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Aiswarya

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Posted: 17 years ago

this is my first ever fan fiction i know there will be mistake lots of them
sorrrrrri for that
ya i have maded a lot of changeeeee
if u don't like tell me that also i will try to improve pls don't forget to comment pls
wherther its bad or good pls comment 😭😭😭

Dharam veer fan fic
sorri if any mistake happens

xcontinuing the story
veer is thinking hard how to solve his 2 promise
then dharam comes
dharam seeing veer in tenstion ask him what is he thinking
veer;kuch nahi may bas aisa hi
dharam;may tumhara bhai ho muhjey pata hey jab tum pareshan ho batavo na kya baat hey
veer;woh bhimsingh key bharey may soch reha tha
dharam;muhjey tum par bahit vishwas hey veer tum apna vada nibana achi tarah janthey ho tho jo tumay theek lagey woh karna magar jo bhi karney sey pehala
apna rules(dunno hindi word) sab yaad rekey
he wents to sleep
veer also goes with to sleep
next morning
bhimsingh started to work when dv reached
his work was marvolluous n fast
when they dv saw there work they where shocked
it was half done
dv also had an for agni because they where sure that agni will do somthing abt this(same time agni spyes this)
agni to maharaj;one of our prisioner is escaped
maharaj in shock;kya when does it happened
agni;yesterday night
maharaj;who is it???
agni; bhimsingh who was senetenced to be in jail for llife time
who is really a grt artisit
maharaj;so? who do u think have helped him to get out
agni; without hestination;rajkumar dharam aur rajkumar veer
maharaj; noooooooooo i can't belive it
agni; if u don't come with me i will show u
maharaj agress they both go to work place
jaimal is happy with agni's performance

workplacce
agnii;maharj iss taraf
maharaj go with him to murti's place

maharaj shocked to see........

should i conitnue if yessss then pls replyyyyyyyyy

part 2
maharaj shocked to see that dv working in murti which was half done
and startes agni
dv runs in sight oof maharaj
dharam;pitaji aap yehaaa
veer;ji maharaj aap yeha kaisey?(both lookking each other in suprise n hidding there laughter)
maharaj;bas may ea dekhna aya thi ki murti ki kaam kaisey chal reha hey
he stares at agni who is standing in shock n searching for sight of bhimsingh who was not at all seen there
maharaj to agni; tum kuch keh reha tha kaha hey woh muhjey yeha koi nahi dekha reha hey seiva dharam aur veer ki
(in angry) mera samay kimtti hey agni agar tumney ak aur word kaha dv key against u will be thrown to jail be aware
aur dv tum log bahut acha kaam kar rehey hoooo
veer;maharaj humey ap sey ak request ki thi ki agni aur jaimal chacha hamere kaam may interfere nahi kar saktha but look agni is interfering
maharaj to agni;agni i m ashamed of u and leave dharamveer ,if u again distrub them i will surly put u in jail for life time n don't distrub me saying again that bhimsingh is helping dv to make murti did u got me??????
agni nodded in agreement
mahararaj went

dv started to laugh
agni to dv; u won't ecaspe from my hands more
i saw bhimsingh working with my own eyesss
veer;muhjey lagtha hey ki tumharai ankhon may kuch problem hey he laughs n dharam joins in laugh too
agni;mazak tum achey kar lethey ho veer
veer;kya karooooooooooo adat jo pad gaya hey
again laughs
agni started to leave when veer calles him
veer; agniiiiiiiiiiiiiii u was comapling that bhimsingh is heliping us na ya he is helping us he is right here with us
bhimsingh he calles him he comes out of an bunch of bush
agni shocked n turn
veer;agni again going to complain or do us in????? try ur best u won't be succes we will finsh the murti in 2 days
agni turns face to face veer;i m not a coward,n i won't tell my plans
dharam;don't u dare to come again hereeeeeeee or else we will complain to maharaj n u will be in jail
agni;dharam may tumay chod ney walla nahi ho
he walks off........
do reply if u wanna reead moreee

