TwiNj Drabble::Soulmates-Toghether Yet Apart 7/3/2016 - Page 4

Originally posted by: asmaanixx

Super sorry for commenting on this late!

I had everything that I wanted to say when I first read it. Just forgot to edit the post. xD

But here I am now! ^_^

Will give you the feedback in point form as that will be the easiest for right now.

• It's best to write out numbers into words. (E.g., 10 should be written out as 'ten'.)
• Capitalize names.
• Go over your punctuation.
• All dialogues should be in quotation marks.
• Every new thought/idea/dialogue should be its own paragraph.
• Avoid run-on sentences.
• Go over your spelling.
• Edit. Especially when you're formatting your piece to look visually pleasing. Sometimes, the formatting itself makes some tiny errors that could be avoided.

If you have anything else you want me to look over, or would like a more in-depth review, then let me know. :)

Originally posted by: ZawraMalik

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Originally posted by: .FlightOfEagle.

I am going to Work on all the points you mentioned,What about the plot,The way of writing 😳

Because you know I have always written pieces are that usual and are no different but this one was an new try altoghether!

So that Is why its so special to me😳

Originally posted by: asmaanixx

Plot wise, I really liked this. The content was really different and gave a very somber, melancholic feeling to it. Take more risks like this and write about stories that are not the norm. If you follow what others are writing, then you won't grow as a creative/imaginative writer. No one will bother to read your story if they can get it from someone else.

The style definitely could have had more impact, but again, that was dependent on the editing of the story.

Shorter sentences, a bit more reminiscing would have sealed the deal. But it was a brilliant effort! 👏

Originally posted by: ZawraMalik

OMG M sory as m super late

but this was just awesome..

Its kinda deficult to imagine twinj here but

You nailed it m speechles dont have words to express my feelings right knw..amazing

Keep writing