Without You - An Asya OS ' Last part UPDATED '

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Hi ! I'm here with my first OS ! it's based on my favourite couple. The idea just popped up in my mind when I was brushing my teeth one fine morning. So don't hit me with a vase after reading this. I want to thank all those people who liked and commented on my first story in IF !


okay now about dedicating this !
I want to dedicate this to you !
Yes YOU !
you right there!!
Don't look around I'm talking about you ; the one who is reading this.
This is for you :)



Without you!

Zoya caressed her blotted belly. She was sitting on a chair on the bench in their backyard garden. A smiling Asad was also leaning against the table with his arms crossed over his chest. His chocolate brown eyes were filled with love for his beautiful wife who was smiling lovingly at her gigantic stomach.

" I'll call her Zara !"

Zoya said without moving her gaze away from her belly.

"Zara means light in French. But what if it's a baby boy ? "

Asad questioned her in a teasing manner.

" No . I'm sure it'll be a girl. Zara! The light of my life! "

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A frantic Asad rushed into the hospital with a frail Zoya in his arms. He laid her on a stretcher the hospital staff brought.

"Zoya! Stay with me darling!Please! Please open your eyes ! please !"

Asad was pleading helplessly to a feeble Zoya who was slipping in and out of consciousness.

Zoya was quickly taken into the operation theatre. Dilshad and Ayaan had reached the hospital by this time. They were greeted by the sight of a frustrated and frightened Asad pacing before the OT. Ayaan placed a comforting hand on his brother's shoulder assuring him that everything will be fine.

All their attention was suddenly turned to the doctor who came out of the OT. The three of them rushed towards the doctor.

" What happened ?" the doctor enquired.

" she fell from the stairs while .." Before Dilshad could complete her sentence, Asad interrupted suddenly.

"How is she Doctor? Tell me she's fine! " There was desperation in his voice and everyone could tell from the look in his eyes that he was breaking apart from within.

" Look Mr. Khan , her condition is quite critical. Both the mother and the baby is in danger. We can't make any promises but we'll try our best to save both of them. The rest is in God's hands. Have faith Mr. khan." Saying this, the doctor retreated to the OT.

Asad didn't hear anything after the doctor said Danger. His Zoya was in danger ! He was distraught hearing the doctor's words. He collapsed on his knees. Without wasting a second Dilshad took her son in a warm embrace. She was distressed with everything going on. She sent a silent prayer to the Almighty for her daughter in law and her grandchild's well being.

Asad was trying too hard to stay strong. But his mother's embrace triggered the anxiety and dread that was building inside him to burst out. The tears he was holding began to cascade as a dam broke out.

"I want my Zoya back! Please save her Ammi .. please ..."

He begged to his mother like a 5 year old pleading for his favourite toy. Dilshad couldn't bear to see her son broken like this. Silent tears of helplessness rolled out of that mother's eyes.

In the eerie silence of the hospital; Dilshad's sobs were the only sound that echoed in the empty corridor.

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"... we don't have time! ... Everyone speed up... Get me the ...Doctor the heart rate's dec..."

Zoya could hear the slurry voices of the doctors and nurses inside the OT. She was trying too hard to stay awake. Above everything she was twisting with excruciating pain. It was eating her from inside. She was feeling that she'll die any moment from this barbarous pain. She wanted to escape from this torment.

Her baby! Her Angel ! She was pulled back into reality with the thoughts of her baby. she didn't want anything to happen to her Angel. She was ready to die for her Angel. She felt a sudden impulse to shout. To scream at the doctors to save her baby. But her throat refused to cooperate with her as no voice came out.

"save...the... baby !"

she managed to utter these words in a small whisper summoning all her strength. But no one heard her.

"Sa..ve ... myy..."

But the words died out in her throat as she finally surrendered to unconsciousness.

