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Hey everyone,

I hope you are enjoying my Ff Rebirth.

I just love Jodha Akbar. But my favourite sequence is the Benazir portion. In it we come to see so many emotions between both jo and Ja, jo's jealousy, Ja's anger, love frustration. I know many ffs have been written on this topic but very few with Jalal's point of view. So I thought I'd write my take on Jalal's point of view in mind. What say all.

Chapter 1 Misunderstanding

Jalal stormed out of Jodha's hozra. He had already ransacked her room, he stopped near a marshal and his mind played the push he had just received. He shouted in anger and threw the mashal away. He was fuming he dashed to his room sat down on his bed picked up the surahi which was full of wine. He poured some into the silver glass and donned it in 1 go , then went ahead and poured one more glass. "How dare she ?" He thought. He had poured all his feelings in front of her and she had rejected him , he had never faced rejection. He was already too drunk and he drank himself to sleep.

Mahamanga stood in front of his door way and saw Jalal sleeping " You cheated me Jalal, because of you and that Jodha my Adham is punished. I love you but no one I mean no one is more important than my Adham. If any one harms my Adham then they will face the repercussions, even if it is you. I will never let you and Jodha be together , you will always be under my control." She gave an evil smirk and went away.

The next day Jalal woke up with a severe head ache and his anger and frustration had not yet calmed down. " It was better when I had no heart. This rejection is really hurting. It feels like someone has ripped my heart apart. I will take a revenge for your behaviour Jodha. I'll show you what rejection feels like. If I had gone to your hozra on my own then it would have been a different matter but you had called me, I was so happy yesterday when I heard your letter from Badi ammi. I felt like I had won over the whole world but then you shattered everything. Was this your way to take revenge. I'll show you what revenge feels like." " Sahenshah ka Iqbal buland ho, Jodha begum aap se milna chaahti hai. " the guard said. Hearing her name acted as a catalyst to his anger. " koi ijazat magi milegi unse khao ke daffa hojaye yehan se." He said angrily.

He then got up and went to his hamam took off his clothes and entered the water. This was one place which calmed him down. But it seems that it was not working. His mind kept on playing the yesterdays night over and over again. He threw the silver jug used to bathe away from him. It would have been better if he had stayed drunk. Something hurt inside. Why was it hurting so much. He asked himself. He closed his eyes and leaned on the side of his hamam, the image of Jodha in her night gown floated in front of his eyes , without a bindi , long silky hair kept on one side. He found himself getting hard painfully hard. He needed to stop " Yaa Alla itni talked kiyun de rahen hai aap humein. Kiyun nahi samjho Jodha begum ke humare zehen mein kya. Ayese Keyes khel sakti hai woh humare jazbatto ke saath." He thought.

He got ready for his shamsheer practice. Took his shamsheer and went to the practice area. From the practice area the tulsi munch in front of Jodha's room was visible. He looked up to see Jodha praying in front of it. He could not take his eyes off her. She was so beautiful. Her hair was wet he could see it through her translucent dupatta, water dripped from the tip of her hair. Jodha looked at him as she must have felt his eyes on her. His eyes locked onto her doe shaped brown eyes. He could see pain in her eyes. Why was there pain she should have been happy after all what she wanted has happened? What was she hiding? After sometime she went away. Jalal started practicing. When he turned arround he saw her standing with the aarti thal in her hand. He took aarti and she gave him a ladle as prosad. " Sahenshah hum aapko dhakka nahi maarna chahte the. Who to galti se hogaya. Humne sach mein sirf dhanyawad me liye patra likes tha aur kuch nahi." She pleaded. But Jalal dint want to listen" Humein aapse koi baat nahi karni. Aap ko jo marzi Karen. Humko aapse koi wasta nahi. " Saying so he turned away. Jodha was crestfallen she went away. Jalal turned to look at her. He felt a weird regret but he stopped himself as his ego was hurt.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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awesome chapter dear...

loved it..

would like to read more..

continue soon...

please PM me...i have sent you buddy request

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Thank you Mahira ! Read your dd's too they are really great.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: Ipsitaray123

Thank you Mahira ! Read your dd's too they are really great.

