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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: SofiaIshVeer
Awesome... Loved It... Waiting For Next Part

Thank you!

Glad you loved it!😊

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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: Sania_suraj
It was awesome di..
U shouldn't do like tis sis..i was reading each and every line eagerly and interestingly..but suddenly u stopped in the mid..
Feeling sad😔
Eyelock btw teacher and student was so different but superb..
Just loved it so much..
And luv u too sis...
Pls update soon..waiting for ur next updates..
Tq for updating before the due date..

Thanks dear!

Sorry for that baby sis!

I know sometimes being cruel is not good but what to do.

Glad the eye lock was accepted.

Louve you too dear.

Will be on time with my next part!

It's my pleasure to update once I finished it!

Thanks once again!

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nemo316

@nemo316

Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#33

Awesome start!

I felt for Chakor, she's missing her old friends and is almost being bullied at school. She's very lonely, no wonder she would fall for Suraj.

Suraj seems to be the quiet type for a change.

Why did you have to end it here? I wonder what did he think of their proximity.

I'm happy it will be a longer story, more for us to enjoy. Eagerly waiting for the next update.

Edited by meshmesh - 8 years ago

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Maithili

@maithu_

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#34

Hello everyone!

Sorry to say I will only update the next part of Orenda on Sunday as I'm a bit busy.

Thanks for all your support and likes!

Here goes how I will be posting my stories:

CAY - Wednesday and Saturday

Orenda - Thursday and Sunday

TTW - Tuesday

When one story ends, I have something reserved to replace the day.

So for now I just hope I follow my schedules.

In case I can't post one day, I will inform you all.

Thanks a lot!

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Maithili

@maithu_

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: meshmesh
Awesome start!

I felt for Chakor, she's missing her old friends and is almost being bullied at school. She's very lonely, no wonder she would fall for Suraj.

Suraj seems to be the quiet type for a change.

Why did you have to end it here? I wonder what did he think of their proximity.

I'm happy it will be a longer story, more for us to enjoy. Eagerly waiting for the next update.

Thanks a lot.

Glad you liked it.

I'm trying to make the falling part a different kind.

And I'm also trying to make Chakor have an upper hand here.

Hope you all will like it.

What he thinks might or might not be said in the next part as this story will not have thought speaking parts.

I wish it will be an enjoyable story.

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Hope09

@Hope09

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

#36

Di the part was splendid!

Loved the way how u depicted Chakor's feelings and her mental thoughts..

Suraj's supportive role was very beautifully justified... 😊

The small parts that hinted towards the beginning of spark between them was the most amazing way of writing.

I loved the part and most what I love is the plot.. ❤️

Eagerly waiting for next 🤗

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Maithili

@maithu_

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: J.arora
Di the part was splendid!
Loved the way how u depicted Chakor's feelings and her mental thoughts..
Suraj's supportive role was very beautifully justified... 😊
The small parts that hinted towards the beginning of spark between them was the most amazing way of writing.
I loved the part and most what I love is the plot.. ❤️
Eagerly waiting for next 🤗

Thanks dear!
Glad you liked the sparking between them.
Hope you will like the rest of the plot too.
Next part for tomorrow.

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Maithili

@maithu_

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#38

Hey!

I'm so happy that you all like the start!
And I just hope that I do justification to the story.
Have to wait a little to see the real heroine here.
Link to previous part: Part 1
Happy reading!

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Part 2

It was with the sound of her pencil which was rolling all this time and now kissing the floor that made them break their eye contact.
The situation was awkward for both.
Chakor left his shoulder at the same time when he pulled his hand away from her. She straightened herself but wasn't able to say a word.
She felt like she didn't remember the question anymore and what is going to happen next.
He cleared his throat to gain her attention to get back to business and get out of this awkwardness as soon as possible.

"Listening Miss. Lal."
"Ye...yes sir!"

She took her notebook and searched for the page before finally finding it.
"While trying to resolve this equation of integral, I followed all the needed steps but found a different answer from what you said."
"Were you doing tomorrow's homework instead listening to my classes?" seeing her face.
"No" she turned a bit only to see his eyes on hers and averted it immediately, bring back to her note "I tried to do them during holidays." pulling few strands of hair behind her ear.
"Holiday are to enjoy but anyways, show me the exercise?" in a professional tone.
"It's not here. Can I write it on board?" pointing the board which is on her left.
"Sure!" he passes a chalk and got up from his chair to have a clear view of the board.

She started to write the equation on the board and started to solve that.
"The brackets should be here so that the equation could be correct." he correct her showing the place when she started to correct that, their hands brushed and she stopped dead there.
He composed his running horse in his heart and took a chalk and corrected it.
"Try to do this for tomorrow." he said.
She nodded avoiding seeing his eyes and went from there, put her things inside and got out of the room exclaiming.
"Thank you Sir."
"Welcome Miss. Lal."

That's what their relationship is.
They are teacher and student.
But something triggered inside both.

