SWARON OS : FORBIDDEN TEMPTATION

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@--Ecstasy--

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#21

Nostalgia...

Beautiful...

Very clean, very well written..

Please do write more OS's..

It's always a pleasure to read from you.

P. S. Something wrong with my like button, it's not working I don't know why, but it's a super duper like from my side.

Thanks.

-Shivani

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asthamehrotra

@asthamehrotra

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#22

Wowww yrr awesome tha ye toh 👏 actually I really liked d name of dis os suits it well nd also d way u started...i mean u could hav first explained d situattion bfore stating Sharon's POV but u straightaway started frm her POV wich I found great... I mean explaining d situation first cuold have diluted the seriousness nd intensity of the whole scene... So that's something which I found exceptionally good although these things were not that big but it really creates an impact on d mind of a reader
So keep writing more...keep up d good work 😃
- love astha 😛