Deepa & Kailash FF - *COMPLETED* - Page 26

Not at all, Jiggly. As I said, I love the story. It is that concept, I don't agree with. However, it is BEAUTIFUL story and very well written. So sweet and dreamy too.............

Nice hello kitty avatar, Wingy 😉

Originally posted by: meli

Where is Pat today? Usha has bet her today. 😆

A long chapter, Leena. As promised you have kept the intimacy to a minimum. u has described their feeling afterwards very well instead describing the intimacy. Well done. 👏 The breakfast scenes were cute and funny. 😆 I hope u wont separate this lovely couple

Meli i sure have my bets on today. 😆😆 wonder if i will have my bets on 2morrow.

Awesome chapter, Jiggly. Very beautifully written. I'm echoing what Meli has said, about them loving the intimacy after the fact. Brilliant tact in writing!

I also thought this was very nicely written and so realistic .. it's the fear of every girl when her beloved sees her sans clothes for the first time, even if she be the most gorgeous, slender person. Deepa was also consumed by such fears, nicely allayed by Kailash.
Once again, Loved it!

(And thanks for keeping in mind what I said, although I also want to make sure that this shouldn't make you alter your style of writing with regards to romance - I wasn't sure how 'deeeeeeep' (see, how many 'e's there 😆 )the descriptions were going to get, what with the first time and all, so very slightly cautioned you - but otherwise I would love to read what you normally write when touching on this subject.. I hope you got the drift)

Originally posted by: patraj

Jenim - I am sure you look sweet and sexy in any colored saree let alone brown.

Pat

Awww..Pat, that was so sweeet of you to have said that!

I was so happy/flattered/thrilled when I read that.. Yes.. you can very well say so 'cos you haven't seen my 5' figure yet 😛

BTW, how come yours wasn't the first post today.. Weekend indha sitekku leave vittacha, neenga?

thanks a lot for all your comments pple! i'm glad my writing is appreciated.😃

@ usha - i've to seperate them yaar. if not how will the story get spicier?😆😆😆

@ jenim, thanks a lot for your praise. the idea struck me when my recently married friend confided in me about how uncomfortable she feels when that particular moment happens.😉

i'm so happy that i've reached my 40th chapter. there's a big twist in store so continue reading & commenting.

so without further ado, i present you with my 40th chapter!

CHAPTER 40

after breakfast, kailash & deepa went back to the bedroom. deepa was pulling on her clothes hurriedly. she seemed to be in a rush. "do you have to leave so soon?" kailash asked deepa sweetly. he was disappointed that deepa was rushing home instead of spending more time with him. kailash wanted to savour every single moment with his lady love. "sorry kailash. I have to go now. it's getting really late & I haven't been home since last night. I promise I'll meet you in the evening. I love you!" deepa kissed him & left. kailash sighed & went for a shower. he emerged from the bathroom 20 minutes later & started getting dressed when the doorbell rang. kailash grinned to himself. "looks like deepa is missing me already!" he thought to himself as he made a run for the door. breathless & excited he pulled open his door to reveal his unexpected guest. "hi kailash!" she threw her arms around him & kissed him.

"sweta? what are you doing here?" kailash asked her, still unable to get over the shock that sweta was standing there right in front of him. "well, I came to see you! I missed you so much. looks like you've forgotten all about me." she scolded him playfully. "how did your treatment go?" kailash sounded worried. "don't worry kailash! I'm perfectly fine now. the money you sent over helped me so much." sweta replied happily. kailash made sure sweta was comfortable in the living room & slipped into his bedroom. he dialled a number & waited impatiently for the other person to answer. "hello. is that you? sweta is here. she has come back to India. what am I supposed to do now?" he angrily hissed into the phone. the other person said something & kailash calmed down a little. he made plans to meet the person at the Tandoori Resturant at 4pm. till the time came, kailash was uneasy & kept on pacing the living room. "stop it. you're making me dizzy!" sweta joked good naturedly but kailash was in no mood to laugh. as 4pm came by, he drove off hastily to Tandoori Resturant which was situated in the heart of the city. "may I help you sir?" the waiter enquired politely. "my name is kailash. I've a reservation here." kailash replied. "ah yes sir. please come. your guest is already awaiting you at the table." the waiter led kailash over to his table. "finally you're here. I thought something was wrong" the man breathed a sigh of relief. "something IS wrong & you're the main reason for it." kailash retorted & took a seat opposite ajay.

"so what's the big problem? sweta is here. so what?" ajay questioned kailash calmly, taking a bite out of his tandoori chicken. the aromatic smell would have usually made kailash hungry but now he was ready to throw up. "what is wrong? my girlfriend has returned from the US & how am I supposed to handle deepa?" kailash angrily banged the table with his fist. "hey. you work for me remember? I'd really appreciate if you would stay within your limits." ajay eyed him coolly. kailash calmed down reasonably but still looked hassled. "look kailash. you worked for me. I promised you that I'll treat your girlfriend if you'd win over deepa for me. I treated your girlfriend & now she's back, hale & hearty. all you have to do now is to break deepa's heart like you promised me to." ajay stated simply. "but i.." kailash stammered when he heard a sob coming from the other booth. feeling a serious sense of dread, kailash stood up & peeked over the barrier. a girl sat there, her head was down but there was no mistaking her dark black hair or her ruby braclet. kailash felt his heart sink when he realised that deepa had heard everything.

honestly yaar, this idea struck me just today, about kailash's dark past & why he is working for ajay. all queries will be cleared in the later chapters.😊 please comment!😃

~leena 😃

Me first,today. 🥳

You have turned the story down up, Leena. I still haven't come back to my sense, after reading your big 😲 shock treatment. Bravo, Leena. 👍🏼 So fare the story was just romantically and cute but now with the turning point, Khailash has already a girl friend, he working for Ajay and Deepa listen to their conversation….that's was brilliant. 👏 👏 I think I can guess why Khailash agreed , but why Ajay doing that???

Originally posted by: meli

Me first,today. 🥳

You have turned the story down up, Leena. I still haven't come back to my sense, after reading your big 😲 shock treatment. Bravo, Leena. 👍🏼 So fare the story was just romantically and cute but now with the turning point, Khailash has already a girl friend, he working for Ajay and Deepa listen to their conversation….that's was brilliant. 👏 👏 I think I can guess why Khailash agreed , but why Ajay doing that???

Oh no! The sweet lovers have been separated. Anyways, its brilliant this twist I love it!!!!!!! Cant wait to read on Leena. Brilliant chapter.

Two words..
Twist O'Twist !!!! 👏

Leena,

That was a brilliant twist to the story. Your earlier chapter was really mind blowing. You brought out the intimacy just the perfect way. So sad of Deepa, what would she do now?

Madhu