The Best of Things - FF (RagYa, SwaSan) +16 Part 44 on Pg 145

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Posted: 9 years ago

#181

Originally posted by: CaptainSpark
Hey!

I read all the parts today! Lovely FF, really enjoyed reading it! I like your wrting style, the way you analyse the characters' feelings. But I have one request- Please put some SwaSan romance. You take your time.. I will be hooked! But will expect loads of SwaSan please..😳

Thanks a lot!

Swasan story also coming up! 😃

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#182

Originally posted by: anu91
Awesome awesome update...

thank you Anu

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Posted: 9 years ago

#183

awesome update
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#184

Thank you again, Viji, for such a nice reading! 🤗

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Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
Very nice couple of chapters, Bubble. I liked chap 10 mostly for the mature, level headed interaction between Lakshya and Sanskaar. I liked how Lakshya did feel a bit irritated that Sanskaar was asking him stuff about his private moments with Ragini, but recognised that he was only doing this out of genuine concern that Ragini could be manipulating him.
Swara, on the other hand, jumped to conclusions and actually accused him of "taking advantage" of Ragini. 😆 She still doesnt fully realize that her messed up sister isn't a vulnerable babe in the woods.😉

Yeah, her own perspective and personality is colouring her outlook...

I did find Lakshya's sentence to Swara, sarcastically asking if she was feeling jealous, somewhat malicious. Considering he knows how Sanskaar feels about her, he really needn't have resorted to that...Though of course, I guess he still has some resentment at the way things there panned out.

I guess so... because he can be biting... but it isn't pleasant to be accused of that, considering the attitude with which he has actually taken up Ragini... so yeah, he can give back as good as he got.. and perhaps he hasn't fully forgiven Sanskaar yet?

As for chapter 11, I liked the mature way you made Sanskaar and Swara talk their way through their slight misunderstanding, rather than retreat behind walls of hurt and mistrust. Sanskaar obviously felt, that one reason for Swara's extreme reaction to the news of Lakshya taking his relationship with Ragini forward, was her own residual feelings for him. I liked the fact that though he was hurt by this, he handled it in a very mature manner. And Swara, though she got angry and asked him to sleep in the guest room, realized she needs to clarify things. That conversation over steaming mugs of Badam milk, in the wee hours of the morning, was wonderful. 😊

Yes, they're all a bit tangled up over residual feelings and what means what. 😆😆

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Posted: 9 years ago

#185

Originally posted by: maaneetfan
phew...glad they got that out frm their systems. ... uncharacteristically sanskaar was hung on the idea tht swara loves laksh still ... so hopefully they will go to the next phase frm here now...
Thnx fr the pm bubble.

Yeah, they cleared the air! Sanskaar doesn't think feelings are so tidy, you see... but he's a mature guy.

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Posted: 9 years ago

#186

The Best of Things

(RagLak, SwaSan) Fan Fiction Series

By Bubble

Chapter 12

Ragini tripped around the house wrapped in a cloud of happiness that whole week.

No one had asked her, but she took on very many maalkin' type duties, ordering the gardener to properly weed some beds... she got the servants to air out razais, dust out the mattresses... and drove everyone crazy.

Annapurna and Sujata watched her in some consternation. It was all very well to get things done but if you annoyed the Maharaj by supervising his every move and telling him to put two more grams of amchur powder, he would not turn up all next week, or worse, give in his notice!

But luckily, her zeal in assuming the role of the Maheshwari Bahu' took a moderate turn over some time and everyone breathed a little more easily, although she did still peacock all over the place. Swara was happy to see her happy, but kept out of her way - she wasn't in the Best Bahu' competition, anyway.

Swara went up to the terrace one evening to see if she had left her book of Meera bhajans on the table there. She had been sitting there earlier, setting one to tune and practising it with the tanpura' app on her mobile. Ah, there it was! She grabbed it and was about to do down again, when she sniffed the air. A faint tendril of cigarette smoke was weaving out of the shrubbery in the corner. She went around the partition and found Lakshya, sitting supine in his chair, feet on the parapet and a look of utter relaxation on his face.

"Achcha! Dhoomrapaan kiya jaa raha hai!" Swara said, leaning against the trellis.

"Panditaain Swara!" He acknowledged her mockingly with his raised cigarette.

She looked at him, opened her mouth to say something and then closed it again. Lakshya looked at her quizzically. She shook her head.

"Kahiye na!" he said to her, with a ghost of a laugh. "Panditaain Swara at a loss for words --- doesn't feel right."

"Ragini looks happy," Swara offered. "I'm sorry for what I said before... you know... it was very unfair. And Sanskaar feels I stepped over the line... interfering into your private lives."

Lakshya stubbed his cigarette out and got to his feet. "I was angry then, but I forgive you."

Swara abstractedly plucked a few dry leaves from the creepers. Then she looked at him hesitantly, "You'll look after her, won't you?"

Lakshya looked at her. "I'll do my best."

She nodded, not looking at him. Tears stung her eyes, and she was too choked to speak.

"You were really worried for her," he said, realising now the depth of her concern.

"Yes, she's made a very big mess of her life and her head. She needs care," she said, her voice a little muffled. "I know she's cheated and betrayed you, but still you have taken it upon yourself... thank you, Laksh!"

Lakshya looked at her for one long moment. At the generosity this girl was capable of. "Don't make me fall in love with you all over again, Swara!"

She looked up at him in shock! But he was smiling a little at his own half-joke and she smiled back at him through her tears... a strong current of love flowed between them, back and forth... sloshing over them, warming their hearts. They were no longer lovers, but a kind of love remained.

"Swara! Laksh!!"

They both turned. Ragini was standing at the doorway of the terrace, looking fearful and very upset.

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Ally

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Posted: 9 years ago

#187

Great update.

I hope Ragini doesn't blow this out of proportion, but I have a feeling that we have a confrontation coming up

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naina

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Posted: 9 years ago

#188

Really loved the update, bubble😃
Loved the way you wrote Swara-Lakshya interaction😊
But Ragini..OMG..Will she misunderstand them..😲😲
Waiting for your next update😊

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alisha17

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Posted: 9 years ago

#189

Lovely update

Hope Ragini doesn't misunderstand Laksh and swara

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Posted: 9 years ago

#190

Originally posted by: Allyson
Great update.
I hope Ragini doesn't blow this out of proportion, but I have a feeling that we have a confrontation coming up

Thanks... Ragini is very insecure!

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