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Please don't kill me ?! Please *holding ears for being
so extremely late*. I swear I thought I would UnRes earlier yesterday but you know what with Durga Pooja and School being in a khidchi and add my laziness or stubbornness to not comment unsatisfactory for me stuff to the mix 🥱
So here I am sitting in my home all dressed up and determined to not get out till I comment 😆
Okay and by the way this was the fourth time I read not because I forgot what to comment on but because I couldn't get enough of the feels !
When every breath you take reminds you of your iniquitous deeds, heart sense the brutal spear and brain nothing but questions how you dare to breathe the same air as the one you oh-so-unmercifully killed with your bare hands by throwing her out of your life three months ago, the littlest gesture of care, and a few lulling words of comfort feels like a soothing balm to your never healing scars.Ah so poetic and so damn addicting at the same time. Like I knew the time I read these lines what an absolute delight and gorgeous this whole thing will be ❤️
Instead he found Annika underneath him. And before he could jerk off as his rational mind had already concluded that she was royally squished all night and a few of her ribcages has been broken with his weight, he noted their position. His face buried into her neck, his arms around her waist, gripping as though it was his only support, her fingers were deeply woven through his ruffled hair while her other hand tightly secured on his back, completely embracing him in her warmth.
No wonder, he slept so well last night!
This whole piece where he gets up and finds their entangled situation was just breathtaking. I could imagine his each and every action and could
feel his feelings. The soothing effect and the sweet relief of their togetherness just blew me away. And also that little bit of humor if I am not wrong just added to the feeling of complete ness.
cocooning him in her warm solace, insisting him to not go to office in the morning, knowing very well how much he needed the sleep though he had never uttered a word about this and had always portrayed himself to be all-normal and sane whenever she was around. Was he surprised at her ability to read him? Nope! Not even a bit. Had she not been like this since the beginning? Just a crease on his forehead and she would know something was wrong. While her soft voice had uttered all the words of comfort that blanketed his heart with an unknown tranquility, her determined and firm voice about not letting him go to office nothing but told him that even if he does protests, it would be of no avail.At this point I didn't even realize that I was reading this because I could just clearly visualize him so in front of me and I just immersed myself in it completely. Immerse as in I let those beautiful sensations wash over me and basked in them for the rest of my stay. Such is your writing prowess :')
Her transformation from being a child with all the crazy antics, to an overly mature woman according to his needs, who read through every inner turmoil and every hidden distress behind his plastic smile, only reinforced the woman she is all together - the kind who is capable of utilizing different shades of the hues secured within her at the right time and in the right way!One of my favourite parts in this shot ❤️ Because of two things : First because of the description of the woman you gave here is exactly the type of woman everyone wants to be , the kind of woman I would like to become. Second : Because he understands her SO well. The bond is just so strong and in this one para you displayed both their dynamics phenomenally ❤️ Bows to you for having the power to portray that in one simple para
Gotta go for now ! Please akhon juto maarish naa. I promise aajke complete Kore e charbo apne dil ki baat 😆
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I am back 🤗
Shubho Maha Shoshti by the way 😳
A homely serenity had overwhelmed him when she had took him in his arms and lulled him to sleep. The scent, the touch, the breath and the heartbeat as he placed his face in the crook of her neck only locked his never ending agony and buried it deep under the sea for the night. He didn't remember the last time he had slept so peacefully and for so long!The way you explained his feelings and the way you made us feel for him is WOW *reference to aaj ka episode 😆* and don't bite your lower lip for this WOW 😉
@Bold : I swear I died a little at this 🤢 I DID 😳
After that the way he wanted to keep that feeling to himself "imprinted" you use. I can't tell you how tranquil I felt. I had that peace inside me when he switched off that damn alarm and told her to sleep ❤️
And after that toh I leggit melted bas no words but pure freaking melted.
Then comes Annika with his suit ready and breakfast ready. As much I already love Annika I think I fell a bit more along with Shivaay for her again.
Like that is the best part of Shivika for me which you captured perfectly. They are there for each other no matter WHAT Sometimes Shivaay and sometimes Annika but for each other always !
All Shivay could do was to stare at her astoundingly. He couldn't for the love for her understand how her every action regarding him is so accurate and calculative, be it when it comes to choosing his clothes, taking care of his health, reading him like an open book or seeing through his stuffed up anguished emotions and soothing his blemished self.
Just what is she?
Exact-freaking-ly ! Just what are you ? How can he make me feel in awe with her all over again and how can You make feel awe for him again ? I don't know at this point whom I loved more ? Annika for being the way she is or Shivaay for seeing her exactly the way she is !
