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Hey...I'm Mansi Sharma and I'm writing a ff on omkara and his ladylove Ritika...RITKARA
let me clear something in advance before story progresses...
1. There is no accident/murder case on Om and prinku regarding ranveer's sister...in fact she is perfectly fine and healthy.
2. Nothing of gayatri murder case here.
3. It will be only Ritkara love story..as I feel in the show that SHIVIKA and rumya love is escalating ..but none for omkara as of now..
4. No ridhima here..
CHARACTERS:-
Everything same as in show.
New characters:-
1. Ranveer randhawa - ACP,prinku's love interest, hate oberois because of his father's death.

2. Ritika randhawa-yes you read it correctly... Sis of ranveer,a lawyer in London,does not stay with her family because of misunderstanding and of course omkaras love interest.

3. Ranjana and rajeev randhawa-yes ranveer and ritika's parents,rajeev died 2 years back,ranjana just like her son hate oberois.


My story will start from the time when ranveer for the first time enters oberois mansion...but this time not regarding gayatri but rajeev randhawa murder case.
Ritika stays in London and just know that her father died because of cardiac arrest.
Here she returns to India after completing her law and there her mom and brother discloses the reason behind her father's death. But she refuses to believe and stand against them for oberois...

Why did Ritika have so much trust on oberois??
What relation does she share with them??

Precap- revelations...


How's it guys???
PS-its purely mine..

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Posted: 8 years ago
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~~~~~CHAPTER 1~~~~~
(Randhawa's house)
Ranveer - I just cant believe that my own sis is doing such thing. I just don't understand this girl. UN oberois ke liye humare , apne parivaar ke against jayegi. Papa usse apni princess kehte thakte nahi...lekin aaj khud dad ko Sharma AA rahi hogi..huh!

Ranjana-(sobbing) Meri mishti NE yeh acha nahi kiya. Kabhi kabhi toh mujhe shaq hota hai ki yeh mera khoon hai bhi ke nahi.

(Just then Ritika enters and hear their conversation,hiding behind the curtain.. Crying inconsolably)
She feels broken ,shattered... She had been pampered so much by her family and now listening such harsh words from them is like piercing a knife in heart.

Ritika - great..u people are...now u see truth will come out and truth only wins...
With this she left the house and went to court to complete some formalities regarding this case.
On her way back,she thought to pay visit to oberoi mansion.

At OBEROI MANSION
tej- what is this nonsense. Media walon ki aisi ki taisi. Hum par rajeev randhawa ke murder case...(he couldn't complete his sentence and stars crying)
Dadi- puttar dekhna..sachai ki hi meet hogi..humare rajeev ko insaaf zaroorat milega ...hum par page jhoothe ilzaam zaroorat galat sabit honge...
Pinki- O my maata...loook who's there's...
My Ritika bachass...
Everyone was happy shocked to see her..with heavy heart and tears in her eyes she run and hug dadi-. But she saw tej and recalled everything..the smiled looking at her while she doesn't make eye contact with him...

Precap- Flashback..4 years ago..Om and Ritika in college

(PS ignore grammatical and spelling errors)
Thank you
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Posted: 8 years ago
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amazing update dear
i loved it very much
plzzz do continue soon
and thanks for the pm dear😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Very good start...I also want ff on omkaara...
Please update soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Awesome dear...
Loved it to the core!!!!!!
Thnx for the PM...Continue Soonish :)
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Thank you everyone for appreciating it...
I'll soon update one chapter

Love mansi😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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~~~~Chapter 2~~~~
Flashback- 4 years ago, last year of college,Ritika and Om's special relationship!!!

Om -Ritz,let's go to the art room...I'm bored AF...
Ritika -come on yaar,kabhi to murti banane ke alava kuch socha karo.(making cute puppy face)
Om - you know very well about my passion for art and..
Ritika (cutting in between) and mera books!! Hey look ..I got it..my favourite bookTHE PALACE OF ILLUSION.. Wow I eagerly waited for this.
Om- acha..I thought you were eagerly waiting for something else from me (smirking)
Ritika blushing very hard
Om- art room chalo,koi nahi hoga waha aur mujhe pura mauka milega tujhe apne interests dikhane mai (smiling )
Ritz(being bold) - art room kyu..yaha kya problem hai...aur tum kyu..mujhe bhi toh mauka do...
She comes near him and removes her dupatta
Om sees something and points that to Ritz
Om- control baby..warna apna MMS ban jayega ( pointing towards the CCTV )
Both started laughing uncontrollably
SILENCE!!! ,a loud voice of librarian.
POV omkara
(Ritika, I love you..mere liye saari duniya ek taraf aur tum tumhara pyaar ek taraf)
Ritika- (waving her hand before his eyes,her sound of bangles mnade him come back to original world)
Oh hello,kya SOCH rahe ho???
Om - kuch nahi..bas yahi SOCH raha hu ki agar abhi hum art room nahi Gaye Na toh (and makes an angry face like a baby)
(Ritika gets up and starts moving but Om hold her hand asking where is she going)
Ritika- kya hua??? Jaldi chalo...ab apne baby ke liye itna toh kar hi Sakti hu ke uske interests mai barabar saath dun (naughtily smiles)
NOW JUST IMAGING "OFFO" SONG FROM TWO STATES



Precap- convocation...love scenes❤️


Do drop your comments and feel free to advice me so as to how I can improve my storyline further...
Ignore grammatical errors pls!!!!


~~~love
Mansi..
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hi Mansi,
What a cute story. I am too stubborn to quit on Ishkara but your Ritkara is starting out very cute. So Ritkara are college young lovers.. Waiting to see what the connection is with their parents / family.

Rishu
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: RishuDarling

Hi Mansi,

What a cute story. I am too stubborn to quit on Ishkara but your Ritkara is starting out very cute. So Ritkara are college young lovers.. Waiting to see what the connection is with their parents / family.

Rishu

So sweet of u..thanks
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Awesome as always dearie...soo soo cute..
Thnx for the PM...Continue Soonish :)

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