Conflicting Emotions - RiKara OS Part 2 (Page 4)

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This is my first attempt to write on RiKara.. I am zero as writer so plz bear with me.. 😆

Conflicting emotions

Om was lying on his bed thinking about today's events.. He shifted himself to small lodging from KT's house after Chulbul's Bali chadhana incident.. One thing he got, If he will stay there KAli will do everything to hurt ChulBul to see him in pain.. He can't risk Chulbul's life.. Waise Gauri N Kali said they will leave Chulbul once Kali's n Gauri's marriage will happen.. So For Chulbul's safety.. He has to be patient..Omkara was restless about what to do.. Though he doesn't believe on them .. But he has to wait. There's o option left in front of him.. He was so angry .. How to deal with KT..? His mind was so restless with the thought of ChulBul not being safe at all in KT's DEN.. What can calm him as of now.. Earlier his brothers and later his best buddy Chulbul used to be there when he use be restless with something.. and also his art.. His art, it can only calm him as of now.. Om started drawing ChulBul's drawing on paper.. His best buddy.. His hamdard like he said to Gauri.. That woman dared to badmouth about My innocent friend like that.. How dare she..?

Om came here in Baraily to take his friend Chulbul from clutches of Kali Thakur.. ChulBul My friend --- my best buddy is so naive to be present at this place Baraily.. n that too at Kali thakur's haveli.. Gosh.. This is all becoz of her..

"Gauri"

