NIBIR STORY - LOVE BEYOND LIFE AND DEATH*updated 10/6* *page 133* end

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mansi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: SaruSenan

Cheating Buasi...😡😆🤣 Waise isliye maine stry padha aur comment bhi late kar rahi hu...🤣

hawww... jaldi karo comment ur bausi is waiting

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mansi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: SaruSenan
Buasi😆 Wat is this????😕 Pehle aapne mujhe PM nahi bheja..
🤣 Aur ab toh yeh stry pesh karke mujhe Rulane pe tule huye ho🤔 jo Saru ki reputataion kharab kar dega...🤣🤣🤣

Awesome Title...👏👏👏 Wen I read it I thought U wl say NiBir's Stry after death😆🤣 But jab padha toh I felt like it Squeezed My heart🤔 Yaar Aise rulane ka kaam q kar rahe ho???🤔

Buasi As I always said U had a gud Writing skill & Ur Use of words r just too PERFECT that it can touch HEART😳 Same Happened here too...😳

I was Aww ng at Kabir-Tanu Bond...

I was feeling sad With Nishu's State...😔

I was Shaccked at the Revelation of Cute Aarav's Truth & Dolly's Ansh😲🤔

I felt Soo Overwhelmed & Relieved When Nishu Hugged Kabir & @RED this para was my most fav..😳 It just Just My Heart🤗

She look up
through her tears to see someone coming towards her. She felt a tug in
her heart. Her heart screamed that her angel has came to snatch away the
pain. She didn't think further and ran with whatever is left in her to
him. She couldn't see properly his face but hugged him tightly clutching
on him for her dear life. She cried... cried like never before. That
stabbing knife disappeared in his arms. The wound was still there but
constant pain was gone.

Here kabir who had came to pick the ball
was in a shock. But this girl was crying like anything and suddenly
he too wanted to cry with her. Her pain was causing equal pain to him
too. She was affecting him like no one has. He wanted to cure her pain
and take away all her tears and make her smile asap. He didn't know when
he hugged her back as tightly as he could. He crushed her unto him and
started patting her back gently stroking it in circles. He didn't
realize when he too started crying with her. 


I m happy dat Nishu ko Kabir ke roop main uska Angel mil gaya...🤗 Waise Mujhe ab bhi dbt hai Y Kabir said to Tanu Dat Agar Kair ko usse door jaan apade toh kabhi dukhi math hona... Pls Nishu ko badi mushkil se Kabir ke roop main apne dard batne ke liye ek ANGEL mila hai.. ab usse yeh aakhiri umeed bhi math cheen na... same is 4 Tanu too.. She loves her bro so much.. dnt broke this bro-sis bond...😊

Waise Saurav ne teekh bola hai.. @BLUE👏

" sometimes pain
gives u what happiness can't " saurav said. " may be this tough time
will gift them something precious " dolly replied. "


Kuch bhi Kaho Buasi... This Story was too much heart-wrenching...🤔 and it proves ur Magical power to play with words aur vo bhi baariki ke saath shabdom se khelthi ho aap...👏👏👏
Pls... Aage se Iss Story main Senti ko thoda rest de dena..🤣 aur phir Khushi ki dastak de dena..😳 I badly want NiBir, Tannu, All Children & DoSa to SMILE😃

Do write More🤗 Q ki DMM😳😆🤣

PS: Agli baar PM zaroor bhejna.. 😆SYS??😈

senti mood m senti hi likha gya bausi se... 😆... about tanu kabir and nisha... they are bound together bhatiji... nothing can separate them 😳 ur rahi pm ki baat... vo to mai bhejungi hi... 😆

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ammu4u

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Posted: 10 years ago

#33

this is awsum mansi...u made me cry..

very well written...

Nisha running and hugging Kabir part and Kabir hugging him back...just loved that scene..beautifully written👏

update nxt part soon

thnx 4 d pm

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mansi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#34

Originally posted by: ammu4u
this is awsum mansi...u made me cry..
very well written...
Nisha running and hugging Kabir part and Kabir hugging him back...just loved that scene..beautifully written👏

update nxt part soon
thnx 4 d pm

thanks ammu...

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mansi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: angelanju
res😆

unres kab karogi... m waiting

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mansi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: itznimi003
res🤣
unres
mansi superb story yr...
i loved dis title so much it is just perfect match for dis story
now coming to update
loved kabir n tanu bonding😊 it was awww
feeling bad for nishu...she is all alone...
feeling bad for aarav yr...usko cancer h...
loved d way dolly console nishu
dolly n saurav kinna accha kaam krre yr
loved wat ramy said to nishu
d way she hugged kabir wid all his pain it was speechless n she was affecting kabir so much i was crying badly on reading dis
kabir usko apni arms me uthaya loved it
saurav ne sach kaha sometimes pains gives us dat happiness cant dis line touched my heart yr
loved d way tannu was seeing his bro frm window
i hope dono ek dusre ka pain jaldi heal kr le
thanx for pm
update soon

awww nimi... thank u so much...

