RAIN (One shot - completed) - Page 3

Originally posted by: Nikita_99503

Just one word... AMAZING!!! 👏 👏 👏

I just loved reading it...

This is exactly the sort of response I would expect Tejo to give when she would face such a situation. And of course, Tejo divorcing Fateh and just leaving to lead her life on her own is just a cherry on top.

Fateh being a shell of the person he was after marrying the "Love of his life"Jasmine... Kinda gave me a sadistic pleasure.

And Amrik's reflection at the end was a perfect ending.

Thank you so much for writing this...

Absolutely loved it. ❤️ ❤️ ❤️

Thanks a lot dear.

Tejo is a woman of grace and Maturity. She would even react with her dignity intact.

Fateh suffering is like the best dream for all of us 😂

Amrik....ah man....kya kare....he kinda props up everywhere.

I am glad you liked it.

- Niki

Originally posted by: Rexana19

This was just... no words!! You've captured Tejo's feelings and Amrik's reflection so beautifully. Please do write more....

Also, do you have any index page of all your stories? I'd love to read all that you've written.

Thanks a lot for appreciating it.

Yes I do have an index. I will tag you there.

- niki

Originally posted by: mistofshadows

Now that I think about it...my work feels like a prequel to yours 😍😍😍

This is brilliant. Your plot actually fits right after this.

- Niki

Oh thank you so much for associating my silly rambling with your beautiful work. I'm a novice. You're a real pro. (And if itv had any taste they'd have hired you and mayuri as writers).

Originally posted by: Absoluv

Amazing super .. I wish Tejo does leave fateh and all these pathetic people suffer in guilt for ruining Tejo life

Thanks a lot dear.

I wish the same. Sometimes Pendulum Fateh is too much.

- niki

Originally posted by: sana8th

Wow..Keep writing..... atleast yha sukoon toh mil rha

Thanks a lot dear!

Originally posted by: ShanUlas

Wow! This is your first I read.

I did think of similar scenario but a bit different .

Reminds me if my old old days when I used to write😊

Great !

Thank you dear.

I have my index posted in the EDT and CC. you can have a look at some of my other works too.

Do write again. Would love to read.

- Niki

Originally posted by: TheFluffyCactus

I think this is your best one till now. I loved how the monologues weren't too long but just enough to set the mood there and the monologue remained constant in my mind even though the words weren't there but the development of the story didn't let me feel the absence of monologues and nor did the lack of monologues affect the connection with the story. It gripped me till the end. Amazing job done! I really don't have anymore to say. Hopefully I managed to give the story justice through my review👏

Thanks a lot dear!

I began with Tejo and the story took shape by itself, turning towards another series of monologues.

I am glad you liked the linear development.

Thanks again for your juicy review 🧡🧡🧡

- Niki

Originally posted by: Bluekohl

Oh thank you so much for associating my silly rambling with your beautiful work. I'm a novice. You're a real pro. (And if itv had any taste they'd have hired you and mayuri as writers).

Not silly at all buddy. The work was actually realistic... something I am sure a can envision.

You already have a good grasp of writing style if your are just beginning. Best wishes.

- niki

Originally posted by: mistofshadows

Thanks a lot dear.

Tejo is a woman of grace and Maturity. She would even react with her dignity intact.

Fateh suffering is like the best dream for all of us 😂

Amrik....ah man....kya kare....he kinda props up everywhere.

I am glad you liked it.

- Niki

You're most welcome... 🤗

I actually loved it. ❤️

Tejo surely is a woman of grace and maturity. So, its definitely unrealistic that she'd pull off a stunt like Jasmine did. She'd handle the situation with maturity and keep her grace and self respect intact.

Fateh sufferint would be the best... Gives me a sadistic pleasure. (And I'm kind of a sadist)

Agree on Amrik... he does keep on popping up everywhere.

(I typed a comment yesterday and then accidentally closed the tab without posting it... )

Boy, did I miss your angst or what!? 🤗

Tejo truly has given so much of herself to others, that she had nothing left for herself. She's always been a giver and naturally, everyone around her became a taker. I'm glad she finally chose herself and put herself first.

Amrik's obsession over JasFa makes little to no sense to me, but you explored it really well! He indulged himself, created drama where it wasn't warranted, and yet, he's not content. That's what happens to anyone who tries to meddle in someone else's matters.

As for Fateh... kya hi bolun... you make me love him and his misery every single time! ❤️

He lost his last chance at love. He lost his light, his happiness, his companion. He lost it all just because he couldn't get his priorities straight. I'm so glad Tejo didn't give him another chance. Even if she misunderstood his intentions, even if he didn't mean to be with Jasmin in that way, he still never put out the fire that Jasmin and Amrik created. He let them get under his wife's skin. He let them speak ill about their relationship. He let them look down upon his wife. He didn't protect his relationship and Tejo could've only shielded it so much. It takes two to uphold a marriage and frankly, what reason does Tejo have to keep fighting when he's showing no signs of wanting this marriage to work?!

I hope you're able to write a second part to this and shed light on how Fateh's coping without Tejo. Would LOVE to read more angst, especially from a perpetually troubled Fateh's perspective.