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Zoya was surrounded by nothing but an uneasy darkness. She tried to open her eyes. But her eyelids felt unusually heavy as though someone placed a huge weight on it. She tried again. But it was exhausting and pointless. She began to feel restless. She was tired of trying and she felt like giving up. But suddenly she felt something in her right hand. She felt her heart soar with that touch. She could recognize that touch anywhere. It was his touch! Her Asad's ! His thoughts filled her with a strange happiness and solace.

Asad !! Suddenly her mind was flooded with the horrible memories of her falling and the pain. That reminded her of her baby. Her baby !!!

Asad was sitting next to an unconscious Zoya lying on the hospital bed. He took her right hand in his. A ghost of a smile graced her lips. Zoya opened her eyes slowly.

"As...sad ! " she managed to whisper his name in a hoarse voice. Her voice was weak. It sounded strange to herself.

" Zoya !! "

"Zoya , you are awake !" she could sense alarm and joy in his voice.

"my...angel...??"

"MY BABY ??" she asked again summoning all her strength. Panic was evident in her voice.

He smiled at her and squeezed her hand assuring her.

"she's fine." He said darting his eyes towards the little cradle next to the hospital bed. Calmness spread over her features.

"c..can i... see her? Please ?"

she pleaded in her frail voice. She was struggling to get into a sitting position. Asad got up and helped her sit up. He went near the crib and gently took what appeared like a small bundle carefully into his arms. He was holding the bundle as though it was the most delicate and fragile thing in the whole world.

He placed the small bundle into the waiting arms of an eager Zoya. He didn't miss the look of pure delight in her eyes as she saw her baby's face for the first time. Tears of mere bliss welled up her eyes.

"sh..she..she's beautiful !" she said between her broken sobs.

"My..my ...dear...Zara !"

Zoya was looking at the tiny creature in her arms. She was smiling through her tears.

" I love you. I love you more than anything my little angel !"

She pecked the baby's forehead gently .she turned towards a smiling Asad and asked .

" you'll take care of her; right?"

He looked confused by her question.

" what are you saying Zoya. We both can take care of .." she cut him off before he could finish.

"promise me. Just promise!"

Asad smiled. "I promise."

She was feeling too tired with all the talking and sitting up. She looked exhausted. Asad sensing her weariness took the baby from her hands and placed the baby on the left side of Zoya. He helped Zoya to lay down. Zoya put her left hand protectively around the baby as Asad carefully climbed onto the bed taking care not to disturb the sleeping Zara. Zoya snuggled closer to him.

"I love you Asad." she said drowsily.

" I love you too Zoya ." Asad kissed her temple.


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Asad woke up after some time by the baby's cry. He didn't know when he fell asleep. Not wanting to wake Zoya he took the baby and cradled it to sleep. After placing the baby in the crib, he went to Zoya.

"Zoya !"

Asad called her gently tapping her cheeks.

" wake up sleepyhead."

"Zoya ! wake up sweety !"

He called out to her again. But she refused to open her eyes. A sudden terror gripped his heart.

"Doctor !! DOCTOR !!!!"

Asad screamed his lungs out.

Then for some time the room was abuzz with activities as doctors and nurses rushed in and out of that room. They tried several medical procedures on Zoya ; but nothing could wake her up from her sleep.

The doctors looked at each other in an understanding manner and nodded. One of them came near Asad ; placing a hand on his shoulder the doctor said .

"I'm sorry Mr. Khan! We tried ... . ... . "

Asad couldn't hear what the doctor was saying. Nothing was registering in his mind. He wasn't willing to believe the doctors. He went towards Zoya and began calling out to her. He tried coaxing her to wake up. But she refused to respond. Her angelic face looked dangerously calm and relaxed. She looked so serene and happy as though she was contented.

Hot streams of frustrated tears cascaded down his chiseled cheeks as he cradled Zoya in his arms. Asad sat there; limply on the hospital bed. And there in his arms lay a lifeless Zoya .

She was dead and he was not ready to let her go ...


