J.E.A.L.O.U.S. Series of 7 OS (LAST part updated) - Page 4

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Posted: 11 years ago
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O yup,,silly me..I forgot to write my name at end...Its Himani...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hello to all!!!

I just wish to tell i send around 15 PM's but receive only 3-4 comments, which is disheartening, thus i would now be sending PMs to all those who are regular.
Its not showing attitude, but sending PMs is not easy, and takes time and since i cannot just leave this series hanging, i have to balance my studies and writing and i am really sorry if anybody is offended about my decision I didn't mean to do so.

Anyway before starting the OS from letter L
I would just like to thank all those who liked the Abnegation from Sayunkta's POV part and
a special thanks to those who even commented

Its this support which keeps the writer going, thank you and without any further delay
I present you the next installment of the J.E.A.L.O.U.S

(It's a little long by the way and
Bold + Italics = Sayunkta's POV
Italics = Randhi's POV)

LAVENDER

What were you doing with him ?? he asked roughly

What do you even mean by that statement ?? she stated

Don't try and divert this and for the last time I am asking you,
WHAT WERE YOU DOING WITH HIM ?? he asked in rage.

And why do of all people I owe you an explanation??

You bloody do, so just answer dammit?? he knew, knew his rage was getting the worst out of him but when the matters involved her, it was just uncontrollable

Its none of your business, what i do, where i go and with whom it is ??

Yes it is and now we can play this game going back and forth or you could just answer me !! he stated coming closer

Fine, I was with Parth, he asked me to accompany to work on some ideas for DREAM TEAM .

Ya right!!! he exclaimed

What, really!! , she exclaimed

Of course, two full days, and both of you are so engrossed in the IDEA that none of the other members of the DREAM TEAM needs to be informed about it,
Randhir spoke sarcastically !
May I request you to tell me what ideas you both were working on Ms Agarwal ??

Ask Parth, it was his sole decision not mine, and what are you even trying to imply ?? Sayunkta asked

Listen, Firstly when i ask you, you answer me and not your Parth,
and secondly yes I am implying what you're thinking !!

She staggered back this, it was nothing but a blow to her. Yes she knew what he was stating but to listen it verbally created a effect she never thought it would. Just how could he ????

Great, here we have the water works again, Randhir spoke menacingly.

No Randhir i'll not cry, at least not because YOU of all people didn't have even an ounce of trust on me and she left.

Randhir you were, you are and you'll always remain a MCP, thought Sayunkta as she moved towards the room.

The very next day Randhir saw Sayunkta clad in black and purple outfit instead of yellow, blue or pink kurti's of her, with her dull face and her down demeanor
Even the dark grey sky admitted her choice today.
The whole day she avoided him like plague and only attended the Vardhaan Sir's lecture.

Dammit Randhir thought, all of this was his mistake .

Yes Randhir had came to know what both Sayunkta and Parth were DOING in his words and WORKING in sayunkta's words
to be more precise,
and Randhir would never ever admit but he was surprised,
surprised how Sayunkta has pushed herself up and
yes he was impressed, again not that he would ever admit.

But now the guilt of his words spoken was eating him inside.

Finally after all day long he finally decided to apologize,
the one thing he had never done in his life him, he thought
as he searched her and when he finally saw her his apology speech was
forgotten and the guilt increased a lot more.

He saw her late at night standing in that lusterless dull outfit with her hair open in the gardens of FITE filled with Lavenders,
ironically representing distrust and suspicion, thought Randhir with a sad smile, and probably it was too late to apologize now.

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A/N - A sad one I know,but I couldn't help myself but to write about Randhir regretting doubting Sayunkta, after that pyaar bhari baatein episode and also i have not read about something related to the incident yet.
Hope you find it worth reading, and also my POV towards the situation.