"This name.. I bloody hate this name.. I hate her.. Last time seeing her wounded with swords .. I helped her..and then this Kali Thakur came like hurricane in our already messed up to make his family's life more upside down.. I agree Gauri once helped me too.. She saved my life when I fainted due to poisonous dart ..Our first meet was not so pleasant I was so desperate to get deal from Kali Thakur.. My mother's life.. her life Mr. Oberoi... Why does she love him despite of all his bad behaviour? But yes.. Om can do anything for his Mom... If she is trying to save this relation Om will help his mom to save this family.. Even though broken.. we are still Family.. What an irony.. KAsh Mein Mr Oberoi ka beta naa hota.. I wouldn't have forced myself to come in business deals n all.. n to come to Barily.. ever to meet that Girl Gauri.. She stood there challenging me-- testing my patience.. I shouldn't have behaved with her like that on that day.. But she was hell bound to test my control n patience.. N what she did.? She crushed my car with bulldozer.. Ok.. It was my mistake to destroy her shop like that in anger.. That time I felt I did wrong with her.. I destroyed her shop her bread n butter.. Then I met met her at Kali Thakur haveli.. She made me angry again.. what a spineless woman she is.. She destroyed one house her family... Kali Thakur seems to be man exact replica of Mr Oberoi.. It's vain to expect something good from him.. But Gauri.. Girl who stood up in front of me with all her Self-respect n all.. where it's gone now..? Why she is not protesting against this man..? Sach kehate hain may be money is everything.. she is too same.. Same like Svetlana.. When she fell in my arms in KT's haveli that day.. I saw pair of beautiful eyes , those eyes held just innocence.. I felt whenever we met at KT's haveli that her eyes wanted to tell something.. But seeing her enjoying n dancing.. Felt those eyes are betraying because her deeds not seems to be so innocent... KT was literally insulting her and her self-respect in front of entire male crowd present in that haveli.. n that girl was not even uttering a single thing.. If she would have I would have helped her but it seems she is also involved and enjoying this.. She bloody sold herself.. This Girl always confused me.. pata nahi chahti kya hain.. When I was leaving Baraily by Train she bumped there also with me.. more than that she got it even though I hurled insulting words towards her.. she caught it My bitterness has something to do with My life's events..I was like she told me clearly on My face I am lying to myself.. May be she is right.. Where My life put me ? Really How does she got it? I literally ran away from her.. But there she came again.. Argh that girl literally threw both of us out of running train in river.. such a reckless woman she is.. if she wanted to run away from that wedding why was she even there..? Idiot girl.. I felt unconscious due to poisonous dart in that jungle.. N she saved my life.. May be she is not that bad as I thought.. I saw KT's men there at Dargah N Gauri's plea to stop me desperately.. she wanted my help.. But Peer Baba's words after I came into consciousness N Gauri's happiness seeing me safe n alive.. Something stirred inside me.. but No I had no time for all this mess.. I wanted to run away from her and that place as soon as possible. Already I have so much in front of me, I rudely went from there leaving her to deal with her problems.. I have changed so much but this is my life wants from me.. I don't have any option.. But it seems like destiny had different plan for us and there she comes again like boomerang.. Gauri bumped with me again.. she was wounded, when I showed some concern that batmeez girl told me again she needed my help. Itani akad hain na usme.. I anger I left her to deal with her problems again.. But alter when I saw her getting slashed by swords of KT's men.. What are they doing? She at least doesn't deserve this.. I don't know but I had to intervene that.. whatever happening was not good.. When I tried to stop them they asked me kis haq se ? I'm doing it for her..? Village people.. they have conservative mind-set.. Things like Humanity n all will definitely go above their heads.. N I found one easy way to get married to her.. What has gotten into me that I married to such girl to save her life..? At least these people won't try to kill her after that when I will leave from here.. That was best way I can found.. As I expected they all left when I announced she is my Wife.. I was relived but Gauri started following me.. what does she think..? This marriage is for real..? no way I can accept Girl like her.. Girl who didn't even hesitate to break one Family.. Mujhe uske Shaqal se bhi nafarat hain.. I lashed out on her, pushed her.. She fell on road.. n left from there leaving her alone.. N der I met KT's men again.. where Shivay came to save me from them.. N we left Baraily finally.. I wished I will never met that girl again.. Back to Mumbai again.. back to same life.. Same Mr Oberoi.. N same conflicts between my parents.. Same svetalna that woman.. Mom wished for me better. She wished my Marriage with one nice girl than woman like Svetlana.. Girl who will fill some happiness in our world, in my world.. Marriage word brought back those flashbacks from Baraily.. I shoved of those memories.. no use.. She is same like Svetlana.. Later, every day I tried to fight back those memories from Baraily.. But somehow those memories haunted me .. Don't know why.. I tried to Forget Gauri so hard.. but why did I always remember her..? Those memories were kind of burden on my heart.. Then I met ChulBul Cutesa sweetsa.. he first time saved my mom's life even helped me during Svetlana's case.. Risked his life so many times for me and my family specially for Mom.. He even loves his wife who left himn went away.. how can person loves someone selflessly..? That's because he has beautiful heart.. He became my best buddy . I have rarely seen anyone having beautiful heart like him.. Pata nahi kab mera sachha aur achha dost ban gaya who.. Don't know whenever he was around me he give me feels of contentment be it his Vishwas talks.. Even though I don't believe now in God.. His Faith in God always won somehow during svetlana's case... I shared with him so many secrets including Gauri which I didn't even share with Shivay and rudy... those events were like Dil pe Ek bojh ki tarah..That day I wished.. If death is going to come in front of me.. I wished for once I want to say something to gauri.. what is that? I myself don't know.. But that day I wished it desperately to meet her before death.. Why out of all people Gauri..? Girl whom I hate so much.. My inner conscious pokes me always . My heart wished to say her this ...

Tumahri Ankhein jis Massomiyat ko bayan karti hain,

Kash wo MAsoomiyat tumhare andar sach me hoti,

Toh shayad humari kahani bhi kuch aur hoti.. 😳

But that was not the case.. When he came to Baraily to take chulbul back First person whom he faced in KT's haveli is Gauri.. she insulted ChulBul.. Badly.. She always makes me hate her.. Even though I don't want to do anything with her.. she always provokes me.. Tests my patience to infinity.. She could have helped me telling Where is my friend ChulBul.. But that stubborn girl hell bound to irk me... Why she is like that.. ? I hate her so much.. "

His hands stopped drawing n what he has drawn on paper literally shocked him.. He just drawn pic of Girl whom he hates but with chulbul's specs.. Those specs looked so funny but this girl.. Omkara was about to throw that pic away in anger but something stopped him.. He looked carefully at picture specially those eyes.. n realization struck him very hard.. He was shocked.. N slumped down on bed holding portrait..

