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Frnds i m trying first time in writing so plz i want ur encouragement. Being a swasan fan i m really pissed off with this Kavita track so decided to write something which was going in my mind.


So its starts after Kavita entry in MM n she came to know about Swasan already married. Kavita gets shocked when Sujata suddenly said, "Ha ye chori mare sanskar ki beendni thi par ab inka talak ho chuka hai aur ab mai apne chore k liye ek marvadi bahu hi layungi. muje ni chahiye koi bangalan chori apne bete k liye" After finding about swasan divorce, Kavita suddenly became happy n went to Swara n says, "Agr tum dono alag ho hi chuke ho to swara tum yha se chali jao kyuki shayad mere aur sanskar k pyar ko manzil milni thi isliye aj tk mai zinda thi aur tumari shadi bi nhi chal payi uske sath to behtar yhi hoga ki tum sanskar ki zindgi se chli jao taki mai aur sanskar fir se ek ho jaye"
After listening to what Kavita said all were shocked n Swara could not bear this pain. She was broke n Shomi held her hand bcoz it was very difficult for a mother to see pain of her child n seeing her losing her love again. Swara was all the time looking at Sanskar
And was trying to find unspoken answers in his eyes n Sanskar was looking at her as if he was saying," No swara not this time. Plz trust me i love u n u only plz stay wid me i need u" But before Sanskar could speak Kavita took Swara at one side and folded her hands in front of swara to give chance to her to start her life with Sanskar. Sanskar was in so such shock n pain n swara remembering all the previous discussions with Sanskar n him saying to her to go out of his life then she suddenly said yes to Kavita n ran out of MM house without saying a single word to anyone. Sanskar could not take this decision of her. He was angry n went in his room" how could she do it to me. She knows how much i love her n for me she is the most important person in this whole world still she said yes to Kavita. She could hv waited for me to speak. I m not letting u swara sanskar maheshwari to go out of my life like this" Sanskar was crying in pain n all this while
his younger bro Laksh who has been with him always in childhood n understood its very difficult task to get Sanskar out of this pain decided to talk to his wife Ragini who is cause of all these problems bcoz he understood that only his rejections towards Ragini has made her a bitter person today n only his love n support can change her now n he too unknowingly wanted to get his best frnd old Ragini back n wid that sweet Ragini's help they both can make swasan meet n find out wat this Kavita n Kaveri story is
After thinking about this Laksh went to his room n found Ragini lost in her thoughts n she was crying. Ragini after seeing approaching laksh got up from bed n carried her packed suitcase n told Laksh, " Laksh ji humne aj tak itna kuch kia apke sath aur baki sab k sath aur khas krke swara ki hum khud se bi nzre milane k layak nhi rhe. Hum ab aur yha rh kar apko aur baki sab ko takleef nhi denge. Hmne sare papers sign kr diye hmr ye sab nhi chahiye. Hmara pyar kb obsession me badal gya hme khud pta ni chla aur hum galat raste me itna age bad gye jha se ap sab tk wapis ana bhut mushkil hai aur hum jante hai ki hum agar maafi bi mangege to na to koi hum pe vishhwas kregaAur na hi hme maaf aur shayd hmare gunaho ki yhi saza hai ki hme maafi na mile. Hum baadi ja rhe hai aur humne divorce papers bi sign kr diye hai. Humne apko zabardasti is rishtey me aur apne pyar me fasane ki koshish krte rhe lekin aj itna kuch hone k bad hme samj aya hai ki pyar ko paaya jata hai hasil nhi kia jata" Ragini after saying so picked up her bag n was leaving when suddenly she felt a strong hand on her shoulders. Laksh made her turn to him n said," Ragini tumare aisa ban ne me meri bi to galti thi kitni bar tumhe aur tumare pyar ko thukraya mane lekin sach khu to jo sab tumne kia wo bhut galat tha khas krke tumara is ghar k bado ki beizdti krna par muje hi shayd ye sab thek krna pdega aur is sab me muje tumari madad chahiye krogi kya ?"

Ragini shockingly asked him, " hmari madad laksh ji hum apki khushi k liye kuch bi krenge shyad is se hmare man ka dard bi kuch kam ho ske" laksh got satisfed after listening to her n took her bag n put it back n went from there. Ragini was still in shock.