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So that's it guys ! End of part 1 of my OS ! If you want I'll post part 2 also. Only if you want.
I know it's crap. It didn't come out the way I wanted to and I'm highly disappointed with this. It didn't come out the way I wanted to. Please do let me know if you liked it or not. I know you must probably want to kill me right now for making you read this stupid thing. Sorry for the torture. Hope you'll forgive me. And I'm terribly sorry if I made any blunders !

Love
-kiki :)

P.S : I'm terribly sorry if I offended anyone's feelings with my work.



scrool down for the last part !! 😳

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Hello!
My os is complete and I'm here with the second and last part !
😊

I am so glad with the response I got ! I honestly never expected more than 10 likes ! I'm really happy !😳

There are alot of awesome people who made me sooo happy with their comment !
those who commented on this OS ! thanks alot guys ! you guys made me soo happy !
thanks alot for encouraging and overwhelming me with your sweet words !
i love you all ! and this part is dedicated to you all who commented and liked the first part !



The light of my life.

Asad was sitting on the garden bench watching the golden sun sinking over the canopy of trees. It felt as if the darkness was eager to suck the life out of the dying day. He was engulfed by darkness as the evening sun completely disappeared into the horizon. The warmth of the sun was replaced by an eerie coldness. The commotion made by the birds retreating to their nests died down and was replaced by a forlorn silence. The whole atmosphere was filled with an uncanny melancholy. The death of the day gave birth to a starless night. A lonely night devoid of the beautiful and soothing moon. Everything was dark. He felt moribund. He wasn't afraid of the dark. But he hated it. It reminded him of his life.
His life before Zoya.
His life without her!

Zoya was the light of his life. She was his sun. She brightened his darkness. She brought colors to his grey and dull life. She taught him to smile, to laugh out loud and to love. She thought him to live. She made him feel alive.
Now without her he felt void. Empty and all alone!
He felt suffocated as old memories of her flooded his mind.
How much he cherished his memories of her. But now; that's all he had of her. Just memories.
He wanted to run.
To escape from this nothingness.

He wanted his Zoya back .
But he knew there was nothing he could do about it.
And what frustrated him more was that he knew he was helpless.

His thoughts were interrupted by a loud wail. He hated that sound. The source of the sound reminded him of her. It made him relive those heartbreaking moments of that horrible day at the hospital. The day he lost her.
His Zoya. His life.

These loud cries were common nowadays. So he ignored it like always. And as expected it subsided after a long time.

He got up from the garden bench and made way to his room. He was again encountered by the loud noise as he was passing by Dilshad's room. It was annoying the hell out of him. He wanted to make it stop. And the next thing he knew, he was in Dilshad's room. He saw a small crib there. He couldn't process what happened as his legs moved on it's own accord and he was standing before the crib. The source of the noise was inside the crib.

There, inside the crib was a little creature.
It's beautiful eyes were wet as hot tears streamed down those rosy little cheeks. But the moment it saw him it stopped crying and it's eyes went wide. A little smile graced it's tiny pouty lips. It's eyes which were brimming with tears were now filled with wonder and joy.

He was rooted to the ground when he saw it's eyes. He was stunned seeing it's eyes. Those eyes ! They were warm pools of honey brown which would mesmerize anyone. They were the eyes that had drawn him in. They were the very eyes that he fell in love with. They were the eyes that he worshipped. It was Zoya's eyes.
Zoya !

Reality hit him. It hit him hard as though hit by a lightning bolt. He realized that the owner of those mesmerizing eyes were not Zoya.
They belonged to their daughter Zara.
Her Zara!

He bend towards the crib and scooped the petite baby into his arms. Holding the baby securely in his left arm, he caressed her right cheek gently. When he was about to draw back his hand, the little beauty grabbed his thump with her beautiful chubby little hands. She flashed him one of her rare , stupefying toothless smile which caused the exotic dimples to dig deeper into her cheeks. He couldn't help but smile at her cute antics. Seeing him smile, the little devil broke into a fit of giggles. Her giggles felt so soothing and heartwarming to him. Tears streamed down his eyes as he planted a soft kiss on her forehead. He felt his heart soar with joy for the first time in six months after Zoya's death.

