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Posted: 12 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: determination





Awesome new characters.
Already love Udhishtir...ahem you know who.
Also thanks for adding Narendra Jha. Missed him after HNLHS.
I personally hope Onir turns out to be Jeet. "Prince charming" Onir a real prince. What fun. That would be a "royal" treat.
Am I dreaming. If yes, God/Mom please don't wake me up.

Glad that you liked it😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
#82

Originally posted by: determination






Hope Ovi bags a nice guy like Rohit. Especially since Arjun is the antagonist. Won't want Ovi to end up alone. Oh well! she can't as she's one of the parallel leads.
Besides, I think Shruti would look amazing with Piyush. They'll make a dazzling on-screen couple.
Piyush is an extremely handsome gentleman and I personally find Shruti very easy on the eyes.

Agree with you!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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grt !!!!!!!!!!!!! ur story is going at a interesting pace keeo rocking
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Posted: 12 years ago
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again onir purvi convo nice...i think u show in ur ff onir related to royal family ri8...nice idea...zara... :)
well m most interested in punir story dats y always commenting on punir parts bt it means not ur other charecter story is bad its also good...
carry on dear zara...👏👏👏👏👏
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Posted: 12 years ago
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@Tarza: Nyc story!!!!😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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The accent of the royal families(Raghuvanshis' and Singhanias') will be different. Like-

Tum = Aap

Mai = Hum

Dad = Babasa

Mom = Maasa

Bhai/Bhaiya = Bhaisa

etc...


Chapter 6


Next day

9:26am

Dehradun
Royal Palace of Raghuvanshis'
Dining Table
Rudra, Sneha, Udhishtir and Anupriya are having breakfast.
Udhishtir: Babasa, kal hum Kolkata jayenge.
Rudra: Hmmm.
Anupriya: Babasa, humari company Kirloskar Industries k saath jo deal karna chahti thi usske liye humne Mr. Deshmukh se baat kia hai. Vo isi hafte deal sign karna chahte hai.
Rudra: Good. Hum PA se baat karke ek date fix karvadenge.
Anupriya: Maasa, babasa hum kuch dino k liye Amritghar jana chahte hai. Babasa(Indravardhan) Pune gaye hai to maasa(Anusha) mehel mei akeli hongi to kya mai Amritghar ja sakti hu.
Sneha: Haan haan. Zarur jao.
Anupriya: Thank you.

10:57am
Mumbai
Park
Onir is walking with Pari in his arms in the park. He is playing with Pari. Arjun is passing from the road, he stops his car seeing Onir with Pari. Pari is happily playing with Onir. Arjun didn't like this.
Arjun: (in his mind) Meri beti k saath Onir hans khel raha hai. Onir k saath meri beti hai, aur woh bhi hai jo mujhse pyaar karti hai(Purvi). Aur mere saath...mere saath koi bhi nehi! Na Ovi mere saath hai na Purvi! Dono aapni aapni zindagi mei khush hai...par mai... Sab khush hai par mai nehi... Ye mere saath nainsafi hai!
Arjun leaves from that place.

2:06pm
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Soham's cabin
Soham is talking with Savita over phone.
Savita: Tujhe malum hai na aaj DK, Arjun, Sulochana tai aur baki sab ane wale hai. Ghar jaldi ana!
Soham: Aaji, aaji, aaji mujhe pata hai. Mai ek ghante mei ghar k liye rawana hojaunga.
Savita: Achcha hai.
Soham: Aaji, mera ek dost abhi abhi yaha shift hua hai. Mai use invite karu?
Savita Haan haan. Zarur kar. Iss bahane hum bhi usse mil lenge. Kar kar invite kar.
Soham: Thanks aaji.
Savita: Iss mei thanks ki kya baat hai? Phir bhi jab tune bol dia hai to welcome.
Soham: Thik hai mai rakhta hu.
Soham cuts the call. He then calls Rohit and invites him. Rohit accepts Soham's invitation.

3:59pm
Deshmukh House
Savita and Ovi are talking about something, sitting in the sofa. Shonali is passing by the kitchen. Soham is passing from the other side of the kitchen. Shonali didn't see that oil is in the floor. She slips but Soham saves her, she falls in his arms.
Soham: Aram se! Dekhk chalo.
Shonali: (in her mind)Oh God! Not again!
Shonalo stands properly.
Shonali: Thanks Soham.
Soham: You're welcome.
All this is shown by Savita and Ovi. Ovi comes to Shonali.
Ovi: Shona, chal mere saath.
Ovi holds Shonali's hand and takes her to her room.

