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OS: EVIL DEAD

Dedicating this OS to my dear insane sisterKAVYA / Kg15 for her Birthday.

Kavya dear, You are not here with us now to celebrate your special day...your birthday but I know u r not very far...hope u r happy wherever u are...love u lots... & one more thing Killer, u'd challenged me to write an OS without any KISS scene or any bit of romance LOL & also to give a SAD ending...I should say it's a very tough task but I tried my level best & u couldn't even find the word KISS in this story LOL...Hope u like it!!

@NINA/ Ni33- Thank u so much Ni for choosing this title..i was confused whether to name this OS as "Brutal death" or "Evil dead" but u finalized this one...thanks!! Like Kavya di, u too love to kill leads so I hope u will enjoy this story!!

NOTE : Dear readers, this story is way too different from my previous works...I have always written love, romance & comedy stories with happy endings...but this one will have a Sad ending & I hope u all would have guessed it just by reading the Title... here the leads will face a Brutal death...in some parts u might feel disgusted or heartbroken on seeing ur favorite couple in pain or even u might get bored I don't know... so read at ur own risk & those who hate violence please don't read this story... & those who are below 16 please don't read...becos this story deals a very sensitive subject...thanks!!

So here goes my final OS...

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"Rk, U okay?" Madhu asked the moment Rk picked up her call.

"Yeah, Madhu. I m good. Why? What happened? You sound worried?" Rk asked her in concern.

"Nothing" she breathe a sigh of relief. "Rk, where are u? Why u taking so long?" Madhu asked Rk. Rk had gone to Pune for a business meeting & he was supposed to reach Mumbai an hour back but still he hadn't return & getting worried madhu had called him to confirm that he was fine.

"Biwi, Relax" Rk said softly to comfort her. "My meeting went long so I got late & now I'm on my way back home from Pune & will see u in another 2 hours or so, okay"

"Hmm...Come home soon, I have something special to tell u" she said blushing.

"What? Tell me now itself" he asked curiously.

"Nope. I won't say over phone. U just come home then I'll tell u" she said stubbornly.

"Biwi, please yaar. I can't wait to know what it is for nearly two hours, please pretty, tell ur husband now what's it?" he pleaded her.

"No means No, Rk...don't behave like a demanding baby...& haan, keep ur concentration on road & drive slowly. There is no hurry, okay?" she warned him.

"Yes, ma'am" he said teasingly making madhu chuckle.

"I love u" madhu smiled.

"I love u too, Biwi" he said back smilingly & they both hang up the call.

Rk, please come home soon. I'm dying to say this good news to u. she thoughts & sags back on the couch to take some rest till Rk arrives. She closed her eye lids & opened a moment later hearing the door bell ring. Rk? U cheater. Just now u said u'll take 2 hours but u r here...yet again u fooled me with ur trick but see this time i won't forgive u soon for lying to me & I'll make u beg me to say the good news. She smirked & marched towards the door to open.

"Aap? (you)" she said surprised.

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"Biwi, I'm home" Rk shouted excitedly the moment he entered into his house. He was surprised to see the door open but couldn't find his madhu.

"Madhu, come out from wherever u are & tell me what you want to tell me. I can't wait anymore" he said & went in search of Madhu. He checked their bedroom, bathroom, & kitchen but he could find no sign of Madhu.

"Madhu...Madhu..." he called her name again & again & even tried her number & he could hear her phone ring in the living hall. Dammit Madhu! Where the hell u went with taking your mobile phone?

"Madhu, stop this hide & seek game & come out. If I catch you, u know what i'll do" he gave her a delicious threat but he didnt get any response.

Then he went to the back yard, their house garden was madhu's favorite spot to pass time so he was hopeful to find her but she was not there too. He ran towards the gate to ask the security guard whether madhu had gone out but no one was presented on their place.

Getting tired Rk came back in to his house & sagged on the couch putting his head on his hands.

He was restless. He could feel an unknown fear gripping in his heart for his madhu.

"Damm! She must have gone for shopping & I m worrying unnecessarily...I need a drink" he said to himself & made his way to the private bar in second floor in his mansion which he used rarely after marriage as Madhu doesn't like him drinking.