Welcome dear đź’—.

Plzz like and comment too...

I am eagerly waiting for next part of this FF

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Chapter 2 Benazir

After Practice he got ready for Deewan e khaas.

Baa Adab

Baa Mulaiza hoshiyar

Noor e taqat

Sahenshah e hind

Jallauddin Muhammad

Tasreef laa rahen hai.

Jalal entered the Deewan e khaas and went to his throne. He sat down and his eyes automatically went to his left side where she was sitting. She looked Divine in her magenta lehenga. She felt his eyes on her and looked directly at him. He couldn't look away. Suddenly he came to his senses and looked away. Then said " Adgha sahab kariwahi suru kijiye." " Ji Huzur, Munim Khan ka paygam aya hai. " He said "unhone jung mein jeeta hua Mehsul bheja hai. Aur baki jaagir ka hissab bhi." He said " Hmmmm, Aur kuch?" Jalal asked " Ji huzur , aap ke liye Kabul ke harum se ek khaas tohfa aya hai." Jalal looked down and smirked then looked up at Jodha He smirked again, Jodha looked at him she looked a little confused. "pesh kiya jaye." He said. The door man called "tohfa hazir ho".

As soon as the damsel entered, there was pin drop silence in the DEK, everyone was awe struck. Jalal looked at the girl, she had dusky complexion, long hair and beautiful big dark eyes. She was wearing a pair red colour harem pants and a small blouse, the whole expanse of her hip and belly was visible. Jalal looked at her she was definitely beautiful, but not as beautiful as his Jodha. But she could be the means to the end. He could definitely use her for his revenge. He did not let his disinterest show on his face. He looked at her with his best lustful look. "Adab Huzur, Shahenshah ka Iqbal buland ho." She said in a sexy voice. " Bandi aap ke khidmad mein hazir hai." She said " Adab , naam kya hai tumhara?" Jalal asked. " Ji Bandi ko Benazir kehte hai ,aur yeh humari baandi hai zakira." "Mugal Sultanat tumhara istakbal karta hai." He looked at Jodha who was looking at her with anger in her eyes. He smirked again and said, not taking his eyes of Jodha " Badi Ammi aaj se Benazir humari khaas kaneez hogi. " he said Mahamanga gave an evil smile looking at Jodha " Ji Huzur." She answered looked at Benazir "Chalo." After this the rest of the proceedings of Deewan e khaas continued.

"Deewan e khaas barkhast." Jalal said. Everyone got up and started to leave. " Jodha begum, rukiye Zara. " Jodha stopped. " Ji Sahanshah." She said. Everyone else had left. " Toh kaisa laaga aapko humara naya tohfa? " He asked ." Ji Sahanshah, bahut Khoobsoorat hai." She said looking directly at him. " Haan, yehan ke aur logon se achi hi hogi." He said. Jodha did not answer. " Jab aap ne humein woh khat likha tha dhayan aapne tabhi soch liya tha humari beizaati karengi." He asked coming close to her " humne aapko koi galt khat nahi bheja tha, humne surf aapko dhaniawad bheja tha. Hume us khat ka har akshar yaad hai." She said. He was still close to her , he could smell the beautiful smell of her hair, but his ego didn't let him feel it " humein bhi woh khat harf dar harf yaad hai, " saying this he moved away. " Aapko laga aap ek ishara karenge aur hum aapke paas daurein chalen ayenge. Par nahi aap koi nahi hai humare liye aap ka koi wajood hi nahi. Yeh baat humesha yaad rakhiye ga." He could see tears shining in Jodha's eyes, but she didn't let them fall. Seeing her pain he felt a weird pain and restlessness, but he turned away from her."Aap ja sakti hai. He turned back just in time to see her desolate face. She went away.

He should be feeling elated but he wasn't, instead he felt hurt and restless sad. He felt like throwing something but he couldn't. He walked out of DEK. As he passed the the angoori bagh he saw Jodha standing at her jhrokha tears pouring down her eyes with a far away look in his eyes. He just couldn't see her like this so he went away to his room fast.

