The Broken Promise - Maaneet OS

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Hello Everyone!!!

So This OS, Well I Had Originally Penned It On Some Other Favorite Couple Of Mine, Almost A Year Back Or Maybe More.

Somehow, I Felt That It Might Suit Our Maaneet Too😳


I WasmActually Listening To This Song That Evening When This Idea Suddenly Crossed My Mind.

It Has Been My First Time Doing Something Like This, So I Hope You Will Like It😛

Happy Reading😃



Tu Jahaan Main Wahaan

Wherever You'll Be, I'll Be There


Sang Sang Yun Chaloon Tere

I'll Walk Along With You


Jaise Tera Asmaan

Just Like Your Sky



The Broken Promise - Maaneet OS <3



Presentation...Done!!!

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Tomorrow's Conference...All Set And Ready!!!


Ensuring herself that she did all that she had planned for the day as she went through the mental list she had prepared, Geet switched off the lights as she got up to leave her office. Obviously she was the last one as usual. But then, that was all she had...her work.


It's past 6 already, Mom will definitely *kill* me today, Geet told herself as she hurriedly got into her car.



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Like every other day, as she was driving by the park which was found on her way home, Geet couldn't help but spare a glance at the people in there.


Kids playing and fighting.

Grandparents accompanying their grandchildren on evening walks.

Teenagers secretly meeting.

Newly-weds romancing in a corner.


She could see them all as she drove at a super slow pace.


But what caught her attention the most was what she saw next.


A man supporting and walking beside his pregnant wife, hand in hand.


At that moment, Geet could do no more than to think about her own life. It pricked her heart to see that couple like that. The seemed to be so much in love and their happiness could be easily reflected on their face.


If only her life could have been the same, she told herself.

If only he would have been with her too.

If only that day never happened in their lives.

If only she could erase that day and change the past, she thought sadly as silent tears made their way from her eyes.


Not able to drive further, Geet stopped the car to go inside the park, the same park which had so many memories of her, of him, of them. She knew her mom would be worried about her but at that moment nothing made sense to her. Sending a quick message about extra work to her mom, Geet made her way inside the park as she grabbed her shawl in her hand in case it would be cold later on.



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As she walked silently in the park, Geet couldn't help but think of all those times they had spent together.


Like any other girl, she had also dreamt of her *soul mate* who would come and sweep her of her feet. She also used to wait for her *special person* who would turn her world upside down with the love he would have for her.


But never had she thought that her world would literally be turned upside down with the arrival of her special person.


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Jo Dhoop Nikli Chaya Ban Jaaunga

If The Sun Comes Out , I'll Become Your Shade


Jo Ho Tu Akeli Saaya Ban Jaaunga

If You Are Alone, I'll Become Your Shadow


Jo Uljhan Mein Ho Mann Main Behlaaunga

If You Are Disturbed, I'll Ease Your Mind



She could still remember his words to her. He had vowed to be her shadow, to be the solution to any problem of hers, yet here she was today, all alone to face her troubles without him by her side.


He lied to her.

He broke his promise to her.


Why did you leave me midway Maan? Why??? Geet finally screamed out.


You had promised to be with me all the time, then why???? she said loudly with no one to hear her, since almost everyone had started to leave the park.


It was already past 8 and it started getting dark. Still, it was of no effect to Geet. Her life was already filled with darkness anyways.


*****************

FLASHBACK


"Stop Geet. Geee-eeettt!!! Stop," Maan screamed out loud as he kept running after his Mishti in the park.


It was one evening like any other one. After work, they would daily come to the park to spend time together. Despite working together at the same place, Geet and Maan would rarely get to spend time with each other due to their workload. And being true professionals, their work would be their priority in the office. That is why, they would daily go to the park in the evenings to spend some quality time with each other.


Sticking her tongue towards him as she gave her a quick glance, Geet continued running.


"I wonder what your mother fed you with as a child. Kitna *bhagodi* types ho tum. Ok I give up. At least now stop running. If you won't, then I'm leaving you here alone and going away, then don't come crying that I left you," Maan finally used his last trump card as he realised that Geet was no way near stopping. Once she makes up her mind to prove her point, there is no way stopping her, and he knew that.


