AkDhaOS: Baarish *complete*

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Posted: 11 years ago
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She was walking on the empty streets with the Kanha ji's idol on her hand.Accompanying her was her best friend,Moti.Tears trickled down from her doe-shaped eyes,thinking about the punishment she was awarded by her husband,who suspected his wife having an extra-marrital affair with an outsider. The pain of being rendered as a charecterless woman by her own husband was killing her from inside.She remembered their last meeting few hours back.. She remebered how Jalal said that he frees her from all the ties and severs all relations from her... Whole DEK was in shock when Jodha proceeded towards Jalal and brought him to the middle and announced,

''Main,Rani Jodha Bai,aaj se,balki abhi se Shehnshah-e-Hind,Jalaluddin Mohammad ko iss benaam rishte se azaad karti hu... Maine jo bhul ki hai woh maafi ke layak nahi hai... Isiliye,aaj main apne aur Shehnshah ke rishte ko iss havankund ke agni se iss rishte ka chita jalati hu aur humesha keliye iss rishte ko khatam karti hu...''

Jalal was shocked for a moment.Jodha wiped her tears and took his hand and tore the mangalsutra infront of everyone present in the DEK..After that,she took his hand and forcefully made him wipe the sindoor oof from her hair parting.Hamida Bano,Salima Begum were stunned and shocked by this act of Jodha.They knew what made Jodha do all this...All they could do is to pray to Allah to do some miracle.

''Aapki khwaish puri kardi maine,Shehnshah... Aapne mujhe puri tarha se azad nahi kiya thha... Main janchuki hu ki mere moujudgi aapko humesha iss dhokhey ki yaad dilati rahegi ki maine aapko dhokha diya hai,isiliye,maine hi iss rishte ki chitey ko agni de di... Mujhe maaf kardijiyega...'' With that,she left the DEK with Moti...

She came out of her thoughts,when she felt drops of water on her body.She looked upwards and saw that it was going to rain.They reached a small village.Moti and Jodha went inside the village.They roamed around to find a place to live,when suddenly,a old woman appeared infront of Jodha..Jodha half-heartedly greeted her and asked,

''Maa ji,mharey ko aur mhari sakhi ko aapke ghar ma koi sthaan milego? Baarish hone wali hai,isiliye...''

The old woman smiled and replied, ''Koi baat na,chhori... Waise,main atthe akeli rehti hu... Manne lage hai ki manne thare ko pehle kahin dekho hai... Mhare ko aisa kyun laage hai ki tu Shehnshah ki bindni se?''

Before Moti could answer,Jodha replied, ''Na na,Kakisaa... Aapne shayad bhul suna hoga... Main toh atthey kaam karti hu... Kakisaa,mharey ko aur mhari sakhi aapke ghar mein thori jagah milego koni?''

''Koi baat na,chori.. Chal andar aaja.. Baarish hovego... Thand lag javego thare ne aur thari sakhi ne...''

''Dhanyavad,Kakisaa...''

The old woman let Moti and Jodha inside the small house made of mud and brick.Moti and Jodha arranged their belongings and took rest... Jodha was feeling really very uneasy and heartbroken... She came outside and stood on the edge of the ''aangan'' and watched while it started to rain. She wanted to go outside and get wet in the rain,so that,it can soothe away her pain.

''Dil mera hai nasamajh kitna,
Besabr yeh bewakoof bara,
Chahta hai kitna tujhe,
Khud magar nahi jaan saka,
Iss dard-e-dil ki sifaarish,
Ab karde koi yahaan,
Ki,
Mil jaaye isse woh baarish,
Jo bhiga de puri tarha...''


Edited by zebbie0504 - 11 years ago

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Very nice, even though the ending is sad, but well written!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Nicely written but please make the end happy!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice update and loved ur marwari dialogues but plzz continue and show Akdha back together! pm me when u do
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Very nicely written. It was all curiosity and pain till the end but why did you stop it there? Continue and complete it pls :) Give it a happy ending.
You write really good!

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