Tumbleweeds ...24th Update.. Pg 45 - Page 18

awesome Skep !! finally Archana regaining consciousness .... 😃 still waiting for doc Manav's arrival in Mumbai nd in Arch's life 😍 missed ya 🤗

u r rite Skepi Manav is getting married to Shravni nd Archana to Jaywant 🤢...their rishta aint pavitra anymore 😭

Trust EK to twist a tale out of shape 🤢............. I am sure its completely veered off the original storyline ............ 😲 😒

wish they could stick to the original Tamil version but naah !! kekta doesnt like simple love stories .... brings in illogical twists nd destroys her shows .... such a sadist 🤢 m never watching Kekta shows again 😳

Wow, its superb... waiting for Manav to come nd take over the case personally.

Hey skepi! Where were you yaar!!! We were missing the story!!!

Ab Manav ko jaldi bulao main story mein. I'm getting restless.

The medical facts seem very realistic and apt. Are you a doctor or someone in your house is? Whatever be the fact- your research is commendable.

Waiting for the next part!!!

Hi Skeptical😳 wat a name😆and I was quite skeptical to read ur thread,have opened it a couple of times and read first 2 lines,then got out😕hate doctor romances😆my dad a doctor,both grandpas docs,me dancer😆hated all doc rishtas-frozen yogurts😆😆so cud'nt bear the thot of a romance between the north pole and south pole😆😆

Originally posted by: SaffyFlower

Hi Skeptical😳 wat a name😆and I was quite skeptical to read ur thread,have opened it a couple of times and read first 2 lines,then got out😕hate doctor romances😆my dad a doctor,both grandpas docs,me dancer oohhhhh!!! 😆hated all doc rishtas-frozen yogurts😆😆so cud'nt bear the thot of a romance between the north pole and south pole😆😆 Well I am glad you entered and did me the honour of reading my tale

But urs is wonderful😲 Thank you ..........And u know,I think the magic spell is in the name-Archana and Manav😳something abt the initial days of PR,about 2 souls entwined,very enchanting couple.Watever the crap PR is now-

u r one wand waving fairy god mother, hahahahaa to make this PR cinderella twirl into a ballerina😊And I like the nimble hands prince, waiting for it to strike midnight soon😉

Somehow liking that Manav is a surgeon and no ordinary doc,they r artists in their own way with their hands, I guess.

And can sorta empathize a ballerina losin her legs I suppose.

And docs have a strange heart-its invisible and then suddenly pops out like a jack in the box-dad used to be soo unsymapthetic to my lil finger blood oozes' 😆but cried when a patient died😳😳

Just wanted to let u know a few items I jotted when readin,cant help,its a habit-

Ur prose is v clean.Just me,not into desc - and ur approach seems perfect for a desi take of An Affair to Remember type of story -one of the best climax ever in Hollywood romance.Even

the Bollywood copy wasnt bad. Well in Affair to Remember the couple was on the verge of starting a relationship before the accident, here they don't know each other ..... as yet

The dream maker sequence v mystic-and the mood u set although ominous ,makes me feel as if its a net catchin a Manav busy butterfly, bfor he flitters into ether, and nesting him on a fragrant flower Archana good analogy 👏

😍

Loved ur makeup desc of Archu in the 1st part - and her sweet nature's description,children clinging-absolutely

As am an avid shravni hater,lub lub wat u have made her to be - hussy #1😆lusterless is ur word,so apt-😉

I find her soo insipid baingan actually, hate her😆

"She was not being conniving, just taking care of herself"- well that would have made her very typical. She won't have a chance against Arch. My Arch is no doormat........ but you will have to read further for that. 😉

pls make her connive,conspire,perspire everything but aspire to be archu😆 -hate it more when she tries to do an archu copycat-ing as in the show😡

sachin's chr is v endearing - his transformation v realistic-his awakening,soul searching -is this gonna be a triangle😉😆will be a v complex one @that - likin sachin as a lead for archu now😆But ArMan forever😳😳 It is not going to be a triangle, altho I am going to make Manav sweat a bit.......... 😃

Archu-> " But what was she actually seeing? Strangely she stood outside of herself"

V nice.Always felt that abt Manav in the current PR track,as if he is observing his first person ,

by himself being in third person -no wonder he is not a go-getter,sigh! Almost like the Look and See part as in the song-sometimes sun goes rnd the moon I don't see PR just one episode a month. That is enough since the story is hardly on the roll. 🤢

Sulo->

"She remembered the joy she had felt when her daughter was born, but this was much more than that"

V nice.reminds me of Paradise Lost and Paradise Regained Chaucer??

Archu treating Doc->

" How many cases had passed through his hands and yet his fervour to get each one back on his feet did not diminish"

V true-docs r amazing human beings for their sheer grit and chase for perfection

PR-

"Yes the story is based on misplaced guilt. Sachin who feels the weight of it when he's not at fault and Suresh walking away from responsibilty"

Such an apt description but sorta convulted in current PR too - Archu feels the wt of wat is not her fault and Manav walking into a responsibility which is really not his - no wonder PR is sooo messed up😆the 2 r doin wat is none of their bizness,satyanaash story😆 Agree totally

But lookin fwd to urs v much.Kudos for ur near word perfect pirouette 👏so many shining stars on this forum⭐️U shud publish,if u r 2 lazy😆me crazy enuf to get ur material hooked to a publisher,wud u mind😳 Dear me ................ 😊

Also wud u mind sending the links to ur short stories pls?😊

You seem more a poem person,whereas Samarth is the poetry type-any collection stashed away that

we can turn the mirror to saying 'And then there was Light' 😆

Lubdub,

...Saffy

Originally posted by: nikitagmc

Hey skepi! Where were you yaar!!! We were missing the story!!!

Ab Manav ko jaldi bulao main story mein. I'm getting restless.

The medical facts seem very realistic and apt. Are you a doctor or someone in your house is? Whatever be the fact- your research is commendable.

Waiting for the next part!!!