At baadi, Swara was sitting still in her room n tears were flowing from her eyes continuously n she was remembering all those precious moments spent with Sanskar. Shomi came to her n tried to pacify her but she could not do so bcoz swara was too much crying n suddenly swara fainted. Shomi held her n called Shekhar n asked him to call the doctor.
Doctor after checking said to parents ,"She is weak n she fainted due to so much stress n low bp. Iska dhyan rkho time se khana khilayo aur khush rkho aur ye medicines jo likhi hai wo de lena. Dont worry she will b fine"
Shomi when accompanied doctor to door of house she saw sanskar coming n she took sanskar by his hand to outside baadi n said," kyu aye ho tum yha sanskar ab jb tumhe meri shona ka sath dena chahiye tb to tumne kuch bi ni kha ab kyu aye kyu uska dard aur uski expectations badana chahte ho. Itne dino se itni preshaniyo ka samna krte krte meri bachi itni dukhi ho gyi hai ki usme ab koi takat nhi bachi ki wo is sab ko aur jhel paye. Sanskar beta tum swara se tbi mil skte ho jb tum use apni zindgi me wapas le jane ka faisla le sko tab tk plz us se mt milo varna hmare liye use smbhalna bhut mushkil ho jayega" Shomi went inside of house n sanskar went from there crying n helpless.
Raglak were keeping an eye on Kavita as per their plan but they were not able to find anything yet. They noticed kavita was very sweet to all family members so they were feeling helpless

Laksh went to sanskar room to meet him ," bhai soye nhi abi tak ? Swara ko yad kr rha hai na ? Kyu itna tadpaya tha use ki aj wo ye smjne lgi hai ki tum us se pyar hi ni krte."

Sanskar cried embracing his younger brother n laksh was trying to pacify him. Sanskar said," mai sirf swara se pyar krta hu lucky bhut pyar aur uske bina apni zindgi bitane k bare me soch bi ni skta. Mai bhut dar gya tha jb wo bar bar apne pyar ka izhar krti rhi ki khi swara fir se pas a ke muje chod na de. Fir se dil toot na jaye par khud hi apne pyar ka dil todta rha. Lucky mai swara ko wapis lana chahta hu yha apne pas par muje samj hi ni a rha ki kavita ko bi kya samjhayu kase smjhayu mai usko aur takleef nhi dena chahta usne phle hi apni zindgi k panch sal gwa diye lekin is sab me to swara ko hi takleef ho rhi hai mai kya kru lucky kuch smj ni a rha" lucky after pacifying his bhai went to his room n told ragini," ek kam to ho gya ragini bhai se bat hui wo swara ko wapis lana chahte hai aur unki puri bat mane phone me bhi record kr li hai"
Ragini gave smile to laksh n gave hi fi to him n laksh gave handshake to ragini n said," friends". Ragini was confused but before she said anything laksh said," hum fir se ache dost banke shuruat kr skte hain" ragini put her delicate hand into his hand n said smilingly,"friends". Laksh saw same smile n sparkle in her eyes which he saw when he first time met her n he was happy that he was getting his sweet Ragini back slowly n Ragini was happy bcoz after so long time laksh was with her though as her friend but that without any lies from her.

next day Ragini woke up early as usual in morning n she saw Kavita going outside MM. She run to her room n woke Laksh n told him n raglak followed Kavita.

Kavita went into a house n raglak wanted to find out whose house is this n to whom she went to meet but they had to wait outside house n waited there. Suddenly they saw the door opening n they saw kavita n kaveri hugging each other n kavit left but Laksh clicked picture when mother duo hugged. Both decided to meet swara n went to baadi

At baadi

Raglak came in swara room and saw her in so much pain as she was holding her pic with Sanskar and both of them were too crying in pain and thinking how they both led to this situation of hers. A beautiful soul who always try to help all has to went through all this but they were determined what they had to do. They showed Swara pic of Kavita n Kaveri and also made her listen what actually Sanskar wants. Swara was shocked as she again misunderstood sankar and was saying conituously" wo muje ab maaf nhi krega mane fir uska vishwas tod dia us par aur uske pyar par bharosa na krke aur use kavita ko dene ko ha krne k liye" Ragini comes to her n hugged her so tightly and tried to pacify her. Swara was shocked with her behaviour and said to Ragini." Ragini ab kyu ro rhi ho ? ye sab jo ho rha hai tumari vaja se ho rha hai" Ragini sit on her knees n folded her hands n begged for her forgiveness and Swara looked at Laksh and Laksh nodded n said," Ha Swara sach me Ragini is bar maafi dil se mang rhi hai aur wo badal chuki hai. hme phle wali Ragini wapis mil gyi hai"

then raglak and swara were remembering how three of them made plan to bring shekhar and sharmishtha together and Swara nodded to Raglak and they put their hands together and decided that they will find out Kavita's truth and Swasan will b together.