Ovi's room
Shonali and Ovi sits on the bed. Ovi starts laughing.
Shonali: You're laughing?!
Ovi: (controlling her laugh)Aur kya karu? Tumhare saath jo bhi ho raha hai vo dekh kar meri hansi ruk hi nehi rai thi...
Shonali: Grrrggghhh! I just don't understand why is all thia happening with me!!! Pata nehi ab aur kaun kaun baki hai...
Ovi: Third time na?
Shonali: Ya! Third time with third boy! Pehle Sachin, then vo larka pata nehi usska nam kya hai...
Ovi: Rohit Khurrana.
Shonali: Huh?
Ovi: Usska nam Rohit Khurrana hai.
Shonali: How do you know him?
Ovi: Actually...(Ovi narrates Shonali the whole story)
Shonali: Oh! Par mujhe ye samajh mei nehi araha ki ye sab mere saath kyun horaha hai!!!(massaging her forehead)Oh God! Ye sab soch soch k mere sar phanta ja raha hai!
Ovi: Hey then don't think about all this. Leave the topic.
Ovi turns the TV on. The news about "the missing Yuvaraj and Yuvrani" is being shown on the TV.
Reporter on TV: Dehradun k Maharaja aur Amritghar k Maharaja nikal chuke hai aapne Yuvraj aur Yuvrani ko dhundne! Akhir kaun honge Dehradun k Yuvraj Jeet Raj Raghuvanshi aur Yuvrani Ananya Raj Raghuvanshi aur Amritghar k Yuvraj Prithvi Singhania?
Seeing this news... both get excited.
Shonali: Ovi kitna achcha hota na agar hum Yuvrani hote?
Ovi: Tune sach kaha! Hum un mehlo k rani hote... Kitna maza ata!
Shonali: Kash ye sab sach hota...
Ovi: Hmmm. Chal shopping chalte hai.
Shonali: Par aaj to guests ane wale hai na?
Ovi: Uss mei abhi bhi time hai. Chal chalte hai.
Shonali: Okay! Let's go!
Both jumps off the bed, turns off the TV and goes for shopping.

Onir-Purvi's room
Pari is in Onir's arm, playing with him. Purvi is arranging the closet. Pari pees on Onir.
Onir: Pari...ye tumne kya kia?
Purvi starts laughing. She comes to Pari.
Purvi: Onir dekhiye Pari kaise hans rahi hai...
Onir: Meri hansi gayab hogaya!
Purvi: (laughing)Pari ne bohot achcha kia.
Onir: Mishti tum bohot buri ho!
Purvi: Maine aisa kya kia?
Onir; Yaha mera kurta kharab hogaya aur tum Pari k saath khel rahi ho!
Purvi: (laughing)To mai aur kya karu?
Onir: Mujhe ek aur kurta lake do.
Purvi: Aap khud nehi le sakte?
Onir: Nehi. Pari mere pas hai, mai kaise kurta lao.
Purvi opens the closet and gives Onir another kurta and takes Pari in her arms.
Onir: Mishti please hansna band karo.
Purvi: (stopping her laugh)Thik hai. Ab aap jaiye.
Onir: Thanks!
Onir goes to washroom.


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Posted: 12 years ago
#87

Originally posted by: Tarza

The accent of the royal families(Raghuvanshis' and Singhanias') will be different. Like-

Tum = Aap

Mai = Hum

Dad = Babasa

Mom = Maasa

Bhai/Bhaiya = Bhaisa

etc...


Chapter 6


Next day

9:26am

Dehradun
Royal Palace of Raghuvanshis'
Dining Table
Rudra, Sneha, Udhishtir and Anupriya are having breakfast.
Udhishtir: Babasa, kal hum Kolkata jayenge.
Rudra: Hmmm.
Anupriya: Babasa, humari company Kirloskar Industries k saath jo deal karna chahti thi usske liye humne Mr. Deshmukh se baat kia hai. Vo isi hafte deal sign karna chahte hai.
Rudra: Good. Hum PA se baat karke ek date fix karvadenge.
Anupriya: Maasa, babasa hum kuch dino k liye Amritghar jana chahte hai. Babasa(Indravardhan) Pune gaye hai to maasa(Anusha) mehel mei akeli hongi to kya mai Amritghar ja sakti hu.
Sneha: Haan haan. Zarur jao.
Anupriya: Thank you.

10:57am
Mumbai
Park
Onir is walking with Pari in his arms in the park. He is playing with Pari. Arjun is passing from the road, he stops his car seeing Onir with Pari. Pari is happily playing with Onir. Arjun didn't like this.
Arjun: (in his mind) Meri beti k saath Onir hans khel raha hai. Onir k saath meri beti hai, aur woh bhi hai jo mujhse pyaar karti hai(Purvi). Aur mere saath...mere saath koi bhi nehi! Na Ovi mere saath hai na Purvi! Dono aapni aapni zindagi mei khush hai...par mai... Sab khush hai par mai nehi... Ye mere saath nainsafi hai!
Arjun leaves from that place.

