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Ashima

@Ashima_Mishal

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Posted: 14 years ago

#21

Hi niki interesting profile pic thanks dear that u gave such a detailed comment..lol great that u accept archu being a secretary lol...and wow so happy that u could imagine things i tried to pendown :D next part asap hope it lives upto ur expectations :)

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Ashima

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Posted: 14 years ago

#22

Hi shootingstar thanks for such a detailed comment ...so glad that u could feel things i tried to put into words...next part asap hope u keep reading it dear :)

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LovePRSoham

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Posted: 14 years ago

#23

Thanks for the update.. Again a beautiful and well written part... Train Part was good and could connect to Archu here...Sachu and Archu in the kitchen part was cute... Archu is leaving for Manav's family has been very well described...

And And I want to thank you for using this beautiful song.. One of my favourites... Tum Bin kya hain Jeena... Aww I just love this song and very well suited Archu... 😳

I loved this part and eagerly waiting for the next part 👍🏼

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vidya_955

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Posted: 14 years ago

#24

Luvv your story! Can't wait for the next part! 😊

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SunoNa123

@SunoNa123

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Posted: 14 years ago

#25

Hea, Nicely written again👍🏼

I loved the train part, u have put in archana's feelings, whats going on in her mnd and the pain of missing manav so well here.

Archu secretary, she is working😃.. Awww love u for this🤗.

Finally atleast here i can think archu is independent and is strong rather than always crying😭.

Damodar discussed bout politics🤣,well i thought other than drinking and irratating Savita he doesnt know anything else.

The kitchen scene is so good. Sachu sitting on raised platform and talking to archu and sav.

Thats such a sweet scene.

Ur FF track is really coming out well, do come up with the next update soon

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Ashima

@Ashima_Mishal

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Posted: 14 years ago

#26

Hi armanfan soo glad that u could feel the things i tried to portray by putting into words and ur detailed comment has left me overwhelmed!...thank u soo much dear...:D

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Ashima

@Ashima_Mishal

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Posted: 14 years ago

#27

Hi deepa glad u lyk the story next part asap hope u keep reading it dear :D

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Ashima

@Ashima_Mishal

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Posted: 14 years ago

#28

Hey ankifan so glad u lyk the idea of archu being independent next part asap..just hoping that it lives upto ur expectations:D YUP glad u mentioned about drunk dad of manav rofl

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Ashima

@Ashima_Mishal

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Posted: 14 years ago

#29

With a heavy heart archana opens up the diary..for all these years she had been writing daily diary enteries addressed to manav..and today as she sat down to write another page of her life..things were different than usual..and she wrote...😳😭

~ Manav.. Aaj..teen saal.. baad waqt wahin aakar tham gaya hai jahan aap mujhe chod ke gaye the... Bahot asani se keh gaye the aap ki mujhe khushi nahin dey sake...aur yeh nahin samajh paaye ki meri har khushi toh aap hii se hai..kitni asani se keh diya ki aapke bina ji loon..aur chod gaye mujhe..yeh nahin samjhe ki main toh aap hii ki parchayi hoon manav..aapse durr kaise reh sakti hoon?..zindagi bitaa toh rahi hoon aapke bina..bas isi umeed mein ki shayad aap laut aao..kyunki mere dil ki har dhadkan...aapke honney ka ehsas dilati hai...laut aaiye manav humare pyar ki khatir laut aaiye ~😛

Tears well up in archana's eyes as her heart longs to get back manav ..there is thunder in the sky and it begins to rain..closing the diary archana keeps it aside and stands up staring at the dark sky..slowly she walks down the stairs and reaches the lane..

raindrops hit her and as archu lets them drench her..she just hopes and wishes that the rain washed away her grief and loss somehow..but no ..standing alone..with her arms outstretched and getting wet..the hollowness of her life seemed to stand out more evidently..😭

Archana feels someone's hand touch hers..slowly she opens her eyes and finds manav stand there in white shirt and blue denims smiling at her...😳

Archana turns around to manav..and as the two stood facing each other..even in the rain he could make out tears streaming down archu's face..stepping closer he embraces her face lovingly and asks-kaisi ho?..ARCHANA JUST stares at him..her eyes wanting to just see him and her heart wanting the time to stop!..finally finding her voice she sobs-aapki..bahot yaad aati hai manav..iss parivar ki har zimedari nibhatey hue..aapki bahot kami khalti hai..laut aaiye na manav..aapke bina main bahot akeli hoon...😭

MANAV INCHES A LITTLE closer to archana and bending he kisses her on the forehead and says softly-akeli kahan ho archana? Main toh har waqt tumhare saath hii hoon...tumhare har ansoo mein mera dard aur har muskurahat mein meri khushi h toh chalakti hai..(manav cups archu's face in his hands and says on)..TUMHARey astitva ka yeh hissa har pal tumhare saath hii toh hai archana..😳

HOLDING MANAV'S HAnDS AS HE EMBRACED her..she cries saying-ab nahin hota manav..meri nazrein sirf aapko dekhna chahti hai..mera dil aapke deedar ko tarasta hai..par aap nazar nahin aatey..laut aaiye na manav..humare pyar ki khatir...MANAV TAKES ARCHU IN his arms and as she cuddles upto him..and shivering with cold she just clings upto him and as the two hug the song plays in the background

~EK PAL KE LIYE HII sahi ..ghadiyan humko mili makhmali..pyar ki..aa iss pal toh jeeley zara..lamhe yeh phir mile na mile kho janey dey sabhi dooriyan fasley..aa dil mila ley aur paas aa..phir kya ho kya khabar..dekha hai kisne kal..aa raat rok ley phir ho jaye na seher~😛

The SONG ENDS..and archana leans her head against manav's wet chest and hears him whisper to her-aaonga archana..(he makes her look at him and says on)..ek din main wapas zaroor aaonga...👏

CALMED ARCHANA closes her eyes and as she opens her eyes she finds herself alone again!..MANAV WAS nowhere..dirheartened she stands hn the rain for a while..still feeling manav's presence close by..HOW MUCH SHE WISHED to see him for real..how much she craved to hide herself in his arms and cry heart out..

Edited by Ashima_Mishal - 14 years ago