SS: Kaash Aisa Hota (A Joint Venture on the ending of NAUC) - Page 3

i wish aap log Nauc ka creatives hothe atlest 4 the last few epi

n abt the chapters

chapter 1:: very well written anu...RaKa Kb noy listening to Ramy...silent kabir n felt bad 4 RaKa...Kb ..loved Ramy's dialog Eyes can't deceive you...but brain can...you might not interpret the what you saw in the right way...you may misunderstand the situation...Vasu enjyng 😡...

Chapter 2: anu y r a fabulous writer...loved it to the coree...tauji tauntng ramesh😡 finally the past is out infront of gangwals n Kabir..happy that kabir considered Ram's word n decided to talk with nisha b4 leavng...Dhakkan ko akal tho aaya😆 n the past Vj's papa knws averythng n he helped ramy to run away...physco VJ😆😆..very well written anu

chapter 3: Shwets superb part...very nicely written..happy to see Laxmi n Mohan supporting Ramy...Finally Mohan opend his mouth...thnx to Viraj uncle he wrote that letter

Chapter 4: virein mohan khaaand exposed...nauc with Laxmi👏..felt bad 4 kabir its very heartbreakng moment 4 him..n i loved the fact that he first thought abt Ramesh...RaKa rockzz

...loved mohan..he was ready to face the consequences..n Virein he is so blah😆..he admited everythng thing bcoz of mohan otherwise he is not gonna say anythng...dadu

chapter 5: finally RaKa patch up...love der bonding...broken Kabir n consoling Ramy...loved the whole convo n especilly that Papa Beta Hugmy RaKa..loved Ramy's I knw u wala dialog😳..happy that Kabiraa said evrythng to ramy abt y he left n Ramy makng him understand wat he done is wrong ..very well written lachu

chapter 6:

finally it happed much awaited confession of 2 dhakkans😆😆...lekhu simple confession chotu sa😉 but its good...i dt like dramatic confessions...😆...very nicely written..Miracle happens n Nibir is its proof...loved this dialog of Kabirr You asked God for a miracle and I got one too😉..

chapter 7...Vasu rejoicing her victory😆😆 RL s entry👍🏼..n her famous shayri😉😆😆...loved RL Vasu convo...bechari Vj kya soch kar plang kiya aur kya hogaya😆😆...Kb's entry was mast..😆😆Papa...Vj's drama again bt this time she failed😆😆 ..loved Kabiraas dalogs especilly this one

I disrespected the only man who treated me like a son, who was there with me in every crisis, who loved me like a son, who gave me the love of a father i never had and you tried to make me against him??? I hate you for this mom...RaKa feeling😉😃

loved Kb's reply to nisha too n tht little smile😉.. nicely written rema,,,,loved it to the core

Chapter 8: beharaa dadu ek hi din main ithne zaara khulasaa...u hve written it very well puneet...RDR part is the best..dadu cryng😭..finally dadu understood where he failed👏

chapter 9: again awsum part lekhuu... BB ko akal aaya bt he never call her Mrs Nisha 😆😆

letter part was nice... Nisha n Vj convo also nice..the best part is Laxmi n Kabir convo..i just loved it..small bt its too gud...kabir Vasu small patch up n invitng her for party..n loved the fact that he did it bcoz of Laxmi😉 I just love RLKN ❤️...RN scene nicely written...Vasu comes to knw she was plyng with both her son's life👏

chapter 10 : Party🥳 Nibir scene😳😳 Kabab main haddi Kirti😆😆..i just imagined that situvation🤣 dust in nish's eyes kya bahana banaya Kabiraa ne Lol😆 Cousins teasing Nibir 😆😆loved it loved it...KNAUC❤️ Leela ka drama😡😆😆 tauji sudar gaya ithnii jaldi😆😆😲

Leela out of GH finally loved that kirti Nihsa drggng her out wala part 👏 small dolly papa scne was nice..tauji Ramy scene👏.. JOJO🤣 cousins teasing Kabiraa🤣 saurav the DJ😆😆😆

