Advni FF~ Phoenix UPD part 13 pg 58

Originally posted by: hailly

Index

Part One - Above

Part Two -

Part Three -

Originally posted by: 2filmy

Congrats on your 1st FF
I loved the start
Interesting start

Originally posted by: 2filmy

So she finally wants to know the truth
And so she called Mama
I wish they had shown this in the show

Originally posted by: LovingAHA2017

Part 1 was very enjoyable. Congrats on first FF. Do continue further. Story could have very much gone this way at some juncture... be it her first hugging him after knowing he is Dev or during rain episode or even yesterday when they were having face off with each other.

Even though end date is declared; CVs have not yet gone this way. Later there won't be sufficient time to make justice for the story.

She contacting and questioning Neeru mama is such an important milestone or turning point of the story. Her redemption starts there. Waiting to read how you portray the bursting of bubble for Chandani " maine to kuchh bhi nahi kiya." You have portrayed well that she was unaware of his parent''s death and his sudden revelation baffles her. Waiting for further parts.