AVNEIL FF : NAINA ASHQ NA HO - BOOK 2 (CHAPTER 47 UPDATED ON PG 60)

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RaindropsNRoses

@RaindropsNRoses

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Posted: 8 years ago

#221

vihuuu such an amazing update it was ...
everything was in a sequence ...
Dr Singh narrating the past...
vishakha's turmoil...I feel pity for her...
she is such a sweet heart...
Neil's reaction n his denial ..
n not to forget abt avni...
Neil saving avni...
n the Kiss was just awww
the way u portray her emotions is tremendous...
everything was described so beautifully...
wat an amazing writer u r vihu...
lots of hugs to u 🤗 🤗
ur ff is my favourite seriously...
do update soon...

Edited by nimarious - 8 years ago

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pri12

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Posted: 8 years ago

#222

Vihu Vihu Vihu kya likhti ho tum yaar...This was superbbb...

I have no comments to praise this one...

My heartbeat was increasing with their increasing car speeds..

Neil Khanna is back!!!!

Plz continue soon

Lots of Love 🤗

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srinithi

@AgnesFan

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Posted: 8 years ago

#223

agar teek hoti to kya kya kichdi pakti Teri dimag mei 😆😆 you give such a superb update though you are sick

So Singh had erased his memories that much that he believes Avni had played games to make Singh say that he is tillu . how rude to snatch ones life just for the sake of his daughter and make him live kapoor life .

I can't wait for them to reach khanna house n ho sake to ek proper proposal and wedding 😃😃

I loved last scene where he had his lips pressed against her forehead .

so you are gonna turn into a romantic writer .

n Mark deewana bhi hai 😆😆

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Ifa_Hassan

@Ifa_Hassan

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Posted: 8 years ago

#224

Sorry vihu for late comment . I am really busy this month thats why couldnt comment . 40B is my officially my favourite chapter . Amazingly written just loved each and every sentence ... i dont have words to explains this chapter its so amazing . Just dont end this story just want to read more and more chapters .

God bless your writting

P.S : my previous name was -Mairaa- . Just changed my name into my real one

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Deepti_98

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Posted: 8 years ago

#225

Woah! The word which escaped from my mouth after reading the update!

Thrilling update it was, finally all the mysteries are solved...

My poor Neil was tortured for such a long period...

But I did felt really bad for Ayna, Vishakha and Neil Kapoor...

The way Vishakha confronted Neil and reminded him of his identity was splendid and heart wrenching!

When Neil ignored Avni, but heart literally just sank...

The car scene was beautifully portrayed.

Neil remembering his past and still showing immense concern and love for Avni, he must be going through such a difficult phase...

Finally the Neil saved her falling!

And the rain scene was beautiful

The forehead kiss was very symbolic and deep... Just loved it a alot

This was an amazing update...

Update Soon

Lots of Love

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Somewhatwriter

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Posted: 8 years ago

#226

Im so sorry, I've been trying to think for ages but i honestly, truly, genuinely have absolutely nothing left to say. You have left me speechless vihu.

Each and every one of your emotions are spellbindingly poignant, completely real. I feel like I feel all of it myself, thats how beautifully you describe them, as if the words come alive and dance across the page... and you say your no good at dancing!?

And your story is so amazing, its twists and turns are so well done... its genuinely like a proper novel or show and i honestly cant find a way to describe how amazing it is.

And your characters, i have fallen in love with each and everyone of them. They react so perfectly to each and every situation, exactly how a real person would react in their situation. You have made them so pious and heroic in the way that they are so broken... so selfless, their mistakes and their anger and everything is so justified and heartfelt.

This is the first chapter you thought of!? Thats so adorable, I will cherish this chapter because it is only because of this chapter that out favourite writer wrote our favourite story for us. If this was your first chapter... oh lord... how did you manage to make your story so developed and interesting for 40 chapter until you used it!? Man i wish could outline a plot as well as you could... maybe you should give me some lessons on how to write such a lovely story like you... because god knows I need it.

Now actually coming on to the chapter which i was avoiding getting to because i have nothing i could say that would be worthy enough for this master piece. Who could even think about breaking your bones!? All i want to do is to give you some kind of award for writing such a beautiful piece of writing. Your writing even makes me root for the villains! Dr Singh's guilt and repentance was so stunningly penned, his love for his daughter was so clear that I completely understood why he did such a thing.

And the whole story behind what happened was so well excecuted and perfectly complicated... how did you come up with all of that... i wish my imagination was so vivid...

Vishaka's broken avatar is so excruciatingly heartbreaking yaar... sometimes it just makes me wish that He is just Neil Kapoor so she isnt so lost and going through so much pain but obviously I change my mind almost immediately. When Neil said Chubby and then she yelled at him and finally released all the pain that is pent up inside of her. I almost cried yaar... so perfectly written.

Aww and our baby Avni... why do put us through so much pain yaar... When Neil accused her your wrote her reaction so spot on... i literally dont know how to explain what state you put me in when Neil did that yaar... and the trust she showed when she said I know... it was so heart touching!

And Neil... I was already in love with the man but now i just dont know what to do with myself... aww the pain and torture he had to go through... he was brainwashed so badly that he was in so much denial that the most beautiful truth of his life caused him so much agony. But how concern for his Avni made his anger vanish... he is so in love yaar... its so sweet...And that car chase! God it was like a thrilling conclusion to an action film. I was holding in my breath and my heart was racing and i was sweating... the conclusion was so sweet you stole my heart.. and it doesnt matter whether I catch diabetes but you better not reduce the sugary content... okay vihu?

I actually live in London... thank you for this wonderful chapter, so sorry for taking so long to comment and much love

Shreya

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__VIHU

@__VIHU

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Posted: 8 years ago

#227

Originally posted by: Kshailja
Res
Unres
Can I let this comment be as "No Comments"???

Bilkul ji bilkul...

Aapka no comment bhi hamare liye world's best comment hai...

I guess it means good... But even if it meant bad... Then also... Thank you Shailu...😃

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__VIHU

@__VIHU

Voyager

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Posted: 8 years ago

#228

Originally posted by: __shibani__
Awesome!

Thank you Shibu...🤗

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Gurveen

@Gurveen

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#229

Eye opener update
Neil trying to convince himself that he's Neil Kapoor but he's not
Thank god both safe and sound
But poor vishakha she lost her love
Update next part soon

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__VIHU

@__VIHU

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Posted: 8 years ago

#230

Originally posted by: Shreya2907
Wow! This was my only expression that left my mouth . Lastly you updated and what a update it was... You write so well.. It was totally impressive... The conclusion, the revealation, the thrill everything was in sequence... This shows how good you are at writing, i guess you are a topper in English, i bet you will surely become a great author in future... And do remember me as it was my prediction .. (LOL)
Visakha's trauma, Neil' s reaction everything was so well described...
And last but not the least do update soon...
I am too inquisitive to know what happens next...
BTW, if this was your first idea, then i must say you are very good at exaggeration.. 40 chapters seriously...
Lastly update soon

Shreya... Thank you so much darling...

Inni saari tareef.. Well well well!!! I am like 😳

Topper... I won't blow my own trumpet but seriously... As in 11 class we don't have grammer part... Just literature... I m in love with the subject...

Tv serial dekh dekhkar maine exaggeration hi seekha hai..

I won't ever forget you dear...

All the love...

Vihu