New AvNeil SS: The Challenge | CHAPTER 7- PG 17 |April 04

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Aishwarya

@itsme_aish

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+ 3

Posted: 7 years ago

#41

Omg u updated so quickly😲 Thank u so much❤️...And damn the way u express is so beautiful that I can visualize each and every bit of it...From the expressions to their feelings..bang on..😃👏 I do intend to read all the chaps again and leave detailed comments..coz this deserves it..😊 hopefully I will do tat⭐️

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Chocolatebond

@Chocolatebond

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Posted: 7 years ago

#42

I'm just loving the perfect dose of jealousiness or say possessive Neil and avni reading your ffs are such a dessert to our dry days inconsideration to the ongoing jail drama sans avNeil scenes last part it was avni and now this time it's Neil can't explain how much I'm enjoying every time I read your ff mind-blowing yaar this concept makes me wonder how would it be if there is a series with adiza adapted on this storyline

Helplessness of Neil Khanna was beautifully written and the way he tactfully used extempore and made his feelings known to Avni was fabulous the reference of apple -pie and Newton's apple was khidkithod to explain his inner turmoil was sooo good its too cute how both of them are wondering on how they fell for each other despite their rivalry and atrangii personalities they share I am falling short of words to express how much I'm loving and enjoying reading your ffs especially this one I have become fan of your writing style I feel like I'm writing an short essay now ok I will stop here please do update the next part soon waiting eagerly to know what's in the store for us

Edited by Afsana103 - 7 years ago

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Zara

@ZaraxA

Explorer

Posted: 7 years ago

#43

OMG simi I'm so glad you update. It was so beautifully written as always. I loved how possessive and jealous they both are of each other it's so endearing to seee.

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Veenapai

@Veenapai

Rocker

+ 9

Posted: 7 years ago

#44

Too good.Loved the update very much.Ek teer se do nishana. Neil is very smart.Continue soon.

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srinithi

@AgnesFan

Sparkler

Posted: 7 years ago

#45

I'm just enjoying this verbal duel of these both more than words . Man you are brilliant with the sarcasm . I'm loving your style of writing .

That Apple pie and Newton's apple was damn fun !_

Rhea and her obsession to selfie 😆 I went back to selfie where she made Avni to pout 😆

So now we get how come they are into courtship being arch rivals . Swetha and Neela are long lost buddies.

Neil's speech rocked . I guess you have done many debates and extempore . You were brilliant with words . Neil didn't want to care much as no one knows about his relationship with Avni .

I'm enjoying this story to bits and parts .

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Smitakshi Guha

@SimiSays

Sparkler

+ 8

Posted: 7 years ago

#46

Originally posted by: paayaal
These two are just too much!😆
Jealous of everything & everyone around their secret partner and then creating such a drama about it..!!😆

The apple-pie and the Newton's apple were too good!!

Maybe they should play cupid between Ria to Ali and save themselves a host of trouble!!😉

So Neela & Shweta are friends & that's how this love story began behind the scenes!😃

M loving the daily dose of these competitions among the two...of who could become angry faster than the other and that too for some random xyz reason...Ah to 19 & get away with sooo much immaturity!!😆

Now that Avni knows why Neil was feeling 'helpless' how is she going to pacify him what with her 'no touching' rule still in effect??

Haha! It is just like how when you start dating someone and their vocabulary becomes yours like insanely, that's what happened with Neil here!

Avni's ''apple-pie-happy'' as a quick phrase got picked up in his subconscious mind! 😆

There are lots more funny stances like that coming up.

I can't wait to read your feedback on the next update, which is personally one of my favorites as I had a dayum good time imagining and writing it.

Stay tuned 😳

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Smitakshi Guha

@SimiSays

Sparkler

+ 8

Posted: 7 years ago

#47

Originally posted by: AgnesFan
I'm just enjoying this verbal duel of these both more than words . Man you are brilliant with the sarcasm . I'm loving your style of writing .
That Apple pie and Newton's apple was damn fun !_

Rhea and her obsession to selfie 😆 I went back to selfie where she made Avni to pout 😆

So now we get how come they are into courtship being arch rivals . Swetha and Neela are long lost buddies.

Neil's speech rocked . I guess you have done many debates and extempore . You were brilliant with words . Neil didn't want to care much as no one knows about his relationship with Avni .

I'm enjoying this story to bits and parts .

Thanks a bunch for the lovely words 😳

And you are totally right! I loved doing debates and extempore, as well as dancing. It was a fun-phase of my school and college life.

I totally remember Rhea's selfie obsession and hence, incorporated the same here 😆

Hope you enjoy the next update as well! :)

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SilentAvNeil

@SilentAvNeil

Navigator

Posted: 7 years ago

#48

Simi just loved it. I look forward more to your updates currently than the daily episodes. Please update this and the other FF you are writing.

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Aishwarya

@itsme_aish

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 7 years ago

#49

This is my feedback for Chap 1:😊

Waah ...AvNeil fighting it out verbally😃😃...tat was an intense exchange of words there😳❤️...Avni leaving no stone unturned to show that her stream doesnt deserve any less😊..OMG how arrogant is NeilKhanna😲 but damn AvniMehta is no less of a fiesty gal😆..Waah he has a steel-like grip on her☺️☺️..They r at loggerheads and yet Im finding it too sexy☺️..She almost punched Neil hawww.😲..and yeh lo bimbette Rhea bhi hai😆..Olive branch offering..🤣

Someone's trying to scare Avni😲...but Haila its our Neilo baby⭐️⭐️..and OMG wat a plot twist😲..they are alrdy dating😳😳☺️☺️❤️❤️..hayeee totally didnt see that coming..☺️☺️

"You know the harder you try, the stronger the grip will be"-OMG this gave me so many feels☺️☺️..OMG and that nokjhok along with the extreme hot make-out session in the library☺️☺️..Damn sooo superduper hawttt🤪..JO bhi ho Avni aint giving up on her stream anytime soon😆..OMG and the No-TOuching challenge for Neil🤢..Tats going to be ddamn hard😆..Would luv to see how successful he'll be in carrying out that clause..☺️ Loved it❤️

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Aishwarya

@itsme_aish

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 7 years ago

#50

Chap 2:😃😃

Bwahahahahahahaa🤣...Neil just referred to Avni as psycho..😛🤣

Bite Me☺️..Would love to☺️..Ommggg these two☺️☺️..their tashan-e-ishq is on fire☺️❤️..Ahahahahaa Avni has awakened the tiger by talking about his alter ego😃😃..They both very well know what it is😆😆..Self obsessed😆😆 (reminds me of Zain alot)..Avni is affected by Rhea's presence around Neil⭐️..Shes jealous and I love jealous Avni😉😉..Bwahahahahahaa he called her LAV and Avni thought its LOVE🤣...Omg he's dead meat now alright😲😆...Sunehri yaha pe bhi line maarrahi hai DD par😆😆..Big fat lava lamo of realization🤣..Finally the cat is out of the bag and Avni knows now that he called her LAV😃...but the teasing session that followed thereafter☺️☺️..Him checking her out ☺️☺️ and OhMyMy Neil khanna is naughtiness personified alright☺️☺️..Ummm he wants to punish her😉☺️..and wooow..such a smartass he is😎..bina touch kiye hi sabkuch kardiya😉😉..Those kisses btw❤️☺️..Her pout and his irresistible urge to kiss them..😆☺️ Really really productive sessions together-LMAO🤣 all guttery ideas floating in my head rn..😆

Must commend you for your style of writing..it always tends to make the imagination process more realistic and beautiful👏❤️👍🏼