RiKara SS - Everything I Do - Pt22, 23 pg67 (18/7/17) - Page 7

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Posted: 8 years ago
#61

Originally posted by: IlaTanwar

Well what a update I can guess Omkara's plight seeing Jhanvi like that no child can see their parent die and that too like that...

Omkara sitting and Gauri being in her own world and saying things without sympathy firstly i was really offended by it but when she showed her symphatic nature in her own way by treating Omkara's wound and telling that she knows what have caused this? I was ok may be if she was not in love with someone else she would have chosen him. She told her plan to him he let her go...


Then Shivaay's coming I really like the way Shivaay told that shivaay is incomplete without him and it is he who had kept his sanity intact...


loved there converstaion waiting for next...

Omkara and Jhanvi have something really fragile and beautiful between them no? The way they both keep attached to each other is really heart warming. I have a lot more to say about them, hopefully in the coming chapters.
As I said in my quick reply earlier, I knew she would come across a little harsh, but at the moment she was elated about her own escape to notice how hurt he was, the moment she noticed, she did care for him.
It's the difference between their worlds, she doesn't know pain as he does, so her approach is always lighter, sometimes enough to irk him.
Even my favorite part was the ShivKara convo. Thank you for the wonderful comment Ila, I'm looking forward to hear more from you!

Lots of love,
Sakura
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Can't believe EID crossed 2000 views!😲😳
Party!!🥳
Edited by Sakura24 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#63

Originally posted by: AYUSHIVISHU

How can I ignore this amazing story..

its superb...the way you portraying emotions are awesome...
I really loved gauri's charecter...too different
a strong girl with her own opinion and powerful attitude...
From rikara conversation it's clear that gauri some how will stop the wedding ...at the same time om wanted this marriage to happen to save his mom
shivkara conversation was superb...I really loved this Two...their conversations will always leaves great impact on us...Totally you covered everything in one single update...I really loved this and waiting for the next update

Thanks dear!
That's good to know, especially that you love G's character, I was a bit apprehensive on that aspect. She can be pretty selfish sometimes.
I don't think O will let G stop the wedding, not that she won't try. But he has too much at stake to let her succeed.
ShivKara convo is my favorite part too. And yeah, I love them as well, they have some really unique bond between them.
Will update soon!
Love,
Sakura
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Posted: 8 years ago
#64
Thanks a lot!😃
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Posted: 8 years ago
#65

Originally posted by: pt311288

This SS in amazing liking it a lot waiting for next part update soon

Gauri loving her characterization but om looks lil dull in comparison to gauri make him strong

Thank you for being so honest with me!😊
However Gauri is light here and Omkara is something between his IB characterization and DBO one, he hasn't turned into the Angry Young Man we see on screen these days. Hope that explains the contrast in their characters. I'll see to it though, as to what I can do.

cheers!
Sakura
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Posted: 8 years ago
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A fresh concept...I really loved it...
So..lf Gauri escaped...what will happen next...hope she' fine...Omie wouldn't lose himself ri8??...too many questions...hope you update soon

~Maha~
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: twerping

Wow! OK.. That is turning out to be my go to response for anything you write but please bear with me, k? You are just that good.

The thing that made this update incredibly powerful was of course the conversation between the two brothers. Shivay's confession of Om being his moral compass touched off so many feels and I am trying to deal.with them at the moment. It is incredibly painful to see Om in such a dark place and who else would feel this amount of worry and fear than his brothers?! Shivay wants to pull On back but Om has grown up. No longer is the Great Wall of Shivay Singh Oberoi adequate to the task of protecting him and everything he holds dear. It is now time for him to become the wall himself. You floor me with the way you write Om. You build the bridge between the Om we had met in IB and you connect it to the Om who is hurt, angry and hitting back at the world.
And now for the hospital scene between Ri and Kara! Again, that tussle between light and dark, fire and water... The whole scene was full of contrasts. The way he shuts down and internalizes the hurt, the pain, growing numb to it to the point that it ceases to exist for him, and the fact that she notices, brings his injuries to light, treats it. The fact that they both understand so much of each other at this point and still don't understand so much is heartbreaking...and he has let her go but at what cost?
Please update soon!
And thank you for the PM. I am in love with your story.