Nisha aur uske cousins n her husband 🤣😆 loved the whole dance part especilly Nibir jeena jeena😳😳(antar ka Nibir fan jg gayii😆😆)..love that song 😉..loved the whole part...Happy wala Part😉 well written lachu

chapter 11: RN the best papa beti i have ever scene on Tv...Rema its awsum yaar...loved it ..👏

cofee ki khasam😆😆 kisi ki nazar na lage papa beti ki jodi pe☯️...Ramy u r the best father ..loved the whole convo of RN.👍🏼 very toucng..n this is my Happy wala gaana 😃...👏👏

chapter 12: shwets finally ur Fav part with DaRa Hug😆😆 i must say this is just wow..👏👏 u portyed the emotions very well👍🏼..dadu saying sorry n Ramy's response evrythng is just perfect...Loved evry bit of it😃😃..that hug👏👏 i wish ye sab show main bhi dikhathi...both the actors r amazng n am sure vivek n dadu ne iss scene ko another level main pohcha diya hotha😉sp😡 forgot to methon tht RDR😆😆 tht was nice shweta...Dadu ke muh se RDR nahi suna tho kuch adhoora lagtha hai 😆

n last part 😭😭 Felt very bad 4 Kabiraa..bt Nishu is der 4 him alwys..Nibir❤️

Part 14 : i was like 😃 while reading the last part...wat a perfect ending with a perfect selfie😉

starting with the cute sa Nibir part😳😳 nice one n loved the way nisha waken kabir Up singam😆😆 n dadu rocked he took the right decision...allowing evry1 to follwing der dremz...well done dadu👏👏 resturant ,fashion designg,saurav dolly business, suku's dream👏👏..Dadu n Nisha convo👍🏼 dadu nishu hug n dialogs very well written...N kabir Dadu convo🤣 i like the way Dadu call him arrey bhai😆😆 smart idiot kabiraa not bad dadu😆😆 the whole convo of Kb n dadu was very nicely written lachu👏 nishu's nodding n RaKa school of dance n Music

rupan ,laxmi,Moren 👏👏

finally Happy ending👍🏼👏

sorry 4 the late comment ...was busy

thnk u guys 4 writing this🤗 loved the whole updates...n u guys rock...

Each and every part was awesome and well written...

Wish if something like this happened in the show too..

Seriouslly hats off to all of your group efforts..👏

Chap 1 -- I absolutely adore the first and second paragraphs, esp the first. So beautifully written. The colours in the sky matching with the colours Nisha brought to Kabir's life was beautifully written. So enticing! But, not quite sure if I agree with the claim that Kabir would find Ramy at fault for what happened to VJ -- he appears to be more mature than that in the show. Despite what VJ told him, he never really held it against Ramy like Vj did. But I do like Ramy's dialogues. Very in sync with his character. And VJ LOL. The way she's written/ described, she comes across as a sadistic maniac who gets aroused seeing people (aka Ramy) hurt 😆 Pretty great chapter, some definite grammer mistakes (need to fix those tenses) but other than that, the content was solid.

Chap 2- Okay, LOVING the initial intro. Dada Ji's words hit you like a thousand bricks and I can feel the weight of the words, even just reading them. Extremely well written and totally in character. And wow, glad that Laxmi stood up for Ramy. Laxmi staying quiet during Ramy baisti was always one of my biggest pet peeves, but I'm glad you've rectified that here. Not sure if I'm a fan of Ramy's mumbai background story. I just, idk. I always felt like music was something Ramy was passionate about and the fact that he disobeyed to pursue his passion was one thing I always loved about Ramy. Reducing music to being an excuse doesn't sit that well with me. That said, do like the touch of VJ being suicidal if Ramy refused marriage -- but also feel like she'd be too prideful to attempt something like that/ show such weakness to Ramy? Idk, just my point of view. Also, loved the ending scene with Dada Ji looking at Dadi and her silent tears blaming him. Wonderfully written and I can picture it now. Again, good content, but just some grammer issues.

