RiKara SS - Everything I Do - Pt22, 23 pg67 (18/7/17) - Page 27

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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: twerping

This chapter was all about being honest I felt. Gauri is open here in a way she hasn't with Om. It is really telling that the conversation happens in her room where he had never visited before. It is almost like he is being give insight into her persona both metaphorically and literally. She shows her vulnerable side to him and he too is no longer trying to keep up an appearance before her. Of course with the wedding about to happen, pretences lose meaning. There is no where to run from here. They must accept what is happening as fact.

The nightmare was amazing! It was perfect! Om comes face to face with a fear that he had hidden so well till now. Gauri's words might have provoked it but it was there all along. Will he turn into his father's son?
Can't wait to read on!
Love,
Twerps.

Hi Twerps,
I adore how you're always so much aware of the tiny details tucked into an update - like the observation about their conversation happening in Ri's bedroom. And your conclusions almost always draw parallels with my intentions while typing those out. Yes, it's about opening up, to each other as well as themselves. Omkara got an insight into her world as well as to what is deep within his own heart - that's where the nightmare comes in.
You're right, the pretense has no value now that they are about to be married, but his fears now play a major role. Omkara is stepping into the relation he had avoided because he has very bad experience in witnessing how horrible their parents marriage had been.
Finally it all comes down to that single question. Will he be his father, or not?
As always, it's a pleasure to dissect and update with you and it always leaves me feeling lighter and satiated. Thank you so much!

Lots of love,
Sakura
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: writergenie17

I am #Shook.

Sorry for being so late to the party once again... but RL is kinda kicking my butt right now.
Hi Genie!
I hope RL goes easy on you, but when had RL ever listened to anyone? It's wonderful you're here to the party even though late. Let me munch in this yummy comment now!
Omkara's nightmare was so intense! It might've been just a tiny little scene in the grand progression of things but I feel its effects are going to be widespread.
This scene had been my dream ever since I was introduced to O's character. I so wanted him to acknowledge this fear - which is what is making him commitment phobic in my book. So glad you found it driving force of the story.
This whole chapter was about walls coming down... Literally and metaphorically. Gauri is shaken from her experience and something else she's about to share with Om in a way that causes her to be completely honest and defenseless around Omkara for what may be the first time. And he's unable to put up his walls around her either.
Yes. It indeed is walls coming down, both between each other and with their inner conscious. And what they are left with to confront is always fear.
Like I said earlier, I am falling for the symbiotic emotional dependence they're sharing. It should help ease their life after the wedding... right? I don't know. I am very conflicted with what I want to see happen next... It's a good thing this story is not in my hands but is being expertly driven by your super talented ones.
I'm going to milk that lovely feeling as much as I can, the bond is developing slowly, but each moment does make a precious memory. I can only hope you'd like what I have in mind for these two, but knowing your expertness with drama I'm sure you wouldn't have handled it half bad either.😊
Please let my poor hurting babies find some measure of solace soon...
They will, if they search for it in the right place (i.e. Each other's arms?😉)
Eagerly waiting for what comes next!


Thank you so much for this lovely comment my dear! I replied above in red.
Lots of love,
Sakura
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: -Namita-

Such a dark update but awesome at the same time. Please continue soon.

I think this is the first time we're interacting on this thread? Welcome!
I'm glad you liked the update in spite all the dark details😊
Keep reading!
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: arshi1995

Ur way of writing is so brillant that ..scenes in the story are always playing in my mind back to back... I hadread all of ur works .. they are so different from each other ...I loved the part where omkara unconsciously stabs gauri as his! Waiting for thd story yo unfold

Aww! That's so sweet of you!😃😳 Thank you so much!
I'm glad you are enjoying my stories. Please keep reading!😊
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: mistofshadows

Sakura,

This is brilliant.
Going to read this...will comment in detail.

Niki

It's wonderful to hear from you Niki, long time isn't it?
I hope you're enjoying the read, my dear!😊
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: IlaTanwar

Unres kar diya hai maine at page 32

Sorry net slow hai and badi mushkil se comment kar paa drhi hun main

Replied in page 34
Thank you so much dear!
Hope your network problem gets sorted out soon!😊
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Endless-LOvE

i love all the chapters so far. it's amazing and you're an awesome writer. please update soon

Thank you!
I'm always thrilled to 'meet' new readers!
Keep enjoying, I'll update soon!😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
Glad you enjoyed it!
Thank you so much!!😳😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
Hi,

So, as I said at the start, this one's kind of a different take on DBO (Where it could have gone as a spin off) so I try to keep it that way, by adding the dramatic flavor and subtle details. In a way, it has some episodic quality to the narration. And sometimes I skip over unnecessary details. I hope you wouldn't mind that.