In his room he st on his bed and closed his eyes, as soon as he did he saw jodha's tear filled eyes again. " Nahi" he thought " Humein apne masked mein kamiyab hona hai, hum kamzor nahi par sakte." He thought for sometime then called a servant " baandi, jao Aur badi Ammi ko bulao." He said. When the bandi left he smiled to himself. After sometime Mahamanga arrived. " Jalal aapne bulaya" she asked " Ji Badi Ammi , hum chahte hai aap ramtanu hi se lage aaj sham ko ek jashan hai usmein wo apna fan pesh Karin." He said " kaisa Jadhan jalal." She asked " Kabul paar jeet la jashan."

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Awesome chapter Ispitađź’šđź’š

Loved it💛💛

Hope he comes to know the truth soon🧡🧡

Continue soon ❤️❤️

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Awesome story

Let's see how going on

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Chapter 3 The concert

Baa Adab

Baa Mulaiza hoshiyar

Noor e taqt e mughalia

Badshah Jalaluddin Mohammad

Tasreef la rahen hai

Jalal entered the Deewan e khaas and went to his throne,and turned arround and sat down. The first thing his eyes were looking for was her, there she was sitting behind the curtain, looking Divine in a blue lehenga. "aaj jashan suru karne se pehle hum chahte hai ke humare khaas begume humare sath baithe, Aiye Rukaiya begam. "Jalal said. Rukaiya begam got up slowly and came to the throne and sat next to Jalal. Jalal then looked at Jodha, Jodha got up slowly and started coming to the throne. "Yeh jagah aksar humare khaas begumo ke liye hota hai, par aaj hum chahte hai ke humara khaas tohfa Benazir yeha baithe. " Jalal said giving Jodha a sly smirk. Jodha was shocked. Jalal could see her face turn red in embarrassment. Everyone in the court was equally shocked. Jalal looked at the entrance of DEK as Benazir walked in seductively, she wore a pair of black harem pants and a short blouse. As she passed Jodha Jalal extended his hand to her she took it and came to sit next to him. Jodha's face was filled with anger and pain. She went back to her seat. "Jashn ka agaaz ho. " Jalal commanded. Ramtanu Pandey started singing,

In ankho mein tum

Jab se base ho

Sara jag roop tera

Jalal saw Jodha looking at him, he took Benazir's hand and started playing with it. Jodha looked down he could see tears shining in her eyes. He felt a weird restlessness in him, he felt like someone was ripping his heart apart. The organ in his chest protested at what his ego was making him do. But his ego was larger than his heart .

Preet ka yeh rang

Aab to tere sang

Aur bhi ho gaya gehra

Jodha was looking at him, Benazir leaned towards him and said "Is izzat afzai ke liye sukriya Shahenshah " he smiled at her, but his eyes were on Jodha. He was not being able to bear seeing Jodha crying. He called Mahamanga " badi Ammi, hum chahte hai ke jodha begum yehan se chali jaye." He told her ." She gave an evil smirk and went to jodha. Jalal saw her wishpering something in Jodha's ears. She looked at him with a lot of pain in her eyes. Jalal looked away, he looked at Benazir and continued playing with her fingers. But from corner of his eyes he saw jodha leaving gracefully.

As soon as Jodha left, he lost his interest in the festivities. Even Ramtanu Pandey's music didn't please him. He just kept a fake smile on his face. When the jashan was over he left for his hozra. As he passed Jodha's room, he heard Moti scolding Jodha " Aap yeh kya kar rahi hai, itni thand hai yeha aur aap bina garam kapron ke jharokhe pe khari hai, chaliye. " " kya prabhav padta hai, jo agni humare man mein jal rahi hai usse humara tan bhi jal raha hai. Aur phir hum jeevit rahe ya mar jaye kya farkh padta hai humari koi astitwa hi nahi unke ankho mein. "

Jodha said with a lot of pain. Jalal was shocked, he could see that his behaviour was deteriorating her state. But in his ego he felt she deserved it. He turned and started going but then turned back to look at her. He wanted to console her but stopped himself. He went to his hozra.

