SamAina TS:- Love Kills Part 3 Page 13 - Page 11

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Posted: 6 years ago
Part 2:
What a way to represent the topic at hand Muski! Bravo! You nailed it!
Right from the time Sameer started to smoke, to the times he tried covering up his habit with flirtatious lines- lying not to break Naina's trust, yet doing so in the end!
No relationship can ever survive without trust! Sameer was naive when he thought he could keep it hidden from Naina.
I liked how he tried to abstain from smoking even in front of the Delhi gang- but then peer pressure and his vulnerable age got the best of it!
But love prevails- Sameer knows he is always going to choose Naina over anything else!
The heart to heart convo between Sameer and Naina at the temple! Wow! And I especially like the line- the dried leaves swayed defiantly as the wind blew vigorously! Don't know why, but this line brought a certain element of pain and nostalgia around the two souls standing at the temple there!
And Naina confesses she fell for him at first look! Show wali Naina se to umeed nahi! CVs to bhul gaye Sameer ki cigarettebaazi! But tumne dil ki tammanna puri kar di...and actually it's a habit which is not easy to do away with!
So great going girl! The writing & the approach to it was very realisitc!
Loved it!
Sur
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Posted: 6 years ago
First of all Sorry for replying late Muskan ... I loved the part though yeh sach hai I had to re read the previous parts Kyunki main bhool gyi thi plot 😆 ... Yeh jo end ka twist I loved it . . Seriously u have out of the box thinking .. Unpredictable at times. .. All the emotions were bang on and subtle romance was cherry on the cake. . U describe the romantic scenes so well it just adds up the feels to hundred times more. . Thanks for the pm
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Posted: 6 years ago
Muskan! 🤗

Firstly, the intentions between the dialogue I badly need one at the beginning and at the end just shows how he has transformed, how the story has progressed beautifully. The twist was good.
I liked Naina's tenacity and you stood by it till the end which made me happy.

Love is a meeting of two souls, fully accepting the dark and the light within each other, bound by the courage to grow through struggle into bliss.

The strongest drug that exists for a human being is another human being, that is why cigarettes didn't stand a chance. I loved how you brought in the fact that all humans are flawed but most important fact to be understood is all are worthy of love. What brought me immense happiness was the acceptance of each other, they truly make each other a better person as they know love isn't only about having a strong feeling for your partner but it is also a a decision, a judgement and a promise.

Love wins, love always wins! ❤️
Edited by Mayashika - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: Samaina_1990

Part 2:
What a way to represent the topic at hand Muski! Bravo! You nailed it!
Right from the time Sameer started to smoke, to the times he tried covering up his habit with flirtatious lines- lying not to break Naina's trust, yet doing so in the end!
No relationship can ever survive without trust! Sameer was naive when he thought he could keep it hidden from Naina.
I liked how he tried to abstain from smoking even in front of the Delhi gang- but then peer pressure and his vulnerable age got the best of it!
But love prevails- Sameer knows he is always going to choose Naina over anything else!
The heart to heart convo between Sameer and Naina at the temple! Wow! And I especially like the line- the dried leaves swayed defiantly as the wind blew vigorously! Don't know why, but this line brought a certain element of pain and nostalgia around the two souls standing at the temple there!
And Naina confesses she fell for him at first look! Show wali Naina se to umeed nahi! CVs to bhul gaye Sameer ki cigarettebaazi! But tumne dil ki tammanna puri kar di...and actually it's a habit which is not easy to do away with!
So great going girl! The writing & the approach to it was very realisitc!
Loved it!
Sur


Thank you so much Sur Di! I'm so happy to hear you liked it and found it realistic!

Smoking indeed is a terrible addiction; but Love gives us the courage to overcome all hurdles including these bad habits. All you need is a little bit of faith and a lot of determination.

Though I'm not a huge fan of poetry, I try to put in a few poetic literary devices in my writing, an example being the line that you loved the most. I'm glad to hear it turned out okay.. 😆

CVs can be credited for this...jahan jahan they leave loopholes or leave us disappointed, wahan wahan our creativity comes into action through words. So thank you CVs for disappointing us yet again... 😆

Thank you so much for appreciating my work, Di. I'd once again credit sangat ka asar! 😳
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: suhaaniladki

First of all Sorry for replying late Muskan ... I loved the part though yeh sach hai I had to re read the previous parts Kyunki main bhool gyi thi plot 😆 ... Yeh jo end ka twist I loved it . . Seriously u have out of the box thinking .. Unpredictable at times. .. All the emotions were bang on and subtle romance was cherry on the cake. . U describe the romantic scenes so well it just adds up the feels to hundred times more. . Thanks for the pm


Meenakshi! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! Sorry for seeing and replying to your review nearly a month late...pata nahi kaise dimag se nikal gaya 😳
No worries...I too had to read the previous parts so many times to remind myself of the plot and to think of ways to end it. 😆 I'm so happy to hear you liked it! Sangat ka asar hai Meenakshi...jab aap jaise itne achhe writers ho forum par toh ideas just keep flowing 😳

Thank you so much once again! 😃
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: Mayashika

Muskan! 🤗

Firstly, the intentions between the dialogue I badly need one at the beginning and at the end just shows how he has transformed, how the story has progressed beautifully. The twist was good.
I liked Naina's tenacity and you stood by it till the end which made me happy.

Love is a meeting of two souls, fully accepting the dark and the light within each other, bound by the courage to grow through struggle into bliss.

The strongest drug that exists for a human being is another human being, that is why cigarettes didn't stand a chance. I loved how you brought in the fact that all humans are flawed but most important fact to be understood is all are worthy of love. What brought me immense happiness was the acceptance of each other, they truly make each other a better person as they know love isn't only about having a strong feeling for your partner but it is also a a decision, a judgement and a promise.

Love wins, love always wins! ❤️


Shreya! 🤗

The idea of repeating the same line with contrasting meanings struck me when I was planning the third and final part of the TS; and I made sure i made a note of it. I'm so happy to hear you liked it! 😃
It's the stereotype of boys being the only ones who smoke, so although pretty late yet I thought of adding this element to the story too. Everyone is flawed and everyone can fall into the trap of cigarette smoking. This isn't an issue restricted to just boys.

Your elaboration on love is simply marvelous! Love too is an addiction and has the power to overcome all others; no matter the person or the habit. Love not only makes life beautiful, but also the people involved. Truly love is a beautiful and incessant emotion!

Thank you so much for the wonderful review, Shreya! 😳

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