The moments those words left his mouth, Geet froze at her place. Seizing this moment, Maan quickly ran to catch up with her and hugged her from the back. When he felt that she was stiff in his arms, he turned her around only to find a teary Geet.


Caught by surprise, he asked her what was wrong when few minutes back, she was *playing* and having fun with him.


Geet hugged him time as she said in a broken voice.


" Maan, don't leave me please. I promise I will do anything you will say, but please never leave me alone. Please."


And Maan knew what was wrong. Unknowingly he made her cry with those words of his. Maan was clearly aware of Geet's insecurities. She could never bear to have her loved ones going away from her especially with the childhood she had lived with.


When she was 10 years old, her father had left her mother for another woman and did not even care about his daughter, who kept craving for him. Since that, Geet would live with this insecurity. Maan still remembers what all he had to do to convince her that he really loved her when he had confessed to her.


Of course, he could understand why she took time to reciprocate his feelings. She didn't want to go through what her mother had gone and didn't want to be left by someone again.


When he felt that her sobs had subsided, Maan broke the hug and made her look at him as he took her face between his palms.


" Geet, I'm not like others. You trust your Maan na? I promise I will never leave you. I will always be with you, forever," he told her as he placed a kiss on her forehead.


"You're telling the truth na?" she asked with uncertainty.


"Haan Geet. I will always be with you, promise. Be it in happy or sad moments. Whenever you need me, I will be there with you, for you. I will be your shield all the time. I promise you this, with all the love I have for you," he finished off.


Overwhelmed and feeling secured by his words, Geet hugged him that very moment.




He promised her to be with her.

He promised to be her saviour.

He promised her.

And she trusted him.





Ho Gham Ke Badal Mujhpe Tham Jaane De

Let The Gloomy Clouds Loom Over Me


Bechainiyo Ko Mujhse Takrane De

Let The Restlessness Attack Me


Dukhti Ho Koi Baat Mujhpe Aane De

Let Any Hurtful Talks Come To Me



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You promised to be with me in every phase of my life.

You said you would be with me in the toughest and worst moments of my life. Then where are you today when I need you the most - when we need you the most, Geet yelled as she place her hand on her stomach, her bump very much visible.


Yes, she was 7 and a half month pregnant with his *Armaan* and she needed him, they needed him. But he was not with them. How could he when he passed away 5 months back.


*****************


FLASHBACK


Geeet, Maan yelled as he saw a truck coming in her direction.


Panic-stricken, Geet was not able to move when she was pushed on the other side by none other than him.


Maaan!!!!! Geet managed to let out as she saw him lying in a pool of blood on the road.



*****************


"Nothing will happen to you Maan, just be quiet and rest," Geet told Maan after his immediate operation.


Maan was struggling to talk which pained him and Geet didn't want that.


With much difficulty he managed to say in a broken tone.


"Please Geet, let me talk."


Even after receiving a glare of her, Maan didn't keep quiet.


" Geet, take care of yourself and of our child when I will no longer be here," he said while having a hand on her almost flat tummy.


"Maan why are you talking like that. Nothing will happen to you. You had promised me you will never leave me. Remember. So, please don't talk like this."


"I will always be with you Geet, maybe not physically, but I will be with you all the time, in your thoughts, in your dreams, in your memories. But promise me, you will move on and will live, for me, for you, for our child, please," he nearly pleaded.


Releasing her hand from his, Geet stood up angrily.


"No, why should I promise, huh, tell me why when you yourself, you're breaking yours. I will never forgive you for this Maan. Why did you do this, why??? I was supposed to be in your place. Why did you push me Maan??? Why??? Main tumhe iss ke liye kabhi maaf nahi karoongi, kabhi nahi?"


With that she turned her back to him pouring her frustration through her tears.


" Geee-eee aaahhh"


" Maaannn!!!! What happened? Wait I'm calling the doctor. Am just coming wait."


But she never went. She stopped in her tracks as she heard him calling her once again.


"Geet, mu--mujhe, chod ke mat jao. Be with me, please."


The very moment he said that, Geet found herself next to him on the bed taking him in his arms.


"Am not going Maan, I'm here itself. I will just call the doctor, he will check upon you and all will be fine," she said in a reassuring tone.