2:06pm
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Soham's cabin
Soham is talking with Savita over phone.
Savita: Tujhe malum hai na aaj DK, Arjun, Sulochana tai aur baki sab ane wale hai. Ghar jaldi ana!
Soham: Aaji, aaji, aaji mujhe pata hai. Mai ek ghante mei ghar k liye rawana hojaunga.
Savita: Achcha hai.
Soham: Aaji, mera ek dost abhi abhi yaha shift hua hai. Mai use invite karu?
Savita Haan haan. Zarur kar. Iss bahane hum bhi usse mil lenge. Kar kar invite kar.
Soham: Thanks aaji.
Savita: Iss mei thanks ki kya baat hai? Phir bhi jab tune bol dia hai to welcome.
Soham: Thik hai mai rakhta hu.
Soham cuts the call. He then calls Rohit and invites him. Rohit accepts Soham's invitation.

3:59pm
Deshmukh House
Savita and Ovi are talking about something, sitting in the sofa. Shonali is passing by the kitchen. Soham is passing from the other side of the kitchen. Shonali didn't see that oil is in the floor. She slips but Soham saves her, she falls in his arms.
Soham: Aram se! Dekhk chalo.
Shonali: (in her mind)Oh God! Not again!
Shonalo stands properly.
Shonali: Thanks Soham.
Soham: You're welcome.
All this is shown by Savita and Ovi. Ovi comes to Shonali.
Ovi: Shona, chal mere saath.
Ovi holds Shonali's hand and takes her to her room.

Ovi's room
Shonali and Ovi sits on the bed. Ovi starts laughing.
Shonali: You're laughing?!
Ovi: (controlling her laugh)Aur kya karu? Tumhare saath jo bhi ho raha hai vo dekh kar meri hansi ruk hi nehi rai thi...
Shonali: Grrrggghhh! I just don't understand why is all thia happening with me!!! Pata nehi ab aur kaun kaun baki hai...
Ovi: Third time na?
Shonali: Ya! Third time with third boy! Pehle Sachin, then vo larka pata nehi usska nam kya hai...
Ovi: Rohit Khurrana.
Shonali: Huh?
Ovi: Usska nam Rohit Khurrana hai.
Shonali: How do you know him?
Ovi: Actually...(Ovi narrates Shonali the whole story)
Shonali: Oh! Par mujhe ye samajh mei nehi araha ki ye sab mere saath kyun horaha hai!!!(massaging her forehead)Oh God! Ye sab soch soch k mere sar phanta ja raha hai!
Ovi: Hey then don't think about all this. Leave the topic.
Ovi turns the TV on. The news about "the missing Yuvaraj and Yuvrani" is being shown on the TV.
Reporter on TV: Dehradun k Maharaja aur Amritghar k Maharaja nikal chuke hai aapne Yuvraj aur Yuvrani ko dhundne! Akhir kaun honge Dehradun k Yuvraj Jeet Raj Raghuvanshi aur Yuvrani Ananya Raj Raghuvanshi aur Amritghar k Yuvraj Prithvi Singhania?
Seeing this news... both get excited.
Shonali: Ovi kitna achcha hota na agar hum Yuvrani hote?
Ovi: Tune sach kaha! Hum un mehlo k rani hote... Kitna maza ata!
Shonali: Kash ye sab sach hota...
Ovi: Hmmm. Chal shopping chalte hai.
Shonali: Par aaj to guests ane wale hai na?
Ovi: Uss mei abhi bhi time hai. Chal chalte hai.
Shonali: Okay! Let's go!
Both jumps off the bed, turns off the TV and goes for shopping.

Onir-Purvi's room
Pari is in Onir's arm, playing with him. Purvi is arranging the closet. Pari pees on Onir.
Onir: Pari...ye tumne kya kia?
Purvi starts laughing. She comes to Pari.
Purvi: Onir dekhiye Pari kaise hans rahi hai...
Onir: Meri hansi gayab hogaya!
Purvi: (laughing)Pari ne bohot achcha kia.
Onir: Mishti tum bohot buri ho!
Purvi: Maine aisa kya kia?
Onir; Yaha mera kurta kharab hogaya aur tum Pari k saath khel rahi ho!
Purvi: (laughing)To mai aur kya karu?
Onir: Mujhe ek aur kurta lake do.
Purvi: Aap khud nehi le sakte?
Onir: Nehi. Pari mere pas hai, mai kaise kurta lao.
Purvi opens the closet and gives Onir another kurta and takes Pari in her arms.
Onir: Mishti please hansna band karo.
Purvi: (stopping her laugh)Thik hai. Ab aap jaiye.
Onir: Thanks!
Onir goes to washroom.


again good work 👏👏👏
i like de most u very well knw na its onir purvi pari----------punir parts...😃😃😃
i insist u plz don show arjun is negative...plz show him he is also happy with her wife ovi n enjoy his marraige also...😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
#88
Oh sweety, I am very lazy when it comes to fan fiction , I never really check them out. But yours is VERY nice. Your effort is evident! <3
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Posted: 12 years ago
#89
nice update and thanks for the pm
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Posted: 12 years ago
#90
nice update
n thanks for the pm

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