After he reached his hozra he sat on the bed. He couldn't understand his feelings. He poured himself a drink and donned it in one go. Then he poured himself another one. He got up took off his clothes and went to the hamam. He told his bandhis to leave" taklia " he ordered . He wanted to be alone. He went into the water and rested his head on the back of the hamam and closed his eyes, he should be happy to see her state but he wasn't, instead he felt restless. Suddenly he felt someone caressing his shoulder, he looked up to see it was Jodha, he stared at her for some time then looked away. " aap yeha" he asked. " Aap rusht hai humse?" She asked in her sweet voice " Aap nahi jaanti, aap ne humari beizzati ki hai." She slowly caressed his hand and put her hand around his shoulder, he closed his eyes,felt himself getting hard " mauf kar dijiye hume , hum aap ko thes pahuchane nahi chaahte the." He looked up to see her face was absolutely close to his, she was breathing hard. He leaned forward and captured her pink rose petal like lips in his she responded with equally fervour. He pushed in his tounge into her mouth and she moaned loudly, without letting go of her lips he pulled her into the water ,she broke the kiss in shock and looked at him, he looked at her with as much passion as he was feeling. He then kissed her again, and pulled her dupatta away and threw it into the water, he kissed the exposed portion of her breast. He wanted to lose himself in her. " Jodha" he called out in passion. "Sahenshah ka iqbaal buland ho Jodha begum aap se milna chahti hai." Jalal woke up with a start he was dreaming he realised. He looked arround their was no jodha. " ane do unhe." He said.

He heard Jodha's Payel as she came in." Aap yaha kiyun aayi hai." He asked looking at her."Aap ko yeh kada lautane. Jab aapne humein ustav mein amantrit hi nahi kiya to hum iska kya karenge. " she kept it in front of him. Jalal heard another footsteps he looked and saw Benazir coming. " Masha Alla, kitni khoobsoorat lag rahi hai aap. Aaiye hum aap hi ke paas aane Wale the, yeh lijiye aap ki khoobsoorati ko char chand lagane ke liye tohfa. "Saying Jalal handed the box jodha had given to Benazir. She took out the kangan and said" Sukriya Huzur. " and put it on her feet. " Subhan Alla. Bahut khub." He took Benazir's hand and said aiye humar pass , Benazir came and sat near him. "aap yeha abtak kiyun hai. " he could see jodha had tears in her eyes he brought Benazir's hand to his cheeks and said " aap jaa sakti hai yeha se." Jodha left with tears flowing from her eyes. As soon as Jodha left Jalal left Benazir's hand and turned away. " kya hua huzur." Benazir asked surprised " kuch nahi humein akela chod dijiye taklia."

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Chapter 4 Pain

After Benazir left Jalal sat in the water and contemplated about what he had done today. He knew that he had stooped too low. He knew he was slowly breaking her but his ego would not let him stop. He got out of the water and got ready for bed , as he got ready and got out of the hamam a soilder came in and announced " aram mein khalal dalne ke life maufi huzur par Marium Makhani aapse milna ki izzazat maangrahi hai" he said. Is waqt Ammijaan yeha kya kar rahi hai." Izazat hai." He said. He waited for his Ammijaan came in." Aaiye Ammijaan Aadab" he said. "Aadab Jalal." She said and kissed Jalal's head. " kahiye Ammijaan kya baat hai." He asked. " Hum bhi to yehi janna na chahte hai. Ke yeh sab kya chal raha hai. Tumne jo aaj Jodha ke saat kiya kya Tumhe lagta hai woh thik tha. Ek baandhi ke samne uski itni beizzati. Kya yeh sahi baat hai. Tumhari begum hai woh." She said "Aapko kiyun lagta hai ki maine yeh bewajah kiya?" Jalal asked " Hum jante hai ke kuch to aap dono ke beach galatfehmi hua hai. Par apni niki baaten ko bhar darbar me chalana ek Sahenshah ko sobha nahi deta hai."She said. " Is baar humari koi galati nahi thi." He said " par bolo to kya hua hai." She asked " nahi yeh humara niki mamla hai AAP isse dur rakhiye. Sabba khair." He said . He knew he was hurting him Ammi but he couldn't possibly tell her what was the problem. His mother went away.