When he entered the bar he was shocked to see the drinks bottles scattered on the floor broken into million of pieces & the bar stools were knocked down.

"R...Rk" he heard a muffled voice & he could say it was his Madhu's voice. He darted his gaze to the sound & his eyes went wide spotting madhu's painful face, her head down on the floor, her hair fanning the surface & her body hiding behind the bar counter. "Madhu..." he could hardly breathe. His whole body went numb looking at the sight. He couldn't move from the spot. Tears prickled at the back of his eyes & his heart leaps to his mouth. Jeez!

"Rk" she breathes his name faintly & held her hand out for him in the gesture of calling him near to her.

He took a fearful step towards her but he couldn't move fast, his brain was not taking his command or his heart was not willing to witness the sight. His heart was pounding hard & it seems like his heart would burst any moment. He went nearer to her & slumped down on his knees hard on the wooden floor & his hands gripping his head & pulling his hair hard in shock & his heart wrenched in pain seeing his madhu's state. Madhu's saree was disheveled on the floor & her inner garments torn & she was jabbed with a broken bottle on her stomach & she was lying on blood pool.

"Oh God! Ma...Madhu" his voices cracked & his head started spinning. "Madhu...Madhu..." he crawled towards her & took her on his lap covering her body with the saree & cradled her against him & his vision was blurry as tears pooled his eyes.

"Argh..." she screams in pain with his touch. "Its paining, rk" she cried. She was broken, wounded & lost all her energy as all her blood drained out from her body but she was holding her breathe to see her Rk for one last time & also to tell who was responsible for her state. She wanted Rk to punish him so struggled hard to breathe till Rk arrives.

"Madhu, what happened to u? Who did this to u? Oh God!" his voice hoarse & he screamed in pain holding madhu's face close to his chest.

"No...No...i won't let anything happen to u...i'll save u Madhu...u are my life...i can't let anything happen to u..." he tried to pick her up in his arms but she protested against it & she cried in pain which pierced his heart. He looked at his trembling hand which was on her behind when he tried to pick her up, was fully drenched with blood.

"I was...was pregnant" she cried hard for the baby...for their symbol of love which she had lost a while ago in the hands of a monster. Her mental pain was more than her physical pain though she was torn out to pieces. Come home soon, I have something special to tell u...Madhu's words were ringing to his ears. Oh God! Who the f**k did this to my madhu & to my baby?? I swear on God, I'll kill the f**ker.

"Madhu...who the hell did this to you?" Rk asked, his voice choked.

"ROHAN..." Madhu blurts the word with high difficulty gripping his chest tightly digging her nails in so that she could restrain the pain for a little longer & tell everything before she leaves him once & for all. Rk's eyes popped out in shock, he couldn't believe what he heard...My friend?? My Rohan, who I love more than my life did this to my madhu?? & his hands fisted like a ball in anger. His eyes were burning with rage & angry tears were oozing down from his eyes.

(2 hours ago)

Ting Tong!!

Madhu hurried to the door thinking it was her Rk & she was so excited to tell the good news to him but who know the person outside the door was not her love but an Evil to kill her life.

"Aap? (You)" she said surprised.

"Hello, Madhubala. How are u?" Rohan greeted pleasantly.

"Um...I'm doing good. Come in" she invited him with a smile & asked him to have seat.

"Rk is not at home but..." before she completes her sentence he interrupts her & said "I know" she eyes him suspiciously but ignored thinking he might have called before coming here.

"And When did u come from London?" Madhu asked politely to make some conversation till Rk comes.

"This Morning." he said & his eyes were lustfully gazing madhu as if he would pounce on her any moment & ravish her.

"Oh! U left to London just a week before our marriage & now after two months u are back. Rk would be surprised to see u but still he is mad at u for not attending our wedding, I guess." she chuckled. He grins wolfishly. "He often says how close u both were, his one & only best friend & how u both struggled to set up the business"

"Yeah. We struggled together but ultimately he was the sole winner. He has everything in his life now" he said with venom in his words which madhu couldn't get well.

