AsharKhirid OS:Setting you free :)

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Posted: 13 years ago
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This OS is based on the story after the last scene of the novel.Khirid doesn't accepts Ashar's apology & it's from Ashar's POV .Comments/Critism more than Welcome
SETTING YOU FREE

"Batool Khala,are you still angry with me?",i asked her curiously.

"If you aren't guilty for what u did,why would i be angry with u,but yes-i am hurt.Ashar,you were all she had.She loved you.More than that,she trusted you.Did you even think twice before labelling her as a characterless woman?" she said irritatedly.

"but i apologized to her,I am trying to make it up to her"

"but that's not enough Ashar.Your apology does not makes up for 4 years of her life.Do u have any idea how hard she worked to feed Hareem,to arrange for her medicines.She would starve herself but make sure she fed her daughter.How will u make up for the loss that you missed your daughter's growing years.You weren't there for here when she said her first words,her first day of school.You missed Everything."



Batool Khala's words had stabbed him hard.At that time,he needed someone to talk to.He went up to his dad's grave

"Dad,i have to make a confession.I broke the promise i made to you,i didn't fulfill your last wish.I was a fool,i always have been one.How did you always make the right decisions.Look at what i have done,i am a horrible person.I should have looked for Khirid,asked her the reality.I was blinded by the lies.I wish you were here to show me the right path Dad,I miss you" & he broke down into tears
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"Khirid please,I apologi..."

"stop it.Enough.I don't want your apologies.I have already told you i have forgiven you but i haven't forgotten.I haven't forgotten the look you gave to me when Mrs.Fareeda Hussain was talking gibberish about my character.You were suppose to defend me.I have no issues with Mrs.Fareeda Hussain,its you.I had hopes from you.My world revolved around you.. but now it revolves around my daughter.I can allow you to intrude in her life as you are his father,but not mine,so stay away from me.I hope i have made myself clear.You can pick Hareem up every alternative Weekend,okay.Now Excuse me please" she left


The feeling was coming again.The feeling i got when dad left me.The thought of being with Khirid made me better & now the thought of her leaving me was coming back again.I coudn't understand what was happening.It felt like someone had stabbed me hard.In a few years,my life had turned upside down.I knew Khirid,she would never agree once she commits herself to something.I guess i had lost her.I decided to pay my regards to her & let her move on with her life,leaving me lifeless.
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"Batool Khala,please give this to Khirid,i am leaving for sometime.",He handed her a letter.

To the person whom i considered my soulmate,

When u came into my life,i told myself i would love u & never hurt you.You were my best friend my love,my everything. . . till 1 day when i screwed things up.
Later on you told me the reality.I refuse to believe you at first but when i saw it in ur eyes,it spells out the truth what u really feel inside.You were deeply hurt and troubled.
You didnt even look straight in my eyes when you said "Stay out of my life".My life has changed from the very moment.I just found myself on bended knees asking God why?.I was down completely but i had to be strong for you,Strong enough to let you go.It was just hard to accept.Letting you go was the hardest thing ever and now i am writing this letter to set you free.Well,plan A would have been better-Growing old with you but never mind...I love you Khirid,i always will
Ashar



Khushi smiled and stepped in her new life,a life which would have hurdles as it was hard to forget him but she knew she coudnt.He was part of her happy memories.

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While i was on my way back,i realised one important thing.Living happily ever after wasn't the important thing,living in the moment was the most important & i was glad that atleast i had done something right.
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Relationships are like glasses,if they break let them stay broken,you'll only hurt yourslef trying to fix it,atleast the pieces still remain
~unknown~

NOTE:
A few lines of the letter have been adapted from a Youtube Video.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Ahhh loved it meephi splendid writing, and it was really sad to read, if this was the ending of novel...lol I would loose my sleep and go crazy ...
btw ...you wrote : Khushi smiled and stepped in her new life,a life which would have hurdles as it was hard to forget him but she knew she coudnt.He was part of her happy memories.
You mean Khirad right ? Sorry I got a bit confuse lol
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Posted: 13 years ago
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hey meepha! it was short was really nice!
keep such OS's comming
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Posted: 13 years ago
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I don't know what OS stands for, but Meepha this is friggin amazing! Damn amazing!
You and Iqra write so well..
I'm so jealous..

One thing though, i seriously wish this wasn't the ending of the book.. It'll just give me a heart-break..

Apart from that, it's beautiful! <33
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Sana, OS = one shot
Meepha- this is amazing! Opposite spectrum of what Iqra wrote..very well written!
I like the ideasof your Plan A ;) "growing old w/ you" hehe
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Posted: 13 years ago
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veryyy welll written meeepha :)),,keeep writing more,and thankGOD this is nt how the novel ends,,it would hav been unbearable ..
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sana.B

I don't know what OS stands for,

It means One shot.It can be a specific scene or a whole story in it,doesn't matters😊
but Meepha this is friggin amazing! Damn amazing!
😳*blushing* Thankyou
You and Iqra write so well..
I'm so jealous..
Haha,let us be the judge of your writing.Still waiting for the pm😃

One thing though, i seriously wish this wasn't the ending of the book.. It'll just give me a heart-break..

Yaar actually i was trying to sleep,i coudn't so i was thinking about Humsafar's sequel.I was wondering what's gonna happen in it.I could only come to one conclusion,that in the next season,Ashar tries to win back Khirid and in the end of the sequel succeeds.Lame,i know but a result of total randomness so i gave it a try.Believe me,I am thankful this didnt happen in the Novel!😊

Apart from that, it's beautiful! <33
Thanks Sana😊

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Meepha, your PM's gonna take me ages, I'm booked completely for the next two weeks, and the first couple of days of December Vacay.
Hopefully by the end of December?
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sana.B

Meepha, your PM's gonna take me ages, I'm booked completely for the next two weeks, and the first couple of days of December Vacay.
Hopefully by the end of December?


Sure sure,even i was free in the beginnin of my Vacations.Now,i have Ielts and mathemathics paper by next month so even i wont be able to read, tou even if u send it in January..Aal is well

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