part-3
dv helped bhimsingh to work out the murtii the first day was over
dharam and veer to went to an hut thats where veers mom live
when they entered veer's mom n sister where sitting n making foood
veer felt some reltion with his mom he felt as if he knows them very well
veers mom was shocked to see him on her hurt n his sister was happy
veer have a srong feeling that he knows them very well
dharam was noticing veer's face reaction
dharam asked veer
dharam;veer tum theek tho ho na
u look confused?????
veer;nothing i felt a strong feeling that i know them before
veers mom turn that side n hide her tears
veers sister saw her mom so she went to them
vs(veers sister);what are u guys doing here
dharam ;we want to ask u a favour from u
vs;what favour???
veer;u know bhimsingh we helped to escape him from jail he is with us now ,we want a place to hide as our cousin agni is behind him
vs;so?????
dharam;pls can bhimsingh stay at ur side room of ur house who none knows
veer interepted when he sees veer's sister's amzement(because only she n her mom knows abt this secert room)
veer;we find out when we where seacrhing for a shelter
vs;okay he can stay
dharam;thank u soo much (he gave an pack of gold)
vs;we don't need it rajkumar we are getting renumeration for our work so thanxz
veer;sorri we didn't mean to insult u
vs;its k with a smile
dharam to veer;ab chalo hey bhi ho gaye
dharam went
veer started to leave but some thing said to remain him back he truned back once more
n then
dharam; veeeeeeeeeeeeeerrrrrr chalooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
veer went
veers mom was happyyyyyyyy
veers mom;he is realsing something i guess
veers sister n mom watch veer running with dharam

in palace
maharaj to his family members ;veer ak bahut hi hosiyaar bacha hey
dharam n veer is working hard the staute is half done
i was wrong in dharam for scolding i think he knows his work
veer is also doing hard work(to his sister)
maharaj to jaimal n agni;jaimal ur son agni is interferening them too much he was provking me against them saying dv helped to escape bhimsingh
tmrw if i find u there agni i will throw u to jail
jailmail replied;no maharaj he won't interpert themmmm he was ashamed of his behaviour today i m sorri for his behaviour
maharj;its okay don't repeat it n where is dharam n veer i want to have a dinner with them senapathi woh dono kaha hey
dv toghther;hum yehaaaaaaaaaa heyeeeeeeeeeeeeee(smiling)
maharaj smiling
dharam went strightly to maharaj n hugged him n veer to his mom n hugged her
dharams mom came
dharams mom;ab ye pyaar baat may kareyga ,khana tyaar hey chalo
so they all went to dinner even agni n jaimal
n then after dinner dv went to there room because they worked so hard they felt very tired
in agni's room
jaimal;agni tumey muhjey aaj sharaminda kar diyaaaaaaaaaaa
agni;sorri ,but dad i saw bhimsingh there but when i went with maharaj dv hide bhimsingh somwhere that i didn't except
jamal;i know they are intelligent there plans are excellent but now i m on this case
i have an excellent plan agni it will surly put both dharam n veer in trouble
agni become excited

should i conitnueeeeeeeeeeeeee????????

part 4
next day the work started as usual bhimsingh was really creative n strong n fast....
dharam was also impressed by bhimsingh's work n bhimsingh was really impressed upon veer for doing his job easly
he understood an sharmik touch in veer he is very creativie n hard working
agni was seeing all this n was angiest
he can't just do anything to destory itttttttt
the murti was done
agni went directly to his dad
agni;pitaji whats all this u said u have plans but dv have completed it n we are just sitting her celebrating there succses??????????
if they build the murti maharaj will be impressed n dharam will be srly new maharaj
agni's dad;don't u dare to tell like that agni and u don't belive ur dad agni thats bad u should trust me
agni be coool i m here to make trouble for dv
with that he gooes agni still in angry

the dv was happy as the murti was over with a grt encarvingsssss n veer thanked bhimsingh al lot even dharam also congrated him
veer;bhimsingh thanxz for ur co-operation we are much thankful to u if u where not there dharam would be in a grt trouble
dharam;ya bhimsingh if u where not there i would be in grt trouble n ur are the best artisiman i ever met
bhimsingh;i don't want ur encouargements what i want i have told u n if u didn't give me free dom i will surly kill u both thats a promise
dharam started veer
veer was also in an confused look
veer asked bhimsingh
veer;bhimsingh why where u throwm out to jail? i mean u are an excellent sharmik who makes the best statue at a faster speed
dharam;ya even good veer i was thinking of asking the same so bhimsingh why where u put in prison?

