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Ashima

@Ashima_Mishal

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Posted: 14 years ago

#11

Hi armanfan 1 thanks a tonn for such a warm welcome dear glad u lyk archana's charecterisation ..next part asap hope u keep reading it :)

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SunoNa123

@SunoNa123

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Posted: 14 years ago

#12

Hi welcome to the forum.

Nice beginning, Archana in ur FF sounds strong, maintain her character the same way.

i have always wanted Archana's character to be shown strong and independent.

liked the bonding between archu and sachin.Do come up with the next update soon.

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zohakhan7

@zohakhan7

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Posted: 14 years ago

#13

hi welcome to the forum and i really liked ur concept.plzz continue soon 😊

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Ashima

@Ashima_Mishal

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Posted: 14 years ago

#14

Hi ankifan so glad that u lyk archana's charecterisation..i hope the track lives upto ur expectation next part asap :D

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Ashima

@Ashima_Mishal

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Posted: 14 years ago

#15

Hi zohakhan..glad u lykd this part dear next one asap hope u keep enjoying :)

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Ashima

@Ashima_Mishal

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Posted: 14 years ago

#16

Its evening...archana is busy wrapping up all work in her office where she worked as a secretary...😊

after she is done for the day she leaves for home and sets out to reach the station..there she gets into the train and taking a window seat she sits looking out at the setting sun...

tired archana closes her eyes and recalls how she met manav in the local train for the first and how this place was a beautiful and vital part of their life...losing manav was hard for archana...and living with his memories all around..was harder...and forgetting her pain and always keep manav's family happy was hardest for her!...😭

The train jerks and archana opens her eyes taken aback...looking around she finds the train full of people..in the noises..the laughter..the sounds ..the voices of the crowd archana just stares into emptiness..her mind had stopped wishing for things long back ago and her heart had stopped dreaming too..now there was just an emptiness that engulfed her snul cutting her off from the world around...😭

THE STATION comes and archana gets down and walks upto the chawl...cool breeze blows across her face...and as she strolls away slowly...and all alone...it was this walk everyday that was toughest for archana as it was in these lonely moments that archana missed manav the most...she recalls all the beautiful moments with manav as the song plays in the background--

~tum bin jiya jaye kaise...kaise jiya jaye tum bin..sadiyo se lambi hai raatein...sadiyo se lambey hue din..aa jao laut kar tum..yeh dil keh raha hai..~ 😭

Reaching the chawl..archana quickly wipes away her tears and walks into the house...SAVITA WAS BUSY playing with sachin and seeing archu come the little one rushes upto her...

All smiles archana takes sachin in her arms and lyk always sachu kisses on archana's cheeks and says-aayi mainey aapko bahot miss kiya...😛

archu carries him to the kitchen after keeping her bag and as she makes tea and dinner for all ..sachin sits on the raised platform in the kitchen and keeps on chatting with savita and archana as the two make food...at dinner they all talk general stuff..savita shares gossips about her neighbours..baba discusses politics with archana and sachin talks about his friends...😃

Its late in the night...everyone is fast asleep..archana sits with sachin's head in her lap and seeing him fall asleep too she kisses his forehead and embracing him lovingly she makes him lie down on the bed and gets up slowly making sure she doesnt wake him up..

closing down the lights she walks outside and sits against the pillar at the stairs and takes out a diary she had brought while coming out...keeping it in her lap she stares at the moonlit night and then moves her hand around the gold chain manav had given her and opening the locket she gazes at her and manav's pic at one ride and sachin's pic which she had put at the nther side...😳

a smile crosses her beautiful but sad face .tears well up in her eyer and as she looks up at the moon the lines frm tum bin's title track plays in background--~kya kya na socha tha mainney kya kya na sapne sajaye..kya kya na chaha tha dil ne..kya kya na arman jagaye~😭

Precap...Archana and manav stand in the rain...and as they get drenched...Manav steps forward.embraces archana and slowly kisses her on her forehead...😳

Edited by Ashima_Mishal - 14 years ago

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zohakhan7

@zohakhan7

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Posted: 14 years ago

#17

wow what an update.too good,keep it up.just luved it and exciting promo.do continue soon cant wait for another update 👏 👍🏼 ❤️

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Nikita Lakhe

@nikitagmc

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Posted: 14 years ago

#18

Very beautifully written part. I liked the whole part in the train very much cos you wrote it in detail, giving stress to what exactly Archana felt and what was going on in her mind. I could visualize it properly.

Archana=Secretary??? Oh well, if Archana can be a Supervisor, then she can be a Secretary as well- I give you the literary license! :-)

The last part discussing the Deshmukh family life was very sweet. I especially liked that one where you wrote Sachin sat with them on the raised platform and talked to Savita Archana in the kitchen-- its something I did too when I was little. :-)

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shootingstar27

@shootingstar27

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#19

Very beautifully written.Enjoyed reading it very much 😛

The part on train was lovely,I can picture Archana going through the emotions 👍🏼 Also loved your description of Sachin and situations in D household,sounds very homey 😛 I love your Archana,looking forward for the next part,hope she remains strong 😛