NIBIR SS - SAATHI REY!! note on page 26 - Page 7

Originally posted by: mishrialways

Awesome one mansi

the description of kabir and aadheer friendship was well described

liked the way u described how played cupid between his friends and how much he desires to be loved

what is this past thing me curious

the accident and kabir attracted by the girl

update soon

thanx for pm

ritika

thank u ritzy... everything will be in open soon

Originally posted by: .vishrutha.

Wonderful update mansi!

Very nice start!

The Kabir-Adheer convo in the start, Adheer trying to convince a tired Kabir to come with him to the club and his monologue on how determined he was to hook up Kabir with someone, gave a nice insight to the friendship they shared.

The club description, the small Adheer-Ananya moment, the flashback of how Kabir got them together, him teasing Adheer by kissing Ananya's cheek were lovely moments!

The description of the tlc that Kabir craved for was written so amazingly well by you!❤️

Kabir's reaction on hearing Maria's name, their convo that followed were well written.👍🏼

Glad that Kabir cleared it to her that he does not reciprocate her feelings and even more glad that she left it at that and did not force herself on him!😆

Liked the suspense you created about that mysterious boy, for whom Kabir is so worried, in the next scene.

Kabir first smacking Adheer for bringing him to the club and then blaming himself for the boy's condition was sad!😔. Again, a well written scene!

Kabir's panic stricken state while driving back to the hospital and he trying to calm himself down, him seeing a badly injured person in the middle of the road, his realisation that its a girl and he admiring her beauty despite her injured face, then chiding himself on getting lost in her instead of rushing her to the hospital, him taking her to the hospital and then calling the docs to the OT were wonderful moments! 👏The best part was how you showed that he did this all mechanically! It showed that instant connect he felt with this stranger!

The next Kabir-sister Angela scene was good too. Liked how you showed that slight shock in sister Angela when Kabir asked her to look after the girl in the OT!👍🏼

Waiting to know about that boy and Kabir's past!

Also, hoping the girl will be alright as we know who it is.

Please continue soon and thanks for pm😊

thanks vishru 🤗

Originally posted by: sam_premc

awesome story mansi!😃

just read it!😳

i just adore the way you write those emotions and you explain each and everything very well!🤗☺️👏

another story i am going to love!☺️❤️

another story i am going to be a fan of!🤗🤪

do continue soon, would love to read this!

P.S.sorry for the late comment!

baba ☺️ thanchooo...

Originally posted by: Roopsha_98

Superb update Mansi...😃

Club scene was fab...luved how Kabir teased Adheer by kissing Ananya...🤣

N then Maira...😆

Kabir ne jis ladki ko bachaya vo Nishu hai na...😳

Continue soon & thanx for the pm...😊

thanks ropz

Originally posted by: poornima_15

awesome start... kabir didn't went home since a long time due to some past ... the club scene and bonding betweenthe friends was awesomely written ... the craving for love to feel it was nicely depicted... the accident scene and kabir took the girl to the hospital was the interesting part ... and not to forget the mystery boy ... everything was binded so well that made me read it again and again 😃... update soon 😊

thanks poornima 😳

PART 2


KABIR'S POV

I rushed towards the duty room to gain some grip over myself. All the way, her thoughts lurked over my conscience, but why... might be the effect of cocktail i consumed or might be the fatigue is taking over my mind finally. whatever it is... i need to think and foremost i need to meet him. Still engaged in my wayward thoughts, i entered the cold shower and stripped down from my blood stained clothes.

Her blood...

The stream of water hit me and massaged my sore muscles while a streak of water mixed with red flowed down on the floor and vanished through the drain. M stained in her colour in a dreadful manner. My hands my hair my face even a part of my soul is coloured in her blood.

Hey... no not my soul... what kind of thought is that. May be m really tired now. I should go back to see him. With this thought, i switched the shower off and dried myself up before throwing some random t - shirt and jeans. I really dont care what i look like at this hour of day or at any hour of day for that matter. Leaving behind my thoughts, i strode towards my destination.