Enjoy!😊

Chapter 9

Silence

Until that moment, Omkara had forgotten all about that favorite spot of his teens; the pool in the terrace. It was where he found his bride, stretched out on the comfy cushions by the pool side, one of her mehendi adorned hands dipped in the pool water along with the bejeweled ornate bangles she wore. He stood in the shadows, observing her, as she stared up at the stars with a wistful expression, oblivious to his presence. Annika had chosen a pale gold and dark maroon bridal for her, under the starlight the tiny stones stitched into the embroidery glittered like drops of dew. She had let her hair loose, her heavy, ancestral neckpiece and the matching earrings were gone. Before setting out in search of her, he had found her ghoongat carelessly thrown over his recliner back in the bedroom.

"What are you looking at, he asked her finally, leaving the shadows to join her, staring up at the stars himself.

"Kabhi hum taaro mein

teri aankein dundthe hai

Kabhi ishq mein jalne wale

apne dil ko dundthe hai She did not turn around or sit up to acknowledge his presence, her eyes remained on the cosmos as she replied.

"You bleed in shayaris don't you? Omkara wondered out loud. Without a word her surprised gaze turned upon him. She found him already changed into his casual wear; he might be planning to work on his studio that night, that he had worn a paint splashed shirt and his spectacles. It didn't surprise her; he had an6 exhibition in a few days time; but his words most certainly had. He smiled and explained. "Each time I found you heart broken, you ended up quoting a couplet.

"Some people's pain is beautiful " she replied wistfully, "like the stars that burn to light a moonless night. Their efforts go in vein, those they watch over never notices them but still how beautiful they look even when they fall?

Her words reminded him of the Omkara of yore one that might wistfully agree with her philosophy and the thought bothered him. He liked dealing with that sarcastic, sly and grinning Gauri over this thoughtful one any time. They were opposites of spectrum he wanted to keep it that way.

"Where is your phone? I was calling you for a while now, Omkara tried to distract her.

"Back at home, locked in my drawer, she replied nonchalantly. "Call me a coward or a sadist there are some questions I don't have answers to.

"It's not my place to judge you, he said slowly, looking at her puffed eyes. She might have spent the entire night before crying that she didn't even shed a tear at her Bidaai.

"Why were you calling me? She broke the silence curiously.

"Oh I was wondering where you were. It's not easy to search an entire floor.

"I told you I'm not gonna leave, her voice was empty of any emotion. "I got lost in this maze of corridors, before realizing this entire floor doesn't have a soul apart from the two of us.

"And that bothers you?

Ri shook her head.

"I like the silence it's calm in here.

She did not elaborate but he knew what she meant. The entire day had been a chaos, from press to guests, rituals or celebrations, they've been through a whirl wind of activities. The tabloids were still exploding with snapshots of various functions, fashion blogs going gaga at their attires. Nobody looked closely enough to notice how detached both of them were.

"Haan kabhi kabhi tanhayon mein sukoon hai, he agreed with her, wondering why his voice suddenly sounded so bitter.

"That's Sirius, the brightest in earth's night sky. It's my favorite star, she decided to enlighten him abruptly. "D' you know why? He shook his head watching her curiously. "Because it's not alone, there are two stars, one circling the other together till eternity. Because they burn for each other they burn the brightest, a light no one can diminish.

Omkara closed his eyes, letting her words wash over him. They had a nice ring to it, a light no one can diminish. She continued to speak, oblivious to his thoughts. "When I was young, I was afraid of darkness. Maa pointed it out to me, and said as long as I have someone anyone with me, no one can diminish my light just like Sirius. Like you have your brothers? She opened the conversation for him. "You don't fall weak as long as they are with you. And you burn bright as long as it's for them.

He didn't ask her how she knew the exact words to describe their bond. She had no siblings, or that mother she so fondly spoke of with her anymore. But still Omkara looked away from Ri and her favorite star, trying to crush that stray thought as soon as it sprung to life her words tasted of love and left him with a yearning that burned his throat. He'd like to be loved like that. Wanting her friendship in itself was a big thing to ask and now, he caught himself hopelessly wondering what it would be like to taste her love.

God must be hysterical somewhere.

**

I'm waiting to hear your take, your words as always inspires me to write more.😊😳

Thanks for reading!😃

Sorry if anyone's disappointed!

Love,

Sakura


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Posted: 8 years ago
Amazing update
So u skipped the wedding
They way u portray their feelings
How Gauri described Sirius
All this just touches my heart

Now Omkara wants her love
This is good progress

Waiting eagerly to read more
Update soon

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