yeh mandir ke paas kya kar rahi hai 

Kinjal : woh kuch nahi mummy mera purse gir gaya tha toh...

Anupama: tu kahi bahar jaa rahi hai...par beta burger thode der mein ban jayega  

Kinjal : mummy woh galti se aap anuj uncle ki diary utha layi hai 

Anupama: kya!!!!!!Hey bhagwaan ab kya kare 

Kinjal: mummy aap tension na lo mein ja kar unhe yeh lauta deti hun....main burger bannne se pehle aa jaungi 

Anupama: tere paas address hai naa 

Kinjal: arey haan mummy ,mere paas number bhi hai...aap tension mat lo 


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Kinjal returns the diary to gk as anuj was busy but what she didn't return was the rose ....


Shah house :


Kinjal: mummy !!!

Anupama: tu aa gayi....anuj ne kuch kaha kya...mujhe phone kar ke sorry bolna chahiye tha....kaise main unki diary le ayi 

Kinjal: mummy aap bahut tension lete ho ...unko toh pata bhi nahi hai ki aap apni diary waha chod ayi thi aur unki diary le ayi thi....unse mulakat toh nahi hui but  kaka mile the unhe maine sab bata diya aur unhe diary de ayi ..aur yeh rahi aap ki diary 


Anupama: thank u beta 


Kinjal : thank u beta se kaam nahi chalega ...mujhe apse kuch chahiye 

Anupama: kya chahiye ...bol na beta 

Kinjal : waada......ki main jo aapke liye layi hun woh aap chup chaap lengi aur bilkul mana nahi karengi 

Anupama: tofa???? Iski koi zaroorat nahi hai beta 

Kinjal: mummy aapne waada kiya hai 

Anupama: acha thik hai 

Kinjal: hmmm yeh hui naa baat...

Kinjal takes out the laminated dried rose from her purse n hands it over to Anupama 

Anupama: yeh kya hai 

Kinjal : yeh book mark hai ..jab main wapis aa rahi thi toh apki diary dekh kar mujhe yaad aya apki ki woh ribbon wali  book mark toot gayi hai( she actually tore it)

Toh yeh vintage wali mujhe shop mein dikhi toh mein le ayi...upar se yeh good luck bhi lati hai...toh mummy aap yeh apne paas rakhengi aur khabar daar kisiko bhi yeh diya 

Anupama : acha baba nahi dungi 

Kinjal: pakhi ko bhi nahi....promise 

Anupama : acha baba promise 

Kinjal : agar aapne iss gumm kiya toh main apse baat nahi karungi 

Anupama : acha meri maa apni jaan se zyada sambhal kar rakhungi ...ab burger kha le ?

Kinjal hugs anu while silently saying sorry to kanhaji for her lie 



Next day office: 


Gk : tu itna kyun pareshaan hai ....kal raat bhi nahi soya ...akhir baat kya hai 

Anuj: Gk meri diary...

Gk : teri diary kya???

Anuj:kal raat meine diary kholi toh usmse gulab gayab thi

Gk: ohhhh 

Anuj:aap ko pata hai ki woh gulaab kahan hai 

Gk: woh kal galti se Anupama apni diary ki jagah teri diary le gayi thi 

Anuj: what!!!!!! (Anuj starts to panic) anu ne kahi diary toh nahi padh li ...woh kya sochegi ....aapne mujhe pehle kyun nahi bataya 

Gk: tu uchalna band karega ,teri diary maine bhi padhi hai...usme sab gol gol jo likha hai na woh anupama ke sar ke upar se jayega....

Anuj: toh usne kuch kaha 

Gk: nahi....dairy wapis karne uski bahu Kinjal ayi thi ...badi hi pyaari bachi hai ...ho sakta hai gulab raste main kahi girr gayi ho...

Anuj: bilkul meri qismat ki tarah yeh bhi gumm ho gayi ....na isse manzil mili aur na......

 


Anujs phone beeps 

Anuj: Kinjal ka message ?

Gk: dekh kya likha hai

Before he could open Kinjals message Anupama knocks to enter the cabin 


After all employees briefing anu Anuj n gk are left in the conference room 


Anupama: woh sorry ....kal galti se aap ki diary le gayi thi 

Anuj : koi baat nahi anu, jo jiska tha woh ab uske paas chala gaya...toh sorry kiss baat ki 

Anupama: woh kal ke note mein kuch sawal the jo mujhe aapse puchne the ....woh mein Kinjal se help lene wali thi par woh diary ke adla badli ki wajah se bahut der ho gayi....toh apka thoda sa samay ...

Anuj: anu plz tumhe hichkichane ki zarurat nahi hai ..main aur gk yaha hai tumare doubts clear karne ke liye 

Anupama opens her diary but the rose freezes gk n anuj for a moment 

Gk recovers first : beta yeh gulab.....

Anupama: yeh bookmark !!!!....yeh meri Bahu hai naa Kinjal....usne kal mujhe yeh tofe mein diya aur mujhe dhamki di ki agar maine isse ghumaya toh mujhse baat nahi karegi bolo...

Anupama starts searching for her pen in her bag while gk n anuj share a look 

Anuj recalls the message n opens his inbox.....it was just a wink emoji from Kinjal 

Gk murmurs: jo jiska tha woh ab uske paas chala gaya 

Anuj  gets restless as he is unable to understand what he is feeling seeing the rose which was meant for Anupama ,which was with him for 26 years....the witness of his love , longing , loneliness ,now in her hands  

 

The End 




Joote chappal se marna nahi🤣🤣🤣

Mujhe galiyan dena nahi🤣🤣🤣

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Amazing story. I wish show me bhi aisa kuchh dikhaye 😇

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Originally posted by: fan_fiction123

Amazing story. I wish show me bhi aisa kuchh dikhaye 😇

thank u.☺️...

Waise yeh naa sahi par  kuch toh hoga...kyunki dono ki diary almost similar hai dekhne ko

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Loved the whole dairy concept you have used and how rose finally reaches Anu.  well written




I think makers have used same diary color with purpose .sure there will be dairy exchange happening in future.  .

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Why the end  😟😟i would have loved to see kinju baby playing cupid... Please continue if possible.. This was nice. 

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Posted: 2 years ago
#6

amazing....... love the os please do write more.

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Posted: 2 years ago
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So cute and lovely 😊 story Hoyeeeeeeee ☺️☺️

When I think 🤔 that Anu will be the first one to read Anuj diary 📔 very soon ☺️☺️ I hope she understands what Anuj has written for her and doesn’t get angry at him 😒 waiting so badly for that day to come when she read his diary and accept his marriage proposal ☺️☺️🤪

GK and AK are the most cutest people in Anupama ❤️ I love how GK always reminds Anuj that he is single ☺️ ☺️ 


I want more please do write more about them 🤗👍🏼😭

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Wow! Speechless… it could so easily be an episode! Would love to see this in the actual serial… please do continue if you can. 

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Enjoyed reading the story. Nice idea of diary getting swiched, now the scene where she packs a diary before her 1st day makes sense too.  👍🏼

Please continue exploring further on this.😊

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Amazing, maine to imagine kar kar ke read kiya😆

Bas writers ye read kare and same sequence show me daal de. Maza aa jayega.😆

Jaise ek request: samar n Kinjal teasing Anuj in the name of Anu, iska bhi OS try karna na.... 


See I m demanding bz u write well. Ab mujhe gaaliyan na dena koi 🤣