"um...what u would like to drink? Tea or coffee?" she asked him politely. she really wanted to go out of his sight. He gazing her lustfully makes her feel nauseous.

"Well, Madhu, if u don't mind can I make a drink for myself from Rk's private bar?" he asked.

"Um...eh...Sure" she didn't like the idea at all. She never encouraged Rk to drink & now he wanted to use the bar that too when Rk was not at home. She felt little hesitant but she had no other go because Rohan was Rk's close friend & he holds a very important place in Rk & Rk might get angry on her if she refused him.

"It's in second floor right? Didn't he change it?" Rohan asked madhu before he takes the stairs.

"Yes" she said.

"Madhu could u please bring some Cucumbers & lemon?" he asked her standing on top of the first floor stairs. "Yeah, okay" She nodded & went in to the kitchen to slice cucumber cursing him under her breathe for taking over advantage at her home. Rk! Come home soon, i'll screw u nicely for having such a friend. I don't like him a bit...he & his hungry stare!

Five minutes later she climbed up the stairs to the Bar to see Rohan gulping down some hard liquor directly from the bottle not even bothering to pour it in glass. She even notice that he had down half of the bottle & he was getting skunky. She quickly placed the plate of cucumbers on the bar counter & turned on her heels to leave the room but he grabbed her wrist & yanked her towards him & her hands hit the bottles & glasses arranged on the counter top & they dropped down on floor making a loud noise.

"Rohan, What are u doing? Leave my hand" she shouted at him & wriggles herself from his hold but he was strong enough to hold her tight.

"Rohan...you are hurting me. Let me go." she twisted her wrist to let it free from his hold.

"I want you Madhubala" he said & brought his face close to madhu, she could feel his breathe on her skin but she turned her face in disgust & tears spring at the back of her eyes.

"Why Madhubala why? U didnt join my office as my assistant but Rk's? Why I didnt get u in my life? Why i'm so unlucky? I want u madhubala atleast once in my life time. I lusted u from the day I saw u in Rk's office but soon he said he loved u & wanted to marry...i went mad hearing that & I thought to forget u so I went to London but no, not even a single day I couldn't sleep without thinking you...ur beauty is killing me Madhubala" he said wrapping his arms around her waist tightly squeezing her.

"You Bloody bas***d! How dare u eye on me?? I m Mrs.Madhubala Rishab Kundra?? Get the hell out of my house now & never ever keep ur filthy paws on my house" She pushed him forcefully & slapped him hard burning his cheek.

"You Bloody Bitch" he said gritting his teeth but madhu turned to walk out quickly "How dare u slap me?" he asked angrily & before madhu could know he man handled her from the back & slammed her hard on the wooden floor & she hit hard on her stomach & she screamed in agony.

"I will show u who i'm & what I can do. If I wish for anything then i'll get it by hook or by crook" he snarled at her like an animal & dragged her by holding her long hair to the back of the counter & he pulled her saree roughly.

"Rohan, please leave me...u r out of ur mind...please for God's sake let me go...i'm ur friend's wife...please..." She begged him covering her breasts with her hands.

"I don't care, Madhubala. All I want is to f**k u" he yelled at her & forced himself on her.

"HELP!! HELP!!" she screamed & tried to push him off of her body.

"No one will hear u...Not even the guards because they are not here" He smirked at her. When he reached Mumbai this morning he learned that Rk had gone to Pune on business so he took the opportunity to fulfill his long time lustful desire & he bribed the guards asking them to leave & then he entered into the mansion & tricked her & brought her to the second floor so no one could hear her voice.

"Rk!! Rk!!" she cried Rk's name. He slapped her again to shut her mouth.

"Please, I'm pregnant...i beg u...please leave me...don't do anything to me or to my baby...please" she folded her hands & begged him for some mercy.

"Oh! We have an invader in here" he touched her belly & madhu shoved his hand away from her angrily.