Then comes another strawberry in your cake (sorry but I prefer strawberry more than cherry any day 😆 ) The Anni-Sa convo ❤️ I just already love them to bits. Everything was so natural and cute. I just couldn't help aww-ing from the consequences of the Convo. I just love love love Possessive + Caring Singh Oberoi especially when Anni is being unreasonable *read: selfless* and you have some perfect timing with stuff man 👏
Raising her small form on her toes as her one hand stayed on his shoulder and the other cupped his cheeks tenderly, she pressed her trembling lips against his cheeks and stayed there for longer than she intended to before pulling back.
" I'll make sure you are!"
I teared up a little bit at this and I had goosebumps all over. SUCH POWERFUL YET POIGNANT WRITING ! All I wanted to do was kiss you at this moment for imprinting such a beautiful scene in my soul. What a phenomenal piece of writing here Mushfika. Just brilliant.
It didn't take him long to understand her sudden statement. It was a reply to his reassurance that he's fine. It was a promise, more to herself than him, to set everything right.
Leaning in to kiss her ear, he whispered in resolution, "I know!
I sucked in an long breathe after this and savoured this moment for a while. And maybe forgot for a moment it isn't my moment but I am making this as a memory to cherish.
Aheemm our Beastly Singh Oberoi is back it seems but this time the staff doesn't have to worry much cuz they have Chameli. Oops sorry no chameli but Chameli wearing khidkitodh lady who makes the beast a billuji 🤣
The text Convo was ❤️ in one emoji 😆
Beautiful insertion which felt natural and nothing else. Maybe I forgot to appreciate the fact that you beautifully stitch the plot , it makes stuff look more organic and gorgeous.
And then came our bundle of sunshine herself along with her trademark warmth. At this point I had a parallel of Beauty and the Beast popping up in my mind with the Beauty radiating love and warmth into the beast's palace and Beauty and Beast is one of my absolute favorite ones ❤️So thank you so much for that Darling 🤗
Then toh kya bolun ? Everything was perfect to the T. Be it Annika unintentionally blurting out the truth or Shivaay being the Heath freak for her.
Just amazingly portrayed. I have told you earlier that your flavor of capturing the domesticity of their relationship is Unique as well as extraordinary. Too Good.
"Spit it out, Anika."
"Ice cream on our way back?"
"Done!"
Anika almost jumped, squeaking in delight as he chuckled softly witnessing yet another number of transformation of his wife from being an overly mature woman to a 5 year old.
I had this huge grin plastered over my face while reading this like I myself was jumping in joy 😆 Uff Mushy why so good ?
Annika being Annika was worried about the price of an ice-cream and SSO being SSO actually made the goons scramble off without a scratch on their faces just with his sheer power. Really loved how you kept them in their respective characters yet managed to blend them perfectly as a couple !
Also I think I slightly dreamt of a guy who could get me all the flavors of ice-cream if I couldn't decide Aww-dored that part girl ❤️
Her hands started grazing his ears before she placed a peck behind his ear. Massaging his scalp, she brushed the short strands of hair from his forehead before placing another on his cheek.
His hands automatically tightened around her waist, "This is just a rough draft. I have jotted down the main points for the presentation."
Cupping his cheeks, Anika kissed his nose before straightening the lines on his forehead.
Did you want to kill us with this heartwarming and tender visual you put in our mind ? Oh what would I do to see this on the show ?! Not that you didn't do a good enough job but my imagination isn't good enough with NaRbhi being such Ace performers. The sweetness and the natural ness of this bit pierced something in me I swear.
And THEN !
When I feel you can't make this better or write better than this , you did Magic.
Like I am not even gonna comment or say something on that part because I just can't do justice by saying something for that Pure and heartwarming a scene. I just can't. I ...
Well speechless is the word for that. But overall the gorgeous masterpiece you created taking care of every small detail and shade. Inserting such organic and lovely bits that it didn't feel like an insertion. That's what a masterpiece is I guess. Putting small details and things to create an overall larger and beautiful overall.
Already said many things about this shot but for you : "Good writing is supposed to evoke sensations in the reader. Not the fact that it is raining but the feeling of being rained upon." By EL Doctorow.
And trust me my twinster you just did EXACTLY that. Create sensations and made me cherish them ❤️
Hope I haven't taken this too long and didn't spam you incessantly 🤣
Also I hope you are writing the next one of any sort as soon as possible. You better do that or else ;)
Huge Love , Hugs and Kisses for this 🤗
You reached till the end right ? 😆
Edited by CaffeineMuggle - 8 years ago
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