You always make me grin like a fool while reading your comments, they are so sweet! So I'm ever ready to bear them!
Yes ShivKara, they set things sparkling wherever they appear right? All the kidkitodh stuff? I really like these two brothers and writing their twisted conversations. Shivay as a character interests me as much as Omkara, and this is how I see him. He is gray and there is no denying of that, but he is not independent as he seems to be. He too needs his brothers to keep him sane, not that he admits it always.
But it would break Shivay to acknowledge that he cannot protect Omkara anymore, right? That he has to fight his own battles. That's what I tried to bring out, as you so aptly put, the wall is not enough he has to become a wall himself. Ah the tragedy!
This light and dark contrast between RiKara is indeed the next highlight of the update. She is yet to see the dark cruel side of the world, the world he had been potentially living his entire life in. So she is always brighter, out going and he is more reserved, silent and dark, but they attract each other, balance each other no matter how unknowingly.
It was fun to read someone being so spot on with pin pointing those ideas!
Will update soon!
You're welcome about the Pm!
Lots of love,
Sakura
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Posted: 8 years ago
#68

Originally posted by: MahaSrilu

A fresh concept...I really loved it...

So..lf Gauri escaped...what will happen next...hope she' fine...Omie wouldn't lose himself ri8??...too many questions...hope you update soon

~Maha~

Hi Maha!
Welcome to EID🤗 Yes, it's a AU on RiKara. I don't usually write cannon. Ri did go, but whether she manages to accomplish her mission or not remains to be seen. Omkara wouldn't go down so easily now would he?
I will update soon. Looking forward to hear more from you! Enjoy reading!
Cheers,
Sakura
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hi,
I'm so in love with this story that I can't stop writing it! Hope you will enjoy, although the skies are turning darker now. I did say, we have angst in the menu!

Chapter 3

Middle ground

The buzzing of his mobile woke him in the dead of the night. Until then Omkara was not aware that he was asleep. Feeling through the mess of pillows in the semi darkness he finally located his phone under the duvet and answered with a sleepy "Hello?".

"Jaagte rahe hum

Apne zakam gin te hue

Wo bedard ko apni sapno se fursat kaha

Jin se socha zara gham baat lu apni

Wo khambhakat ko sunne ki fursat kaha..." The voice from the other end was slurry, each line punctured with a throaty giggle.

" Gauri," he acknowledged her, rubbing his eyes and pulled his mobile away from his ear to check the time. It was half past two in the morning.

"The very same," she chuckled. "Haven't forgotten me yet have you?"

"Are you drunk?"

"What do you think, mummy?" Her tone dripped with sarcasm. He was already on his feet, shuffling his drawer for his keys.

"Where are you?"

"Tere ghar ke saamne," she sang. "Nahi hoon!" Another chuckle.

"Tell me right now," he was at the last scratch of his temper.

"Jeez Omkara, entire house will get up, stop yelling will ya?"

Closing his eyes he exhaled deeply. " Gauri please tell me, where are you?"

"Aww, poor dear!" She cooed mockingly. "Outside Club Skyfall," she answered finally and he sighed pinching the bridge of his nose. "I can't drive that's why am calling you."

"I'm coming, stay there okay?"

"No promises tonight Baby," she said before ending the call with a click.

**

He had almost forgotten the hue of dawn stars, Omkara mused tracing the few stray dots scattered up ahead. Gauri's jeep was parked at the very edge of the cliff line, with its owner stretched out on the bonnet, gazing up at the cosmos, her hair ruffled by the chilly winds. Since he was no longer worried for her, Omkara noticed she had a wistful, bitter smile on her lips, her eyes were closed. He had almost decided she was asleep when she spoke.

"Naraz ho?" Her eyes remained closed, a strand of hair now swept across her face, hiding her expression. Instantly his hand reached out to wipe it off, her eyes shot open when his fingertips touched her cheeks.

"Next time, ask me to come like normal people;" he said casually, his voice betraying no hint of the restlessness her gaze always made him feel. "Don't pretend to be drunk out of your wits."

She giggled, before starting to hum.

"You can't tell me it's not worth dying for... the reaction you gave me!" He tried to maintain his stern look.

"Why?"

