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-Anku-

@-Anku-

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Posted: 9 years ago

Hello everyone 🤗 I am sure you guys know me. I am the one who preaches a lot on the forum 😆 Makes some heavy load of gifs and partly would update the show at one point. I have written a bit for other shows but never for IshRa, although I always wished to. The reason was that I wasn't confident about my writing and to top it all, the writers on this forum are way out of the world for me to match up with them. But I've finally managed some courage and typed up a part of my first piece of writing for this show and couple.

Before you read it, let me tell you. I am not a writer and hence its possible that my writing might not be up to the mark, could have grammatical errors and may not be as you expect it to be. But everyone gets better with time, which I hopefully will too 😆

My story is about the family dispute track that pathetically ended on the show with Mutthu sniffing some juice boxes. It was one of the most realistic and promising tracks that concluded with nothing short of rubbish. So this is my take on how life would be after Raman and Ishita move out of the house and how their family realizes their worth. It was a bright chance for them to start afresh and give priorities to each other for once. I plan for it to be an SS, but it might exceed and become into an FF 😛

P.S - In my story, IshRa have already consummated probably years ago and live like any NORMAL couple would, without making intimacy a big deal

I would like to thank all my friends who have helped me in thinking of better ideas and inspiring and pushing me to finally post. Thanks so much Neets, Nidoo, Kavya, Krishy, Anju, Atii, Kiara, Boo, Alu and Sai. 🤗

Special thanks to Neets whom I've been tailing for help and inspiration. Thanks so much dear for bearing me and going through all that trouble. Hope this lives up to your expectations. And a special credit to Nidoo whose been pushing me to write for so long. 😳 Love you guys.

Enough of my rant, here is the first part below 😳

PLEASE do leave likes and comments.

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Jab koi baat bigad jaaye

Khushi mile ya gam, badlenge na hum
We're in this together
A day in the life of 'Bhalla's'
Itna karo na mujhe pyar
Agar tum saath ho
Bol do na zara, dil mai jo hai chippa

Edited by -Anku- - 9 years ago

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-Anku-

@-Anku-

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Posted: 9 years ago

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kavya

@s_kavya

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

Finally the update is here.. was waiting from long for this.. and have to admit it was really worth waiting.. as its a Great Start Anku...

I loved that YOU choose this track to write as in the show this track where ishra were misunderstood and leaved bhalla house was not up to Mark CV 's started it well but then they Messed up the track with that Toshiji.. ishita planning to reunite family and that juice track.. and we didn't got proper closure they ended the track with that lame juice track... so I am waiting how you will make this story go further...

I loved ishita here... her.. love her care her respect for Raman and how she is with Raman in this decision of his and how his self respect matters to her.. how she feels his pain and trying to soothe to take away his pain... really loved the way you portrayed ishita's character here.. 😳

Really felt bad for Raman the way he got misunderstood even after doing so much for his family his siblings.. his siblings blamed him his father being unfair to him.. must be very hurting for a man like Raman who is always ready to do anything for his family his siblings... and he had to leave his family... really loved how Raman thinks about ishita and fought for her... how much he loves her... as you said Raman is like a child who wants to proove that its worth having him... and he surely is worth having in life he is a responsible son.. careing and loving brother for his siblings.. dotting father.. and loving husband.. 😳

Loved ishra moments... there intimacy .. there gestures to each other.. thank god here they already taken that step in there marriage and already consummate there marriage loved all ishra moments waiting for many more in upcoming updates 😳

Anku that was an Awesome.. beautiful update.. Great start... 👏 will be waiting for next part eagerly continue soon.. 🤗

Anku... Thank You mat bolo otherwise we gang will take all credit sochlo 😆 😉 just Kidding 😆

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Neetz

@Neetz

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

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Anku, love u my dear. And, it's all your hardwork . Stop being so modest. [:*] I am always there to help...
Btw, I LOVE THE TITLE...

off to read now. back later..

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MG_Inactive

@MG_Inactive

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

Awesome...beautiful...continue soon 👏

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SA1234

@SA1234

Navigator

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Posted: 9 years ago

Res

UnRESing this shamefully late Anku..sorry 😒

Its hard to believe that you are a first time writer and am so so glad that you chose the family dispute track to make a start. This track had the potential to not only make Bhalla family realise the worth of IshRa but also to bring IshRa more close to each other thereby strengthening their bond. It did not happen on the show but am happy u are making it happen right here..👏

Coming to the update ...I love the fact that u started it with them stepping into their new home. The first scene where Raman is standing lost in his thoughts with a sleeping Ruhi in his arms, a dejected Adi leaning on to him and Ishita slowly nudging him out of his thoughts- this itself was hard hitting and what followed was equally wrenching 😭

I loved the part where Raman reflects back on his past and feels gratitude towards his family for standing by him when he used to be insensitive and rude...love this side of Raman -fiercely loyal,even in his private thoughts and then his realization that Ishita has always been the GIVER in their relationship and how they needed this time for themselves.

Ishita's self thought made her look human for a change...am so glad that she admitted to herself that she was also hurt by their family's behavior and also the fact that she would have opted to stay back had it been in her hands but chose to follow her husband without a word of protest when he decided to move out.

Lastly I love the way u have portrayed their intimacy in this update. Its so effortless and natural and something from which they derive the strength to over come their pain..( really tired of candles and flowers and the clichd mahaul banana..when all u have to do is just crash into each others arms or just walk into the shower 😉)

Brilliant first chapter Anku 👏

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Posted: 9 years ago

This track had so much potential but very disappointed the way cvs dealt it.

They made raman accept staying in iyers house but how I wished ishrarudi lived seperately.

We would have got most wonderful track.

Coming to your ss, this part is awesome, ishrarudi are living seperately, that's what I wished.

Loved reading it, and I know forum writers give logical ending to their writings, wanna see how you're gonna unite bhallas👍🏼

Edited by kingmanu - 9 years ago

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-K.13-

@-K.13-

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

You finally posted it - yayyy!

So we've talked about this before, but this had the potential to be one of my favorite 2015 tracks. They had set everything up perfectly - Raman's emotions, Ishita's unwavering support, the realistic struggles of a joint family rooted in money, the role of the kids, & so on. As the track was building up, I was so excited to see Raman & Ishita survive independently & the Bhallas come to realize the worth of both Ishita & Raman. Unfortunately our CVs gave is BS (no surprise there)...they utterly ruined what could've been an ode to classic, realistic YHM.

But that's in the past.

I'm so happy this is the topic of your SS because just from this update...you have developed this rich and meaningful work of writing. It has the depth I wanted to see on screen. It has a couple waving true hurt and justice being given to both their emotions. I seriously can't wait to see where you take this & thanks for writing as most people have abandoned the forum/show (leaving me bored 😆)! ❤️

Edited by -K.13- - 9 years ago

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Neetz

@Neetz

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

Anku, I can't tell you how much I loved reading it. Gut wrenching to say the least. Tbh, my heart feels heavy and eyes welled up. It's that touching. Plz give me some time to make a detailed post. I don't have my laptop with me. Gone for repair. I will reply properly as soon as I can because there are a few lines I wanna highlight and that won't be possible on phone. In case I don't get my laptop by tomorrow, I will sit and type on my phone as much as possible on this. I hope you understand. Don't feel discouraged or anything. I will keep prodding you on. Lol

Great work! Awesome! 😊

P.S. Thank you so so much for taking this up and writing it so beautifully. Lots of Love. 🤗

Edited by Neetz - 9 years ago