18M

Ah... this room or should i say hall was meant to be my private office. Perks of being a hospital trusty u see... but i dont need it, m happy in the staff room with the fellow doctors. So i decided to convert it into a ward for i dont know who. Actually it was just for me... so i have loaded it with some of best equipment. I opened the door and was greeted by the gush of cold air heating my skin giving rise to goosebumps and the sight of him sleeping cozily. A smile made its way on my chapped lips when i sat by his side. The chart displaying his info and condition gained my attention.

Pt name - Daksh
Age - 15 / M
Diagnosis - bilateral lower limb fractures with internal bruises and multiple injuries.

I sighed and checked his vitals. Ruffling his hair, i gave him a long look. Those bruises around his eyes and on his cheek bones are pale blue now but that didnt snatched away his boyish charm. His plastered legs were resting on soft pillows while his hands were still attached to saline. I still remember how i met this very cheerful boy at an NGO for child abuse, how he became my buddy in less than a month and how brutally he was beaten by some bullies and later abused for raising his voice against him at his foster home and how difficult it was for me to see him in such condition. But thanks to his faith in me that he called me in time. I was still in my thoughts when a hand creeped on my sleeve.

"hey buddy..." that jet black eyes sparkle with life in them and made me come back to earth. "hey buddy..." i replied but saw how his expression changed from smile to frown and then to anger and it terrified me. Yes i, a 26yr old well settled doctor is terrified by a 15 yr old shakespeare fan. " i know buddy u are angry... i m sorry u know how much of a fool i m... i actually forgot about our meeting and went to that stupid club with adheer and then sister angela called me and told me that u were having nightmare and u are angry with me... and... one second she told me u didnt took ur medicine... why... why didnt u took ur medicine u know its imp for u... how many times i have told u that..." as always i begin to ramble in front of him. It is always like this... this boy certainly bring out my 15th yr old self out. "m sorry..." his voice came in squeak making me stop abruptly. "u promised that you'll bought my gift... and that medicine taste awful... i don't want to have it and sister angela hide my books i don't know where..." he puffed his swollen cheeks some more. I couldn't help but chuckle at his cute face. "sorry buddy... and yeah i have ur gift but u have to promise me to have ur medicines... it is good for u n for sister angela... i can't help it if u will behave she will give them to u..." i told him with a grin and he stretched his hand in front of me. Rolling my eyes i gave him a new addition in romantic feast of his appetite. Who would have thought that in the age of gaming obsessions, this child is all about literature and poetry specially romantic genre. Absurd.. huh... yeah thats right. He grinned wide seeing his gift actually that should be referred as bribe so that he take his medicines on time so every week i have to bought a stupid romance book for him. "i have another gift for u actually..." i winked at him while he gave me a confused look. Smirking wide, i produced a copy of his fav magazine in front of him. "open pg no. 4... it has a surprise" i whispered and watched how his eyes widened like saucers and then how he broke out in the widest grin i have ever seen on his face." kabir bhaiyaaa... meri story publish ho gyi" he screamed so loud that i have to cover my ears. "daksh...shhh" i have to cover his mouth. He smiled sheepishly and said sorry to no one in particular before diving in the pool of words he himself has crafted. "now... now... now u have to sleep and i too... so keep this aside and close ur eyes buddy" i snatched magazine from his hand while he glared at me. For a 15yr old he is quite intimidating that's why i have to fake yawns and tired looks to be on safer side. He narrowed his eyes but let go of me and closed his.

I was still reading his story from the magazine when sister angela entered. "go to sleep doctor... u too need rest" she rolled her eyes at me. See, m just an innocent soul but the whole world is glowering over me... it isn't fair. "i will sister... by the way how's the girl..." i asked. "she is just ok... i mean there is excessive gut bleeding and she had fractured her ribs whose remnants are stuck in her liver with fractures in her right hand and left leg which is pretty bad..." she informed. I hear like i always do... like a professional. "anything serious..." i asked. "she will undergo surgeries one by one but the thing creating nuisance is her head injury, u know how unpredictable it can be" she said changing daksh saline and keeping his book in one of the drawers "fir se ek nayi book... seriously doctor?" she gave me that incredulous look which was often used by my mother whenever i used to fool around. She remind me of her always and care for me like her. If only she would be here, she could have seen how much sister angela and she are alike.

