NIBIR TS - One last night (updated) last part

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arviabhigya

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Posted: 9 years ago

#21

res😆

all the best mansi for ur exams😉

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poornima_15

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Posted: 9 years ago

#22

Yipeee another story from u .. I just keep waiting to read something from u and every time u make me lost in the nibir land 😳 ... This was another awesome work of urs ... I really like nishas character 😉 and kabir seems a gangster 😳... Nice scene in the dark loby ☺️ ... Their povs and conscience was verry well written just loved them ...

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mishrialways

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Posted: 9 years ago

#23

mansi god yaar u changed everything😆

i was excepting something else and these was total different😆

nisha still waits for him to come back

kabir comes every night after she sleeps he knows her well

she never lock the door

the first day in the house was beautifully described, nisha remember the happy memories 😃while kabir the sad ones😭

he cuddles her and sleep and that's what she says meet him in dreams😳

awesome mansi👏

cont soon😉

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mishrialways

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Posted: 9 years ago

#24

mansi it is really gonna be a three shot only😛

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vaishnavi

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Posted: 9 years ago

#25

wifey how do you manage to do this every time
you always make me speechless yaar
such a beautiful update it was 👏
nisha's pain , the flashback , the scares , she preparing his fav food , and he visiting the house , cuddling her everything was perfect
you make me fall in love with NiBir even more wifey 👏
loved it ❤️

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mansi

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Posted: 9 years ago

#26

Originally posted by: mishrialways
mansi it is really gonna be a three shot only😛

yes yes... its a three shot... a shock more to come 😉

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Amina...

@Amina...

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Posted: 9 years ago

#27

Hey Mansi !!!
It was a Beautiful Update ...!!!
Very Well Written ...!!!
But m confused about things like Nisha was thinking that Kabir has not come back from past seven years And Kabir is right in the house in the very next scene ...!!!
Kabir n Nisha separated , Although they Loved each other so much ...!!!
Is there any problem with Kabir ...!!!
And what did Nisha do that She was blaming herself ...!!!
There are a lot of things to unfold ...!!!
Waiting for the revelations ...!!!
Continue Sooonnniissshhh ...!!!

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mishrialways

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Posted: 9 years ago

#28

Originally posted by: mansi_as18
yes yes... its a three shot... a shock more to come 😉

so k of u yaar

another shock😆

waiting

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mansi

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Posted: 9 years ago

#29

Originally posted by: Amina...
<font color="#00ccff" face="Georgia, 'Times New Roman', Times, serif" size="2">Hey Mansi !!!
It was a Beautiful Update ...!!!
Very Well Written ...!!!
But m confused about things like Nisha was thinking that Kabir has not come back from past seven years And Kabir is right in the house in the very next scene ...!!!
Kabir n Nisha separated , Although they Loved each other so much ...!!!
Is there any problem with Kabir ...!!!
And what did Nisha do that She was blaming herself ...!!!
There are a lot of things to unfold ...!!!
Waiting for the revelations ...!!!
Continue Sooonnniissshhh ...!!!</font>

every wuestion has its answer.. but patience is virtue... so keep waiting.

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.vishrutha.

@.vishrutha.

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Posted: 9 years ago

#30

Woah!! Now that's something i never expected!!

You gave the story a whole new dimension, and what a beautiful one it was!

Nisha's feelings were expressed so beautifully!! ❤️

Her memories, her monologues everything was so well written! Perfect is an understament actually!

The part where she sees herself in the mirror looking at the marks on her body and remebering how they came to exist was wonderful!!! ❤️

Her wait for Kabir is so heart-breaking but at the same time her faith that he may return one fine day is so heartwarming!

Only you can make your reader feel two absolute contrasting emotions in the same line!

And that twist you gave there!! Of Kabir actually coming home every night reading her story and even having the dinner she's cooked for him?!!

No words! Just 👏 👏 👏!

When I read those few lines about the stars i was like ok now we'l get to know what happened years ago or we may get Kabir's pov on it. But then when he tells she still doesn't close the door, I was like wait! What?!! Too good yar Mansi!! 👍🏼

Aah and him telling how she's the only one who can bring out his emotional side was lovely!

Ok i know ur busy with your exams but it's your fault! You've given the story such an excellent turn, now our curiosity level is at its peak! 😆

Do continue soon if possible please and thanks for pm 😊