Chap 3- Loved Viren and Rupan's parts here! I know they aren't the main characters - but damn were those dialogues totally in sync with their characters! Laxmi was good. She definitely raised some valid points. I felt like at times, some of the dialogues would've been better said by Nisha (or at least they seemed to mimic Nisha's tone to me) but I suppose it's okay because Nisha is Laxmi's daughter and hence the two are similar in that respect. I also liked Mohan's interference. Thank God he took a side -- I thought his words were in character too. I also liked how you reiterated that music was Ramy's passion and still a huge reason for him to go to Mumbai -- it wasn't just about getting away from VJ. But not too sure how I feel about the letter though. I like how the lease is credited to Ramy -- showing how the entire business is/ was dependent on him (contrary to what Dada Ji said when Ramy left). Specifically tho, I think the clause about how Ramy could call Viraj uncle/ how VU was grateful to Ramy/ how VJ was moving on --> those things seemed weird to me. But I suppose it's just semantics. The last paragraph alone makes up for it though, wonderfully written -- such a realization was needed in the show. Great chapter, grammer wise and content wise.

Chap 4 - Possibly my favourite chapter yet. Everyone was in sync with their character and some much needed home truths were out. No words needed.

Chap 5 - Great RaKa moment. Extremely well done. I like how you showed Ramy internal dialogue and him deciding not to tell everything VJ did to Kabir. Speaks of a mature Ramy -- completely in character. I also really really loved that touch of how VJ thought land lease was dowry. It gives more basis for her hatred for GF. She probably thinks that they cheated her father and took his land -- and that's why her father did (not the shock of her marriage). Reall does wonder's for VJ characterization -- even when she isn't in the scene. Also, it was good to see the dichotomy between seeing and believing explicitly touched upon. It was definitely a lesson in PC, but more implicit than explicit. Nice to see that theme being continued. Also, huge fan of the ending. It's definitely pretty filmy with Nisha magically being at the door when Kabir needs to clarify/ talk to her 😆 but still one I liked nonetheless. Did noticed some small grammer mistakes, but good otherwise.

Chap 6 - Firstly, loving how the dialogues are in english - makes it so much easier for me to read! Secondly, Kabir is only 22? In my canon, he's at least 23 (possibly turning 24). Idk I just feel weird when I think how young KN are and how they're married. Also liking how Nisha started her-Viraj story from the breakup day. And typical Kabir breaking up her story to ask a question about the miracle -- good touch 😆 And OMG, NISHA'S CONFESSION IS THE CUTEST -- JUST LIKE HER I think it would feel more like KN had it been written in hindi -- but personally I don't mind (actually like it more) that it's in english. Also, loving Kabir's subsequent reactions. I like how he walked a little far away from Nisha, ran his hand through his hair, thought about it, and then started speaking. Really well described and totally in sync as I can see that happening. Adore how you also made Kabir start with his mission and end with his confession. LOL at the kiss at the end -- do not see that happening for a long time (pilani needs to be addressed before any physical acts like that). But tight hug was cute and so typical KN. Pretty cliche chapter and like 1-2 grammer mistakes, but I still very much enjoyed it as I'm a sucker for cliche's done right 😆

Chap 7 - Interesting how you start off by comparing Ramy and VJ -- peace vs war. Also liked the touch of Ramy referring to Nisha as 'happy wala gaana' in his head and continuing on the metaphor with the 'tune' she found with Kabir. Nice touch. And good to see that Laxmi is with Ramy -- although I think Laxmi not being there would've worked as well? Also, didn't get the shayari 😆 I read halwa initially instead of hawa and so was like -- what does halwa have to do with this? 😆 Good to see Laxmi keeping a cool head while Ramy burns. I like how the two balance each other out. Not a fan of VJ taunting Laxmi tho -- that's uncool. I felt like VJ was above that behaviour? But anyways, liked the touch of her acting once she saw Kabir - typical VJ 😆 so great job in keeping her in character there! LOVING Kabir's tirade against her! Much deserved! And love the replies by Ramy and VJ and Nisha! Excited to see the upcoming LaKa scene! Good chapter -- some grammer mistakes but solid otherwise!

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