There was a pause, in which she lowered her gaze, her arms wrapping around her petite frame to keep herself warm. It dragged his attention back to her figure, clad in fashionably torn jeans and a cream color crop top, her dark blue jacket abandoned inside the jeep.

"I wanted a friend, someone to hold me from losing it." He leaned against the vehicle, gazing at her suspiciously. "There's the downside of falling for your best friend, you have no one to go to, after a break up."

"When did we become friends?" Omkara raised an eyebrow. She laughed.

"Always trying to pull out SSO on me," she said then wiping her eyes. "It's really unromantic you know?"

"I thought you were the girl I almost married?" He repeated her phrase. "What happened to all that?"

She leaned back once more, her eyes on the cold stars. He wondered if her love had broken her heart. A selfish joy flickered in his mind at the idea, reminding him of his earlier envious thoughts on her perfect world.

"He is supposed to be waiting for me somewhere." She said after a moment, her eyes still tracing constellations. "I didn't go."

"Why?"

"You love that question don't ya?" She flipped back to her joyous mode, imitating him. "Why?"

"I thought mine was the only heart you didn't give a damn about," he confessed and she raised an eyebrow.

"Please Omkara, you and I both know your heart is not involved in this mess, don't label me a heartbreaker for nothing." He didn't say anything and in the pause that followed the wind hummed in their ears. "You and I are creatures of night, we always get tempted by light, chase after it, only to realize how it burns us at the end." Something about those words made him silent and thoughtful. He could have disagreed, but inwardly some of those statements where true. Giving him only a moment to accept that she continued. "His father came to see me, right after I left hospital," she nodded at him. "And begged me to end things with him. According to him, they are normal, middle class people who can't, won't meddle with likes of my father - or the Oberois." In the bluish light, her chocolate eyes traced up to his dark gaze. "You knew this would happen, right?"

Omkara nodded.

"But I thought," he swallowed, his throat suddenly tight. "I believed you two had talked it out."

"We did. I almost packed, had the bag in my hand - then I thought - can I really put an entire family through something they don't want to face? Will those people ever accept me as their own after what they'd probably go through because of me? I chickened out, even before I left the house."

"So you wanted to hear how it's like, sacrificing?" His tone was dark. Omkara didn't believe in her friendship business. Least he know, he didn't want to feel guilty of betraying her at some point. He was already drowning in guilt as it is.

"I wanted to know how you survive it," her answer again caught him off guard. There it was once more, the trust in her eyes, the curiosity in her words. "I hated you till that night at the club, I hate you no more."

"Why?"

"There you go again," she laughed for the sake of it but answered nevertheless. "Because you and I are similar than you would ever agree."

He choose to ignore that honesty, instead addressed her earlier question.

"You live on, until the pain dulls away, until it hardens you into something cold and unfeeling."

She shuddered at the hopelessness of his tone.

"But you haven't reached there yet, have you?" When he turned around, her eyes were so close that he could almost count each fleck in those deep dark orbs. The reply died on his lips as he felt himself drowning in those bottomless brown swirls. " Will we ever get past this pain Omkara?"

"I don't know." He said honestly. "I don't want to think about it."

"Then let's not - think about it." She gazed at the stars once more. "Let's think about Donald Trump instead."

Before he could help it, a snort of laughter escaped his lips. She joined in, her cheeks digging into elegant dimples.

**

A review would compel me to write more, otherwise I'll be compelled to think no one likes the turn of events.

Thanks for reading!

If anyone's disappointed I'm truly sorry!

Lots of love,

Sakura

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Posted: 8 years ago
#70

Originally posted by: Sakura24

It's called exam pressure Genie...
That's good to hear!
Yeah, that's exactly what I wanted to bring out, he is trapped himself but he'd rather let her go. He won't in the end, that's another topic entirely.
As for Shivay and Omkara, these two have always been my favorites, I like writing them and their twisted conversations.
All in all I'm super happy to know you loved it, means a lot!

Love,
Sakura


Oh I understand exam pressure gurl... But no worries, you've got the whole forum behind you cheering you on! There's no way you'll do anything but ace them!

Wishing you all the best for your exams and anything else you might need the luck for...


Here... have some Felix Felicis on the down low... You never saw me today... okay?
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