I miss u mom...

"U miss me too..." a soft whisper voiced itself in my head. A chill ran down my spine but i shrugged the feeling away. Its a part i want to forget but i cant. "doctor... the police is here..." one of the ward boy came to inform me. I nodded and stood up.

After what seems like an hour, i was able to go back to see her. Since it was an accident, there wasnt much for me to say. Her identity is still unknown as someone stole her belongings from the "site" as per police and there was no trace of another person around so only she can help them. I just listened and went into ICU where she was for now and checked on her. She still looked deathly pale but have some liveliness in her feature. One of her surgery is scheduled in an hour and i dont know if she will be able to pull through all of them. Yeah i know i sound cruel and pessimistic but thats the truth. But i want her to wake up, and talk to me... i want her to tell me who did this to her and... i just want her to live. She looked like an angel in this whole white hospital background. But i dont like it... may be if in future she would be lying like this sleeping in my room with a cute smile on her face, i would love to see... hold on there... what the heck i m thinking. This girl surely messes with my mind and she isnt even awake. Frustrated with myself, i went out and fill her form. I need to be away from her, she is something too alluring for my peace of mind but i cant stay away from her and cherry on top i dont know why.

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Nishas POV

Arghhh... Why my head's spinning like a merry go round. And why is everything dark out here. I cant see anything and i m sure as hell cannot feel my body. I m dead... arent i? But if m dead then i should either be in hell or heaven. Heaven... hmmm... its out of question actually.. i mean m not a horrible person but m not a saint either... i mean i have my fair share of mischievous and snarky idiotic deeds. But m sure as hell that something isn't right. if m not dead then where m i... M i imprisoned somewhere or is it some kind of black magic. May be m stuck in between life and death. Is that the case... but thats so unreal isnt it. Oh god!!!

WHAT THE f**kING HELL...

This... this is the only thing i can think of now due to this delusional state of mine... arghhh how annoying.

Oh sorry, i remember i was involved in an accident may be... that is what i believe, i mean i remember a car speeding towards me and a collision of lights afterwards. Oh yes i also remember the tremendous amount of pain i felt but that is not imp... the face that was in front of me which i last saw is imp. I mean u know if i m in an accident i should be concentrating about how bad it is but here i m still stuck with that face lingering on my mind. That thoughtful yet mysterious glint in those honey brown eyes... actually i don't think they were honey brown... they should be hazel in colour, it will suit his handsome face more... yeah that's it they should be hazel. Oh god... see this is my prblm, apart from how i cant open my eyes and even move my stupid finger... this is my prblm. That man... i mean i have seen boys around being in one of the prestigious college has some perks but he... he was something else. Now u must be thinking that what the hell girl... u should be concentrating on pain or injuries. But let me tell u... as u know i cant open my eyes or move or speak or anything so let me just think about him, who knows i would meet him again or not. M feeling so tired again... being injured sucks... i keep falling asleep in dreamless state every 5 minute. I want to wake up but i cant, it feels like m tied up with invisible ropes and no one is letting me move. Its irritating. But something is different... yup definitely different. The same warmth i had felt.. that had engulfed me some hours ago... is radiating again. Is he here... oh joy. I should thank him, but how. These stupid state of mine i tell u. I want to touch him again, his stubbled cheek felt hard yet soft underneath my tarnished skin. I remember how handsome he looked when i saw him through by half closed eyes. The sincerness of his face was striking enough to let me know he is a good man... i was in good hands.