Mahamanga watched from far away " Jo aag humne lagaya hai Jodha begum who koi nahi wujha payega. Aapne air Jalal ne humare bete ko qaid karwaya hai na. Hum tum dono ko khun ke ansu rulayenge. Jalal jab tak hum tumhare chahti hai hum uska Canada utha te range." She turned and left.

It was middle of the night Jalal couldn't sleep. He got up and went out of his hozra. As he was strolling arround he saw someone moving in the garden. He looked down to see Jodha. She looked like a dissolate figure all alone. She went to the centre platform and sat down. He saw Moti come to her with her dinner plate . " hadn't she eaten?"he thought. He saw Jodha shook her head and returned Moti. Moti tried again but to no avail. Jodha has always been stubborn. He went down to angoori bagh. And stopped Moti." Ruko Moti khana idhar Lao." He said taking the plate from her. He went to the central platform. He came and stood behind her " Aap ne khana kiyun nahi khaya." He asked. Jodha looked up at him" Shahenshah aap yeha. Lagta hai aap rasta bhatia gaye hai yeha Benazir nahi hai." She said in a sarcastic voice. "Taana maarne ki jarurat nahi, khana kha lijiyecaur andar jaiye bahar bahut thand hai." He said " Aaj achanak humari chinta kiyun. Hume aap ki chinta ki jarurat nahi." She said. " Fikr nahi hai humara farz hai, chahe aapne hume apna shauhar na mana ho par aap humari begum hai toh aapki what ke bare mein sochna humara farz banta hai." He said. " Humein bhukh magi hai." She said " Kiyun Kuch hua hai kya!" He asked on purpose. Jodha stared at him for sometime and said "Nahi kuch nahi ." She said " Phir kha lijiye," he said then came very close to her and said " warna hum samjhenge me humare Benazir ke pas jane se aap ko dark padta hai." He said smirking. " Nahi nahi padta fark.Aap jo chahe kariye hume usse kya." She answered " to first saabit kijiye , lijiye" He said still smirking. Jodha snatched the plate from Jalal and walked away.

Next day Jalal woke up early and went out to his practice area looked up to at the tulsi munch near Jodha's hozra, but she was not there. He started his practice whe he heard clanging of swords somewhere else looked up to see his guards had stopped Benazir. "Aan e do unhe." She came to him " Aadab Shahenshah , aap to behtareen shamsheer charlatan hai." She said " Sukriya asp shamsheer chalana la Saukh rakhti hai." He asked." Ji nahi, kabhi jarurat hi nahi padi. Humari ankhe kafi hai."she answered " So to hai, site hum aapko shamsheer chalana sikhaten hai. " he said " par Sahenshah shamsheer chalana ke liye humare libas thik nahi." She said " baandhi jao aur inkeliye woh libas le kar ao jaise pegan kar jodha begum shamsheer ka diya kartin hai." He said then he looked at her and said " Jaiye badal lijiye." Benazir left. Jalal had seen Jodha begum coming hence this drama. Benazir returned wearing Jodha's dress. He could see Jodha looking at him with fire in his eyes. they started practicing. Benazir was good, He saw Jodha's eyes filled with pain tears,were rolling down her eyes. She left and Jalal's sword fell from his hand. " aap toh acha chalati hai shamsheer. " he then said chaliye hum Chaltein hai.

In the evening Jalal came out of his hozra for a stroll. He again saw Jodha begum sitting on the central platform with Salima begum. She had a sad look on her face. She also looked pale. It hurt Jalal to see her state. After sometime Salima begum left She sat alone. He went down and stood looking at her she had her hair open and looked Divine.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Please don't show her meek and vulnerable.she is not at fault.you should show her in different perspective not like show.No King will offer his throne to a maid.show was crap showing this type of garbage.show her strong,fiery, prideful holding her ground like a queen.

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