Deepa & Kailash FF - *COMPLETED* - Page 24

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Posted: 18 years ago

guys, i have an impt question. my next chapter would consist of some intimate scenes. do you guys want me to edit it or just post it as it is now? i mean i know some people are a little conservative. i didn't want to offfend anyone that's why i asked.😊

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Posted: 18 years ago
Leena, just go ahead and post as you have written, I am sure we can take it, after all, many, if not all of us have read romance novels with far more detailed intimate scenes than those in your story. We are all big boys and girls. So don't worry, go ahead.

Pat
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Posted: 18 years ago
Leena nice chapter, and I didn't feel its vulgar too. Its a romantic love story... 😳 You can post the next chapter as it is, I guess. 😊
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Posted: 18 years ago
I'd vote for Posting as is. it is actually much better than those yuck in mega serials
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Posted: 18 years ago
Another romantic chapter, Leena. I still felt bad for Khailash but happy Deepa at least wasn't mad at him so long. 😳 Just post your next chapter, as no body will think it's vulgar. I am sure people has watch western movies and read novels books like what Pat said. 😊
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Posted: 18 years ago
Leena let me tell you something!!!!!!

That was really the best story i have read after many years. Those intimate scenes were wicket bring it on. Actually, im reading a book called the kiss and that is not as good as your story. Do write a story book when you grow up cos you have the ability to become a good writer and i will be racing to the shop for your book 😆 . Bring the next chapter on. I cant wait to read it.
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Posted: 18 years ago
Leena,

I have been reading ur story from the beginning. It is amazing 👏 👏. Waiting for the next chapter. And as everybody said, i think it is not vulgur, but a wonderful description of emotions 👏

Good job !!!!

Sudha
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Posted: 18 years ago

thanks for all your sweet comments pple! and usha, if i ever write my own book, i'll give you a free copy.😃

CHAPTER 38

"I'm sorry kailash. I was being too unreasonable at the picnic." deepa apologised sweetly. kailash who was hugging her assured her that he had forgotten all about it. "so can I take you out for dinner or are you still not hungry?" kailash teased her. deepa smacked his head playfully & agreed to go out for dinner with him. "but what about ajay?" kailash questioned her. deepa told him that ajay had already left long time back as he had some urgent work in the office. as they were discussing happily, the lift whirred to life again. breathing some fresh air at last, kailash told deepa that he had something for her & that she would have to come to his house to get it. "but I'm not even properly dressed for dinner!" deepa protested as kailash dragged her to his car. "believe me, you will get all you need in my house." kailash insisted as he peeled away from the carpark in a rush.

kailash was acting all mysterious & refused to answer any questions of deepa's. "kailash! for god's sake can you tell me what is the mystery gift you have for me?" she asked him. kailash just grinned widely & sped towards his flat. 15 minutes later, deepa was seated in kailash's living room as kailash went to fetch his mystery gift for her. "here! I hope you like it!" kailash grinned as he held out a big flat box. deepa took it happily & opened it to reveal a beautiful brown sari. "wow kailash! this is some gift. the sari is really really beautiful. thank you!" deepa stood up & gave kailash a quick kiss on the lips. "will you wear this sari & show it to me? please?" kailash pleaded so cutely that deepa had to agree. kailash paced up & down the hallway along the door. he was excited to see how deepa would look in the sari he had chosen for her.

he heard the door click open & spun around. what he saw took his breath away, deepa stood there looking like a gorgeous goddess in the brown saree. the thin material of the saree clung onto her body, outlining every curve clearly. she looked sweet yet sexy. all kailash could do was to gape open mouthed at her. "is there something wrong with my face? do I look that bad kailash?" deepa questioned, looking highly perturbed. "NO! no, no deepa! you look gorgeous!" kailash walked up to her & smiled. "in fact, I have never seen you look so sexy before." he grinned down at her. deepa blushed beet red & was about to go back into her room when kailash cornered her. "deepa you refused me in the lift. is this place enough for me to get intimate with you?" he asked her bluntly. deepa looked shocked & tried to move away from him.

"no deepa. we have played hide & seek long enough." he said as he pushed her lustrous tresses away from her back. he kissed the back of her neck softly. deepa shivered & let out a soft gasp. kailash continued to kiss her & his lips moved down to the back of her sari blouse. It was a backless blouse meaning it consisted of only strings holding the cloth together. kailash reached the first knot. his fingers automatically reached up & started undoing the knots one by one. as he undid every knot, kailash planted a fiery kiss on deepa's soft back. deepa felt the passion & fiery of his kisses right down to the tip of her toes. she then realised that she had been awaiting that moment since a long time. "kailash…" she called out softly. "what deepa?" came the muffled reply as kailash was buried in deepa's tresses. "my answer is yes." she told him shyly.

kailash was lost in deepa. he was lost in her tresses, her eyes & her luscious body. he was quite shocked when deepa said that she would get intimate with him but he regained his composure quickly. "deepa? you sure about this? I don't want you to regret this." kailash looked at deepa nervously. "I know what I'm doing." deepa answered simply. kailash smiled & gave deepa a tight hug. he picked her up & started walking towards his bedroom slowly. "this has to be the most right thing I have ever done." thought deepa resting her head against kailash's shoulder

okay so the next chapter will be a little intimate. this chapter was longer than i expected so i put all those intimate scenes in the next chapter.😉 hope you all liked it. comments & suggestions are welcome!

~leena 😃

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Posted: 18 years ago
I am first again all you people! A very beautiful chapter. I liked it. So more steamy episode ahead is it? Can't wait.

I will keep you to your word on that 'free' copy of your book 😉

👏

Pat
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Posted: 18 years ago

Originally posted by: patraj

I am first again all you people! A very beautiful chapter. I liked it. So more steamy episode ahead is it? Can't wait.

I will keep you to your word on that 'free' copy of your book 😉

👏

Pat

same here. Great work.

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