Raglak and Swara went to that home where In the morning Kavita met Kaveri. It was locked from outside. they decided to go inside the house and Swara used hair pin to open the door. they went inside n searched the house. they found a diary in a room. It was Kavita's diary. they read it and found out that five years ago Kavita was really in love with Sanskar as she wrote about it in diary. Now they were so confused what was going in present in Kavita's mind. Raglak went to MM and Swara went back to baadi. Raglak were watching Kavita's each move. They saw Kavita was in her room and her phone was ringing and they listened what she said,"Maa apne kyu kia phone muje agar kisi ne muje apse bat krte sun lia to mera sara plan khrab ho jayega is parivar ko barbad krne ka aur sab se badla lene ke. Mai aj sham ko apse milungi i promise."

in the evening when Kavita went outside raglak followed her and Swara was with them. Kavita met her mom outside in a park.Kaveri said to Kavita" tuje jis trah se in logo ne reject kia wo din muje aj bhi yad hai beta aur tu jis taklif se gujri wo bhi. Tu Sanskar se shadi kregi to tu jo chahti hai wo kar payegi" Kavita replied," Ha ma sahi kha apne jis tra in logo ne muje mere sanskar ke sath ek nhi hone dia mai in sb ko ek ek krke itna tadpayungi ap dekhiyega aur rhi bat sanskar ki to use mai apne pyar se fir se hasil krungi. mai janti hu wo swara se pyar krta hai par mai ab use nhi khoyungi. phle kho chuki hu ek bar ab nhi maa. is bar sirf sanskar hi nhi uski puri property muje apne nam par karani hai taki mai us puri family ko control me rakh payu aur unhe tadpayu. is waqt k liye hamne bhut mehnat ki hai maa ab ye mauka hath se nhi jane denge"

Raglak n swara recorded everything and hid behind tree. Kavita n Kaveri hugged each other and went from there. Raglak came home and showed the recording to Sanskar. He was shocked a lot nd cud nt believe Kavita turning so obsessive. He was told by Raglak that Swara knows about it too and she was with them. He asked them to bring Swara in mandir. Raglak went to baadi and alongwith Swara they went to mandir n there Sanskar was already waiting for them. Sanskar on seeing swara was so much happy and went to her n bent on her knees n took her hand and said" Miss Swara Gadodia, Will u be mine forever ? Will u marry me and become Swara Sanskar Maheshwari ?" Swara was too happy with this and tears formed in her eyes n nodded yes. Both hugged each other forgetting everything around nd got lost in each other. Raglak laughed n both came out of hug and were blushing n Swasan got married in mandir n this time with their wish n happiness. After their marrriage they went to baadi n took Shomi and Shekhar ashirwad n they went to MM after that

In MM all were sitting in hall and Kavita was restless bcoz she did not Sanskar n Raglak for long time. Suddenly Uttara saw Swasan n Raglak at door n she said," Swara bahabhi" All looked at them n understood from their appearance that they got married. Swasan came to elders n took ashirwad from all n Even Laksh too told all that He and ragini will live together and requested all to give a chance to his wife. All were very happy then suddenly Kavita said to Sanskar." you can not do this to me Sanskar. I will not spare u Swara n left from there angrily. U will have to suffer now. I will cum back" Saying so she left

Swasan room

Swara was standing near window n Sanskar came n hugged her from behind n whispered in her ears," I love u my jaan" Swara was blushing hard and said," I love u too Sanskar". Sanskar made her turn towards him n kissed her forehead n then her eyes n then finally his lips met hers. They lost in each other n kissed until they were short of breath, Sanskar took her in his arms n put her on bed and ... and finally swasan became one(imagine i cant write its my first time in writingšŸ˜‰)

RagLak room

Ragini and Laksh were sitting on bed n were very happy on swasan finally becoming one. Laksh said to Ragini," Mai bhut khush hu Ragini aur khas kr tume wapis pa ke.Ragini muje thoda waqt chahiye tumahe sath is rishte ko age badane k liye" Ragini said," Hme pta hai Laksh ji hm samjte hai aur ab apko hamari trf se kbi koi shikayt nhi hogi"

End of story

I hope its not that bad plz comment n do tell how u find it







Edited by KawalArora - 9 years ago

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Posted: 9 years ago
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good yaar nice try
do write more
next time pm me too


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Posted: 9 years ago
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thanku lovesonu thanku sneharay n thanku ishanita thanku yar its encouraging
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Very nice work
Great work
This is my assumption too
I hope this is what exactly happens on the show
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Posted: 9 years ago
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thanku all frnds for liking it. its really motivating dat u all liked it. I will try to write much better i promise.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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thanku frnds i m vry happy dat u liked it
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Posted: 9 years ago
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hi i did nt know earlier their was on os by this name so i updated n changed the title a little
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Nicely visualised Kawal. I like how you tried to resolve the various issues. In terms of constructive feedback you asked for, you had so much to cover, you could have actually made it a 2 shot? Then you could have detailed what you needed to without condensing but as a first attempt, I thought you were really brave, and tried to do a lot and achieved it too.
I liked how you tried to show RagLak working together to help SwaSan and despite Swara's stupidity in being over sacrificing, it all got resolved and it was clear Sanskaar didn't want anyone other than Swara ever! That's my 2 cents worth and hope it helps?

Nice work! X
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Great OS :)
Loved it :)
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So beautiful OS!!!!😃 Awesome!!!!šŸ‘ Loved it.ā¤ļø

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