Something unexplainable.
Something they may even never acknowledge.
Something called seeds of love maybe.

A feeling which has 1000s of definition.
A feeling that changes face from one person to others.
A feeling that leaves no one.

Chakor went home and laid on her bed for hours thinking what had happened.
All she can come up with is:
"He is my teacher! And that's it!"

He! On the other side went to his class and back to his one room flat where he lives since he came out of the orphanage.
All he can think is:
"She is my student! And that's it!"

From the next day, they tried to avoid seeing each other.
She tried her best to keep her full attention on his lessons but sometimes get distracted by his voice and smile that she looks at him, at his face and then bends her head.
He tried to give his full attention to everyone except Chakor but when his eyes roams around, he came face to face with her for few times, only to find her watching him.

As promised to his student, the next day, he came with presentation topics for 1st batch of 5 students which were selected randomly by the youngest of the class.
The objective is to select a mathematician and present them and their works.
Chakor was one among them and she felt the need to know what all she has to prepare.
But speaking to him alone is not her cup of tea for now.

Suraj saw her frown when she was selected and a lot of things going on her eyes.
Instead of letting her ask anything, he volunteered and answered all unasked questions from everyone in general.
And they all have to be ready in just 2 days.

That day finally arrived.
Chakor was 4th in the list, so 3 persons before her.
Suraj have to leave his place and take a seat in the front row.
He can't ask someone to get up when one place is free in Chakor's bench.
He went there and she pulled herself a little to give him enough space even if it would feel awkward.
She looked at him but turned immediately as she found him looking at her which said 'I'm just a teacher!'.

One by one everyone started to do their work.
Chakor wasn't tensed due to the presentation but due to the presence of the person near her.
She felt something doing in her stomach and her mouth was dry.
Suraj fully concentrated on his pupils but glanced at Chakor time to time from the corner of his eyes.
He don't know what is happening but all he knew is, she is making him feel things that he never felt before, which made him only to keep more distance with her.

Both didn't know that avoiding is not a solution, it will just pull the time to take a decision to a later one even when it's comes to something they didn't know what it is;

It's Chakor's turn and she presented Archimede and his works.
Students asked questions regarding whatever she presented but not one word from Him.
He just said "Thank you!" and turned to the class calling for the next person while taking notes on his paper as his left hand was laying in the bench.

Chakor felt hurt seeing him not appreciate her work, not even a 'Good' from her role model.
She pulled herself down to her place, put the paper she was holding on the table and sat on her place closing her eyes, only to jump and stand up.
Everyone saw her like seeing a ghost as she was feeling embarrassed with her cheeks turning red.
"Please sit Miss. Lal." he said not looking at her as he, himself felt embarrassed of what just happened.

She sat down in now empty side of her bench with her opened eyes and tried with all her force to concentrate on the last presentation.
Few seconds later, she felt a paper caress her hand which is on the table.
It is being pushed to her from the man who's hand was on a place where it shouldn't be few seconds before.

She took the paper and turned it to find 'Sorry' written on it as small as possible so that no one else can see.
Seeing that, she just remembered the scene that she has never forgot.

******* SCENE *******

She felt sad that she couldn't get even one appreciating word from him.
She threw the paper she was holding in her hands on her side of table.
Leaving the breath she was holding.
Facing the board.
Closing her eyes.
She sat on her place.
She felt immediately it wasn't flat but something under her butt was moving.
Turning to her right, she saw an embarrassed teacher, who is try to take his hand out which made her jump out of her place.

He immediately took back his hand.
Cleared his throat before asking her to sit.

******* NOW *******

She wrote a 'Ok & Sorry' in it and passed it to him and he left a sigh of relief knowing that she didn't took it wrong but had a question look with the 3rd word.

She passed him a paper marked 'I should have seen.' making him shook his head and he wrote:
'I should have been careful. Sorry.'

With this being the last note exchanged, they all went through the last presentation and the class ended with the selection of the next bunch of students for a new topic.

Finally the exam results arrived on Friday.
As expected by all the teachers, Chakor stood 1st and Tina 2nd.
All students came out with exceptional marks in Maths which made Suraj proud of his achievement as the Principal congratulated him personally.

T clan couldn't take this defeat, so planned to lock her in sports room after sports class on Friday that week.
As planned by them, they blocked Chakor in the room, making her talk with a person while stealing her bag.
When that person left, Chakor was alone in that room searching for her bag which has all her important notes and everything, including her phone.

With the sudden sound of locking door, she came out of the bathroom area to see that nobody is left and when she tried to open the door, she got that it's closed.
She banged on it several minutes until the light went off.
Panic taking its toll on her, made her unconscious.

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Thanks for reading guys!
Was it acceptable for you all?
Tell me whatever you feel like even if it's negative.
Hope I didn't go overboard with the presentation scene.
If you enjoyed reading, LIKE & COMMENT.
Next Part: Part 3

- Maithili

Edited by maithu_ - 8 years ago

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