Originally posted by: arviabhigya
<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">Finally writing a comment on a story u posted almost 7 months ago😆😆</font>
<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">Sach kahoon toh ever since I read the first part, I knew posting comments or giving my views on it was going to be an extremely tough job considering its intense nature😆</font>
<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">But giving it a try finally😉</font>
<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">Chapter 1- Since this chapter was an intense overly emotional chapter, I have decided to just point out the parts I loved and comment on ur writing😊</font>
<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">Wont tell u which part made me cry cz that's a very tough job</font>
<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">It should come as no surprise to u that this chapter still chokes me up every time I read it😭</font>
<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">This was a heart wrenching chapter to say the least !</font>
<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">But a beautifully written chapter👏</font>
The way u were able to evoke this gush of emotions for almost every character be it Nisha, Kabir, Dolly, Aarav or Tanu is commendable👏👏👏 My heart goes out to them reading their stories😭
Love the way Dolly decides to be friends with Nisha in order to share Nisha's sorrow and soothe her pain😳
Love the way Aarav made Nisha realize that she needs to let go of her pain. woh kete hain na ki bacche bhagwaan ka roop hote hain😳
Love the way Dolly has handled her loss so well😳Love Tanu-Kabir-Dolly-Saurav's bond😊
She was in tears... she wanted to cry her heart out but something was locking it up and it was paining more. She felt as if a stab was present in her heart but the pain was manifold because that knife was still there deepening her wound every time.-She patted her back soothingly because she knew what it meant when someone who u consider ur part dies.-In just a few words u were able to convey the pain and sorrow of ur characters so well👏👏👏U can feel the depth of sorrow of Nisha and Dolly through these lines👏
a girl who had lost what she considered her treasure. - Love this line👏👏❤️
sometimes pain gives u what happiness can't "- Such deep lines👏
She cried... cried like never before. That stabbing knife disappeared in his arms. The wound was still there but constant pain was gone. - Such deep poetic lines describing Nibir's bond and their ability to heal each other so well👏👏👏
Here kabir who had came to pick the ball was in a shock. But this girl was crying like anything and suddenly he too wanted to cry with her. Her pain was causing equal pain to him too. She was affecting him like no one has. He wanted to cure her pain and take away all her tears and make her smile asap. He didn't know when he hugged her back as tightly as he could. He crushed her unto him and started patting her back gently stroking it in circles. He didn't realize when he too started crying with her. Suddenly he felt her grip loosen and a weight on his chest. He pushed her a little to look if she was ok. But she has fainted. He got all worried for her but somewhere his heart admired her beauty at that time.
His attention divert towards her again when she pulled his t- shirt clutching on it that's when he realised that her face was pale.He wanted to kiss away all her tears.He shifted a bit and was going to put a kiss on her forehead when aarav came in with a glass of water making kabir realise what he was going to do- U have penned down Kabir's emotions so well👏👏👏His unspoken connection with Nisha that her tears cause so much pain to him even though he hasnt even met/known her is bewilderingLove the way he wanted to remove all pain fro her lifeTheir soul connection is so well brought out in the fact that her tears made him cry
The tear marks, the pain so evident that his heart squeezed painfully. - Such a beautiful line Mansi 👏
" sauro... vo..." kabir said feeling choked. - Their connection is so deepBtw, Kabir
Kabir kept looking at her angelic yet saddened face. Nisha stirred in her sleep. Kabir just held her hand and started stroking it gently. He can very well see her pain soothing. He kept looking at her confused. What he just felt haven't happened before. He sat on the stool beside the bed and kept thinking about how strange life is. Everyone has its share of happiness and sorrow but sometimes the pain outwits the happiness. " I didn't know why but I will make u smile nisha... and I promise that " he said. - This part did manage to bring a smile on my face. Love the way Kabir is so concerned about Nisha and is determined to make her smile😳
All in all, a superbly written chapter which made u cry heaps and buckets😊
Waise Mansi tum toh badi philosophical nikli yaar😆😆
Geet - Hui Sabse Parayee
Bade Achche Lagte Hain Naya Season