"No Geet, be-b-be h-e--here only, don--don't leave me," he said as he clutched her blood-stained top, cuddling himself into her.


Hugging him back, Geet kept cursing her fate.


Why her only? First her dad and now Maan. Please God, make him fine.


Her prayers and pleads were left midway as she suddenly felt his stiff body on hers.



Maaannn!!!!!!!



*****************



Dil Sochta Tha Ke Koi Apna Ho

My Heart Always Thought Of Someone To Be Mine


Koi Raaz Na Ho Jo Uss Se Rakhna Ho

Someone Who I Won't Keep Secrets From


Aankhein Na Kholu Main Shayad Sapna Ho

I Won't Open My Eyes; Perhaps It's A Dream



How she wished it was all a dream.


If only she had not insisted on ice cream that day, she always kept telling herself all the time.


Today, she would have been here with him. They had woven so many dreams together concerning their baby since the very day they became aware of her pregnancy.


Yet today, she was alone when their dreams were on the way of becoming real. She would never have the complete family she always craved for.


How many times, she felt like giving up. She never imagined her life without him since the time they got together. Still, she managed to *survive* for 5 months without him.


If only she was not carrying their baby. If only she hadn't promised him inwardly when he had asked for it on his death-bed, she kept telling herself each time she felt the need to give up.


But she had to live, for their baby - for him. He wanted her to and she knew that would be the only way to keep him *alive* - through her, through their baby, through their happiness.



*****************


" Geet, where are you? I have been calling you since so long. Why were you not picking up my calls? Tu theek to hai na" Geet heard her mom telling her when she finally decided to pick up her phone which was ringing continuously for the last one hour.



"Y-y-yes mom," she managed to say in a choked voice.


"Geet. What happened? Whay are you sounding like this?" asked her mom in a concerned voice and as if realisation dawned onto her, she quickly added,


"You're there only, na? You again went to the park. How many times I forbade you from going there, when why do you keep going there Geet. Why do you keep facing the things which hurt you? Stay there itself, I'm coming in 10 minutes, ok?"


Drinking the tears which made their way out as her mom talked to her, Geet finally replied.


"No mom, I'm ok, sach mein. And don't worry. I'm coming in a while."


"Are you sure, beta?"


"Yes mom, please don't be tensed. I'm just coming. See you in a while mom. Bye."


"Bye," her mom replied as she hung the phone sadly. She was aware of her daughter's pain though she never voiced it to her. But she was her mother, and one cannot hide anything from a mother.


As much as she was affected by Maan's death also, Geet's mom recomposed herself. Maan was the son she never had. And it pained her equally not to have him anymore in their lives. But she had to be strong, if not for her, then at least for her daughter.


"Keep my daughter safe all the time Babaji," she silently prayed as she waited for Geet's return.


*****************


Wrapping the shawl around her, Geet made her way out of the park, but not without giving it another glance.


As she drove off, she again *promised* herself not to come there again.


But promises were made to be broken and Geet knew she would find herself there again the following day. The park was filled with too much of the memories of their togetherness, she could still feel his presence there, something she would never be ready to let go of.


That was how the daily evenings of Geet went by. Geet, the widow of Maan Singh Khurana!!!


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Phew, Tada!!!! That's It.

Hope It Was Not Boring And You Will Like It.

Thanking You In Advance For Your Comments, Like And Taking The Time To Read It.


Have A Nice Day Everyone😛


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Posted: 10 years ago
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superb emotional
first i thot maan cheated on geet
but finally😭😭
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Emotional but really nice one..
So touching .. Thanks for sharing it with us dear..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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this is such painful one
i thought maan cheated geet but he died saving geet ..
geet still in memories ..
people leave but their memories never leave us ..so painful to live without our loved one ..

thanks for os ..wish it be a happy one
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Very sad but wonderful os .The way u show geet emotion just love it.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Beautiful sad OS! Wonderfully written! Lovely song! Feeling4 Geet! Maan died she is pregnant! Past well incorporated! her mom is worried abt her! Hope u write another Os - this time with a happy ending! Thanks

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Ah sad one..
Din expect this ending...
Bt liked it..
N also liked ur writing style
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Thank you everyone for your precious likes and comments ^__^ :* <3
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Thank you for liking, reading and commenting =D

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