"What we can do to u, baby?" he asked looking down at her stomach. "You don't like ur mummy screaming in pain right? So u don't see or hear her" he said clenching his teeth & grabs a champagne bottle from the counter & breaks it. Madhu looked at him horrified. "No No No...please don't do anything to my baby" she cried & dragged herself back to escape but all her escape routes where locked as she could only be cornered by a priapic monster. She pulled her legs close to her chest to protect her baby but he ruthlessly dragged her legs & she slid on the floor & he jabbed the sharp edges of the broken bottle on her abdomen. She gasped in sudden shock. "Arghh!!" then she shrieked in immense pain as blood oozed out from her stomach. She wished to die in that moment but her torture didn't end easily. He tied her hands loosely above her head with her saree to stop her from wriggling & wrapped his legs firmly on hers to avoid her kicking & he molested her, abused her & hurt her to the core like a wild animal even worse than an animal...he was an Evil who brutally killed her baby & f**ked her to his fill, she was vulnerable, helpless & her cries & prayers for help went unanswered. Finally, he raised up from her leaving her aching, lifeless, almost in a deadly condition as her body was bathed in blood. She stared blankly not ever blinking her eyes, she had no tears to let out but she was alive, she had only vengeance in her eyes, she wished to kill him back cruelly but she knows she won't survive & now her last prayer was to hold her breathe till she see her RK, her love.

"This would have been great if u had responded to my touch but still u r the best. Bye, sweetheart" Rohan said with a evil smile & walked out hurriedly before Rk reaches the mansion as he needs to escape from Rk's eyes to save his life.

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"Kill him Rk...Kill him...that's all I want you to do for killing our baby & snatching us away from u" she said angrily. "He ruined everything Rk...he ruined our happy life...he should not stay in peace...show him the fear of death & kill him brutally" she hissed in burning rage. Her internal pain had long forgotten now only angry tears flowing down from her fury filled eyes.

"I swear on u madhu...i will kill Rohan for f**king my life but not before showing him what is hell" Rk promised her & hugged madhu close to him shedding painfully tears for what all pain his beloved wife had gone through.

"Madhu, please don't leave me...i can't live without u...please biwi, I need u...i'll save u...i beg u please let me take u to the hospital..." he sobbed.

"R..Rk" she fights for precious breathe. "Do u love me?" she asks leaning up from his chest & looking into his eyes.

"I LOVE U, Biwi...U r my everything Madhu" he said with teary eyes holding her close in his arm & caressing her pale face with his fingers.

"Then will u do me a favor?" she asked him hopefully. He nodded not knowing what she was gonna ask him but he was ready to do anything for her.

"That Evil killed our baby but I won't let him kill me... I want to die in your hands...so please KILL me, RK" she muttered the words scrunching her eyes tightly as she doesn't want to face Rk because she knows how difficult & hurtful for him to kill his own wife whom he loved with his heart & soul. "And bury me in the back yard...please don't let anyone know that I was raped by an Evil & had a gory death." she adds.

"Madhu, I won't let u die..." he said shaking his head frantically & cried hysterically.

"I'm already dead Rk...i died the moment he forced on me...i lost my purity...i lost my baby...i lost everything...i have nothing to give u...I'm a living corpse & I know I won't survive too...so please fulfill my last wish Rk...KILL ME PLEASE" she begged him & breathes rigorously.

"I don't have much time Rk..." her vision was getting dark & her pulse went low.

"AHHH..." Rk let out a loud scream cursing the God for putting him in this situation. He had promised to love his madhu...cherish her & protect her but he fail to protect her...& now he was forced to kill his own Biwi with his hands...will this be anymore cruel?? can a loving husband ever do this to his wife?? but he will do it for her as he wanted to satisfy her final wish. He inhaled sharply & looked down at her & she was waiting expectantly...for what? To get killed? She took a broken bottle from her side & handed it to him to end her life. He took the bottle in his hand shakily. She smiled at him faintly encouraging to go ahead. Silence prevailed in the room for a moment, they could hear only their erratic breathes & thumping heart beats.

"I LOVE U, Rk" she whispered.

"I LOVE U,Madhu. WE WILL MEET SOON" he cried & gripped the bottle firmly. Yes, he need to do this...he can't let his biwi suffer in pain anymore...she had enough...its time to set her free & in peace!! KILL DILL!!