This is it.. How is it..? I will post another part later.. to finish it off.. Plz bear with spell mistakes.. I didn't check them.. Just wanted to write something based on recent track n past events..hope U guys will like it.. 😊

Part 2 -

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/141955833

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Itna Bada OS likh liya 😲
I shall read it in some time...and edit the comment 😆
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: priya_86

Itna Bada OS likh liya 😲

I shall read it in some time...and edit the comment 😆

Haha Priya di sure.. 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Teju.. girlie.. thanks for this mature take on our current RiKara.. the shows gonna run havoc anyway.. sensible isn't their concern but thankfully tu hai na.. 😃 ..


So we have an introspective Omkara.. what a delight.. the show hasn't given us any such monents n am even gonna wait for it.. but this Omkara here is fascinating.. he recalls each n every detail while sketching at the same time n then it hit him hard.. just can't legit wait for the next part now..

Thanks Teju for taking out time for us.. :))
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: A-Musing-Me

Teju.. girlie.. thanks for this mature take on our current RiKara.. the shows gonna run havoc anyway.. sensible isn't their concern but thankfully tu hai na.. 😃 ..


So we have an introspective Omkara.. what a delight.. the show hasn't given us any such monents n am even gonna wait for it.. but this Omkara here is fascinating.. he recalls each n every detail while sketching at the same time n then it hit him hard.. just can't legit wait for the next part now..

Thanks Teju for taking out time for us.. :))

Aww. Neha thank U.. 🤗 Introspection Show mein nahi milega.. So I thought introspective Omkara can come out of my head.. 😛😆
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Tejuuu..congo on ur first Lambhaaa OS😆
Ek Os mein dbo ya ka Kahani ab tak de diya.😆..woh bhi Omkara POV..which we never get in the show...and how well u handle the words...lovely yaar..as i had said before in AT..i need to get into omkara's mind to find out what he thinks..and think that just happened..awesome start dear...pls do continue..😉



Ps- Half way through the Os was wondering yaar teju ka strong fort is her shayari..where is it...and lo i found it at the end..wanted more shayari.. maybe can add up more in the next update..😆😉


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Art is always where the answer can be found for our Omkara... Glad he's on the path to revelation all by himself! A very different and fresh take on how he can come to know about Chulbul being Gauri.
All that introspection and backstory just made his journey to the revelation that much clearer, both for him and us... his subconscious was trying to tell him something with the drawing that he wasn't ready to acknowledge.

Great job with the OS... can't wait for the next part!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: ss1609

Tejuuu..congo on ur first Lambhaaa OS😆

Ek Os mein dbo ya ka Kahani ab tak de diya.😆..woh bhi Omkara POV..which we never get in the show...and how well u handle the words...lovely yaar..as i had said before in AT..i need to get into omkara's mind to find out what he thinks..and think that just happened..awesome start dear...pls do continue..😉



Ps- Half way through the Os was wondering yaar teju ka strong fort is her shayari..where is it...and lo i found it at the end..wanted more shayari.. maybe can add up more in the next update..😆😉


Haha Sumi thank U.. 🤗 that shyari was all from Om's mind.. Om shows his anger n hatred for her when circumstances came.. I mean jahaan ussse ankhon ke samne dikhta hain//..ya phir lagta hain uski ankhon ko that she is doing wrong then he becomes angry on her.. So I wrote that shayari.. 😳 yeah will post another part till night.. 😊 aaj d end OS ka.. 😛 Writing is not very good job.. specially for science students.. 😆 Art lovers are so good in that.. 😳😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: writergenie17

Art is always where the answer can be found for our Omkara... Glad he's on the path to revelation all by himself! A very different and fresh take on how he can come to know about Chulbul being Gauri.

All that introspection and backstory just made his journey to the revelation that much clearer, both for him and us... his subconscious was trying to tell him something with the drawing that he wasn't ready to acknowledge.

Great job with the OS... can't wait for the next part!

@bold.. I wanted Om to find out abt ChulBul's truth by himself.. what can be best than his own art.. I know we won't get this kind off in our show so write it in my story.. thanks for liking it.. 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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I really really loved this introspective Om kash show mein. Bhi aosa hota... And that shayari was bang on... Plz continue

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