The flower LAVENDER depicts distrust and unhappiness, hope you find its usage correct

Thank you for Reading

Cheerios

P.S - positive criticism is welcome, and so are LIKES AND COMMENTS..(please) 😃😃

Edited by sukriti11196 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#33
Hey Sukirti,,L-Lavender..
you ,my sweets ,,have brilliantly penned out this word in this Sandhir epic..Regret-a humane trait which all of us go through at some point but only very few of us actually have it in us to rectify..
An exquisite and ravishing description..
An idea put to life...
Words,,indeed,,they have that power to unleash those emotions which are pretty invisible to us ...You have beautifully shown those emotions of suspicion,,jealousy,,angst,,regret,,...
Truly amazing...
Himani
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Posted: 11 years ago
#34
WOW!!!!!!! Sukrithi!!!!!!!!!
I loved the Update!!!!!!!
Again u surprised me...LAVENDER!!!!!!!
Waiting for ur next update!!!!!!!!
Keep Writing
I was late because I had entrance exam tody!!!!!
With Love Rekha!
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Posted: 11 years ago
#35
l-lavender

beautiful DESCRIPTION!
wow sweety u rocked and surprised me as usual !
u have brilliantly penned down the story and it's very good
to read ur work!
and ur last part was to lovely and thanks for making on sanyus p.o.v.
just loved each and every little thing in ur story!
keep on writing dear u r rally talented!
and something is different in ur story !
it is not usual type and i'm eagerly waiting for ur future works!

p.s a bouquet of roses with sorry for not regularly commenting!
a box of chocolates for ur sweet work!
a room of snacks all u wish for ur pm!

always with love
#niru

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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice one.. Like it.. Thanks for pm..
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Posted: 11 years ago
#37
ITS AWESOME PLZ PM ME<<<<<
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Posted: 11 years ago
#38
RES!
WILL UNRES 2MORROW WITH DESCRIPTION OF EACH PART
OHK?!
---------edited---------
Sukriti!!! (right na)😊
First of all this J.E.A.L.O.U.S. concept is really awesome!!!👏

Part 1 JADE

First I thought it was about Sandhir but it was Vardhan and Neharika
But never my mind
The way u have described Neharika's eyes is so damn PERFECT!!!😊
It was short but a sweet one👏

Part 2 ENGINEERING
The way u have described Randhi's POV is very good
I really loved these lines

And slowly and steadily these small arguments, these ego clashes, this bantering, the competitions, these challenges have become a part of my life,
and day without all this is like
Food without spice,
Me without my punching bag and
she without her god-knows-what-filled Handbag

I am really angry on myself because I didn't read this J.E.A.L.O.U.S. OS before😡
And yes this engineering is really IMP in Sandhir's life😊
I completely agree with you on this point😊

Part 3 ABNEGATION (Randhir's POV)

OMG!!!
This is really a unique OS!!!
The question-answering thing between Randhir and his mind was just AWESOME!!!👏👏
This part is very fav. part of mine
I just loved each and every line of it

Part 4 ABNEGATION (Sanyukta's POV)

The way u have defined Sandhir's POV is so FANTASTIC!!!👏👏
Nobody has described it in this manner
And this unique style of urs is VERRRY GOOD!!!👏👏
The best lines from this part were
His presence if not physically but verbally is important to her...
Their fights are like oil to machine..,
Their bickering is part of her daily routine now...,

Part 5 LAVENDER

Now I am a BIG FAN of urs😊
The way u have used this L for Lavender is sooo UNIQUE and perfect
Even I agree with this POV
Randhir should not have doubted Sanyuka!


PS:Extremely sorry to reply this late
I was out of town
So couldn't reply
Edited by Prachijainn - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#39

Originally posted by: anki08

Hey Sukirti,,L-Lavender..

you ,my sweets ,,have brilliantly penned out this word in this Sandhir epic..Regret-a humane trait which all of us go through at some point but only very few of us actually have it in us to rectify..
An exquisite and ravishing description..
An idea put to life...
Words,,indeed,,they have that power to unleash those emotions which are pretty invisible to us ...You have beautifully shown those emotions of suspicion,,jealousy,,angst,,regret,,...
Truly amazing...
Himani

Thank you Himani..
i have now started looking forward to your comments...
thank you for taking out time..
and writing such a lovely description...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Rekha85

WOW!!!!!!! Sukrithi!!!!!!!!!

I loved the Update!!!!!!!
Again u surprised me...LAVENDER!!!!!!!
Waiting for ur next update!!!!!!!!
Keep Writing
I was late because I had entrance exam tody!!!!!
With Love Rekha!


No worries on commenting late...
you comment that itself means a lot...
and as i have said before...
I love giving surprises...

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