[SwaRon FF]. Adrenaline Rush - Replies 55+, #4 Pg59. (12/5)

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Manisha Bhardwaj

@Rockingbhardwaj

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#291

Finally update mil hi gya..
Sharon's character is beautifully penned..

Awesome...

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LoveHopeMagic

@LoveHopeMagic

Stunner

+ 7

Posted: 10 years ago

#292

Pheewww Finally im done with Reading ...😊
Amazing piece of work...i loved the concept the most... the characters which u included were so promising... With less number of characters and all were needed too... and all of them were quite different with we usually read... Sharon is complicated character but here she is little bit more complicated...her thoughts and insecurities are really complex... She is craving for love , its usual she feel jealous of kriya and rey... most of all girls like that.😆

And i loved the banners which u used in first and second part 👏
Ur writing style is appreciating one👍🏼.i felt it as introvert type . with lots of emotions but not getting way to pull it out...i dont know im right here but i felt like that...

Loved the connection between swayam and his mom, in usual case he should hate her but here everything is different so he has love her beyond limits. i loved that thought ...

I have read all 4 parts together then i felt the first one is beautifully written .. with much easiness... i loved that part where he was giving speech about his school life that was so refreshing one... i was missing my scholl days at that time...😃

And the first part itself gave me the behavioral difference in the of both swayam and sharon...

And swayam dad is an understanding dad with much proud of his son's success.

Hmm yaa thats abt the first part...

The second was average when it compares to ur first part... as u said... it could be much better 😳 there i loved sharon , she really neeed love as soon as possible..plzz make them meet soon 😆 I loved the way she snapped at her ...

Hmm the swayam and his friend gunjan that was sweet part... two bestie's conversations are always good to read... With lots of comfortableness

Then the third part

Am i not boring u na????😳

That was an outburst one and needed one too... sharon snapped at kriya nice,😆

I loved that sharon the attitude one

Hmm now next forth part...

That made me to fall in love with ur writing skills and the story tooo...

I loved characterization of sharon and kriya... the both are sisters still very much difference... and the way u penned it were amazing... 👏 with comparison ... she is much complicated and i hope the complications, the insecurities and the wall which she made around her break soon...

And one thing caught my attention was the list lines "complicated"

Complicated

Her life was rendered complicated. Her entire existence was rendered complicated. Her trust, brutally broken, made her complicated. Her persona was dazzling, left people to envy her, but rest assured, she was envious of their simple, uncomplicated life. They had their own space to breathe, to stop, to let it out, to heal. But she, she lacked this space, this air, and that suffocatedher beyond measures "

I loved these lines... and her envy abt their uncomplicated life 👏

very well written Story..I wish i could read this as soon as possible...plzz try to give us a regular updates ...

And im sorry if i bored u with long comment...i used to give long ones to those who really deserve it and u do ... and it was for 4 parts so it has to be long one...and if u dont want long ones then feel free to inform me i will reduce the size of the comments...😃

~Keechu

Edited by --Keechu-- - 10 years ago

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VReSh

@VReSH

Rocker

Posted: 10 years ago

#293

jus read this FF n yeah i likeit... Hoping to read more soon :)

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--Ecstasy--

@--Ecstasy--

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#294

Okay this is really interesting ff. Yesterday I was going through your writing gallery, when I found this. This is amazing . Loved all parts.

Please continue soon.

Girl you are a brilliant writer. Your writing has great flow. Please update all your other works, especially bereaved. Would love to read more from you.

Keep writing!

-Shivani

Edited by Vani20 - 10 years ago

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LoveHopeMagic

@LoveHopeMagic

Stunner

+ 7

Posted: 10 years ago

#295

Edited 😳

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Anushka

@...Anushka...

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

#296

res!🤗
Read the prologue! And oh my, I love the way you write it!

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Fairy...

@Fairy...

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#297

Awsome Story

Read all parts in one go

Loved it

Pls PM me when u update

Update soon :)

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Fatima

@HSFA

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

#298

Hey Nivi

I never knew something of this sort existed in this forum. Truly Marvelous!! And I am not just saying it but I mean it. I enjoyed every part of it as I read it in one ago. Addictive.

From the Character Sketches to the plot and till this chapter everything seemed so perfect. Loved all of it <3

I am so glad to see you writing like this. All the chapters were in good sync but this one just blew me. The way you portrayed Sharon was just commendable!! It was as if I was seeing her from a different angel. I so wish the writers of the show have seen her this way as well.

I simply loved the style, the words and the emotions you poured in this chapter. Simply Outstanding!! This is the Sharon we know. The girl whose soul has been tarnished badly but still she lives for her sister and has presented herself to the world in a different way.

Continue soon and do pm me. Thanks to Nishi who pmed me about this FF :)

Edited by HSFA - 10 years ago