Ishqbaaz ss:Mere humsafar ( chapter 1:page 2)

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This idea is propping up in my mind from many days thought of penning it down.Comments both positive and negative appreciated.

Basic plot:everything is the same the oberois are billionaires, shiomru share the same bond. Shivay married to Anika.but rikara story is different. Gauri here is a police officer who is on a mission to collect evidence against the crimes of kaali Thakur and arrest him. She is disguised as simpleton so that Kaali Thakur doesn't suspect her .the same scene continues with Kali forcing Gouri to marry him. She helpless as her police team haven't arrived due to some problem. Om marrying her to save her reputation but misunderstands her as the second women. After Om departs she is successful is arresting Kali Thakur and his brothers they are now in jail. After returning to Mumbai Gouri has a new case she is approached by the real svetlana's sister to find her missing sister from past 5 years and no one is helping her . Real svetlana's sister Swati begs Gouri to look into this case as her sister sole breadwinner of family suddenly disappeared five years ago and remained untraceable till today. Swati says that she met her sister today at a mall but she failed to recognise her and even dismissed her when she Tried to hug her. So Gouri decides to investigate the matter and follows svetlana to Oberoi mansion dressed as Chulbul.rest is same except Gouri and Om are not close friends like in the show they are just partners in finding svetlana secret. Om is humble to Chulbul as he saved his mother. Gouri is patni vrata and all she is very self made and hates men due to a reason. She doesn't have any feelings for Om either.
Shivika are facing hurdles due to this Gangotra puja .their story will move forward from here.
Mahi and Gouri are best friends live in the same chawl and are in love 😆 .gouri lives with her nani . Anika and Gauri are sisters .
Soumya has come to Oberoi mansion to avenge someone who was responsible in killing her elder brother .the person will be revealed later in this story.
I hope il be able to give justice to all characters.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Awesome story line dear. Waiting for next update. Please update soon...
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looks interesting, keep it up
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Interesting yaar... Gauri and Mahi being friends was really funny 😆 continue soon... 😳
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Interseting
Continue soon 😊
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Hey I liked it. Plz continue.
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Awesome story concept
Please update soon
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Different story line
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Chapter 1
Oberoi mansion
Gouri has found out the real svetlana's body and send her blood secretly to forensic department to confirm with Swati's DNA that the real svetlana is dead.Here Om is frustrated as all doors to svetlanas secret has been closing upon him and his marriage date is nearing .
At night Om's room
Chulbul enters the room and finds Om pretty upset .
Chulbul: kya huwa Omkara ji aap pareshaan kyun hain??
Omkara: pareshaan naa hoon toh kya Karun Chulbul. Panache din baad mere shadi hain aur Mujhe Samajh Nahi as raha hain ki main kaise svetlana ka Raaz Maloom Karun . Woh saare log ko svetlana ke bare mein Bata sakte the Sab ke Sab mar Gaye.
Gouri( self thought): bad Kal ki baat hain ek baar Swati aur mari huwi svetlana ka DNA match kar Kaye phir mai arrest warrant nikal kar is Nakli svetlana ko arrest karlungi. Phir ek baar woh mere hirasat mein Aajaye mai uski sacchai usi Se ugalwaungi . Aise hi police department mein Mujhe lady hitler Nahi kehte. Iss Oberoi Se Zyada Mujhe jaldi hain is so called Oberoi mansion se nikal ne ki . Sabr Gouri bas kuch Samay aur phir yeh Natak khatam. She said smiling to herself.
Omkara: Yahan main apni pareshaani Bol raha hoon aur ru Muskura raha hain jaan sakta hoon kis Khushi mein Muskura raha hain tu.
Composing herself Chulbul answers: kuch nai Omkara ji Mujhe Aisa lag raha hain ki jaldi Sab theek hojayega is liye hum Muskura rahe hain . Aap Bhi sojayiye dekhna Sab theek hojayega . She said going towards her bed and sleeping comfortably.
Omkara shakes his head in denail and goes to sleep rather calmly as though trusting gouri's words.

Shivika room
Anika enters the room to find it in darkness .she was feeling a negative energy around as though something was wrong very wrong as she enters shivaay switches on the light and asks in stern tone.
Shivaay: kahan the Anika ??
Anika fumbling: woh main ... Haan sabji lene Gayi thi.
Shivaay: sabji raat ke 11 baje?? Aise kounsi sabji lane Gayi thi ko raat ko milti hain.
She nervously comes to the dresser and removes her jewellery.
Anika: woh Maine Suna tha raat ko fresh sabji Milti hain isiliye lene Gayi thi par jake pats Chala ki kisine ullu banaya tha Mujhe.
Shivaay shouting: JHOOT JHOOT sirf JHOOT bolna aata hain tumhe Anika . Us Farzi Se Milne Gayi thi na Tum jawab do Mujhe haan ya Nahi
Anika: haan shivaay Magar...
Shivaay: jab Maine tumhe mana kiya tha toh kya zarurat thi Jane ki Anika. Aakhir Sabit kya Karna chahti Ho Tum ki Us sadakchhap Insaan ka mere parivar as koi Rista hain . Haan .jiska koi naam Nahi Jise khud ke Baap ka naam Nahi pata aise Aadmi ke bare mein pata Karke kya milega tumhe.
Anika was shocked to hear shivaay it was as though he was the old shivaay she met for the first time
Anika: chilla kyun rahe hain aap shivaay Akhir itna Gussa kyun ho rahe hain aap.
Shivaay: agar mere baat ka Opposite karoge to Gussa aayega hi na just forget it I'm sleeping in the guest room Mujhe sukoon chahiye in Sab jhanjhaton se. Saying so he went out. Anika was unable to comprehend shivaay's behaviour . Pinky smiled to herself seeing a crack already in this perfect relationship.

Soumya room
Soumya on phone with her mother
Soumya:aayi main Bahut kareeb hoon USs Katil ke bas kuch din aur phir mere paas pakka saboot honge aur bhaiya ka Katil jail mein . Someone knocks on the door.aayi mai baad me call karti hoon.
She opens the door to find Rudra there
Soumya : Tum Yahan iss waqt
Rudra: woh dadi ne doing bheja tha tumhare liye .
Soumya: thanks she takes milk and closes the door.
Rudra: Soumya he calls hesitantly
Somya: haan
Rudra : woh kidnapping ke baad I mean Tum theek hona. Woh daadi ne puchne ko kaha tha he said immediately
Soumya sensing his restlessness
Soumya : dadi se aur unke crybaby pote se kehna ki mai theek hoon . She closes the door smiling and Rudra also goes from here with a smile .

Precap: Gangotra puja + shivaay birthday and a big dhamaka
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Interesting story and well written. Waiting for next update please update soon...

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