SLASH!!!

he slashed the sharp edge of the bottle on her neck & she gasped loudly & took her last breathe.

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(One Month Later)

"Hello, Chief" Bittuji, his PA called Rk.

"Tell me Bittuji? Where the f**k he is hiding?" Rk growls. Its been one month but his pain for losing his wife had never washed out...will never wash out not even after killing Rohan. He hadn't slept. He hadn't had anything, he cooped up himself in the bar where his wife endured so much pain & got killed with his own hands. he wished to kill himself but he wanted to keep up his promise to his wife. Not even the God who created him can snatch his life before he ends Rohan's life.

"Greece" Bittuji said.

"GAME OVER" Rk smirked evilly & hanged up the call.

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(In Greece)

Rk kicked the bedroom door & he entered in to Rohan's Room like a storm.

"Rk?" Rohan said terrified & blinked his eyes twice to see whether he was really there or he was just hallucinating.

"You are not dreaming, my dear friend Rohan! I'm here...here to Kill YOU" Rk said & laughed hysterically.

"Guards!" Rohan shouted for help "Daniel" he even called his dog, his protector but no one came in his rescue.

"No one will hear u, Rohan...i bribed ur security team & few were so loyal to u & I said they can meet their boss in hell...Go! Ur guards are waiting in hell" Rk smirked & glared at him murderously. He wanted to kill him the moment he faced him but nah...he wanted to torture him for every bit of pain madhu had suffered because of this ruthless heartless f**king creep.

"R...Rk what are u doing here?" Rohan asked. His voice hoarse.

"Relax Dude! I'm not here to Rape you. I'm not a GAY...you know why I'm here...just now I said the reason for my impromptu visit...Don't u?" Rk asked raising a brow. Rohan's tried to swallow but his mouth went dry.

"Rk, please forgive me...I was drunk...I'm sorry...Don't kill me?" he pleaded to Rk.

"Forgive?" Rk clenched his teeth in anger & in one swift move he punched him hard on the side of his skull knocking him down to the floor. "You bloody hell!! u want me to forgive u after what u did to my innocent wife...u even killed my unborn child & u have the nerve to ask for forgiveness , my foot!" Rk spitted on his face & kicked hard on his rib & Rohan's breathe caught on his lung & he coughed vigorously & one more hard kick followed him & he started bleeding from mouth. Then Rk pulled out his pistol which he had tugged on his waist band.

"No No No, Rk...please don't shoot me?" he raised both the hands above his head in the gesture of showing his defeat.

"What Biwi?" Rohan turned his gaze where Rk was looking but he could see no one there. "Oh! Okay Biwi! I'm sorry" he said & tugged his pistol back on his waist band. "Rohan, My madhu told not to shoot u...i love her so much so I won't defy her words" Rk said in contrite tone & he helped Rohan to stand up.

Oh No! Rk has gone mad! No one was here but with whom he was talking? But luck is in my favor! He wont kill me! He thoughts & sighed in relief.

"Oh C'mon Rohan! Game is not yet over! You didn't hear what my biwi told? She said not to shoot u & kill in an instant but to torture u till death. I think she is right. U deserve a Brutal death" Rk said tapping his chin as if thinking how to torture him. "Okay, Let me look into my tool kit" he said & placed a case on the bed. "Hmm...Ropes, Knife, Cutter...not nail cutter Rohan, finger cutter, but don't worry I have nail plucker too...then what other toys do we have?...oh ur favorite weapon which u wield on my biwi...Glass bottles...okay rest of the things we will see later when we use it...because am not in the mood to give u any demo but I want to jump into action" he said.

When he turned Rohan punched Rk on his face & he fell back on the bed & Rohan rushed towards the door to escape but Rk took a hammer from his case & threw it in force which hit the back of Rohan's head & he clutched the door in one hand for support & other hand holding his head to stop the bleeding & slowly he sinks to the floor.

"Don't u dare to run away!! then I will stretch your torture period" he said & dragged him to the center by holding his leg. Then he lifted him up harshly & made him sit on a wooden chair & tied the rope around him & also tied his hands & legs.