But m feeling sleepy and tired again. I want to fall asleep but i fear if i never able to wake up again. I want to meet my family one last time... i wanted to tell them i luv them that i dont mean what i said earlier... that it was just an argument... an uglier one. But i think i lost my chance. And oh yeah... i want to see that stranger too... one last time before i meet my afterlife.

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It's been a week since nisha had undergone her most of the surgeries. She was still in medically induced coma to help her surgeries and wounds. Kabir kept in check her progress and was an active part of her treatment plans.

"kabirrr..." someone called out for him as he was strolling in corridor. He turned and grinned at his friend who was showing his 36 teeths. "whats up... itne daant kyu dikha rha h?" kabir asked curiously. "kyuki 4 mahine baad meri shaadi h" adheer screamed at the top of his voice and kabir had to punch his guts to stop him from disturbing patients. "idiot... this is hospital" kabir hissed. "u wont congratulate me... do u? Upar se daant rha h mjhe" he pouted like a kid and whinned. Kabir shook his head amused "bhagwan jaane why i agreed to be ur friend... u should be in kindergarden u know". Adheer made a hurted face and clutched his shirt right above his heart "that hurts kabir... how mean". Kabir chuckled and smacked his head from back. "congratulations... akhir kaar bechari ani fas hi gyi tere jaal m" he mumbled and adheer laughed. "true that... achha bta hows ur mystery girl... aajkal poora hospital teri ur usiki baat karta h" he smirked while kabir looked at him confused. "matlab?" he asked. Adheer took a deep sigh and narrated how everyone is gossiping about dr. Kabir taking utlier interest in a mystery girl who he bought and is paying fir everything and blah blah. Kabir flinched a little but stop himself from making any crude remark. "its ok... i dont care until it doesnt harm her... waise bhi i helped her and it was my duty ur abhi bhi mai vhi kar rha hu" he said coolly. Adheer just hummed in respobse because he knew kabir better then this. "achha... so where is she.." he asked. "still in ICU but she need to be shift soon. We cant give her a permanent bed u know" kabir said. "so... what do u think... what will u do now" adheer asked as they stopped by the staff room. "i may... uh... shift her with daksh?" he said in an uncertain voice. Adheer looked at him with curious eyes and then nodded "good for her". "u think so?" kabir asked. "yup..." adheer replied and a smile made its way to kabir face. "see... i knew that was a good idea..." he beamed like a kid who suddenly got his fav choclate and rushed to nurse station to make a call. Adheer looked at his retreating figure "kuch to hai is ladki m..." he mumbled and followed kabir who was busy in giving commandes to shift her wirh daksh as soon as possible.

"kitna bhi door jau... par tmhare paas hi aa jata hu" he whispered as he saw the girl being transffered to 18M.

A/N - I WANT COMMENTS K'S... OTHERWISE NO MORE UPDATES... ATLEAST TELL ME WHATS WRONG 😕

superb update 😊 this was something really i cant even think of and u wrote it so well i don't have words to express all the feelings the characters have are very realistic ...
kabir and daksh bonding the craze for literature the little boy has was well described 😊
kabir's pov - amazing even after trying hard to stay away he cant ..." She looked like an angel in
this whole white hospital background. But i
dont like it... may be if in future she would be
lying like this sleeping in my room with a cute
smile on her face, i would love to see... hold on
there... what the heck i m thinking" 😆 ohh poor kabir the game his mind is playing with him 😳 kya soach raha h 😊 jo bhi soach raha h achcha h ... 😃
nisha's pov ... even in this emmense pain she is thinking abt him 😃
aag dono taaf baraabar h 😉
and not to forget the room 18M seems mysterious 😊 and there is nothing wrong in ur update its mindblowing as always 😊 😊

my wifey is kamaal 👏
this story is really interesting and I am waiting for nisha to wake up
I love daksh he is such a cutie pie a strong yet innocent kid
NiBir don't know each other yet they falling for each other
superb
fantastic awesome
fabulous
perfectly described as you always do
interesting concept 👍🏼
continue soonish wifey
loved it ❤️