He looked at the angelic baby in his arms. How could he be so cruel? To think that this innocent creature was the reason for his lose. To hold her responsible of his wife's death .
How could he ignore his own baby for six months from it's birth when she needed him the most. How selfish he had been all this while. All he did was think about himself and his lose.
What about her and her lose?
If he lost his wife; she lost her mother.
He lost his love but she lost the love and care she deserved from her mother.
How could he be so foolish ?

How blind he had been! But was it his fault that he was too devastated after Zoya's demise. The irredeemable pain of her death was craving him from within. Zoya was the light of his life. And when that light was blown off, he was left standing in the darkness. The tantalizing warmth and comfort provided by her was replaced by a brutalizing agony.

But he was an idiot not to recognize that Zoya didn't leave him all alone. Even though she left, she left a part of her with him. She left her light for him. But Asad was too blinded by her glow that he couldn't see the tiny flicker of hope, that was Zara.

Holding the little angel in his hands; he knew it then. That his life wasn't meaningless. It wasn't void. But it had a new meaning.
A new purpose.

He was broken; but he had to stay strong for her.

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Tears of joy poured from another pair of eyes that were witnessing the heart touching scene before her. Dilshad sent a silent prayer to the heavens above. She was more than happy today. Her son was acknowledging his daughter for the first time in 6 months. It was she who took care of Zara while her son was mourning over his lose. He shut himself out from everything else. He was turning into a living dead. It killed that mother to see her son and granddaughter suffer like that.
But today; something changed. She could tell from the determined look on her son's face that he will make everything better. Their lives will be improved.

Life sure is hard; but after all it is worth living.

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Asad was passing by the garden when he heard soft sobs. A six year old Zara was there; sitting on the garden bench hugging her knees. Her little body was shaking as she was crying. He made his way towards the bench and sat beside her. His heart ached to see his child shedding tears. He gently stroked her head. Seeing her abbu, she got down from the bench and climbed onto his lap and crossed her arms around his neck. He wound his arms protectively around her petite body. Cupping her cheek and gently wiping her tears; he asked.

" Can abbu know why my princess is crying ?"

"Am I a bad girl abbu ?" she asked through her tears.

"Who told you that you are a bad girl ?"

"Am I that bad abbu? That my ammi left me the day I was born ?"
Big fat tears escaped her beautiful eyes. His heart cringed at her words and he felt tears welling up his eyes.

" No my baby. You are your ammi's girl. You can never be bad even if you try. And your ammi loves you a lot. I think she loves you more than me." saying this he kissed her forehead.

" I wish ammi was here with us." She said looking into his eyes.
He smiled.

" who told you she isn't here. Your ammi is with us everytime."

He pointed at her chest where her heart was. "She's in here"

"Always ?"
She looked at him with expecting eyes.

"Always."

He smiled at her as he saw her dimpled smile and tightened his arms around her.

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It was a nice Sunday morning for the Khan's. The Khan Villa was unusually quiet and Asad knew very well that it was the calm before the storm. Zara probably must be waiting patiently in the living room.

"AYAAAN CHAACCHHUUU !!!!!!!!! !!!"

His guess was proved right by her loud scream from the living room. In the living room, Asad was greeted by the sight of an elated Zara in Ayaan's arms. Zara was quite fond of Ayaan and vice versa.

"Abbu !! look what Ayaan chachu got for me."

Zara pointed towards Humeira who was holding a huge purple teddy.

"Hi Asad chachoo. Hi dumbo"
An 8 year old Ishaan greeted Asad and Zara respectively as he entered the living room. He ignored Zara's irritated glares and turned to Humeira.

"Ammi, why did you buy the teddy for the Dumbo. You should have bought the new Transformers Action figure for me."

" Ohh ! Shut up you pea-brain. You are just jealous because everyone loves me more." An angry Zara retorted.