"Rohan, My dear friend, so tell me should I do you Gonadectomy??" Rk asked casually keeping one leg on the arm rest of Rohan's chair & Rohan gulped in his saliva in horror but before he could say or react Rk changed his stance "Nah..that's a dirty job by the way what's the use in castrating u when u are going to die soon? So will drop that idea & go for shock" he declared clasping his hands. Then he rummaged in his case & took out a iron hand cuff & he hand cuffed it to Rohan's wrist & then he connected a circuit wire to hand cuff & plugged the other end to the switch board & ON.

Rk smirked evilly with utter satisfaction seeing Rohan jerking his hands & legs in violent pain & screaming & after a minute Rk switched off & removed the cuffs from him while he put his head down exhausted.

"Rk...What u r doing is against law? Please...please leave me...I'll surrender." Rohan cried.

"Against LAW? Don't u know raping is also against LAW? Don't to know stabbing someone is also against law? Don't u know killing a baby is against Law? Now about what Law u r talking to me, Rohan?" Rk seethed holding Rohan's face harshly with his fingers. "Imprisonment is not a punishment at all for your acts of barbarity...u ought to be tortured till death...death sentence is the punishment, Rk is ganna give that to u" Rk pushed Rohan's face back forcefully & screamed in agony like a madman.

"Rk...please i'm ur friend" Rohan pleaded him with tears.

"f**k!!" Rk growled at him. "I curse the day I met u...i felt ashamed of myself for befriending with u...A monster who killed my happiness. Didn't u know I was ur friend while u f**k my wife? Didn't u know I was ur friend while u kill my baby? All u cared was ur f**king pleasure & now enjoy the pain i'm gonna give u, Mr.Rohan" then he furiously took out a nail plucker & plucked each & every nail of Rohan's fingers & toes without giving any heed to his painful scream. Yes, Rk too behaved like a monster, what he did was wrong but he was happy inflicting pain on him. Then mercilessly he cut Rohan's fingers & blood made its way as if water flows from a faucet. Rk laughed hysterically seeing every drop of blood shedding from his body but his sadistic pleasure didnt reduce, he took a sharp knife & pierced it on his chest but not hard & deep but scraped it in jig zag.

"Rk...please I beg u...please Kill me?" Rohan begged him as he couldn't take the merciless torture anymore.

"Rk...please please...i can't take this pain anymore...i agree what I did to your wife was wrong...I'm an evil & I don't deserve forgiveness...i deserve to be punished so kill me, please" he cried genuinely feeling shittier for what he did. Yes, he regretted what he did was wrong, an unforgivable sin, no man in this world ever have the right to lay a finger on a women without her consent but he forced on Madhu, Molested her, & killed a pure soul only to satisfy his lustful pleasure.

"Kill him Rk...kill him" Rk heard a faint voice ringing at the back of his head.

Rk took a steady breathe & then took out a drinks bottle, he tosses the lid & took a slug of the drink & then he poured the rest on Rohan, drenching him with the alcohol from head to toe. Rohan scrunched his eyes tightly in fear...fear for facing his death. Show him the fear of death, Rk!! k could see madhu's wish fulfilling. Then Rk tossed the lighter lid up & he stared at a flame for a second & then he threw it on Rohan & Rk turned the other side while he got burnt in the ferocious fire. Rk could hear only a violent scream which soothed his anguish heart & soon everything went silent.

"EVIL DEAD" Rk declared & slumped on the floor & cried his heart out & pulled out the gun he had tugged in at the back & pointed it to his head.