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mansi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: angelanju
res😆

unres😉
sorry for late comment...
mindblowing story mansi...👏
just got carried away with it...
all the emotions beautifully portrayed...kabir felt nisha's pain...
they both need each other...kabir ko nisha se mat chinna...
the bro-sis bond is soo beautiful...loved it😳
update soon...😊

thanks anju... akhir kaar ye res unres ho hi gya... 😆

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arviabhigya

@arviabhigya

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Posted: 10 years ago

#38

Finally writing a comment on a story u posted almost 7 months ago😆😆

Sach kahoon toh ever since I read the first part, I knew posting comments or giving my views on it was going to be an extremely tough job considering its intense nature 😆

But giving it a try finally😉

Chapter 1- Since this chapter was an intense overly emotional chapter, I have decided to just point out the parts I loved and comment on ur writing😊

Wont tell u which part made me cry cz that's a very tough job

It should come as no surprise to u that this chapter still chokes me up every time I read it 😭

This was a heart wrenching chapter to say the least !

But a beautifully written chapter👏

The way u were able to evoke this gush of emotions for almost every character be it Nisha, Kabir, Dolly, Aarav or Tanu is commendable 👏👏👏 My heart goes out to them reading their stories😭

Love the way Dolly decides to be friends with Nisha in order to share Nisha's sorrow and soothe her pain😳

Love the way Aarav made Nisha realize that she needs to let go of her pain. woh kete hain na ki bacche bhagwaan ka roop hote hain 😳

Love the way Dolly has handled her loss so well 😳 Love Tanu-Kabir-Dolly-Saurav's bond😊

She was in tears... she wanted to cry her heart out but something was locking it up and it was paining more. She felt as if a stab was present in her heart but the pain was manifold because that knife was still there deepening her wound every time.-

She patted her back soothingly because she knew what it meant when someone who u consider ur part dies.- In just a few words u were able to convey the pain and sorrow of ur characters so well👏👏👏 U can feel the depth of sorrow of Nisha and Dolly through these lines👏

a girl who had lost what she considered her treasure. - Love this line👏👏❤️

sometimes pain gives u what happiness can't "- Such deep lines 👏

She cried... cried like never before. That stabbing knife disappeared in his arms. The wound was still there but constant pain was gone. - Such deep poetic lines describing Nibir's bond and their ability to heal each other so well 👏👏👏

Here kabir who had came to pick the ball was in a shock. But this girl was crying like anything and suddenly he too wanted to cry with her. Her pain was causing equal pain to him too. She was affecting him like no one has. He wanted to cure her pain and take away all her tears and make her smile asap. He didn't know when he hugged her back as tightly as he could. He crushed her unto him and started patting her back gently stroking it in circles. He didn't realize when he too started crying with her. Suddenly he felt her grip loosen and a weight on his chest. He pushed her a little to look if she was ok. But she has fainted. He got all worried for her but somewhere his heart admired her beauty at that time.

His attention divert towards her again when she pulled his t- shirt clutching on it that's when he realised that her face was pale. He wanted to kiss away all her tears.He shifted a bit and was going to put a kiss on her forehead when aarav came in with a glass of water making kabir realise what he was going to do- U have penned down Kabir's emotions so well👏👏👏 His unspoken connection with Nisha that her tears cause so much pain to him even though he hasnt even met/known her is bewildering Love the way he wanted to remove all pain fro her life Their soul connection is so well brought out in the fact that her tears made him cry

The tear marks, the pain so evident that his heart squeezed painfully. - Such a beautiful line Mansi 👏

" sauro... vo..." kabir said feeling choked. - Their connection is so deep Btw, Kabir

Kabir kept looking at her angelic yet saddened face. Nisha stirred in her sleep. Kabir just held her hand and started stroking it gently. He can very well see her pain soothing. He kept looking at her confused. What he just felt haven't happened before. He sat on the stool beside the bed and kept thinking about how strange life is. Everyone has its share of happiness and sorrow but sometimes the pain outwits the happiness. " I didn't know why but I will make u smile nisha... and I promise that " he said. - This part did manage to bring a smile on my face. Love the way Kabir is so concerned about Nisha and is determined to make her smile 😳

All in all, a superbly written chapter which made u cry heaps and buckets😊

Waise Mansi tum toh badi philosophical nikli yaar😆😆

Edited by arviabhigya - 9 years ago

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mansi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: arviabhigya
Res 😆 Well I need to comment on ur other stories first 😆 This post is just to signify that I have read ur new story and I like what I have read 😆 😉 Baaki ki baatein unreserve kar bataungi 😆

thanks mihu... as always m waiting... n m happy u liked it