"Jealous and me ! No way ! After all it's you girls' job to be jealous and dumb."

By this time Zara got down from Ayaan's arms and was pacing towards Ishaan.

"Humeira Phoophi, your son's gonna be dead today"

"Catch me if you can dumbo!"
Ishaan began to run and after him rushed an angry Zara. Everyone couldn't help but laugh at the two adorable kids. Thus started their typical Sunday morning.

"Ahhh !!! GET OFF ME YOU CRAZY GIRL !!!"

Everyone's attention turned toward's Ishaan's scream. They saw a helpless Ishaan lying on the ground and a wild Zara was sitting on him pulling his hair. For the next few minutes Asad and Ayaan struggled to separate an impossible Zara from Ishaan.

They were all sitting around the dinning table for breakfast when Ishaan came near Zara and spoke.

"I'm sorry dumbo!"

"I'm sorry too pea-brain."

"Friends?" Zara extended her hand.

"Best friends." Ishaan caught her hand and pulled her in for a hug.

"You know what ! If you wasn't my best friend I would have broken your face today." Zara warned him while he got in his seat.

"Ohh come on !! you have already broken my hand once."

"B..But it was an accident .. and .."


Asad looked at his lovely family. Dilshad was talking to Humeira about some household stuff and little Ishaan looked so pleased at himself for irritating Zara. And Ayaan was holding back a furious Zara who was ready to pounce on Ishaan any moment now.

He just smiled seeing his devilish daughter's antics. With Zara around he never felt lonely. There was an emptiness in him that was never filled. But when he had Zara he never felt the need to fill it again.
This was Asad Ahmed khan's life.
His life with his daughter Zara.
Zara ! The light of his life !

-THE END-

THANK YOU !
thanks alot for reading guys .


love
-kiki

Edited by -waitingforyou- - 6 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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U made me cry... 😭
It was really amazing !! 👏
Hats off to u buddy for this beautiful piece of work ! 👏 😉
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Res! Hmph, I didn't get the 1st comment. :(
Unres

Omg kiki! U write fab! It was such an emotional story, my eyes teared towards the end. I luvd the start too, Zoya wanting to name her baby Zara, that was a realy sweet part, but u made me so sad yaar! I felt so bad for Asad, its always his happiness that's snatched away. The part b4 Zoya dies, where Zoya asked asad to promise her that he'll take care of their baby, that was such a heart warming scene. My jaws were at my knees when I read the part where Zoya leaves, my eyes were all wet. Such a heart wrenching story yet so beautiful. Ur amazing at describing the characters emotions, u really can make a writer feel what the character is feeling. Hats off dude! Ur just fab! 👏
Edited by ..Ramya.. - 11 years ago
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Emotional os..
I was crying after reading the os. :((((((
Bt its really nice
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Originally posted by: ..Ramya..

Res! Hmph, I didn't get the 1st comment. :(



ohh !! come on ! now that's your fault !
i pm ed you first thing after posting this !
atleast you got 2nd !
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Posted: 11 years ago
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it was so very beautiful.. so very that i cried :'(

write more please or else i will cry again! :( :'( 😆
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Originally posted by: SBanoMalik

U made me cry... 😭
It was really amazing !! 👏
Hats off to u buddy for this beautiful piece of work ! 👏 😉



thank you so much for reading :)😊
but i'm surprised you found this beautiful !😛
i'm sorry ! i made you cry !😕
but thanks dear😳
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Originally posted by: aYASHIKA

Emotional os..
I was crying after reading the os. :((((((
Bt its really nice



thanks dear :)😊
i'm glad you found it nice :)
i'm sorry i made you cry !
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Originally posted by: -waitingforyou-



thank you so much for reading :)😊
but i'm surprised you found this beautiful !😛
i'm sorry ! i made you cry !😕
but thanks dear😳


Most welcome !! 🤗
It indeed was beautiful the way u portrayed their emotions 😳
The fact that u made me cry is a compliment ! 😆

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