"Madhu..." He whispered with his eyes shut relishing the past memories & he felt a cool breeze hitting on him, sending shivers to his body & he knew his madhu was nearer to him mingled in the thin air. "Madhu, My Dancing Doll, why this happened to us? Why? We were so Crazy in love, the word "Love" which I hated & believed that no such thing exist in this world but you made me feel it, made me love you & made me feel loved & cherished. It all started as a game, a game of Seducing Mr. Perfect, & you won the game but not because of your seduction but it's your love which won ultimately & yes, Pyaar hai, Biwi, pyaar which gave me the strength to fight. But still I had a dilemma whether i'm worthy for ur love but u trusted me & married me & then Love starts after marriage for me too, I loved u with my heart & soul, everything was going well with us, I loved my life because u were with me to brighten it & dreamed that finally we are a family, a cute little family with a baby adding to our happiness but all my dreams got shattered, our world turned Upside down, destiny played its card & let this evil win & we both got separated & I was left alone in this purgatory but not anymore because now Evil dead, & our Journey of love continues till eternity, i'm coming to you madhu from this Purgatory to paradise, Yes, u r my heaven, I can't live without u, as I promised u, I took my revenge on him for killing u & our baby & also I said We will meet soon & the time has arrived, Let's begin our life anew in a new world where no one can separate us. "I LOVE U, B.I.W.I" then he fired the bullet on his head & he was dead.


THE END

Okay! I know the story was not good & I know Rape is such a sensitive subject to write but I tried & I really feel every rapist deserves the worst kind of punishments like Rk has given to Rohan even worse than that so that no one will dare to touch a girl. But taking Law in our hand is wrong, I know that well so don't lecture me for writing like that. It's just a story...so COOL!!!

Um...last para might not made any sense but I just wanted to use all my story titles LOL

please do hit the like button if u really like the story & comment your views if u so wish.

Thanks to all my lovely readers in advance.

No more stories from my side. I QUIT!!

Sayonara!!

love u all!!

sudha (Jalebi)


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First... I feel like I ran a Marathon...😆

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res...haven't read it yet but u better have included our Rohan!! 😈 🤣
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very very sad story 😕
but u described everything very well
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My God..never ever give such a misfortune to anyone. Never ever.. I feel rape is the most brutal crime in the world which kills the victim inch by inch breath by breath...leaving her/him as a living corpse. 🤢 More than body it hurts the soul..
Madhu was pregnant when she was raped and murdered...what a bloody ba****d! I was thinking to rip his limbs off his filthy body while going through the violent rape description. he deserves it..this barbarism.😡 and that plonker thought RK would mercy him??😲 Height of expectation. The di****ads like him deserves no mercy. RK did good by killing him so NICELY.😈

Thanks Sudha for writing this OS..I can't say it's beautiful..it's so pragmatic..so painful..so heart-aching but sometimes we need to be cynical. Or we can't protect ourselves. Somewhere I can assume the person's pain you have depicted behind your story..no I'll never question you or anyone else anything..😳 but I feel sorry for her...😭 RIP Kavya..God loves those who dies young. You're his love child..you're lucky that way.👏
Edited by Miss_uliuli - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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ok.. this was one scary and heartbreaking story...
scary bcz even I was scared for Madhu when RK was searching for her...

you brought out RK's and madhu's emotions very well.. i couldnt have asked for more from his side..
but RK killing Madhu himslef... 😭😭

it felt very right at the same time when it felt so impossible.
i could easily relate to Madhu's thought at that time.. being killed by the one she loves so dearly..

RK did right with Roshan.. he deserved to be treated that way.. infact more than that but I know you couldnt elaborate it here on the forum.. 😆

Rohan obviously reminded me of kavya Di's Rohan.. The name was enough.. 😆
that rohan had made me have chills down my spine.. and even this was no less only that he was still a human, to be made a ghost soon by RK.. 😆

RK's pain was unbearable for me.. and then having to wait for a month.. i cant imagine how he would have waited for the whole month..

well it was a nice story.. you experimented with your writing style in ur last work and I must say it was brilliant..
😃

Happy Birthday Kavya Di... I am sure she must be laughing hard seeing you writing this for her.. 😆

Edited by k.atrina75 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Outstandinggg + Tooo Emotional OS...
Can't stop my tears ...
Feelinggg bad 4 Rishbala ...
specially when Madhu asked Rk to kill her nd told about baby too it's a Heart breaking part for me...Loved d Way Rk killed dat Rohan...
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Posted: 10 years ago
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what an evil story.
madhu's death was very painful:(
will surely gonna miss your stories
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Really sad endg.
Ronan is an evil.
Heart wrenching story😭

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