bhimsingh;i was put in prison because i helped my friend who was helping other sharmik actcally i was a solider of sharmik prince
dv shocked to know thisssssssssssssssssssssss
dharam; was there a sharmik prince ?
bhimsingh(b);u don't know the histroy???????????????????
veer;no can u explain to us???
b;ya sure actcally there was a war between sharmik n aryavrid(sorri dunno know to spell) we sharmik lost the war our prince was prisonred
we where great craftsman of our time n aryavyad know abt this from that very moment they i mean aryavydh made us there slaves to do there bidding
veeer;what happened to the prince
b;he was murdered for asking not to have crulty to sharmik(the prince will be veer father story twisted by me)i went to help him
thats why i was senetnced to jail for lifetime
dv shockedddd especailly veer was visualsing the scence of killing the prince thats his dad
dharam;but we don't know abt this i mean none told us this stpry
b;they won't because if they did u will fight for our freedom more than us
because they are doing a cruical thing to sharmiks(dunno to spell it)
anyway i wanna some rest
he went
veer is still shocked
dv stayed with murti side to protect it

next day
the murti was made perfectly just some last work was there
dv was informed that maharaj will come at 11 in morning
dv was happy because they had some last work
but jai mama had mis informed dv that maharaj will come at 11 actcally the time was 9
jai mama was sure that dv n bhimsingh will be working there together
maharaj n alll went to the ground @ 9
other side dv working hard with bhimsingh last work

what will happen
pls reply

part 5

on other side
veers mom(not real her name i duno i will use n)n;-pls god i want my veer to be safe i know he is not my son but
blood is not only the reletion
then sunanda comes in(i dunno her name i will denote her as s)s;-u are prayers will surly help him one day
but he will always remain as a sharmik i saw his work todAY he is soooooooooooooooo much talentedddddd
i was shocked to see his work so u be careful i came here to suggest u to tell u that
pls keep veer away fro sharmik some day he will find out his blood will speak

n;ya sunda u are right i will keep him away from them once murti is over
i will never ever allow anyone find out he not my son
sunada pls don't tell this to anyone i trust u

s;i won'ttttt

they went to sleep

by the time maharaj reach
bhimsingh had been waiting there for solider to take him(tieed in ropes)
maharaj was shocked to see bhimsingh was locked by dv
maharaj(m);agni is this the one who is escaped from prision?????????
agni (in shock);yes maharaj ,but maharaj this is all dv's trick i mean after doing there murti they had tied him up it is obvious isn;t it maharaj?????
maharaj;basssssssss agniiii stop all ur nonsense i know why u wanna tell hese things u are jealous of dv aren't u plssssssss study somthing from them
dv laughs n looks at agni who startes back
jai mama also in shock he failed in his plan
dv laughsss at jai mama n agni's reaction
an flashback
after a min maharaj went to see statute veer came back to enjury the right time,when maharaj will come
n he knows that they where misinformed time he run through shortcut thrugh bushes,jumping through rocks,water n he
n reached the place before maharaj came,he informed bhimsingh there problem
veer;bhimsingh i know my promise to u but now u have to trust me by anythingggggggggggggggg ,i won't cheat you
dharam;veer what happened n why are u tieing his hand in ropes what happened
veer;maharaj will reach here soon we where misinformed he is comming if he finds bhimsingh he n us will be grt trouble so i had an plan
bhimsingh i will surly give u ur free dom trust me
bhimsingh;i trust you n if u broke it i will broke jail n come n kill u first
veer noodded
dharam;veer u promised me that he will go back to jail (in whisper)
veer;i know dharam but u also said we can't give freedom to an prisoner but maharaj have rite to do it
dharam;whats ur plan
veer;i will tell u
but soon he started telling maharaj came so he have to stop telling his plan
end of flashback********
maharaj to dv;dharam aur veer u have captured him dv nods
m;(maharaj=m);-i m really proud of u dharam n u veer u also,i m feeling great my son n my sister son done an outstanding job
dv nodded n smiled at agni who started them
maharaj was happyyyyyy with there murti he praised them a lotttttttttt
he was sooooo happy he asked to dv
m;u have done an perfect job tell me what u want whatever u want today i will give u thats an king's promise
maharaj looked at dharam
dharam;i don't want anything these sharmiks helped us a lot so i want them to take rest for there job dad sorri maharaj
m;ya permission granted
and u veer what u wwant

veer;maharaj first u should promise me u will give me what ever i asked
maharaj smiled and said;i m a king n here by will give u watever you want
veer smiled ;maharaj i want u to give free dom to bhimsingh
all shocked

if i wanna conitnue i need 10 comments or replyssssssss

Edited by ash_rajat00 - 17 years ago