Manya /Rara SS Tumse pyaar hame hai kitna janejana Chapter 5, page 6

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hey guys... i was thinking of making an ss of manya and rara ..its a light hearted story.. it starts with amaya and rachi di.. flashbacks and when the present will reach... it is going to be very happy..really happy... hope you enjoy it... and please if you did then hit the like button and leave your feedback . And please buddy me for pms . thanks your so much.

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Chapter 1 : page 1

Chapter 2

Chapter 3

Chapter 4

Chapter 5

Chapter 6 ( last part )
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Tumse pyaar hame hai kitna janejana

Chapter 1

It was a cold ... amaya and rachita were son the terrace.. it was raing a bit.. but ot much... recalling their past... amaya was looking down at those streets where she and mantu use to fight and argue sometime back... rachita was sitting peacefully on the swing type couch ( dont know how it is called )

A. his heart knows it rachi di.. but the fact is .. that he doesnt know it or doesnt want to admit it...

R. same here amaya.. look where r we now.. god knows how r they ...

A. rachi di... i wish i could tell him.. i wish i could make him undestand .. i wish... i wish... youll see rachi di.. one day.. one day. he will talk his feeling s out.. he will confess...how much time hes going to be able to hide his feelings rachi di... i wanna see. how much time?

r. well.. at least im happy hes happy on his own now... he has started his own electronics shop in the next street... he moved from here.. and shifted there ... at least.. his parent s have softened a bit...

A. di... why does destiniy play games with us.. why...?? huh?? di ?di'

amaya turned around and saw that her rachi di fell asleep there ... she went to her.. and put her shawl that she was wearing on her... she sat therre ... with her legs against her chest... on the floor ... relaxing... she closed her eyes.. a soft smile apeared on her face..

Precap: amaya s flashback ... rachis ... feelings...



well .. this is the chpater 1 .. ill post the chapter 2 longer than this one and with proper manya and rara scenes... i hope this crated interest... and do tell me what u feel about this.




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Posted: 10 years ago
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It was really nice..Seems interesting..Will wait for the next chapter..Try lessening spelling errors 😊
A n j a l i 😉
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sorry for the spelling errors.. actually theyr e typos mistaake.. due to lack of time dont have time.. but definetily do it bettter next time !
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thanks a lot for the apreciation!
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Yup its nice...😃...do continue soon...
I have seen people leave it giving 1 or 2 chapters...thats why i dont like to read OS/SS...i agree evryone got work and mite get busy...but still there shud be update at regular intervals...
yeah as Anjali said...try lessening spelling errors...it takes a while to understand...other than that fine...👍🏼
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yeah.. iw will... people leave because of the less comments and maybe apreciation.. me s a writer can feel it .. iwill defo try to get better..
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Good start. .love to read more. .do continue
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thanks a lot for such a beautiful appreciation ! ill defo continue soon !
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hi guys.. im really very sorry for the delay in updating. An d hope you enjoy this part ..and please hit like and leave your feedback

Chapter 2

In those cosed eyes... A beautiful memory was playing...

Flashback starts.

A. Mantu...mantu...

M. What amaya??

A. Muntu... Dont go out of the shop. .. Its raining heavily ... Please come back...

M. Are amaya... Kya yaar...tum bhi na...

And he turned and returnedto amaya... They had bought flowers for the pooja the mathurs had in the house ...

It was night and these two were stuck in the shop...

A. Bhaiya... Can u give me a kit kat please... ??

M. Kya amaya..tum 7 kitkats kha chuki ho jitna time hum yaha khade rahe hai... Thodi sharam karo yaar...

A. What ??? Look... These types of days dont come always and...

And amaya took a step towards mantu and slipped... Byt mantu held her waist tightly... Not letting her fall... Mantus eyes were lost in amaya , admiring her beauty... And amaya was lost in mantu... Eventually... Mantu realised his position and amata stood straight...

M. Sorry...

A. No...mantu dont say sorry...in fact u saved me ... I must say ..thank you ...

M. Come on ... The rain stopped... Lets go home ...

And amaya followed mantu... When she sat on mantus bike... She grabbed his shirt from his shoulders...

M. Amaya!!! Yaar... Please... Hold me... Otherwise ypull fall

A. Ok...

And she holds his waist...

Lightly...

M. Amaya..kya hai ye huh?? Hold me tightly.. Very tight... So tight that no one could separate us... ( the last words were said with a soft and full of feeling )

A. Alright mantu.

And she wrapped her arms around his waist holding him very tight... Mantu had a slight smirk...and amaya blushed ... And they left from there..

Flashback ends...

A lone tear escaped her eyes...Amaya was on the floor ...she had fallen asleep... Rachita got up... And saw her sisyer lying on the floor...

R. Amaya..amaya!!

And started shaking her ... Amaya got up with a jerk..

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A. Di ... Rachi di.what happened ?/? I was just sleeping ... Dont worry...

R. . Oh sorry amaya... Im really sorry..I thought you were...

A. No didu...

A. Rachi di... Why ... I mean...why today..u came on the terrace...?

R. Actually... Today... ... Remember... This day last year was the day when we lamded in banaras... The first time i saw rama...

And she walked to go towards the swing couch..and there... Amaya went there and sat as well... Rachi rested her head on amayas shoulder ... And closed her eyes...

Flashback starts

Rachita was at the ghaat... It was early morning... Soon... She saw a boy... Raising his hands ... He was doing a namaste looking to the sun... Rachita couldnt take her eyes off him... His banarasi dhoti... That toned back... Those broad shoulders... And those muscular arms ...Still with water droplets all over his back , shoulders... And arms...

A. Rach di ... Come on..!;

R. Yes...amaya..

And rachita left ...

Flashback ends

Few tears escaped her eyes... And amaya didnt even noticed... But when rachi started To sob... Then amaya noticed ... And wiped her tears

... Rachita looked at amayas eyes

R. I love him... I love rama amaya...!!!! I really really love him...

A. Rachi di... Hes still single... And rachi di you know that he also loves you... And very much... Acha ... I forgot to tell you sth ... Woh.. Actually i went ramas shop today...

Rachita stopped crying.

R. What???, how is he???

A. Di... Hes not fine... When i went there... The first thing he asked me was ... How were you... And a... And rach di... His eyes still spoke that he really really loves you...

R. Iknow amaya... I know... But... Ma... Shell never... Ever want me to go tohis house ... Shell never let me marry him... And... Dont you remember how they insulted papa and ma... How??? How?? Amaya how?? Even rama knows what his parents did... He is extremely ashamed ... He doesnt even looks at me ...

A. Di... Evrything will be fine...

R. No... No..amaya... Notings gonna change... Its too late...

A. Di... You always said that... hope should always be there ... so... why r u giving up so easily..?

R.. u don't understand amaya.. and you wont ever understand... there r so many issues .. moral issues , family issues .

A.. rachi di... all I know .. that true love never gets defeated...

R.. oh.. really... so what about you?

Amaya stood there shocked .. with no answer to give...he didn't have words to explain herself.. and she went from there to her room... and rachita.. after a while.. left the place as well and went to her room.

Precap. amayas tiny little dress accident ... mantus help ... Rama rachita come face to face...

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